05《洪亮英语》2021年佛山二模读后续写再开发课件.pptx

1、读后续写20212021年普通高等学校招生年普通高等学校招生 全国统一考试佛山二模全国统一考试佛山二模Continuation Writing第二节 （满分25分） 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 This was it. Today was the day. Finally, she would be able to see her again. Itd been five long years. Her university days now felt like a lifetime ago. When Jennifer thought back

2、 to it, she didnt like the girl she had been then, but when she thought about Yui Fay, that discomfort disappeared and her whole life lit up. She couldnt be more excited. She kept imagining theirmeeting how they would run towards each other, hugging and talking of the old times. As she imagined, hap

3、piness spread through her body. It was time to get dressed. As she was struggling about what to wear, she spotted a red summer dress, which she wore that night in Barcelona. She would never forget that night five years before. After a hard week at university, Yui Fay and she spontaneously（心血来潮地）boug

4、ht bus tickets to Barcelona. They slept on the bus and then spent the whole day exploring the city. In the evening. they met these fun young guys and spent the whole night singing and dancing. Every day with Yui Fay was fun. After university Yui Fay went back to China where she took over her family

5、s business, while Jennifer took the job in an office. They promised to keep in contact. But then life happened. The occasional calls faded with time and they had not talked for over two years. Yet, of all her friends. Yui Fay was still the one she felt the closest to. She knew all her fears, dreams,

6、 and her wildest stories. She knew that if something happened, Yui Fay would be there for her no matter what. And vice versa. Some friendships just survive the passage of time. Yet the idea of meeting her was also terrifying. What if ? The idea was too hard to put into words. What if theperson she w

7、as so fond of was no longer? What if this dinner turned out to be nothing more than a meeting between two boring businesswomen? At that moment, her cellphone rang.注意 1. 续写词数应为150左右 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答 Jennifer took up her phone and looked at the screen. _ Just then, someone was coming towards Jenni

8、fer. _Storywhenwherewhowhathowwhyfive long years laterin university，in BarcelonaJennifer，Yui Faymade an appointmentJennifer and Yui Fay hadnt seen each other for five years一、准确理解材料，理清人物事件一、准确理解材料，理清人物事件 1. 浅层信息理解浅层信息理解 首先要审题：体裁：_；人称：_；主体时态：_。记叙文第三人称一般过去时2. 深层信息理解深层信息理解 理清故事的发展线索（理清故事的发展线索（How）PARAGR

9、APH（段落）（段落）及及时间线索时间线索Behaviors（行为）（行为）Topic（段意）（段意）see her again，felt like，thought back，thought about，disappeared，lit up，kept imagining，hugging and talking of，spread throughJennifer thought of their five years university life and imagined their meeting.Para. 1，2， 3,4，5（at university）2. 深层信息理解深层信息理解

10、理清故事的发展线索（理清故事的发展线索（How）PARAGRAPH（ 段 落 ）（ 段 落 ） 及 时及 时间线索间线索Behaviors（行为）（行为）Topic（段意）（段意）get dressed，was struggling about，spotted a red summer dress，bought bus tickets，exploring，met these fun young guys，singing and dancingThey bought bus tickets to Barcelona and spent the whole day exploring the ci

11、ty.Para. 6（ in Barcelona ）PARAGRAPH（段落）（段落）及及时间线索时间线索Behaviors（行为）（行为）Topic（段（段意）意）went back to，took over her familys business，took the job in an office，keep in contact，faded ，had not talked，felt the closest to，knew all her fears, dreams, and her wildest stories，would be there，survive After universi

12、ty, Jennifer believed that their friendships just survive the passage of time.Para. 7（ After university ）2. 深层信息理解深层信息理解 理清故事的发展线索（理清故事的发展线索（How）PARAGRAPH（段（段落）落）及时间线索及时间线索Behaviors（行为）（行为）Topic（段意）（段意）too hard to put into words，was so fond of，turned out to be nothing more than a meeting，rangJennife

13、r imagined all possible situations when meeting.Para. 8 & 9（ At that moment ）判断细节描写类型：判断细节描写类型：心理活动；动作 ；环境；外貌性格。通过felt like a lifetime；lit up；discomfort disappeared；couldnt be more excited；happiness spread through；fun ；felt the closest to；also terrifying等词汇生动刻画了Jennifer热爱生活，渴望友谊和关爱，但又不很自信，性格情绪不稳定的心理

