小六英语第20讲：写作指导一（教师版）.docx

1、第 20 讲写作指导一 小六英语写作技巧小六英语写作技巧 一、用介词短语替代从句一、用介词短语替代从句 例： 原句：While they were playing tennis, she started an argument that lasted all morning. 修改后：During tennis she started an argument that lasted all morning. 原句：When you come to the second traffic light, turn right. 修改后：At the second traffic light turn

2、 left. 二、删除诸如二、删除诸如who is”或或that is之类的关系代词，变从句为短之类的关系代词，变从句为短 例： 句： The novel, which is written in three parts, told a story that took place in the Middle Ages. 修改后：The three-part novel told a story set in the Middle Ages. 注： 把句中的three parts改用形容词来表达， 节省了四个不必要的单词which is written in。 我们经常可以将关系代词如that去

3、掉，这只会引起最少的变动。 三、剔除你不需要的单词三、剔除你不需要的单词 例： Two joint partners will present their views over a long-distance telephone call. 写完这样的句子后，你自己再读一遍， 挑出单词joint和telephone，注意删去不必要的词。 1、 重点教学作文审题的过程和技巧 2、 难点教学如何通过学习深入作文。 (1) 以“My friend and I”为题按下面的要求写一篇英语小作文。 要求：1.语句通顺，条理清楚，书写清晰、规范。 2.不得少于 50 个单词。 【要领点评要领点评】 写法：

4、写法：这篇作文的题目是“我的朋友和我” 。既然写作范围是两个人物，就要笔墨均匀，两 者缺一不可。不能只描写朋友，也不能只叙述我。这无形中增加了写作的难度。解决 这个难点的关键是：找出两个人几方面的异同。可以通过常见的年龄、身高、体重、 外貌、喜好等方面列举出每个人的具体实际情况，再进行比较，通过比较突出每个人 物的特点。这样就把人物活灵活现的展现给读者了。 时态：时态：像此类题目的作文，运用一般现在时即可。 句型：句型：因为涉及两个人的比较，不要忘记使用比较级句型：A+be+比较级+than+B。 注意：注意：在列举两个人的“体貌、喜好”等方面情况时，应一边列举，一边比较。不要一味指 出不同，

5、还要列举相同之处。两人能成为朋友，一定有共同语言和喜好，共性不容忽 视。在表达喜好时，不同的句型应交叉运用，避免枯燥的重复。例“Our favorite colors are”，“We like best”, “We both like,too”, 为突出不同时间做不同运动, 用“On Saturdays”， “On Sundays”， 形成鲜明对比。 常使用并列连词and 和转折连词 but ， 使文章读起来更流畅。结尾以 How happy we are!突出了两人从友谊中得到的快乐！ 参考例文：参考例文： My friend and I Ive got a lovely friend a

6、t school. His name is Jack. Jack is 12 years old now. Im 11. Hes older than me. Hes 150 cm tall. Im 148 cm. Hes taller and stronger. Hes 43 kg and Im 41 kg. Hes heavier. Weve got round faces and short hair. But my eyes are bigger and my legs are longer. Our favoritecolors are white and blue. We like

7、 summer best. We both like sports, too. On Saturdays, we play table tennis. On Sundays, we play basketball. Hes good at basketball. But I do better at table tennis. We laugh and play together. How happy we are! （2） 以“A Bad Cold”为题按下面的要求写一篇英语小作文。 要求：1.语句通顺，条理清楚，书写清晰、规范。 2.不得少于 50 个单词。 【要领点评】【要领点评】 写法

8、：写法：这篇习作是按照时间顺序记叙了得病、病的症状、服药及治疗的全过程。写出了小作 者希望快点康复，好去上学的愿望。 时态：时态：这篇文章可以采用一般现在时来写。如果主语是第三人称单数，动词别忘加 s。 句型：句型：要用 feel 加形容词，和表示“患某种疾病”的用法“have+表示的疾病的单词” 。 注意：注意：在表示疾病时，可以使用-ache,hurt 和 sore。不要只用一个单词，以避免枯燥。要写 出得病后的简单治疗及心情，不能只写得病的情况。常见病句：My nose is hurt。因 为be后面要加形容词， 而hurt是动词， 因此应使用sore； 东西放在床上要用on the b

9、ed。 生病，是卧床不起，应该说 stay in bed。表示吃药时，通过用 take some medicine，不 用 eat。 参考例文：参考例文： A Bad Cold Im not feeling well today. I think I have a bad cold. I have a headache. I have a fever. My nose hurts. My throat is sore. I have to take some medicine and stay in bed. My parents will take me to the hospital. W

10、hat a bad cold!I hope I can be better soon. And I want to go to school （3） 以“Zooms Weekend”为题按要求写一篇英语小作文。 要求：1.要详细写出此周末的主要活动。 2.条理清楚，意思连贯，标点正确，书写规范。 3.不少于 50 个单词。 【要领点评】【要领点评】 写法：写法：这篇习作是按时间顺序记叙了 Zoom 的周末活动。 时态：时态：这篇文章可以用三种时态来写，由于本单元主要讲的是一般过去时态，所以我们采用 一般过去时态比较合适。 句型：句型：主语+动词过去式+过去时间。 注意：注意：活动的相关表达法采

