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1、1第1页，共39页。一、结构层面错误分析一、结构层面错误分析1 1、段落少于三段。段落少于三段。只写一段只写一段0-40-4分，写两段分，写两段0-70-7分。分。2 2、结构安排不合理。、结构安排不合理。一般来说中间主体段篇幅最大。一般来说中间主体段篇幅最大。一句话不足以成段。一句话不足以成段。3 3、论述段落无层次感：未使用合适的过渡词。、论述段落无层次感：未使用合适的过渡词。第2页，共39页。二、语法层面错误分析二、语法层面错误分析1 1、句子结构混乱，出现句子不完整或句子结构混乱，出现句子不完整或句子句子 成成分多余分多余 2 2、主谓不一致、主谓不一致3 3、双动词、双动词4 4、时

2、态问题、时态问题5 5、名词可数与不可数的误用、名词可数与不可数的误用6 6、动词作主语、动词作主语7 7、修饰语错位、修饰语错位8 8、悬垂修饰语、悬垂修饰语第3页，共39页。一、一、句子不完整句子不完整 句子结构不完整会令意思表达不清，这种情况常常发生在主句写完以后，又想加些补充说明时发生 Therearemanywaystoknowthesociety.Forexample,byTV,radio,newspaper and soon.改为：改为：Therearemanywaystoknowsociety,forexample,byTV,radio andnewspaper.第4页，共39

3、页。一、一、句子多余句子多余例例6Thepublicserviceadvertisementcatcheveryoneseyes,enableuspaymoreattentionaboutourlivesandsocieties.第5页，共39页。二、二、主谓不一致主谓不一致 e.g.Whenonehavemoney,he can do what hewantto.改为：改为：Onceonehasmoney,he can do what hewants to.第6页，共39页。三、三、双动词（常见双动词（常见there bethere be句型）句型）改为改为1：Therearealargen

4、umberofpeoplewhodiefromthedisasters.改为改为2：Therearealargenumberofpeopledyingfromthedisasters.改为改为3：Alargenumberofpeoplediefromthedisasters.e.gTherearelargenumberofpeoplediefromthedisasters.第7页，共39页。四、四、时态问题时态问题 改为改为1：Withtheimprovementoflivingstandard,moreandmorepeoplehavepossessedcars.e.gWiththeimpr

5、ovementoflivingstandard,moreandmorepeoplehadcars.第8页，共39页。五、五、名词可数不可数的误用名词可数不可数的误用 改为改为:Toomanytestshavenegativeimpactsonstudents.e.g第9页，共39页。六、六、动词作主语动词作主语 改为改为:Toplay/Playingcomputergameswillsurelyinfluencestudentsstudy.e.g第10页，共39页。七、七、修饰语错位修饰语错位 英语与汉语不同，同一个修饰语置于句子不同的位置，英语与汉语不同，同一个修饰语置于句子不同的位置，句子

6、的含义可能引起变化对于这一点中国学生往往没句子的含义可能引起变化对于这一点中国学生往往没有引起足够的重视，因而造成了不必要的误解有引起足够的重视，因而造成了不必要的误解e.g.IbelieveIcandoitwellandIwillbetterknowtheworldoutsidethecampus.改为：改为：I believe I can do it well and know the world outside the campus better.第11页，共39页。八八悬垂修饰语悬垂修饰语 所谓悬垂修饰语是指句首的短语与后面句子的逻辑关系所谓悬垂修饰语是指句首的短语与后面句子的逻辑关系

7、混乱不清混乱不清例例1.Attheageoften,mygrandfatherdied.改为改为：WhenIwasten,mygrandfatherdied.例例2 2 Todowellincollege,goodgradesareessential.改为：改为：Todowellincollege,astudentneedsgoodgrades.第12页，共39页。三、语言表达层面错误分析三、语言表达层面错误分析1 1、词性使用混乱词性使用混乱 2 2、词语搭配错误、词语搭配错误3 3、to to 的用法的用法4 4、汉语翻译痕迹明显、汉语翻译痕迹明显第13页，共39页。一、一、词性误用词性误

