新高考读后续写范例语料积累与续写结构课件.pptx

1、段落结构段落结构语料积累(情节+情感)读后续写挑战1.交白卷2.结构混乱3.对话来凑4.不知所云.读后续写想法Narrative Arc Narrative Arc 是什么用处教学实例Narrative Arc?情节OrientationComplicationActionActionResultNarrative ArcEvaluation2021届新高考 读后续写范例 语料积累与续写结构课件2021届新高考 读后续写范例 语料积累与续写结构课件Red lives in a village near the forest and will be visiting her grandmothe

2、r.However,she dawdles on the way and talks to a stranger-the wolf.The wolf takes a shortcut,swallows the grandmother and awaits Red.Red discovers the wolf and calls out for help from the woodsman.In the end,the wolf is defeated.Red realizes what she did was wrong and has learned her lesson.Little Re

3、d Riding Hood 2021届新高考 读后续写范例 语料积累与续写结构课件2021届新高考 读后续写范例 语料积累与续写结构课件Red lives in a village near the forest and goes to visit her grandmother.However,she dawdles on the way and talks to a stranger-the wolf.He takes a shortcut,swallows the grandmother and awaits Red.Red discovers the wolf and calls ou

4、t for help from the woodsman.In the end,the wolf is defeated.Red realizes what she did was wrong and has learned her lesson.orientationorientationcomplicationcomplicationactionactionresultresultevaluationevaluationLittle Red Riding Hood 2021届新高考 读后续写范例 语料积累与续写结构课件2021届新高考 读后续写范例 语料积累与续写结构课件Narrative

5、 Arc 用处2021届新高考 读后续写范例 语料积累与续写结构课件2021届新高考 读后续写范例 语料积累与续写结构课件Finally John started his long walk.Tired filled with his body,and he felt hungry.But he didnt stop.There is nobody in the road.It is so quiet around him.He carried on walking along with the road.Although he was afraid,getting company was m

6、ore important than that.After two hours,he was very tired so that he didnt carry on walking.He sat down on the road.2021届新高考 读后续写范例 语料积累与续写结构课件2021届新高考 读后续写范例 语料积累与续写结构课件Finally John started his long walk.Tired filled with his body,and he felt hungry.But he didnt stop.There is nobody in the road.It

7、is so quiet around him.He carried on walking along with the road.Although he was afraid,getting company was more important than that.After two hours,he was very tired so that he didnt carry on walking.He sat down on the road.Finally John started his long walk.There is nobody in the road.It is so qui

8、et around him.But he didnt stop.Although he was afraid,getting to company was more important than that.He carried on walking along with the road.After two hours,he was very tired so that he didnt carry on walking.He sat down on the road.Tired filled with his body,and he felt hungry.2021届新高考 读后续写范例 语

9、料积累与续写结构课件2021届新高考 读后续写范例 语料积累与续写结构课件Narrative Arc 教学2021届新高考 读后续写范例 语料积累与续写结构课件2021届新高考 读后续写范例 语料积累与续写结构课件 One weekend in July,Jane and her husband,Tom,had driven three hours to camp overnight by a lake in the forest.Unfortunately,on the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel

10、.By the time they reached the lake,Jane was so angry that she said to Tom,“Im going to find a better spot for us to camp”and walked away.With no path to follow,Jane just walked on for quite a long time.After she had climbed to a high place,she turned around,hoping to see the lake.To her surprise,she

11、 saw nothing but forest and,far beyond,a snowcapped mountain top.She suddenly realized that she was lost.“Tom!”she cried.“Help!”No reply.If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom.Jane kept moving,but the farther she walked,the more confused she became.As night was beginning to f

12、all,Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night.Lying awake in the dark,Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family.She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him.2021届新高考 读后续写范例 语料积累与续写结构课件2021届新高考 读后续写范例 语料积累与续写结构课件 Jane rose at the break of day,hungry and thirsty.She

13、could hear water trickling(滴落)somewhere at a distance.Quickly she followed the sound to a stream.To her great joy,she also saw some berry bushes.She drank and ate a few berries.Never in her life had she tasted anything better.Feeling stronger now,Jane began to walk along the stream and hope it would

14、 lead her to the lake.As she picked her way carefully along the stream,Jane heard a helicopter.Is that for me?Unfortunately,the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above.A few minutes later,another helicopter flew overhead.Jane took off her yellow blouse,thinking that she should go t

15、o an open area and flag them if they came back again.But no more helicopters came and it was dark._ It was daybreak when Jane woke up._ 2021届新高考 读后续写范例 语料积累与续写结构课件2021届新高考 读后续写范例 语料积累与续写结构课件 With no path to follow,Jane just walked on for quite a long time.After she had climbed to a high place,she tu

