（读后续写解读）广州与深圳一模英语试题读后续写指导课件.pptx

1、广州一模作文 第一节 (满分15分)假定你是李华,上周你校举办了首届生活技能云端展示活动,主题为“劳动创造美好生活(Work Creates a Better Life)”。请你为校英文报写一篇报道,内容包括：1.活动主题；活动主题；2.展示内容展示内容(烹任、急救等烹任、急救等)；3.活动反响活动反响。注意：1.写作词数应为80左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。The First Online Life Skills Show 写作的内容是为校英文报写一篇报道，回顾校首届生活技能云端展示活动。本题题材源于生活，但略显新颖，审题需要仔细考虑。在构思内容的时候，建议考生关注：关于活动

2、的时间地点，考生需根据“云端展示”设置合理的情景。活动反响要紧扣活动主题及展示内容。报道体裁的相关结构和常见句式，都应 该仔细斟酌。The first online life skills show,whose theme was Work Creates a Better Life,was held by our school last Friday.With the theme of,sth was held in our school.It draw the attention of teachers and students.Teachers and students interest

3、ed in it were required to display their life skills of cooking,first aid as well as washing clothes.This activity turned out to be a great success.Not only does it.but also it.The First Online Life Skills Show With the theme of Work Creates a Better Life,the first online life skills show was held in

4、 our school last Friday,which turned out to be a great success.The online show was broadcast live through the school website.Contestants/Participants were required to display their life skills of cooking,first aid or repair with tools prepared by themselves.Directly following participants performanc

5、es,we audience voted and the one making Zongzi was rated the best.Through this activity,not only could we show/demonstrate our life skills but also we appreciated the life from a new angle.这篇文章关于孩子撒谎，最后承认错误。题目：阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。It took place in a teachers family.One day,Ben was pl

6、aying basketball in the living room after school,when he accidentally threw the ball at a vase sitting on the shelf.The vase dropped to the floor and a large piece broke off.What made Ben more upset was that the vase was not a common decoration but an antique,which was handed down through generation

7、s from the 18th century.It was also his mothers favourite possession.To cover his terrible action,the terrified boy glued the pieces together hastily and put the vase back to its place.As the mother herself dusted the vase every day,she naturally noticed the cracks(裂纹)that evening.To her surprise,th

8、e repair work was actually very good.At dinner time,she asked her boy if he broke the vase.Fearing punishment,the suddenly inspired boy said that a neighbours cat jumped in from the window and he couldnt drive it away no matter how hard he tried.It raced around the living room and finally knocked th

9、e vase off its shelf.His mother was quite clear that her son was lying,for all the windows were closed before she left for work each morning and opened after she returned.However,in the face of her sons nervous eyes and the suspicious looks of the other family members.Bens mother remained calm.She r

10、ealized she shouldnt just simply blame and punish her son for lying.She came up with another idea.Before going to bed,the boy found a note from his mother in his room,asking him to go tothe study at once.The boy thought he would now be punished but,as he had already lied,he was determined to deny ev

11、erything to the end,no matter how angry his mum became.In the study,calmly bathed in the light,his mothers face showed no sign of anger.On seeing her son push open the door and cautiously enter,she took a chocolate box out of a drawer and gave him one.1.续写词数应为 150左右;2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。The mother sa

12、id,This chocolate is a reward for your imagination:a window-opening cat!Now with some chocolates in hand,the boys bad attitude disappeared.写作指导写作指导：第一步：在搞懂文章的第一步：在搞懂文章的characters,plot,setting的基础上，把所有可能的线索全部的基础上，把所有可能的线索全部列出来：列出来：his mothers favourite possessionglued the pieces together hastilythe cr

13、acks（裂纹）the repair work was actually very goodFearing punishmenta neighbours catHis mother was quite clearBens mother remained calm.She realized she shouldnt just simply blame and punish her son for lying.he was determined to deny everything to the end,no matter how angry his mum became.In the study

14、,calmly bathed in the light his mothers face showed no sign of anger.a chocolate box out of a drawer第二步：首句解读 The mother said,This chocolate is a reward for your imagination:a window-opening cat!Now with some chocolates in hand,the boys bad attitude disappeared.衔接句:give him more chocolates第三步：构思场景,紧扣

15、主题。本文主题毫无疑问是属于change类，即：男孩从撒谎变成诚实的孩子。我们要续写的就是：到底妈妈做了什么让孩子改变的？/妈妈给他巧克力的原因？The mother said,This chocolate is a reward for your imagination:a window-opening cat!场景一：场景一：the boys puzzle and embarrassment场景二：场景二：the mothers smile and explanation(是否可以照应线索：是否可以照应线索：the cracks,good repair,close the door,why

16、?Need more imagination)场景三：场景三：the boy felt shameful衔接句衔接句:give him more chocolatesNow with some chocolates in hand,the boys bad attitude disappeared.场景一：场景一：boys regret and admit his mistake场景二：场景二：mothers response场景三：场景三：theme;the boy got the chocolates and understand what mother said妈妈先奖励他，然后惩罚他。

17、先奖励，是消除他的警戒和抵抗心理；后惩罚他的撒谎。这样就是奖惩分明，让孩子明白他要为他的所有行为负责，而且真实意识到诚实的重要性。The mother said,This chocolate is a reward for your imagination:a window-opening cat!Scratching his head in confusion,the boy felt the chocolate was a hot potato.Did she find some holes in my excuse?“You know,all the windows were shut

18、close.”Mother seemed to see him through but continued calmly,“Arent you imaginative to tell me that cats amazing ability?”The boy hung his head in shame.How he wished the ground to open up and swallow him!The mother pulled him close and pressed two chocolates into his hands,“These are a reward for y

