高中英语复习写作讲评课北师大版《How-to-make-our-writing-better》-课件-(共35张).ppt

1、高中英语复习写作讲评课高中英语复习写作讲评课Xiangan Middle School潘士春潘士春Topic假定你是李华，你班交换生Amy，这两天因身体不适，未能到校上课，请你给他写一封邮件。要点如下：1.表示安慰；2.询问她是否能参加下周六学校举办的足球比赛。3.邀请她下个月到你家共度端午节。注意：1.词数100字左右；2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。Dear Amy,_（2017“合肥三模合肥三模”）unclear 审题不清审题不清inaccurate语言不够准确语言不够准确too plain语句过于语句过于“平庸平庸”写作中存在的问题写作中存在的问题Examine the topic

2、 again,and solve the problems below after discussion.1.Style:（体裁）_ 2.Person:（人称）_ 3.Topic:（话题）_Task 1.重新审题重新审题An e-mailThe first/second personTo show sorrow/invitationparascontentstensepara1para2para3Task 1.重新审题重新审题to show your sorrowbest wishes invitationsthe simple present tensethe simple future t

3、ensethe simple present tense童鞋，说好的分段呢？童鞋，说好的分段呢？时态是关键时态是关键Task2.错误纠正错误纠正单词拼写错误单词拼写错误1.Wheather you are convenient or not2.we can buy what we need at a low prize.3.It can help us save money and also benefit our enviroment.whetherpriceenvironmentSome common spelling mistakes?colledge choise apear opni

4、on benifit howerve technolog knowlege interst drogon collegechoiceappearopinionbenefithowevertechnologyknowledgeinterestdragon主谓一致问题主谓一致问题1.There is two days when we dont go to school.2.I think Mary like to go with us next Monday.likesare词性误用问题词性误用问题1.This activity is of greatly importance.2.I think

5、 it is my glad to join you.greatgladnessadj+nadj+n习惯搭配习惯搭配1.Moreover,I have a pleasant news to tell you.2.The Dragon Boat Festival falls of the fifth day of the fifth month.3.we can learn how to make the most use of our things.havenewsonmake full use ofmake the best/most of句子结构问题句子结构问题2.If you come

6、back to school,I will help you study.1.Let me tell you some details what you want to know.that/which3.If you can go with us,we would very happy.help sb with sthbe汉语式英语汉语式英语(Chinglish)2.Im very sorry know this news that you body is uncomfortable.Im sorry to know that you dont feel comfortable.1.Wheth

7、er you are convenient or not,pleasegive me a reply.Whether it is convenient for you or not,please give me a reply.Meaning NoYes昨昨 晚晚 yesterday night睡的迟睡的迟 sleep late 讲笑话讲笑话 say jokes 好身体好身体 good body很喜欢很喜欢 very like一场大雨一场大雨 a big rain 喜欢唱歌喜欢唱歌 like singing songs 繁忙的交通繁忙的交通 busy trafficlast nightstay

8、 up latetell jokesgood healthlike very mucha heavy rainlike singingheavy traffic 是否清晰工整也会是否清晰工整也会影响答卷得分影响答卷得分卷面不整洁，卷面不整洁，涂改多；涂改多；使用涂改液，修正带使用涂改液，修正带大小写不正确；大小写不正确；标点符号乱用；标点符号乱用；书写不清。书写不清。书写书写neat and tidywell-shaped一一“脸脸”的麻子的麻子高考禁用涂改液高考禁用涂改液，修正带，修正带vs没有比较就没有伤害没有比较就没有伤害书面表达评分最高标准书面表达评分最高标准（第五档（第五档 21-2

9、521-25分）分）完全完成了试题规定的任务，完全完成了试题规定的任务，覆盖所有的要点。覆盖所有的要点。应用了较多的语法结构和词汇应用了较多的语法结构和词汇有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。使全文结构紧凑。一一.使用较高级的词汇和短语使用较高级的词汇和短语Task3.让表达更精彩让表达更精彩1).This activity is greatly beneficial to us.of great benefit for the purpose of 2)Students Union held the activity to raise money fo

