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1、中考作文 邻水实验学校邻水实验学校 江崎峰江崎峰A saying a day!A saying a day!A sentence a day!A sentence a day!Better late than never!Better late than never!迟做总比不做好！迟做总比不做好！What an important thing it isWhat an important thing it isto keep healthy!to keep healthy!保持健康保持健康是一件多么重要的事！是一件多么重要的事！What can they help us to improve

2、?“每日一谚每日一语每日一谚每日一语”对提高我们的什么有帮助？对提高我们的什么有帮助？outlineoutlinecompositioncomposition提纲提纲作文作文列提纲写作文列提纲写作文2017中考复习作文指导中考复习作文指导Learning goals:1.To learn how to make an outline of a composition(学习列写作文提纲学习列写作文提纲)2.To write a composition according to your outline.(根据提纲写作文根据提纲写作文)书面表达快速浏览快速浏览中考作文自学指导一：自学指导一：Wha

3、t is a good composition?我当老师我来打分我当老师我来打分 give a mark材料一（材料一（2016，广安中考），广安中考）：书面表达（书面表达（10分）分）健康的身体是我们中小学生学习的保证。但是网络抢走了我们的锻炼时间，垃圾食健康的身体是我们中小学生学习的保证。但是网络抢走了我们的锻炼时间，垃圾食品威胁着我们的健康。请根据下面的提示，以品威胁着我们的健康。请根据下面的提示，以“How to Keep Healthy”为题写一篇英语短文。为题写一篇英语短文。提示：提示：1.坚持锻炼；坚持锻炼；2.健康饮食；健康饮食；3.合理上网；合理上网；4.充足的睡眠；充足的睡

4、眠；5.保持愉快的心情。保持愉快的心情。要求：要求：1.不要逐条翻译，可适当发挥。不要逐条翻译，可适当发挥。2.词数：词数：100词左右。词左右。3.文中不得出现真实的人名，校名等相关信息。文中不得出现真实的人名，校名等相关信息。参考词汇：参考词汇：junk food（垃圾食品）（垃圾食品）评分标准：评分标准：人称、时态正确（人称、时态正确（1 1分分）点出主题（点出主题（1 1 分分）主体明确，要点齐并适当举例主体明确，要点齐并适当举例(各各1 1分，共分，共5 5分分)结尾总结（结尾总结（1 1分分）用词准确，上下文连贯（用词准确，上下文连贯（1 1分分）书写认真无错别字，字数符合要求（书

5、写认真无错别字，字数符合要求（1 1分分）读读品品读读品品评分标准：评分标准：1 1.人称时态正确人称时态正确（1 1分）分）;2 2.点出主题点出主题（1 1分）分）;3 3.写出五个建写出五个建 议要点并适当举议要点并适当举例（各例（各1 1分分 共共5 5分）分）;4 4.结尾总结结尾总结（1 1分）分）5.5.用词准确，上用词准确，上下文连贯下文连贯（1 1分）分）;6.6.书写认真无错书写认真无错别字，字数符合别字，字数符合要求要求（1 1分分.）How to keep healthyHow to keep healthy Hello,Im Li Hua.Im a middleHel

6、lo,Im Li Hua.Im a middleschool student.I like play school student.I like play computer games.I dont like puter games.I dont like sports.Healthy is important.But Internet Healthy is important.But Internet takes our exercise time.Junk food istakes our exercise time.Junk food is harmful to our healthy.

7、harmful to our healthy.1.We should keep doing exercise1.We should keep doing exercise.2.We should eat healthy food2.We should eat healthy food.3.We should surf the Internet 3.We should surf the Internet properlyproperly.4.We should have enough sleep.4.We should have enough sleep.5.We should keep hap

8、py.5.We should keep happy.I want to make friends with you.I want to make friends with you.Mark:Mark:？5 5playingplayingHealthHealth healthhealth优点：优点：1.1.句子表达基本流畅句子表达基本流畅 2.2.时态、字数恰当时态、字数恰当 3.3.书写规范书写规范不足：不足：1.1.人称混乱，前后不一致人称混乱，前后不一致 2.2.话题中心不明确话题中心不明确.结构结构层层次次不不分明，条理分明，条理混乱混乱 3.3.句式表达单一，句式表达单一，should

9、should句型重复过多句型重复过多 4.4.单词拼写错误单词拼写错误In my opinion How to keep healthy How to keep healthy 自由朗读自由朗读 As is well known,keeping healthy is very As is well known,keeping healthy is very important to students.But we spend too important to students.But we spend too much time on the Internet.And junk food is