14、，故事发展情感自然且真挚。3. 整合本篇的整合本篇的故事故事情节和情感线索：情节和情感线索： 五年了，Jennifer马上要和Yui Fay见面了，见面了，Jennifer想起了他们五年的大学生活，也起他们买了去巴塞罗那的汽车票，花了一整天的时间游览这个城市。大学毕业后，他们逐渐失去联系了，但Jennifer认为他们的友谊会随着时间的推移而持续下去。Jennifer想象了他们再见面时所有可能的情况。二、分析续写段首，确定续写方向 根据段首句1（ Jennifer拿起手机，看着屏幕）结合文尾句At that moment, her cellphone rang，设想以下问题获取写作要点： Whi

15、ch words or phrases catch your eyes? (took up her phone，screen)What happened then?How would Jennifer feel?How did the story develop? 根据段首句 2 （就在这时，有人向Jennifer走来。）及时间线索词Just then，设想以下问题： Which words or phrases catch your eyes? (coming towards Jennifer)What did Yui Fay do and say? What did Jennifer re

16、act then What did they talk about and do ?What can we learn at last?二、分析续写段首，确定续写方向三、借助文本资源，创设续写情节三、借助文本资源，创设续写情节 根据已知人物、事件及续写段落首句预测故事总体的发展。根据已知人物、事件及续写段落首句预测故事总体的发展。 Paragraph 1：开端 Jennifer拿起手机。故事发展打通电话，得知约会只好取消了在街上漫无目的地闲逛无意间走进了约定的餐厅菜单上有许多她最喜欢吃的菜，但没有胃口。 高潮没有意识到正发生了什么事。 Paragraph 2：高潮有人向Jennifer走来 J

17、ennifer得到了一个温暖的拥抱Yui Fay完成了工作，并一路跟着她来到餐馆。结局这两个女人一起谈论过去的有趣的时光。感悟很多事情也许会改变，但做得最深厚的友谊却不会。Paragraph 1: Jennifer took up her phone and looked at the screen. The name “Yui Fay” on the screen made her heart bounding wildly. She got it through and heard a gentle but similar voice “Its me, Jennifer. Im sorry

18、, but our appointment will have to be cancelled because of my urgent business.” As she imagined, some kind of shock and disappointment spread through her heart. After getting dressed in the red summer dress, she aimlessly wandered on the street and ended up walking into the appointed restaurant unco

19、nsciously. Filled with her favorite dishes as the menu was, yet she had no appetite for anything at all. Thinking of their sweet moments and friendship, she was not aware of what was happening to her then.四、参考范文四、参考范文Paragraph 2: Just then, someone was coming towards Jennifer. She delicately patted

20、Jennifer on the shoulder. Before her reaction, she was greeted with a warm hug. It was Yui Fay whom she had been dreaming of. Seeing that naughty, wild and adventurous face that had been carved into her brain, Jennifer lit up excitedly. “Why are you still here?” Yui Fay smilingly explained that she

21、had dealt with her business as quickly as possible and followed her all the way here to give her a big surprise. Undoubtedly, the two businesswomen talked of the old times together, which turned out to be great fun. In fact, many things will maybe change, but the deepest friendship will not. 【名师导学】续

22、写首段Jennifer拿起手机，看着屏幕。屏幕上的名字“Yui Fay”让她的心狂跳不止。承接了文本结尾的发展的脉络，想到要见Yui Fay，Jennifer既兴奋又害怕。短尾Jennifer没有意识到正发生了什么事衔接续写第二段有人向Jennifer走来，Jennifer得到了一个温暖的拥抱，很好衔接了首段故事脉络，且最后使用感悟many things will maybe change, but the deepest friendship will not升华主题。故事采用“多样性”语言结构如：状语从句As she imagined，介词短语或分词作状语After getting dre

23、ssed，Thinking of their sweet moments and friendship；倒装句Filled with her favorite dishes as the menu was；强调句It was Yui Fay whom；定语从句that had been carved into her brain表现出Jennifer渴求友谊和关爱，但又性格情绪、焦虑的心情。此外此外划线部分是选用与续写情节内容相关联的文本线索词，通过照应、替代、词汇复现等方法帮助完成读后续写，而且确保了续写与文脉主题、人物、线索和语言风格一致性。本文分别用了Undoubtedly，In fact等衔接词汇，使得全文连贯且紧凑。名师导学祝同学们高考成功！