10、r the charity.普通单词普通单词替代短语替代短语likesee usejoincausesupportbelievethankthinkimportantbe fond of/have an affection forcatch sight ofmake use oftake part in/participate in result in/lead toapprove of/be in favor ofhold the belief thatbe grateful to attach great importance to二二.丰富的句式结构丰富的句式结构利用不同的句型来表达同一

11、意思，能增加文章的表现力。利用不同的句型来表达同一意思，能增加文章的表现力。1.非谓语动词非谓语动词 1.It is important to learn some practical skills.（改为（改为-ing形式做主语）形式做主语）Learning some practical skills is important.2.After we decorated our house,we could hang out with friends.After _our house,we could hang out with friends.decorating2.强调句强调句1.We h

12、eld the party on Sunday.（对划线部分进行强调）（对划线部分进行强调）It was on Sunday that we held the party.2.The new book was bought by my mom.（对划线部分进行强调）（对划线部分进行强调）It was my mom that/who bought the new book.3.倒装句倒装句We were tired,but we found it meaningful to take part in the activity.（用（用as改写成倒装句）改写成倒装句）Tired as we wer

13、e,we found it4.定语从句定语从句The Students Union held a flea market on campus.It turned out to be successful.(用定语从句合并用定语从句合并)The Students Union held,which turned out to be successful.佳句欣赏佳句欣赏1.On that day,we will eat traditional and delicious food that are cooked by my mother.邾容烨邾容烨2.In addition,I hope you

14、 can come to my home to celebrate the Dragon Boat Festival with us.谢莉芝谢莉芝 3.For us,you are the most important one that can lead us to the champion.李华凯李华凯5.Finally,I sincerely hope you can be healed as soon as possible.戴蕊戴蕊4.Id appreciate it if you can take part in the football match.王诚诚王诚诚6.I sugges

15、t you should see a doctor and drink some water.王诚诚王诚诚8.You should be aware that asking a doctor for help is necessary.章洪建章洪建9.Lastly,the Dragon Boat Festival is around the corner.孙文静孙文静7.Its one of the most interesting Chinese festivals,so I really hope you can come.夏智勇夏智勇 _,it is vital to hold this

16、 activity._,it provides us a platform to share used things with each other._,it helps students learn some practical skills,which will be beneficial to their future._,I expect to take part in it next time.for one thing,for another,therefore,from my point of view 三三.使用恰当的连接词使用恰当的连接词For one thingFor an

17、other From my point of viewThereforeDear Amy，Im sorry to hear that you are so unhealthy that you have been absent from school these days.How is everything going now?I quitely understand the uncomfort you are suffering from.Thus,I hope you can recover as soon as possible.Id like to ask whether you ar

18、e willing to take part in the football match to be held next Saturday.If you can,you must better take care of yourself to prepare the match in advance.In addition,with the Dragon Boat Festival coming near,I want to invite you to spend it with my family next month.I believe we will have a good timeon

19、 that day.Looking forward to your early reply.Yours sincerely Li Hua学生习作点评学生习作点评汪雪伟汪雪伟Rewrite Advanced words and expressions A variety of sentence patterns Some transitional wordsby using:Homework 学习英语的方法有很多，你最喜欢的方法是什么？请以学习英语的方法有很多，你最喜欢的方法是什么？请以“My Favourite English Study Method”为题写一篇为题写一篇100词左右的短文词左右的短文。要点：要点：1.列举至少三种你熟悉或常见的学英语的方法；列举至少三种你熟悉或常见的学英语的方法；2.谈谈你最喜欢的一种，并给出二至三条理由。谈谈你最喜欢的一种，并给出二至三条理由。My Favourite English Study Method Thank you for your attention!