16、rned around,hoping to see the lake.To her surprise,she saw nothing but forest and,far beyond,a snowcapped mountain top.She suddenly realized that she was lost.“Tom!”she cried.“Help!”No reply.If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom.orientationorientationcomplicationcomplication

17、actionactionresultresultevaluationevaluation2021届新高考 读后续写范例 语料积累与续写结构课件2021届新高考 读后续写范例 语料积累与续写结构课件 With no path to follow,Jane just walked on for quite a long time.After she had climbed to a high place,she turned around,hoping to see the lake.To her surprise,she saw nothing but forest and,far beyond

18、,a snowcapped mountain top.She suddenly realized that she was lost.“Tom!”she cried.“Help!”No reply.If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom.orientationorientationcomplicationcomplicationactionactionresultresultevaluationevaluation2021届新高考 读后续写范例 语料积累与续写结构课件2021届新高考 读后续写范例 语料积累与

19、续写结构课件 Jane rose at the break of day,hungry and thirsty.She could hear water trickling(滴落)somewhere at a distance.Quickly she followed the sound to a stream.To her great joy,she also saw some berry bushes.She drank and ate a few berries.Never in her life had she tasted anything better.orientationori

20、entationcomplicationcomplicationactionactionresultresultevaluationevaluation2021届新高考 读后续写范例 语料积累与续写结构课件2021届新高考 读后续写范例 语料积累与续写结构课件 Jane rose at the break of day,hungry and thirsty.She could hear water trickling(滴落)somewhere at a distance.Quickly she followed the sound to a stream.To her great joy,sh

21、e also saw some berry bushes.She drank and ate a few berries.Never in her life had she tasted anything better.orientationorientationcomplicationcomplicationactionactionresultresultevaluationevaluation2021届新高考 读后续写范例 语料积累与续写结构课件2021届新高考 读后续写范例 语料积累与续写结构课件But no more helicopters came and it was dark._

22、 It was daybreak when Jane woke up._orientationorientationorientationorientation2021届新高考 读后续写范例 语料积累与续写结构课件2021届新高考 读后续写范例 语料积累与续写结构课件2021届新高考 读后续写范例 语料积累与续写结构课件2021届新高考 读后续写范例 语料积累与续写结构课件Interpretation of the first sentence 首句首句解读解读But no more helicopters came and it was dark.It was daybreak when J

23、ane woke up.根据推测，必须描写根据推测，必须描写Jane 独自在森林里独自在森林里呆了一晚的情形！呆了一晚的情形！orientationorientationresultresult2021届新高考 读后续写范例 语料积累与续写结构课件2021届新高考 读后续写范例 语料积累与续写结构课件Para.1 But no more helicopter came and it was getting dark again.What esle can you add to the environment?orientationorientationcomplicationcomplicat

24、ionactionactionresultresultevaluationevaluation How did Jane feel at the beginning?How did Jane feel at the beginning?What What happenedhappened?What What did Jane did Jane do and how did she do?do and how did she do?Was Jane prepared for the nightWas Jane prepared for the night?How did How did Jane

25、 finally fall asleep?Jane finally fall asleep?How did Jane How did Jane feel in her dream?feel in her dream?2021届新高考 读后续写范例 语料积累与续写结构课件2021届新高考 读后续写范例 语料积累与续写结构课件scaredscaredregretfulregretfulcalmcalmbravebrave2021届新高考 读后续写范例 语料积累与续写结构课件2021届新高考 读后续写范例 语料积累与续写结构课件以以情感线情感线的角度的角度：How did Jane feel at

26、the beginning?How did Jane feel at the beginning?What What happened to Janehappened to Jane?What What did Jane did Jane do and how did she do?do and how did she do?Was Jane prepared for the nightWas Jane prepared for the night?How did Jane How did Jane feel?feel?How did How did Jane finally fall asl

27、eep?Jane finally fall asleep?首句解读：Para.1 But no more helicopter came and it was getting dark again.orientationorientationcomplicationcomplicationactionactionresultresultevaluationevaluation2021届新高考 读后续写范例 语料积累与续写结构课件2021届新高考 读后续写范例 语料积累与续写结构课件Para.1 But no more helicopter came and it was getting dar

28、k again.5 senses:temperature/light/soundorientorientationationcomplicomplicationcationactionactionresultresultevaluaevaluationtionConflicts:difficulties/dangers/injuries/troubles/changesActions:brave/determine/fight back/deal withGoals/Aims:shelter/fire/warmth/food/water/sleep Feelings:mentally/phys

29、ically,body and soul情感线：情感线：失落失落2021届新高考 读后续写范例 语料积累与续写结构课件2021届新高考 读后续写范例 语料积累与续写结构课件Para.1 But no more helicopter came and it was getting dark again.As the light dimmed,the warmth of the day was ebbing into a faint chill.orientaorientationtioncompliccomplicationationactionactionresultresultevaluat

