如何写好读后续写(ppt课件)-2022新人教版（2019）《高中英语》必修第二册.pptx

1、表达的准确性和丰富性教师：吴杰杰学校：大悟一中读后续写微技能读后续写第五档评分原则 档档 次次 描描 述述 第五档（2125）与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理。内容丰富，应用了5个以上短文中标出的关键词语。所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不会影响意义表达。有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。rich&accurate创造动作链。2.2.精选动词，做到描写精准。精选动词，做到描写精准。3.3.添加修饰成分，实现描写生动。添加修饰成分，实现描写生动。在描写动作时，要细化动作，把动作分在描写动作时，要细化动作，把动作分解成一连串细微的动作，形成解

2、成一连串细微的动作，形成，这样人物更有画面感，立体感。这样人物更有画面感，立体感。2.2.汤姆把小女孩从着火的房子里救了出来汤姆把小女孩从着火的房子里救了出来。1.(1.(灾难过后灾难过后)妻子开车过来与他相见妻子开车过来与他相见。Not long after he arrived,his truck came into sight.LoAnna(his wife)pulled over and ran to him.He hugged her tightly and spoke with relief“Lets go home.”Without delay,Tom kicked the do

3、or open with great force,only to find the little girl lying on the floor.Immediately,he picked her up,shielded her nose from the choking smoke and rushed downstairs.1.As the bell rang,Amy and I went out of DIY classroom,heading to the store where we had our mothers gift picked.2.The boy got up,mumbl

4、ed sorry,and ran the corner as quickly as possible.3.While waiting,She nervously walked outside the room.4.I waited until it was dark.Silently and secretly,I went into the yard of the old lady.I looked around.5.In no time he got annoyed and walked into our room,questioning us in glare who it was tha

5、t made such a mess of his flowers.rusheddashingfledpaced up and downslippedstormed精选动词精选动词添加修饰成分添加修饰成分比如要体现人物动作的迅速或短暂，可以添加的修饰语：比如要体现人物动作的迅速或短暂，可以添加的修饰语：immediately;instantly;swiftly;speedily;without delay/hesitation其他情况其他情况:walk aimlessly;speak in a soft but firm voice;hug tightly;said with a determ

6、ined voice动作描写中最常见的修饰成分是状语，如副词，介词短语等。动作描写中最常见的修饰成分是状语，如副词，介词短语等。描述内心“兴奋”的常用词有：thrilled.描述内心“悲伤”的常用词有：heartache;sorrowful描述内心“害怕，恐惧”的常用词有afraid;horror;horrible;scare;fear angryUsing actions to describe the feelingstiredsurprisedfrightenedupset/uneasycautiousexcitedHe covered his mouth to hide his yaw

7、n.Our mouths dropped open in surprise.She folded her arms and stared at him.She jumped to her feet at the news.She picked her way carefully along the stream.He paced back and forth.She screamed that there was a snake.My eyes were wide open.My face turned pale.My legs were trembling.My heart was beat

8、ing wildly.My tears were welling up.My heart My face My eyes My legs eyes/face/mouth/heart/ear/hand/body.My tears 翻译练习1：当看到那只凶恶的狼时，我感到很害怕。概括描述：At the sight of the fierce wolf,I felt very scared.At the sight of the fierce wolf,I froze with terror,too scared to move an inch.(吓呆了，不敢动弹)翻译练习2：当主持人宣布她获奖时，

9、她兴奋极了。概括描述 When the host announced that she won the prize,she felt thrilled.When the host announced that she won the prize,her eyes twinkled with excitement.（激动得两眼放光）翻译练习3:一听到那个坏消息，她悲伤不已。概括描述 Upon hearing the bad news,she felt extremely sad.Upon hearing the bad news,her heart ached,tears streaming d

10、own her cheeks.(心痛，眼泪直流)翻译练习4:她感到非常羞愧。概括描述 She felt ashamed.She felt so ashamed that she could feel her face burning.(脸上滚烫)Writing 1(2018浙江宁波5月模拟)阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。Jenny was the only child in her family.She had a quarrel with her mother that afternoon and she ran out of the house angrily

11、.She couldnt help weeping sorrowfully when she thought of the scolding from her mother.Having wandered aimlessly in the street for hours,she felt a little hungry and wished for something to eat.She stood beside a stand for a while,watching the middle-aged seller busy doing his business.However,with

12、no money in hand,she gave a sigh and had to leave.The seller behind the stand noticed the young girl and asked,“Hey,girl,you want to have the noodles?”“Oh,yes,but I dont have money on me,”she replied.“Thats nothing.Ill treat you today,”said the man.“Come in.”The seller brought her a bowl of noodles,

13、the smell so attractive.As she was eating,Jenny cried silently.“What is it?”asked the man kindly.“Nothing.Actually I was just touched by your kindness!”said Jenny as she wiped her tears.“Even a stranger on the street will give me a bowl of noodles,while my mother drove me out of the house.She showed

14、 no care for me.She is so merciless compared to a stranger!”Hearing the words,the seller smiled,“Girl,do you really think so?I only gave you a bowl of noodles and you thanked me a lot.But it is your mother who has raised you since you were a baby.Can you number the times she cooked for you?Have you

15、expressed your gratitude to her?”Jenny sat there,speechless and numb with shock;she remembered her mothers familiar face and weathered hands.“Why didnt I think of that?A bowl of noodles from a stranger made me feel indebted.Why havent I thanked my mum for what she has done for me?”On the way home,Je

16、nny made up her mind to make an apology to her mother for her rudeness as soon as she arrived home.注意:1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;3.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;4.续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph 1:Approaching the doorway,Jenny took a deep breath.Paragraph 2:A gentle touch on her hair called her

17、 mind back.One possible version:Paragraph 1:Approaching the doorway,Jenny took a deep breath.Tired and sad,she sat down in front of the house.“Where might my mother be?”she wondered.“Is she really so angry with me that she doesnt want to show any care for me?”Again,the scene of the quarrel appeared

18、in her mind.She remembered her rudeness to her mother,and she just realized that all the scolding from her mother was due to the fact that her mother really cared a lot about her.Tears rolled down her cheeks.Paragraph 2:A gentle touch on her hair called her mind back.She raised her head to see the f

19、amiliar face and the worried eyes.“Here you come!Ive been looking for you,”came the tired voice.Jenny couldnt help but throw herself into her mothers arms.“Im sorry and thank you for all you have done for me.”She expressed the sincere apology and the great gratitude.Then she felt the hug tightened.Thank You!