人教必修第二册-英语概要写作基于学生问题的概要写作讲评课例分析“We-talk”教学课件.pptx

1、We-talkEvaluation criteriaStudents in writing踩不中点，既怕踩不中点，既怕不完整，又怕太不完整，又怕太繁琐繁琐ContentLanguage Logic找不到替换词和找不到替换词和句式句式段与段关系不明，段与段关系不明，不会用连接词不会用连接词Solution:stepsRead for structure and organize your writing coherently.Step3Read for key points and rewrite them correctly and concisely.Step2Read for theme&

2、main ideas.Step1Read for theme and main ideasStep1Read for theme and main ideas We all know that friends are special people who we share our lives with,and who share their lives with us in return.But seeking friends and keeping the friendship going are never easy.According to research recently publi

3、shed in the Journal of Social and Personal Relationships,the key is to use“we-talk”.Led by University of California psychologist Megan Robbins and her colleagues,the researchers reviewed and analyzed 30 different studies involving over 5,000 participants.This largest-ever analysis of“we-talk”suggest

4、ed that the frequent use of“we”and“us”is linked to happier and healthier relationships.The word“we”move people from an individual position into a partnership,which makes us more interdependent.“The pronouns offer an insight into whether people see themselves as individuals or as part of a whole,”Rob

5、bins told Science Daily.Their research also found that“we-talk”is helpful for solving conflicts.“The primary point is that interdependence may bring about supportive behaviors and positive ideas of the partner especially important in times of stress and conflict,”according to a statement released by

6、 Robbins lab.Contrary to“we-talk”,there is“I-talk”,which refers to the frequent use of first-person singular pronouns,such as“I”,“me”,and“mine”,when writing or speaking.Earlier this year,researchers from the University of Arizona,US,analyzed a set of data that came from 4,700 people in Germany and t

7、he US.They found that too much“I-talk”was an accurate linguistic marker（语言标记）that someone is likely to feel stressed or experiencing negative emotions.As you can see from the two studies,too much“I-talk”can make you feel depressed.But“we-talk”can encourage you to become more positive and create a ri

8、pple effect of healthy interdependence with others.So next time youre talking to a friend,try using more“we-talk”.You may find yourself feeling more positiveand the effect it will have on your friend will have on your friend will be positive as well.“we-talk”“we-talk”The of“we-talk”“we-talk”“we-talk

9、”“we-talk”“we-talk”One of“we-talk”Another of“we-talk”The of“I-talk”The importanceadvantageadvantagedisadvantagesuggestionRead for key points and rewrite themStep2Para.1The importance of“we-talk”We all know that friends are special people who we share our lives with,and who share their lives with us

10、in return.But seeking friends and keeping the friendship going are never easy.According to research recently published in the Journal of Social and Personal Relationships,the key is to use“we-talk”.We all know that friends are special people who we share our lives with,and who share their lives with

11、 us in return.seeking friends and keeping the friendship going are never easy.According to research recently published in the Journal of Social and Personal Relationships,the key is to use“we-talk”.Tip1 抓住信号词，定位要点。Tip2 抓住关键词，同义替换。seek friends:make friends;buildestablish friendshipkeep friendship:mai

12、ntain friendshipkey:sth.is importantessentialcrucialvital;sth.plays an important role in;sth.is of importanceLearn from peersTip3 巧用句型，整合关键信息。Which version is the best one?Why?1.Using“we-talk”is vital to making friends and maintaining friendship.(v-ing作主语）2.“We-talk”can play a crucial role in buildi

13、ng and maintaining the friendship.(句型sth.plays a crucial role in doing sth.）3.Despite the obstacles in establishing and maintaining friendship,“we-talk”may be of assistance.(despite引导的让步状语从句）Possible version“We-talk”plays a crucial role in establishing and maintaining friendship.correct&concisePara.

14、2 One advantage of“we-talk”Led by University of California psychologist Megan Robbins and her colleagues,the researchers reviewed and analyzed 30 different studies involving over 5,000 participants.This largest-ever analysis of“we-talk”suggested that the frequent use of“we”and“us”is linked to happie

15、r and healthier relationships.The word“we”move people from an individual position into a partnership,which makes us more interdependent.“The pronouns offer an insight into whether people see themselves as individuals or as part of a whole,”Robbins told Science Daily.研究介绍研究介绍(冗余信息冗余信息)研究结果研究结果(主要点主要点

16、)解释解释“relationship”(次要点次要点)Tip4 逐句分析复杂段落，提取主要点和次要点，去除冗余信息。Led by University of California psychologist Megan Robbins and her colleagues,the researchers reviewed and analyzed 30 different studies involving over 5,000 participants.“The pronouns offer an insight into whether people see themselves as in

17、dividuals or as part of a whole,”Robbins told Science Daily.举例说明举例说明(冗余信息冗余信息)Whats“happier and healthier relationships”in para.2?Whats“happier and healthier relationships”in para.2?(Draw a mind map to illustrate the concepts like“individual”;“partnership”;“interdependent”and“happier and healthier r

