2023届高三英语写作备考-读后续写素材表达之画面感的描写.docx

1、读后续写素材表达之画面感的描写一、 名词动词是续写语言之基， 善用 doing/done、 形容词、 副词、 介词短语， 做伴随状语， 在关键处驻足， 避免流水账， 细化动作延缓过程， 立体动感 show出鲜活。1.从设定假设， 到做调查问卷， 再到联系学校申请实验许可， 一切都如预期般顺利， 但不好的事情却在等待着我 。 （ 2022 年 1 月 浙江卷续写， “与学霸做项目 ”）Everything went on smoothly as expected, ranging from setting hypothesis, making a questionnaire to contact

2、ing a school for permission to conducting experiments, but something bad was in store for me.亮点： 连续相接的动词叠加能够使读者身临其境， 如关于“合作式项目 ”进展顺利的描写用 setting， making， contacting， conducting， 环环相扣， 一气呵成。2.让我沮丧的是， 爸爸妈妈低声说着， 轻声笑着， 咯咯笑着， 最后哈哈大笑起来。Much to my dismay, my dad and mom whispered, chuckled, giggled and fin

3、ally burst into laughter.亮点： 四连动， 由轻渐重， 层层递升， 所抒发的感情层层推进， 增强语言的说服力和感染力。3.我深吸一口 气， 大喊一声， 往前冲去。 (三连动)I took a deep breath,let out a shout and sprinted forward.4.沃尔夫女士优雅地走向钢琴， 坐到座位上， 然后开始弹奏。 她的手指在琴键上翩翩起舞。 她时而摇摆, 时而点头, 乌黑发亮的马尾辫跟着起伏摆动。 她的双脚在踏板间来回穿梭。Ms.Wolff made her graceful way to the piano, took her se

4、at and then began to play.Her fingers danced across the keys. she swayed and, nodded and her shiny black ponytail bobbed. Back and forth she raced her feet among the pedals.5.烈日 烤着我的脸， 汗珠模糊了我的视线， 我几乎窒息， 但仍在继续努力。The scorching sun baking（ 独立主格结构） my face, and beads of sweats blurring（ 独立主格结构） my visio

5、n, I was nearly suffocated（ 谓语动词） , yet ploughing（ 伴随状语） on.6.伊丽莎白手里拿着玫瑰花， 紧张地慢慢走向沃尔夫， 舞台灯光灼热， 汗珠顺着伊丽莎白的脸上滴下来。Clutching （ 伴随状语） the roses, Elizabeth edged（ 谓语动词） nervously towards Ms.Wolff, the stage lights blazing（ 独立主格结构） hot and beads of perspirationtrickling（ 独立主格结构） down Elizabeths face.亮点： 准确使

6、用非谓语动词做伴随状语， 两个独立主格结构做状语， 能让写作句子更简洁， 段落更紧凑， 层次更分明， 更富有立体感。二、 熟练掌握一两种部分倒装句1.Jane 在之前的人生中从未体会过如此强烈的后悔之情。Never before in Janes life had she been so overcome by regret.2.Jane 太累了， 以至于她一躺下就很快睡着了。So tired was Jane that she fell fast asleep the moment she lay down.=Hardly had Jane laid down when she fell f

7、ast asleep because of exhaustion.=No sooner had Jane laid down than she fell fast asleep because of exhaustion.3.她太疲倦了， 眼睑开始往下垂， 打起了呵欠， 昏昏欲睡起来。So exhausted was she that her eyelids were beginning to droop, yawning and drowsing.4.Jane 不仅又累又饿， 而且对自 己的无理行为深感后悔。Not only was Jane exhausted and hungry, but she was also deeply regretful for her unreasonable behaviors.5.只有当简处于如此无助的境地时， 她才意识到汤姆对她是多么重要。Only when Jane was in such helpless situation was she aware that her beloved Tom meant so much to her.