11、用新旧知识结合的方法，但要注意动词过去式的拼写。 参考例文：参考例文： Zooms Weekend Zoom had a busy weekend. On Saturday morning, he washed his clothes and went to a park. He did his homework and went fishing on Saturday afternoon. On Sunday morning, he cleaned his room and visited his grandparents. He played football and watch TV o

12、n Sunday afternoon. Zoom was too tired. . A 以一种文具为题按要求写一篇英语小作文。 要求：1.要写出此文具的主要特点。 2.条理清楚，意思连贯，标点正确，书写规范。 3.不少于 50 个单词。 参考例文：参考例文： My Pencil-box I have a pencil-box. It is nice and big. It has many colours. There are two blocks on my pencil-bo x. One is yellow, the other is orange. In my pencil-box,

13、there are pens, pencils, a ruler and an eraser. I like my pencil-box very much and my pencil-box looks like my best friend. B 以“Myself”（我）为题按下面的要求写一篇英语小作文。 要求：1.语句通顺，条理清楚，书写清晰、规范。 2.不得少于 50 个单词。 参考例文：参考例文： Myself My name is Wang Dong. Im 12 years old. Im a student of No. 5 Primary School in Beijing.

14、 I have many hobbies. I like reading and watching TV in my free time. Snow White is my favourite book. I have some friends in my class. My best friend is Chen Gang. I often play games with him. My English teacher is Miss Hu. I like her very much. (1) 以“My Trip”为题按下面的要求写一篇英语作文。 要求：1.意思连贯，词句通顺，标点正确，书写

15、规范。 2.不少于 50 个单词。 参考例文：参考例文： My Trip Japan was fun. It was very cool and windy. We flew kites in the park. I bought a watch there. I wanted to buy more, but I didnt have money. The gardens there were beautiful. I liked them the best. The department stores were too big. I couldnt find Mom. The food w

16、as delicious. We ate a lot of fish, and I also liked the vegetables and cake there. I hope I can go to Japan one more time. (2) 以自己最喜欢的宠物为题按下面的要求写一篇英语作文。 要求：1.意思连贯，词句通顺，标点正确，书写规范。 2.不少于 50 个单词。 参考例文：参考例文： I have a cat .It is a lovely cat. Her name is Lucy .Her fur is black and white. She is my best

17、friend. I like her very much. I often tell stories to her. I think she can understand me. Because she jumps up with the joy when I tell her stories （1） 以你自己的宠物或你熟悉的小动物为题按下面的要求写一篇英语作文。 要求：1.意思连贯，词句通顺，标点正确，书写规范。 2.不少于 50 个单词。 参考例文：参考例文： My dog I have an English dog. Its name is Laike.Its two years old

18、. Its grey. Its body is very long. Its mouth is white. Its two eyes are blue. It has two small ears. Its four legs are very long. Its tail is thin and long. It runs fast. It likes meat. I like to play with it. Its my good friend. (2 ) 以 My Bedroom (我的卧室)为题按要求写一篇英语小作文。 要求：1. 要写出卧室内的主要物品。 2. 条理清楚，语句通顺

19、，标点正确，书写规范。 3. 不少于 50 个单词。 参考例文：参考例文： My Bedroom I have a big bedroom. There are many things in it. There is a big desk in the middle of the room.There are some books, a computer, a keyboard and mouse on it. Theres a pencil-box and a lamp on it, too. Near the desk, theres a bed. Near the bed, there

20、is a big wardrobe. There are two windows in the wall. There are four pictures and a nice clock on the wall, too. I often clean my bedroom .I love my bedroom （3） 以 My Day（我的一天）为题按要求写一篇英语小作文。 要求：1.有一定的内容，条理清楚，语句通顺，书写规范。 2.不少于 50 个单词。 参考例文：参考例文： My Day Im a boy, and Im a pupil. I go to school from Mond

21、ay to Friday. I have no class on Saturdays and Sundays. I often get up at six oclock. I go to school at seven oclock. I have four lessons in th emorning and two in the afternoon. I go home at five. I do my homework at home. 2.阅读阅读 Buying a ticket Wang Bin is a football fan. There is a football match

22、 between Chinese team and American team. He wants to watch it. He comes to the box office(售票处) and gives the clerk 10 yuan. The clerk says,“please give me another 10 yuan. The price(价格) of a ticket is 20 yuan.”“Why?” says Wang Bin, I just watch Chinese team. I dont want to watch the other team at al

23、l. Do you want me to buy a ticket for them? No, no, no” 根据短文内容选择正确答案。 ( )1. How does Wang Bin like football? A. Little. B. A little. C. Very. D. Very much. ( )2. Can you guess the meaning of “clerk” in the passage? A. 商人 B. 老板 C. 买主 D. 售票员 ( )3. Can Wang Bin buy a ticket with 10 yuan? A. Yes, he can

24、. B. Yes, he does. C. No, he cant. D. No, he doesnt. ( )4.“Do you want me to buy a ticket for them?” The word “them” refers to A. Chinese team B. British team C. American team D. French team ( )5. Can Wang Bin watch the match? A. Yes, he will. B. Yes, he can. C. No, he cant. D. No, he wont Keys: 1-5. DDDCC