18、elationship”.)Iindividualpartnership“We”interdependentTip5 借助思维导图，厘清抽象概念。Learn from peers1.According to their study,the more you use“we”and“us”,the happier and healthier you will be.(句型“the+比较级,the+比较级”)2.Frequently using“we”is associated with healthier relationship and motivates individuals into a

19、group.(将is linked to改写为is associated with;move改写为motivate)3.The research demonstrates“we-talk”,with plenty of“we”and“us”,promotes harmonious relationships by mingling people to a community.(将happier and healthier改写为harmonious;move改写为mingle;借助v-ing连接主次要点)Possible version As a study reveals,“we-talk”c

20、ontributes to healthier relationships,motivating individuals into a group and to rely on each other.Which version is the best one?Why?主次要点逻辑主次要点逻辑清晰清晰be helpful for:Para.3 Another advantage of“we-talk”Their research also found that“we-talk”is helpful for solving conflicts.“The primary point is that

21、interdependence may bring about supportive behaviors and positive ideas of the partner especially important in times of stress and conflict,”according to a statement released by Robbins lab.“we-talk”is helpful for solving conflicts.研究结果研究结果(主要点主要点)解释说明解释说明(次要点次要点)benefitbe beneficial tobe conducive

22、tocontribute tosolve:conflict:settleaddresstackledeal withcollisiondisagreementargumentdisputePossible version Support from such interdependence is beneficial to address collisions.Tip6 巧用限定词，省略重复信息。Some researches show that“we-talk”not only can make relationship happier and healthier,but also can h

23、elp us to deal with some conflicts between friends.Thinking：The following version combines the points in para.2 and para.3 into one sentence.Do you think it proper?Why?Tip7 概括较长段落时，各要点独立成句，以免丢失次要点。点评：此生虽能借助“not onlybut also”句型体现para.2和para.3两段的并列关系，且能抓住两段的主要点，但合并处理不利于次要点的整合。要点要点2要点要点3Para.4 The disa

24、dvantage of“I-talk”Contrary to“we-talk”,there is“I-talk”,which refers to the frequent use of first-person singular pronouns,such as“I”,“me”,and“mine”,when writing or speaking.Earlier this year,researchers from the University of Arizona,US,analyzed a set of data that came from 4,700 people in Germany

25、 and the US.They found that too much“I-talk”was an accurate linguistic marker（语言标记）that someone is likely to feel stressed or experiencing negative emotions.Contrary to“we-talk”,there is“I-talk”,which refers to the frequent use of first-person singular pronouns,such as“I”,“me”,and“mine”,when writing

26、 or speaking.Earlier this year,researchers from the University of Arizona,US,analyzed a set of data that came from 4,700 people in Germany and the US.They found that too much“I-talk”was an accurate linguistic marker(语言标记语言标记)that someone is likely to feel stressed or experiencing negative emotions.a

27、n accurate linguistic marker:indicate;symbolize;demonstrate;show“I-talk”indicates pressure or negative feelings.Possible versionstressed:tense;anxious;strained;under the pressure研究结果研究结果(主要点主要点)Para.5 The suggestion As you can see from the two studies,too much“I-talk”can make you feel depressed.But“

28、we-talk”can encourage you to become more positive and create a ripple effect of healthy interdependence with others.So next time youre talking to a friend,try using more“we-talk”.You may find yourself feeling more positiveand the effect it will have on your friend will have on your friend will be po

29、sitive as well.As you can see from the two studies,too much“I-talk”can make you feel depressed.But“we-talk”can encourage you to become more positive and create a ripple effect of healthy interdependence with others.So next time youre talking to a friend,try using more“we-talk”.You may find yourself

30、feeling more positiveand the effect it will have on your friend will have on your friend will be positive as well.建议内容建议内容(主要点主要点)建议效果建议效果(次要点次要点)表建议:its necessaryrecommendedsuggestedadvisedproposeda must to do sth.Possible versionIts advisable to use“we-talk”in the benefit of you and your friends.T

31、ip8 巧用介词短语、非谓语动词、定语从句等语法，连接主次要点。Read for structure and organize your writingStep3Read for the and draw a mind map Suggestion (Para.5)Introduction (Para.1)Advantage 1 (Para.2)Advantage 2 (Para.3)Disadvantage (Para.4)并并列列转转折折因果因果Fill in the blanks with proper logical words “we-talk”plays a crucial rol

32、e in establishing and maintaining friendship.As a study reveals,“we-talk”contributes to healthier relationships,motivating individuals into a group and to rely on each other.,support from such interdependence is beneficial to address collisions.“I-talk”,indicates pressure or negative feelings.,its a

33、dvisable to use“we-talk”in the benefit of you and your friends.并列:also;additionally;besides;whats more;furthermore;moreover;in addition toPossible version转折:however;on the contrary;contrarily;by(in)contrast;whereas;conversely;nevertheless结果:so;therefore;thus;hence;consequently;in consequence;as a re

34、sultconsequenceAdditionallyby contrastThusStep1:Read for theme&main ideaStep2:Read for key points and rewrite them correctly and concisely.Step3:Read for structure and organize your writing coherently.ConclusionAssignments1.Polish your writing with the 8 tips youve learnt.2.Review the newly-learnt words and sentence patterns.