8、用“词性误用词性误用”常表现为：介词当动词用；形容词当副词用；名常表现为：介词当动词用；形容词当副词用；名词当动词用等词当动词用等 Nobodycannegativetheimportanceofmoney.剖析：剖析：negativenegative系形容词，误作动词。系形容词，误作动词。改为：改为：Nobodycandenytheimportanceofmoney.第14页，共39页。一、一、词性误用词性误用“词性误用词性误用”常表现为：介词当动词用；形容词当副词用；常表现为：介词当动词用；形容词当副词用；名词当动词用等名词当动词用等.Allthegraduatesarefacingthe

9、sameproblemoffindingagoodjobinmodernsocial.剖析：剖析：socialsocial系形容词，误作名词。系形容词，误作名词。改为：改为：Allthegraduatesarefacingthesameproblemoffindingagoodjobinmodernsociety.第15页，共39页。二、二、词语搭配错误词语搭配错误e.g We must pay attention to it and make a solution of the problem.改为：改为：We must pay attention to it and find/work o

10、ut/figure out a solution to the problem.第16页，共39页。e.gToomanytestswilldoharmtocultivateourindependentthinking.改为：改为：Toomanytestswilldoharmtothecultivationofourindependentthinking.三、三、to的用法的用法第17页，共39页。四、汉语四、汉语思维思维 Today,Moneytoeverybodyisveryimportance,ourseat,cloth,live,go,etc.Iverylikeit.改为：改为：Ilik

11、eitverymuch.改为：改为：Today,Moneytoeverybodyisveryimportant,becausefood,clothing,shelterandtransportation,thefourbasicnecessitiesallconsumemoney.第18页，共39页。预测作文一Directions:For this part,you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay.You should start your essay with a brief description of the picture a

12、nd then express your views on Should We Give a Hand to the Strangers in Need of Help?You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.第19页，共39页。ShouldWeGiveaHandtotheStrangersinNeedofHelp?Asisvividlyshowedinthepicture,an old woman has fallen down and shouted for help,the woman standing

13、 beside warned the young man not to offer help so as to avoid being blackmailed by the elderly.Suchimagedrawsattentiontotheissue whether we should offer help to the stranger in need of help.Thereisonlyoneimportantreasonwhya minority of people are willing to offer their help to strangers,especially t

14、he elderly.That is,people are often blackmailed after giving a hand,第20页，共39页。which is reported on TV or newspapers quite frequently.However,thisphenomenonhasarousedanumberofdreadfulconsequencesonthesociety.Tobeginwith,such indifference to needed people will lead to moral declining of the whole soci

15、ety.Moreover,if we do not offer our help,people in desperate need may even lose their lives.AsfarasIamconcerned,I wontturnblindeyesto those needed strangers since to help others is a glorious tradition of our nation.Meanwhile,I will protect myself and offer help in an appropriate way.Onlywhen I have

16、 a ready mind to help others can I expect to be helped when I am in need.第21页，共39页。预测作文二Directions:For this part,you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay.You should start your essay with a brief description of the picture and then express your views on On the Study of Chinese Traditional Cu

17、lture.You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.第22页，共39页。On the Study of Chinese Traditional Culture Just like what you can see in the picture above,students areboundupin learning English in Guoxue class,which makes the Chinese teacher furious.Recent few years have witnessed th

18、e phenomenon that people have putEnglishasthetoppriority and ignored the importance of Chinese traditional culture,Since English is considered as a means of promoting commerce and world communication.第23页，共39页。People,however,differinopinionsonthismatter.Somepeoplehold the idea that the prominence of

19、 English study should be reduced significantly,students should spend balanced time on each subject，especially for Chinese students,they should render Chinese,their tongue to be on the list of priority.It is more crucial to acquire the Chinese traditional culture in the view of these people.Meanwhile

20、,some people think it is unnecessary to learn Chinese traditional culture since theyre out-of-date in this modern society.They advocate that in order to be competent in the modern society,individuals should have a good mastery of English.第24页，共39页。As to me,I strongly recommend students to limit thei

21、r times in learning English and attach more importance to our Chinese traditional culture.Chinese is our mother tongue and it carries notonlythe cultural significance of our nation,but also a sense of mission and pride.第25页，共39页。Directions:For this part,you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short es

22、say.You should start your essay with a brief description of the picture and then express your views on On the Cancellation of English Test.You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.第26页，共39页。On the Cancellation of English Test As vividly depicted in the picture a student who is

