概要写作之记叙文概括Melody课件.ppt

1、概要写作概要写作之记叙文概括之记叙文概括2022-12-15n第二节读写任务（共第二节读写任务（共1小题小题,满分满分25分）分）n阅读下面短文，然后按要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。n A father came home from work late,tired and exhausted.He worked day and night,hoping to earn more money for his only child.His 5-year-old daughter was waiting for him at the door.n“Dad,how much do you earn

2、 an hour?”asked the daughter.n“Why do you ask that?”n“I just want to know.Please tell me how much you earn an hour.”n“If you really want to know.I earn$20 an hour.”n“Oh,”the little girl replied with her head down.Looking up,she said,“Dad,may I borrow$10?”nThe father became angry.“Go to bed right now

3、!Think about how selfish you are.I work hard every day,but you just want to buy your silly toy!”nThe little girl quietly went to her bedroom,feeling sad.After an hour or so,the father calmed down and started to feel sorry because she really didnt ask for money very often.So he went to his daughters

4、room and gave her$10.nThe little girl jumped from the bed.“Oh,thank you,Dad!”She was really happy indeed.nThen she took out her own savings and said,“Dad,I have$20 now.Can I buy an hour of your time?Please come home earlier tomorrow.I would like to have dinner with you.”n写作内容写作内容n1.以约30个词概括上文的主要内容。n

5、2.以约120个词就“家长的陪伴”的话题谈谈你的想法，内容包括：n（1）阅读上文之后的感想；n（2）叙述你在家长陪伴下的一次难忘的经历；n（3）家长的陪伴对孩子成长的影响。n写作要求写作要求n1.作文中可以使用亲身经历或虚构的故事，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子。n2.作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。n评分标准评分标准n概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，语篇连贯。概括：summaryWhat is a summary?Summary is a short passage giving the main points of an original article.分值分值 评

6、评 分分 标标 准准 5按照要求概括了按照要求概括了全部主要全部主要信息，信息，没有增加没有增加与原文与原文无关无关的信的信息，息，没有照抄没有照抄原子的句子。语言结构正确，行文规范。原子的句子。语言结构正确，行文规范。4基本基本按照要求概括了主要信息，没有增加与原文无关的信按照要求概括了主要信息，没有增加与原文无关的信息，没有照抄原文的句子。语言结构正确，行文规范。息，没有照抄原文的句子。语言结构正确，行文规范。3基本按照要求概括了主要信息，但包含基本按照要求概括了主要信息，但包含一些不相关一些不相关的信息，的信息，有个别句子有个别句子抄抄自原文。语言结构自原文。语言结构基本正确基本正确，行

7、文比较规范。，行文比较规范。2不能按照要求概括主要信息，包含不能按照要求概括主要信息，包含较多不相关较多不相关的信息，有的信息，有较多的抄袭较多的抄袭。语言结构。语言结构不够准确不够准确，行文不够规范。，行文不够规范。0-1没有按照要求概括主要信息，基本是不相关的信息，大多没有按照要求概括主要信息，基本是不相关的信息，大多数的句子都抄自原文。语言结构不准确，行文不规范。数的句子都抄自原文。语言结构不准确，行文不规范。nRevision:n文体的写作特点和框架。文体的写作特点和框架。n记叙文：记叙文：n5 factors(When/Where/Who/What/How)如何写记叙文的概要？n记叙

8、文：记叙文：n5W(what/who/when/where/how)n注意：注意：n时态时态n人称人称试卷读写任务试卷读写任务 Find out five factorsWhen/Where/Who/What/HowWhen:Where:Who:What:How:-a little girl,her father“Dad,how much do you earn an hour?”“Dad,may I borrow$10?”So he went to his daughters room and gave her$10.“Dad,I have$20 now.Can I buy an hour

9、of your time?Please come home earlier tomorrow.I would like to have dinner with you.”Combine the five factors in your own words Give a general idea试卷读写任务试卷读写任务When:Where:Who:What:How:-a little girl,her father“Dad,how much do you earn an hour?”“Dad,may I borrow$10?”So he went to his daughters room an

10、d gave her$10.“Dad,I have$20 now.Can I buy an hour of your time?Please come home earlier tomorrow.I would like to have dinner with you.”注意：逻辑顺序注意：逻辑顺序 （中文思维过程）（中文思维过程）askedthathow much he earned an hourthenshe borrowed some money from her fatherand asked him to sell one hour of his time to accompany

11、 her.A possible versionA little girl asked her father,who often came home late from hard work,how much he earned an hour.Then she borrowed some money from her father and asked him to sell one hour of his time to accompany her.Versions from students:1.The passage mainly tells us that a father come ho

12、me from work late,his daughter ask him how much does he earn an hour and want to borrow$10,and then she can buy an hour time that have dinner with father tomorrow.(7/42)2.According to the passage,we know that the daughter eagar to pay$20 to buy an hour of his father time because she hope his father