19、our gluing.”Now with some chocolates in hand,the boys bad attitude disappeared.His conscience forced him to make a decision.“Mom,it was I who broke the vase.”he stammered out the truth but suddenly felt like being relieved of tons of burden.“Good.But you deserved punishing for lying.”The mother said

20、 as calmly as usual,“Just give me the three chocolates.”The boy did it.“Now,my boy.This box of chocolates are a award for your honesty.”The mother stared at him with admiration,“Honesty is the best policy.”（186 words)说明：这篇文章我综合用到了前面文章说道地技巧：1.如何表示内心地想法疑问句：Did she find some holes in my excuse?虚拟句：How

21、he wished the ground to open up and swallow him!2.如何在结尾表达主题在对话里把主题凸显：The mother stared at him with admiration,“Honesty is the best policy.”3.对人物性格刻画地统一原文：However,in the face of her sons nervous eyes and the suspicious looks of the other family members,Bens mother remained calm.我地照应：Mother seemed to

22、see him through but continued calmly,The mother said as calm as usual.感谢观看深圳一模深圳一模 读后续写读后续写Reading for Elements读要素读要素WhoWhenWhereWhatSally,her mother,coach,refereeduring a gameon the grassy fieldSally was playing a football game.She didnt score a goal.She felt bored about the game andconsidered to q

23、uit it.Reading for plot 读情节读情节123Reading for plot 读情节读情节546Expressions about football1.football season2.run around3.uniform4.chase the ball 5.across the grassy field6.score one goal7.pass the ball8.take shots at the goal 足球赛季足球赛季到处跑到处跑队服队服 追球追球 穿过草地穿过草地 踢进一球踢进一球 传球传球 射门射门Expressions about football9.

24、kick the ball past the goalkeeper10.coach11.go in the wrong direction12.take control of13.referee14.blew his whistle15.head to her position16.with many feet kicking frantically at the ball 将球踢过守门员将球踢过守门员教练教练 跑错方向跑错方向 控制控制 裁判裁判 吹哨吹哨 朝她的位置走去朝她的位置走去 用许多的脚拼命地踢球用许多的脚拼命地踢球Descriptions about SallyAchieveme

25、nts:1.Sally still had not score one single goal.2.Sally was pretty good at passing the ball.3.she couldnt kick the ball past the goalkeeper.4.She was trying.Every time she got a chance to kick the ball,it would go in the wrong direction or a player from other team would take control of it.Feelings:5

26、.She really enjoyed.6.She wondered if she should quit football and join a different club.7.Sally was feeling frustrated.8.she knew that she tried her best.That was something to be proud of.9.It was a rather boring game and Sallys heart was no longer in it.10.Sally started to daydreaming about joinin

27、g other school clubs.Actions:11.She sipped at her cola and pouted.12.Sally bent,tied up her shoelace and heard her mother whisper in her ear.13.Sally stood up and took a deep breath.14.So she smiled at her mother and headed to her position.15.Recalling from her mothers words,Sally was woken from her

28、 daydream.Inferring the development推发展推发展Paragraph 2:Recalling from her mothers words,Sally was woken from her daydream.Paragraph 1:Sally started to daydreaming about joining other school clubs.开始开始发展发展高潮高潮转折转折结局结局Sally had been playing football and had not scored a goal.She wanted to quit football

29、and join a different club.The game continued.Mother told Sally to keep focus.Para1:Sally started to daydreaming about joining other school clubs.Para2:Recalling from her mothers words,Sally was woken from her daydream.frustratedsatisfiedtended to give updeterminedsolution:stay focusSally scored a go

30、al./Her team won the game.Writing your story 写故事CAFEParagraph 1:Sally started to daydreaming about joining other school clubs.1.What club would Sally join?2.What would she do in the club?3.How would she feel?4.How did she recall her mothers words?Writing your story 写故事CAFEParagraph 2:Recalling from

31、her mothers words,Sally was woken from her daydream.1.What would she do?2.How was the game going?3.How did she feel?4.What about her teammates and the other team?5.Did her team win the game?Polishing your story 润故事（1 1）连词）连词 （2 2）副词（）副词（3 3）形容词（）形容词（4 4）句型）句型（5 5）细节：心理、环境、动作、语言）细节：心理、环境、动作、语言.P177修辞

32、手法修辞手法1.明喻 She ran as fast as a leopard.2.夸张 She brought the house down with her excellent perfomance.The moment she got the ball,her heart burst.3.拟人 The breeze gently kissed her cheeks as if it were congratulating her on her victory.4.反复 They hugged together,jumping and cheering,“We won!We won!”5.

33、排比 No matter who you are,no matter what you do,no matter how tough the situation is,stay focus and you will make it.A Possible Version Sally started daydreaming about joining other school clubs.She could be a member of the hip hop club,which her best friend Tracy kept talking about.She imagined hers

34、elf dancing on stage of a big auditorium with thousands of people cheering for her.She could also try a different sport,like jogging or cycling.Anyway,football would be her last choice.Just as her mind was wandering,she saw a familiar face in the crowd.It was her mother.Stay focused.You can do it.Re

35、calling her mother s words.Sally was woken from her daydream.At that very moment,her teammate passed the ball to her.She took control of it and dribbled it between her feet,moving forward toward the net of the green team.She passed a few players and was soon positioned right in front of the net.Focused on the ball,she kicked it as hard as she could.The referee blew her whistle.Goal!.Sallys team won.Her mom was right.All she had to do was stay focused.