10、 much time on the Internet.And junk food is harmful to us.So how to keep healthy?harmful to us.So how to keep healthy?First,we should keep doing exercise.First,we should keep doing exercise.Second,why not get into a good eating Second,why not get into a good eating habit.Eat more vegetables and frui

11、t.Third,habit.Eat more vegetables and fruit.Third,we must surf the Internet in a right way.we must surf the Internet in a right way.Then,Then,its necessary to have enough sleep.its necessary to have enough sleep.Finally,wed better be happy all the time.Finally,wed better be happy all the time.Rememb

12、er,“Happiness is our best friend.”Remember,“Happiness is our best friend.”In a word In a word,we should take actions to,we should take actions to keep healthy from now on.Better late than keep healthy from now on.Better late than never!never!佳作欣赏佳作欣赏中考作文How to write a good composition?审题意（审题意（master

13、 the topic meaning)列提纲（列提纲（make an outline)写作文（写作文（write a composition)学习探究一学习探究一:Master the topic meaningMaster the topic meaning 根据中考常见写作考题，可将写作基本思路归纳为下表根据中考常见写作考题，可将写作基本思路归纳为下表 话题：明确话题：明确中心中心，提炼，提炼主题句主题句 人称：注意人物关系，前后一致人称：注意人物关系，前后一致 审题审题意意 要点：列出要点，勿遗漏要点：列出要点，勿遗漏 时态：活动时间时态：活动时间主体时态主体时态 格式：书信；一般格式格

14、式：书信；一般格式 字数字数明确明确话话题题要点要点人称人称时态时态字数字数健康的身体是我们中小学生学习的健康的身体是我们中小学生学习的保证。但是网络抢走了我们的锻炼保证。但是网络抢走了我们的锻炼时间，垃圾食品威胁着我们的健康时间，垃圾食品威胁着我们的健康。请根据下面的提示，以请根据下面的提示，以“How to Keep How to Keep HealthyHealthy”为题写一篇英语短文为题写一篇英语短文。建建 议议1.1.坚持锻炼；坚持锻炼；2.2.健康饮食；健康饮食；3.3.合理上网；合理上网；4.4.充足的睡眠；充足的睡眠；5.5.保持愉快的心情。保持愉快的心情。注意注意:1001

15、00词左右。词左右。审题意审题意健康的身体是我们中小学生学健康的身体是我们中小学生学习的保证。但是网络抢走了我习的保证。但是网络抢走了我们的锻炼时间，垃圾食品威胁们的锻炼时间，垃圾食品威胁着我们的健康。着我们的健康。请根据下面的提请根据下面的提示，以示，以“How to Keep HealthyHow to Keep Healthy”为题写一篇英语短文。为题写一篇英语短文。分析并提出建议。要点分析并提出建议。要点：建建 议议1.1.坚持锻炼；坚持锻炼；2.2.健康饮食；健康饮食；3.3.合理上网；合理上网；4.4.充足的睡眠；充足的睡眠；5.5.保持愉快的心情保持愉快的心情注意注意:10010

16、0词左右。词左右。明确明确要点要点人称人称时态时态字数字数话话题题以一般现以一般现在时为主在时为主审题意审题意 学习探究二学习探究二：make an outline(列提纲列提纲)要点提示要点提示 素材串联素材串联(写出关键词，关键句写出关键词，关键句)）开开头头(beginning)点明主题点明主题(topic)：人、物、现象、观点人、物、现象、观点正文正文(body)根据提示，内容要点、情节根据提示，内容要点、情节（逐条列出，适当展开）（逐条列出，适当展开）1 2.3.4.结尾结尾(ending)呼吁，看法，感叹，希望，强呼吁，看法，感叹，希望，强调调提提纲纲题目（题目（title）_中考

17、作文 一学就会一学就会 As is well known,But we spend too much time on the Internet.And junk food is harmful to us.So?First,we should .Second,why not .Eat more vegetables and fruit.Third,we must .Then,its necessary to .Finally,wed better all the time.Remember,“Happiness is our best friend.”In a word,we should t

18、o keep healthy from now on.Better late than never!提取提纲提取提纲beginning（开头）（开头）body（正文）（正文）ending（结尾）（结尾）how to keep healthykeep doing exerciseget into a good eating habitsurf the Internet in a right wayhave enough sleepbe happy要点要点1：要点要点2：要点要点3：要点要点4：要点要点5：take actionstopic说看法，呼吁说看法，呼吁 How to keep heal

19、thy How to keep healthy keeping healthy is very important to students.一学就会一学就会提取提纲提取提纲beginningbodyendinghow to keep healthykeep doing exerciseget into a good eating habitsurf the Internet in a right wayhave enough sleepbe happy要点要点1：要点要点2：要点要点3：要点要点4：要点要点5：take actionstopic说看法，呼吁说看法，呼吁 How to keep

20、healthy How to keep healthy keeping healthy is very important to students.2 2.使用连接词（使用连接词（use the linking words）3 3.扩写要点句（扩写要点句（enrich the key sentences）串句成段，串段成章。串句成段，串段成章。丰富主体内容丰富主体内容学习探究三：学习探究三：How to use the outline to write your composition?怎样使用提纲写作文？怎样使用提纲写作文？1.补全提纲句（补全提纲句（complete the outline

21、)从纲到文从纲到文beginningbodyendinghow to keep healthykeep doing exerciseget into a good eating habitsurf the Internet in a right wayhave enough sleepbe happy要点要点1：要点要点2：要点要点3：要点要点4：要点要点5：take actionstopic说看法，呼吁说看法，呼吁 How to keep healthy How to keep healthy Finally,First,Second,Third,Then,we should keep do

22、ing exercise.why not get into a good eating habit.we must surf the Internet in a right way.its necessary to have enough sleep.wed better be happy all the time.In a word,we should take actions to keep healthy from now on.补全提纲补全提纲句子句子使用使用连接词连接词keeping healthy is very important to students.As is well k

23、nown,从纲到文从纲到文beginningbodyending说看法，呼吁说看法，呼吁 How to keep healthy How to keep healthy Finally,First,Second,Third,Then,why not get into a good eating habit.we must surf the Internet in a right way.its necessary to have enough sleep.wed better be happy all the time.In a word,we should take actions to k

24、eep healthy from now on.扩写要点扩写要点句句we should keep doing exercise.how to keep healthykeeping healthy is very As is well known,important to students.As is well known,keeping healthy is veryimportant to students.how to keep healthy?But we spend too much time on the Internet.And junk food is harmful to u

25、s.So 从纲到文从纲到文beginningbodyending说看法，呼吁说看法，呼吁 How to keep healthy How to keep healthy Finally,First,Second,Third,Then,why not get into a good eating habit.we must surf the Internet in a right way.its necessary to have enough sleep.wed better be happy all the time.In a word,we should take actions to k

26、eep healthy from now on.Eat more vegetables and fruitRemember“Happiness is our best friend.”Better late than never!扩写要点扩写要点句句we should keep doing exercise.凤头凤头 猪肚猪肚豹尾豹尾 What does a good composition look like?好作文长得像什么样？好作文长得像什么样？写作联想写作联想开头：开头：引领全文引领全文点主题点主题 正文：阐述要点正文：阐述要点 丰富内容丰富内容结尾：结尾：首尾呼应首尾呼应显主旨显主旨

27、 /fi:nfi:nksks/phoenixphoenix/t ti:ti:t/cheetahcheetahMake your own outline 我们一起列提纲我们一起列提纲材料二材料二Make your own outline.近几年，随着工业近几年，随着工业(industry)的发展，雾霾现象的发展，雾霾现象(haze)在在我国愈来愈严重，使我们的环境受到严重污染，人们的我国愈来愈严重，使我们的环境受到严重污染，人们的健康也受到威胁。在日常生活中，我们应怎样自我防护健康也受到威胁。在日常生活中，我们应怎样自我防护呢呢？提示：提示：1.雾霾天气少开窗。雾霾天气少开窗。2.外出戴口罩（外

28、出戴口罩（wear a mask）。）。3.多喝水，尤其是茶，多吃果蔬多喝水，尤其是茶，多吃果蔬。4.加强加强体育锻炼，增强自身体质。体育锻炼，增强自身体质。要求要求:1.不要逐条翻译，可适当发挥。不要逐条翻译，可适当发挥。2.词数：词数：100词左右。词左右。3.文中不得出现真实的人名，校名等相关信息。文中不得出现真实的人名，校名等相关信息。提示提示1.1.审题意审题意(明确主题，要点，人称，时态，数字明确主题，要点，人称，时态，数字)2.2.要求用英语写出相应提纲内容要求用英语写出相应提纲内容 牛刀牛刀小试小试题目题目Haze/hez/正文正文：措施措施要点要点结尾结尾：make an o

29、utline(我会列提纲我会列提纲)牛刀牛刀小试小试 seriousserious话题话题 (中心话题中心话题)hazehaze (主题句主题句)dont open the windows too oftendont open the windows too often wear a mask,go out wear a mask,go out water,tea,fruit,vegetables water,tea,fruit,vegetables do exercise,strongerdo exercise,stronger1.1.2.2.3.3.4.4.many ways,protec