13、can come home earlier to have dinner with her.(7/53)3.The story mainly tell us about a girl who want to borrow$10 from her father and want to buy her fathers an hour in order to have dinner with him.(7/18)Versions from students:1.From the passage,we can know that a daughter asks her father for$10,ju

14、st want to buy the time that accompany with her father,who always too busy to accompany with his family.(8/8)2.From the passage,we know that the daughter whose father went home late and asked his father how much he earn.Then she borrowed$10 from his father and took out her own saving to asked his fa

15、ther come home earlier because she wanted to have dinner with him.(8/58)概括所给短文内容要点概括所给短文内容要点写作具体方法和要求写作具体方法和要求1.1.注意：利用原文中所给的语言材料，用注意：利用原文中所给的语言材料，用自己的话自己的话来写；来写；概括后的文章意思要通顺，行文连贯。概括后的文章意思要通顺，行文连贯。2.概括要做到概括要做到开门见山开门见山1)According to the passage,we know2)This article is mainly about3)The writer states

16、that3.概括要概括要抓住要点抓住要点,语言精练语言精练.考生易犯错误考生易犯错误:1).expressing the wrong ideas1).expressing the wrong ideas (主题大意概括不清主题大意概括不清)2).quoting original sentences2).quoting original sentences (抄袭原文抄袭原文)3).including too many details3).including too many details (加入了太多的细节加入了太多的细节)4).adding judgments of your own4).

17、adding judgments of your own (表达了自己的意见表达了自己的意见)(A)Oct 3,1999,Sunday Rainy It was raining outside when I got up early in the morning.Its too bad,I had to go to school by bus.I said to myself.It was almost seven oclock before I left home.I put on my raincoat and ran to the bus stop in a hurry,for I th

18、ought a lot of people might be waiting there.Hardly had I got there when a bus was coming.I got on the bus immediately,hoping it was possible for me to take a seat.I saw an empty seat and took it.But I found an old lady standing behind me.I stood up at once and was about to ask her to take the seat

19、when a young girl in a modern skirt made a dive for it.I could hardly believe it.I glared at her,thinking,“What bad manners!”She cares for nobody but herself.Wont she grow old in the future?”1、以约、以约30个词概括短文的要点；个词概括短文的要点；Find out five factorsWhen/Where/Who/What/HowWhen:Where:Who:What:Combine the five

20、 factors in your own wordsone rainy morningon a busthe author,an old lady,a young ladygo to school,offer the seat,make a dive for Give a general ideaonoffer his seat tobut(When),(Who).(Where)(What)to(Who)standing behind him,but(Who)_ (What).1.One rainy morning,the author on a bus to school offered h

21、is seat to an old lady standing behind him.However,the moment he stood up,a young girl .2.The passage mainly tells us a story about of young people on a bus.The author was about to offer his seat to an old lady beside him when a young girl_.the authorThe Refined Version rushed to take itGive a gener

22、al ideabad mannersrushed to take it2.I was studying in high school when my brother left home for the first time to go to a residential college.He was excited about going to a new town,a new college,and above all,being on his own.Nobody would tell him about wake-up time.I was fascinated with the rewa

23、rds and privileges that high school graduation brought to people.About two weeks after my brother left home,his tear-stained(泪痕泪痕)letter arrived telling how much he missed all of us.It was evident that he cried writing this letter and thinking about the things he missed which hadnt been a big deal t

24、o him just two weeks earlier.I learned that the first year of college did not just involve going away to college,it was also about leaving home.Now,as a psychologist,I know that leaving home for college is one of the first major steps in separating from the family and becoming independent.I was stud

25、ying in high school when my brother left home for the first time to go to a residential college.He was excited about going to a new town,a new college,and above all,being on his own.Nobody would tell him about wake-up time.I was fascinated with the rewards and privileges that high school graduation

26、brought to people.About two weeks after my brother left home,his tear-stained(泪痕泪痕)letter arrived telling how much he missed all of us.It was evident that he cried writing this letter and thinking about the things he missed which hadnt been a big deal to him just two weeks earlier.whowho the writers

27、 brother the writers brotherwhatwhatleaving home for the first timeresultresultmissing the family a lotmissing the family a lot The writers brother left The writers brother left home for the first time and home for the first time and missed the family a lot.missed the family a lot.I learned that the

28、 first year of I learned that the first year of college did not just involve going college did not just involve going away to college,it was also about away to college,it was also about leaving home.Now,as a leaving home.Now,as a psychologist,I know that leaving psychologist,I know that leaving home

29、 for college is one of the first home for college is one of the first major steps in separating from the major steps in separating from the family and becoming independent.family and becoming independent.What to learnWhat to learnLeaving home for college can help Leaving home for college can help us

30、 become independent.us become independent.The writer learns thatThe writer learns that leaving leaving home for college can help us home for college can help us become independent.become independent.The writer tells us The writer tells us that his that his brother left home for the first brother left home for the first time and missed the family a time and missed the family a lot.lot.The writer learnsThe writer learns that that leaving home for college can leaving home for college can help us become independent.help us become independent.One possible version:One possible version: