读后续写：真题实战谈写好读后续写的三个理论.docx

1、读后续写：真题实战谈写好读后续写的三个理论读后续写：真题实战谈写好读后续写的三个理论 读后续写的三个理论读后续写的三个理论 一个基本规则：一个基本规则：Conflict(冲突）冲突）- Solution（解决）（解决） 两个基本技能：两个基本技能：Act(角色角色 A 的动作或话语）的动作或话语）-Response（角色（角色 B 的反应）、的反应）、Image - Contrast (画面定格画面定格;照应反衬照应反衬) 解释：解释： Conflict(冲突）冲突）- Solution（解决）：（解决）：高考中记叙文的读后续写到目前为止都是为 了解决文章中的一个矛盾（或冲突），所以考生一定要

2、把文章的冲突找出来，而接下 来续写就是找到解决方法。 注：就冲突而言分为两个环节： 第一环节：以全文的视角看主要冲突； 第二环节：以局部的视角看次要冲突和解决，从而为推动主要冲突的解决。 对应在读后续写中，第一段可能就有一个矛盾的解决，从而为第二段的全文主要冲 突的解决埋下伏笔。（但第一段的次要的矛盾冲突并非必须） Act(角色角色 A 的动作或话语）的动作或话语）-Response（角色（角色 B 的反应）：的反应）：读后续写中要围绕角色 A 发出的动作或话语后得到什么反应来推动情节发展，这种反应分为：心理反应心理反应（尤 其是只有一个角色，读后续写必须写情感的一连串的变化）、动作反应动作反

3、应（一般角色是 动物，但也可以是人物无声胜有声的动作）、声音反声音反应应（基本角色是动物）、话语反语反 应应（角色都是人物）。 Image - Contrast (画面定格画面定格;照应反衬照应反衬)：作者要把所有描述简化成 2-3 副画面，每 个画面要给人深刻的画面感（也可以说是点睛之处）。常用的记叙文两大技能：使用 环境描写来烘托角色，使用首末照应来突出主旨。 实战：2016 年 10 月浙江真题 One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tom, had driven three hours to camp overnight by a lak

4、e in the forest. Unfortunately, on the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel. By the time they reached the lake, Jane was so angry that she said to Tom, “Im going to find a better spot for us to camp” and walked away. With no path to follow, Jane just walked on for quite a lo

5、ng time. After she had climbed to a high place, she turned around, hoping to see the lake. To her surprise, she saw nothing but forest and, far beyond, a snowcapped mountaintop. She suddenly realized that she was lost. “Tom!” she cried. “Help!” No reply. If only she had not left her mobile phone in

6、that bag with Tom. Jane kept moving, but the farther she walked, the more confused she became. As night was beginning to fall, Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family. She wanted to hold him and tell him how m

7、uch she loved him. Jane rose at the break of day, hungry and thirsty. She could hear water trickling(滴落滴落) somewhere at a distance. Quickly she followed the sound to a stream. To her great joy, she also saw some berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything

8、 better. Feeling stronger now, Jane began to walk along the stream and hope it would lead her to the lake. As she picked her way carefully along the stream, Jane heard a helicopter. Is that for me? Unfortunately, the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above. A few minutes later, ano

9、ther helicopter flew overhead. Jane took off her yellow blouse, thinking that she should go to an open area and flag them if they came back again. 注意注意: 1.所续写短文的词数应为所续写短文的词数应为 150 左右左右; 2.至少使用至少使用 5 个短文中标有下划线的关键词语个短文中标有下划线的关键词语; 3.续写部分分为两段续写部分分为两段, 每段的开头语已为你写好每段的开头语已为你写好; 4.续写完成后续写完成后, 请用下划线标出你所使用的关

10、键词语。请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。 Paragraph1: But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. Paragraph2: It was daybreak when Jane woke up. 正文指导 Conflict：Jane and Tom had a quarrel; Jane was lost in the forest Solution: Jane met her husband. 作者的续写情节一定要尽可能简单，必须简化到三句话说清，用 2-3 张图表达： 第一段：Jane was afrai