30、ievaluationonDarkness soon fell upon the forest,while the sounds of night started to grow and eyes from among trees began to glow.Frightened but determined,Jane took a deep breath and quickened her pace,hoping to find an open area soon.(stagger,stumble,fumble )And after walking a long distance,to he

31、r great joy,she eventually reached an open area.Exhausted inside out,Jane sat on the ground,built a fire and slowly fell asleep.(Though,managed to build before dropped and fell)Filled with regrets and missing her husband,she cried(sobbed)in her dreams.2021届新高考 读后续写范例 语料积累与续写结构课件2021届新高考 读后续写范例 语料积累与

32、续写结构课件Possible version Paragraph 2 It was daybreak when Jane woke up.The sun shone lightly,bringing warmth and hope to the world.Jane stayed at the open area patiently to wait for others help.Two hours later,the helicopter which she had seen yesterday caught her eyes.Jane took off her yellow blouse

33、to flag it and yelled out to make the helicopter notice her.Fortunately,the helicopter noticed her and came closer,finally landing at the open area.Her husband,Tom,got out of the helicopter.Surprised and overjoyed,Jane held him tightly and told him how much she loved him.At the moment,the mountain w

34、as filled with love.orientationorientationcomplicationcomplicationactionactionresultresultevaluationevaluationhopeful-excited-happy-lovehopeful-excited-happy-love2021届新高考 读后续写范例 语料积累与续写结构课件2021届新高考 读后续写范例 语料积累与续写结构课件Narrative Arc 一模学生作文Students version 惊悚版惊悚版 Paragraph 1 Finally John started his lon

35、g walk.Walking along the quiet street and holding the bat tightly,he could hear nothing but his own breath,heartbeats and the sound of wind.Suddenly,when he was going to pass a crossing,a group of homeless dogs rushed out from the roadside bush,barking loudly at him.John was so frightened that both

36、of his hands and legs were trembling.He hold the bat and knife tightly and stepped back.Soon the dogs had him cornered.John was so helpless that his brain went blank.orientationorientationcomplicationcomplicationactionactionresultresultevaluationevaluationStudents version 惊悚版惊悚版 Paragraph 2 At that

37、time,a car was drawing closer.Meanwhile,the enormous bear was drawing closer too.John wanted to ask for help but he was so tired that his lips parted in a soundless scream.He plicationcomplicationStudents version 平淡版平淡版 Paragraph 2 At that time,a car was drawing closer.He got his hopes up again and

38、waved with all the strength left in him at the car.The car stopped in front of him and the window was rolled down.John was surprised to find that the driver was a woman and a little girl was sitting in the back seat.After knowing the situation,the woman opened the door and gave him a lift.John was d

39、eeply moved by the kindness of the woman and decided not to go out at midnight again.orientationorientationcomplicationcomplicationactionactionresultresultevaluationevaluationNarrative Arc语料的积累适应性考试学生仿写Students version Paragraph 1 When I was about to say goodbye,the girl asked if Id had lunch.I was

40、about to say yes but my stomach gave out a signal before my mouth opened.The girl received the signal and smiled.I saw her walked to the truck and told something to her parents.Then she took a paper bag and brought it to me.She said they took some feature food of their hometown and wanted to share i

41、t with me.After I thanked her,I watched them left at the end of the road.orientationorientationcomplicationcomplicationactionactionresultresultevaluationevaluationStudents version Paragraph 1 When I was about to say goodbye,the girl asked if Id had lunch.After a long time of waiting and working unde

42、r the burning sunshine,I did feel hungry.So,awkwardly,I shook my head.The little girl quickly opened the door,got into their car,took out a piece of bread and a paper bag and handed them to me.Gratefully,I accepted her gifts and,in return,I gave her a new robot.Seeing them leaving,I addicted myself

43、to the warmth they gave me heart and soul.orientationorientationcomplicationcomplicationactionactionresultresultevaluationevaluationStudents version Paragraph 1 When I was about to say goodbye,the girl asked if Id had lunch.Hearing that,I suddenly realized that I had been waiting and working there f

44、or several hours and my stomach had been already empty.I replied,with an embarrassing smile,“No,I havent.”A smile worked its way across the girls face and she jumped into the truck and took a hand-made sandwich in a paper bag and a bottle of water to me.At that moment,a warm current rose in my heart and I eyed the little girl up and down and could hardly speak.The little girl was just like an angel,shining her kindness to me,a stranger who.orientationorientationcomplicationcomplicationactionactionresultresultevaluationevaluation段落结构段落结构语料积累(情节+情感)Thanks