23、making preparation for the national college entrance exam is feeding himself with the knowledge of all the subjects except English.A proposal to remove the English test from the national college entrance exam has triggeredheateddebate among parents and experts.第27页，共39页。Some say it is a good news as

24、 it helps toeasestudentsburden.Students will utilize the time which used to study English on other subjects.However,the others worry that students may think English playsaminorrole in their daily life.They advocate that if English is no longer in the national college entrance exam,students will not

25、make endeavor to learn it.Moreover,in the long run they are not capable of using English to communicate with the people outside our country.第28页，共39页。AsfarasIamconcerned,aslongas colleges recruit students according to their scores,no matter how and where they take assessments,it wont help ease the a

26、cademic pressure at all.As a result,thekeytothesolutionliesinthe reform of the enrollment system and exam-oriented education.Furthermore,as a useful communication tool,English should be learned through more active communication rather than focusing on vocabulary and grammar.第29页，共39页。假日经济的现象表明：中国消费者

27、的消费观假日经济的现象表明：中国消费者的消费观正在发生巨大变化。根据统计数据，中国消正在发生巨大变化。根据统计数据，中国消费者的消费需求正在从基本生活必需品转向费者的消费需求正在从基本生活必需品转向对休闲、舒适和个人发展的需求。同时，中对休闲、舒适和个人发展的需求。同时，中国人的消费观在蓬勃发展的假日经济中正变国人的消费观在蓬勃发展的假日经济中正变得成熟。因此产品结构应做相应调整，来适得成熟。因此产品结构应做相应调整，来适应社会的发展。另一方面，服务质量要改善应社会的发展。另一方面，服务质量要改善，以满足人们提高生活质量的要求。，以满足人们提高生活质量的要求。第30页，共39页。Thephen

28、omenonofholidayeconomyshowsthatChinesepeoplesconsumptionconceptisundertakinggreatchanges.Accordingtostatistics,thedemandsofChineseconsumersareshiftingfromthebasicnecessitiesoflifetoleisure,comfortandpersonaldevelopment.Meanwhile,theconsumptionofChinesepeoplehasbecomematuredintheprosperously-develope

29、dholidayeconomy.Therefore,thestructureofproductsshouldbeadjustedaccordinglytoadapttosocialdevelopment.Ontheotherhand,servicesshouldbeimprovedtosatisfypeoplesdemandforanimprovedqualityoflife.第31页，共39页。近代以来，亚洲经历了曲折和艰难的发展历近代以来，亚洲经历了曲折和艰难的发展历程。亚洲人们为改变自己的命运，始终以不程。亚洲人们为改变自己的命运，始终以不屈的意志和艰辛的奋斗开辟前进道路。今天屈的意志和

30、艰辛的奋斗开辟前进道路。今天，人们所看到的亚洲发展成就，是勤劳智慧，人们所看到的亚洲发展成就，是勤劳智慧的亚洲人民不屈不挠、锲而不舍奋斗的结果的亚洲人民不屈不挠、锲而不舍奋斗的结果。亚洲人民深知，世界上没有放之四海而皆。亚洲人民深知，世界上没有放之四海而皆准的发展模式，也没有一成不变的发展道路准的发展模式，也没有一成不变的发展道路，亚洲人民勇于变革创新，不断开拓进取，亚洲人民勇于变革创新，不断开拓进取，探索和开辟适应时代潮流，符合自身实际的探索和开辟适应时代潮流，符合自身实际的发展道路，为经济社会发展打开了广阔前景发展道路，为经济社会发展打开了广阔前景。第32页，共39页。Inmodernti

31、mes,Asiaexperiencedtwistsandturnsinitsdevelopment.Tochangetheirdestiny,thepeopleofAsiahavebeenforgingaheadinanindomitablespiritandwithhardstruggle.AsiasdevelopmentachievementstodayaretheresultofthepersistenteffortsoftheindustriousandtalentedAsianpeople.ThepeopleofAsiaarefullyawarethatthereisnoreadym

32、odelorunchangingpathofdevelopmentthatisuniversallyapplicable.Theynevershyawayfromreformandinnovation.Instead,theyarecommittedtoexploringandfindingdevelopmentpathsthatareinlinewiththetrendofthetimesandtheirownsituations,andhaveopenedupbrightprospectsforeconomicandsocialdevelopment.第33页，共39页。过去过去10年，海