11、d. Jane picked stones and made them in the form of SOS. 第二段：The helicopter saw the SOS and they hugged each other. 一定要第一时间要设计好结尾， 因为结尾无论从改卷子角度还是从写作角度具有话 题点睛作用，想象他们最后拥抱说了什么才非常感人？（这里卖个关子，请看我下面 提供的技能） 一旦情节有了，至于具体如何描写恐惧、高兴等，这都是很简单的，一般老师都会 给准备这方面的资源，请把它们当做词典，每次写的时候就翻找，这样写十篇后基本 就能熟练运用了。纯粹的死记当然也很有必要，但必须在实践

12、中运用才更有效果。 这就是我说的，读后续写关键在于能否合情合理去设计情节，这犹如装修房子的图 纸设计阶段，一旦设计成功，其它材料选择都是按图索骥而已。 本文运用到的词汇资源库见： 读后续写细节描写 46 讲：第 1 讲 描写 forest, woods 第一段： Act(角色角色 A 的动作或话语）的动作或话语）-Response（角色（角色 B 的反应）：的反应）： Act Pick stones and make them in the form of SOS Response 体现情感变化：Afraid hopeful Exhausted, slept Image A woman, SO

13、S, hopeful Contrast 森林的黑暗反衬人物的恐惧（terror）；月光的照耀反衬希望（hope） Paragraph1: But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. The ceiling of thick branches shut out the sky and covered the path in darkness. Jane looked around blankly, a

14、shiver of alarm going through her. Soon the full moon rose, large, round and clear, shining in the deep blue. “Why not pick stones from the stream and make them in the form of SOS?” cried Jane excitedly, determined to save herself independently. Having finished it, she felt so exhausted and slept be

15、side the stones. Tomorrow will be another day. 第二段：第二段： Act(角色角色 A 的动作或话语）的动作或话语）-Response（角色（角色 B 的反应）：的反应）： Act The helicopter appeared. Response 动作：Jane ran towards Tom. 情感变化：Hopeful - thrilled Image They hug each other. Contrast 环境衬托环境衬托：森林早晨的美（hope）； 照应首段：照应首段： 首段：Im going to find a better spot

16、 for us to camp 末段：对话 “I miss you so much. Have you found the spot?” “Yes, in our he art.” Paragraph2: It was daybreak when Jane woke up. Birds were chirping, the branches swaying to the rhythm of the wind, and the leaves fluttering like graceful butterflies. A ray of hope rose naturally in her hear

17、t. Suddenly, the buzzing of the helicopter came overhead again. It did saw her waving yellow blouse and most important the SOS. Upon its landing, so thrilled was she that she threw herself at Tom and hugged him tightly, tears of joy welling up in their eyes. “I miss you so much. Have you found the s

18、pot?” “Yes, in our heart.” 全文： Paragraph1: But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. The ceiling of thick branches shut out the sky and covered the path in darkness. Jane looked around blankly, a shiver of alarm going through her. Soon the full moon rose, large, round and clear, sh

19、ining in the deep blue. “Why not pick stones from the stream and make them in the form of SOS?” cried Jane excitedly, determined to save herself independently. Having finished it, she felt so exhausted and slept beside the stones. Tomorrow will be another day. Paragraph2: It was daybreak when Jane w

20、oke up. Birds were chirping, the branches swaying to the rhythm of the wind, and the leaves fluttering like graceful butterflies. A ray of hope rose naturally in her heart. Suddenly, the buzzing of the helicopter came overhead again. It did saw her waving yellow blouse and most important the SOS. Up

21、on its landing, so thrilled was she that she threw herself at Tom and hugged him tightly, tears of joy welling up in their eyes. “I miss you so much. Have you found the spot?” “Yes, in our heart.” 赏析： 1.景色描写，主要用到省略和比喻：景色描写，主要用到省略和比喻： Birds were chirping, the branches （were） swaying to the rhythm of

22、the wind, and the leaves (were) fluttering like graceful butterflies. 2.人物心理活动用到：人物心理活动用到： 独立主格：Jane looked around blankly, a shiver of alarm going through her. tears of joy welling up in their eyes. 形容词短语作状语： cried Jane excitedly, determined to save herself independently. 3.修辞上还用到留白艺术：修辞上还用到留白艺术： “I miss you so much. Have you found the spot?” “Yes, in our heart.” 这段对话留给读者去想象两人的恩爱，不必要再去费笔墨了。 4.至于其它各种语法结构有：至于其它各种语法结构有： Upon doing. Having done. 引用并修改名句： Tomorrow will be another day.