30、t many ways,protect How to protect ourselves?How to protect ourselves?材料二材料二Make your own outline.近几年，随着工业近几年，随着工业(industry)的发展，雾霾现象的发展，雾霾现象(haze)在我国愈来愈严重，使我们的环境受到严重污染，人们在我国愈来愈严重，使我们的环境受到严重污染，人们的健康也受到威胁。在日常生活中，我们应怎样自我防的健康也受到威胁。在日常生活中，我们应怎样自我防护呢护呢？提示：提示：1.雾霾天气少开窗。雾霾天气少开窗。2.外出戴口罩（外出戴口罩（wear a mask）。）。

31、3.多喝水，尤其是茶，多吃果蔬多喝水，尤其是茶，多吃果蔬。4.加强加强体育锻炼，增强自身体质。体育锻炼，增强自身体质。要求要求:1.不要逐条翻译，可适当发挥。不要逐条翻译，可适当发挥。2.词数：词数：100词左右。词左右。3.文中不得出现真实的人名，校名等相关信息。文中不得出现真实的人名，校名等相关信息。.Writing time:我会写作文我会写作文提示：提示：1.1.根据提纲，完善句子，增加连接词，丰富根据提纲，完善句子，增加连接词，丰富内容，完成写作。内容，完成写作。2.2.借用常见写作句式。借用常见写作句式。当堂训练当堂训练题目题目Haze/hez/正文正文：措施措施要点要点结尾结尾：

32、seriousserious话题话题 (中心话题中心话题)haze haze (主题句主题句)dont open the windows too oftendont open the windows too often wear a mask,go out wear a mask,go out water,tea,vegetables water,tea,vegetables do exercise,strongerdo exercise,stronger1.1.2.2.3.3.4.4.many ways,protect many ways,protect How to protect our

33、selves?How to protect ourselves?outline composition 看提纲写作文看提纲写作文提纲写作提纲写作常见错误常见错误小组合作小组合作互改作文互改作文主题是否明确主题是否明确要点是否全面要点是否全面时态是否恰当时态是否恰当人称是否正确人称是否正确连词是否合适连词是否合适结构是否完整结构是否完整词汇是否准确词汇是否准确书写是否规范书写是否规范 勇当小老师勇当小老师 Make your own composition!Show Time!Show Time!我行我秀我行我秀你秀我学你秀我学 Haze /hehez z/自由自由朗读朗读 In recent

34、days，we have to face a serious problem haze.Our environment and health are badly influenced by it.What should we do to protect ourselves?First of all,dont open the windows too often when haze comes.Second,its better to wear a mask when we go out.Then,we should eat more vegetables and fruit,drink mor

35、e water and tea.Finally,doing exercise is a good way to make us stronger and stronger.Nothing is more important than to protect ourselves.Im sure we will have a bright future.佳作赏析佳作赏析列列七字七字步骤：步骤：审审 列列 补补 连连 扩扩 改改 抄抄书 面表 达学有所获学有所获列提纲列提纲写作文写作文The formwork and the writingThe formwork and the writing 套模

36、板套模板 写作文写作文 与你有约与你有约Hope for your joining!Hope for your joining!Thank you Thank you！开头开头：1.Man is now facing a big problem _whichMan is now facing a big problem _which is becoming more and more serious.is becoming more and more serious.人类正面临着一个严重的问题，这个问题变得越来越严重 2.Recently,the problem of has caught 2

37、.Recently,the problem of has caught peoples attention.peoples attention.最近,问题已引起人们的关注3.Nowadays,has become a problem3.Nowadays,has become a problem we have to face.we have to face.如今已成为我们不得不面对的问题了中间：中间：表层次表层次:1.To begin withsecond thenfinally:1.To begin withsecond thenfinally 2.Firstly.second(ly)nex

38、t whats 2.Firstly.second(ly)next whats more more 3.First(of all)secondnext 3.First(of all)secondnext in additionin the end;in additionin the end;表解释表解释:for:for example example,such as,that is to say,such as,that is to say,in other words;in other words;结尾结尾:all in all,in a word,generally speakingall

39、in all,in a word,generally speaking，in my in my opinion,in fact opinion,in fact学海拾贝学海拾贝 How to keep healthyHow to keep healthy As is well known,keeping healthy is very important to students.But we spend too much time on the Internet.And junk food is harmful to us.So how to keep healthy?First ,we sho

40、uld keep doing exercise.Second,why not get into a good eating habit.Third,we must surf the Internet in a right way.Then,its necessary to have enough sleep.Finally,wed better be happy In a word,we should take actions to keep healthy from now on.从纲到文从纲到文 使用连接词使用连接词扩写要点句扩写要点句Eat more vegetables and fruitall the time.Remember,“Happiness is our best friend.”Better late than never!