33、平面升高和森林看法的速度都是前所年，海平面升高和森林看法的速度都是前所未有的；生态恶化、物种灭绝、臭氧层被破坏、温未有的；生态恶化、物种灭绝、臭氧层被破坏、温室效应、酸雨等一系列环境问题已经严重影响到人室效应、酸雨等一系列环境问题已经严重影响到人类的生存环境。环境恶化造成的问题之一就是缺水类的生存环境。环境恶化造成的问题之一就是缺水。目前全世界。目前全世界40%以上的人口，即以上的人口，即20多亿人，面临多亿人，面临缺水问题。据预测，未来缺水问题。据预测，未来25年全球人口将有年全球人口将有60亿增亿增长到长到80亿，环境保护面临更大的压力。中国作为亿，环境保护面临更大的压力。中国作为一个发展

34、中国家，面临着发展经济和保护环境的双一个发展中国家，面临着发展经济和保护环境的双重任务。重任务。第34页，共39页。Sealevelroseandforestweredestroyedatanunprecedentedrateduringthelastdecade.Aseriesofenvironmentalproblemssuchsthedeteriorationofecosystem,theextinctionofbio-species,damagetotheozonelayer,thegreen-houseeffect,acidrain,haveposedaseriousthreatto

35、humanlivingconditions.Environmentalcrisisleadstooneoftheseriousproblems,namely,watershortage.Presently,morethan40%oftheworldspopulation,morethan2billionpeople,nowfacewatershortage.Itispredicted第35页，共39页。hatwiththeglobalpopulationexpectedtoincreasefromsixbilliontoeightbillionoverthenext25years,morepr

36、essureonenvironmentalprotectionstressisexpected.Asadevelopingcountry,chinaisconfrontedwiththedualtaskofdevelopingtheeconomyandprotectingtheenvironment.第36页，共39页。泰山的每个季节都有独特的魅力。春天，绿茵茵的泰山的每个季节都有独特的魅力。春天，绿茵茵的山坡上，争奇斗妍的花朵到处可见。夏天泰山的雷山坡上，争奇斗妍的花朵到处可见。夏天泰山的雷暴雨堪称奇观。秋天，枫树叶漫山遍野，蔚蓝色的暴雨堪称奇观。秋天，枫树叶漫山遍野，蔚蓝色的河水川流不息。

37、冬天，雪盖群峰松披霜，景观素雅河水川流不息。冬天，雪盖群峰松披霜，景观素雅悲壮，别有一番情趣。喜逢艳阳日，极目远眺，重悲壮，别有一番情趣。喜逢艳阳日，极目远眺，重峦叠嶂，尽收眼帘。但遇天阴时，环顾四周，苍茫峦叠嶂，尽收眼帘。但遇天阴时，环顾四周，苍茫大地，尽入云海。泰山的日出与日落，闻名遐尔。大地，尽入云海。泰山的日出与日落，闻名遐尔。壮观的自然风景以及不可计数的历史名胜，激发了壮观的自然风景以及不可计数的历史名胜，激发了古代文人墨客，为之舞文弄墨，创作了无数经典古代文人墨客，为之舞文弄墨，创作了无数经典 佳作。泰山历来是画家骚客所钟情的聚集地。佳作。泰山历来是画家骚客所钟情的聚集地。第37页

38、，共39页。EachseasonMountTaihasitsbeauty:brightflowersinfullbloomcoveringthegreenslopesinspring,spectacularsummerthunderstormswhicharerarelyseenelsewhere,blueriversrunningacrossthemountainsoverlaidwithredmapleleavesinfall,andsnow-cappedmountainsandfrostedpinetreesinwinterthatstageaquietsolemnspectacleof

39、particularinterest.Onacleardayonecanseethepeaksrisingoneafteranother./Whentheskyisovercast,thehorizon第38页，共39页。disappearsintoaseaofclouds.MountTaiismostfamousforitsspectacularsunriseandsunset.Itslandscapeandnumeroushistoricalsiteshaveinspiredmanygreatclassicsofancientwriters,scholarsandcalligraphers.MountTaihaslongbeenthepreferredgatheringplaceofartistsandpoets.第39页，共39页。