高中英语《读后续写》公开课优秀课件(经典、完美、值得收藏).pptx

1、读后续写01内容要内容要前后衔接前后衔接，上下连贯上下连贯语言表达语言表达风格一致风格一致。03凡是凡是故事都应有故事都应有跌宕跌宕起起伏伏，其中人物会遇到困，其中人物会遇到困难或问题，但难或问题，但最终能解最终能解决决。02故事内容一定要故事内容一定要正能量正能量，弘扬社会主义，弘扬社会主义核心价值观。如迷路了但最终一定核心价值观。如迷路了但最终一定回到了家；失败了或遇到困难了，但回到了家；失败了或遇到困难了，但最终一定成功了；吵架了但最后一定最终一定成功了；吵架了但最后一定是言归于好，是言归于好，和睦相处和睦相处；犯错了，最后一定会改过自新，重新做人；贼逃了，最后一定犯错了，最后一定会改过

2、自新，重新做人；贼逃了，最后一定是绳之以法，是绳之以法，等等。等等。三大原则写作指导四个步骤四个步骤仔细仔细阅读阅读所给所给两段的两段的首首句句，结合正能量结尾，结合正能量结尾，思考思考大致框架大致框架。读所给的不完整故事，读所给的不完整故事，弄清大意和主题弄清大意和主题，理清，理清故事的主要人物和事件。故事的主要人物和事件。思考再三，把修正润色后思考再三，把修正润色后的续写整洁地的续写整洁地写入答卷写入答卷。根据根据“所见所见/遇所想，遇所想，所为所感所为所感”等构思具体等构思具体细节。细节。I always wondered how people would react if I trie

3、d to approach a total stranger for help in a busy place like a street corner or in a crowded mall.I personally have always hurried past a stranger who tried to catch my attention in a busy place or when I am rushing around.Yesterday I had a taste of being stuck in such a desperate situation where my

4、 only hope of help would have to come from a total stranger.I was in a busy shopping mall buying a large piece of luggage.After the purchase in one of the large,fancy,expensive shops,I picked up my phone from my pocket to call my driver waiting in the parking lot and my phone was dead.I then request

5、ed the shop assistant who had just sold me the luggage,which was not cheap at all,if she could help me telephone my driver.She replied,still all smiles,“Im sorry,Sir,but it is the shop policy that we cannot use mobile phones while working in the shop.”As I was wondering what kind of policy that was,

6、I saw a nice-looking teenage boy coming toward me.Remembering my wifes interesting theory that beautiful people are more likely to give you a hand when youre in trouble,I thought I might have a chance.But before I could say a word,he walked past me.It turned out he simply didnt see me.I waited a bit

7、 longer in the mall but it seemed nobody bothered to look at me.Disappointed and tired,I got out of the shop on to the busy street in front.I stood there with people rushing by,looking at their faces to see if there was a sign of kindness on their face.I began wondering how many times I had reacted

8、to strangers like the shop girl and the teenager.Paragraph 1 Paragraph 1:At that point I saw a young mother with her two kids.Paragraph 2 Paragraph 2:Finally a man wearing a cheap T-shirt and dirty jeans seemed to notice me.1读懂大意，读懂大意，理清脉络理清脉络 主要是根据记叙文的六要素弄清文章大意，主要是根据记叙文的六要素弄清文章大意，特别要弄清故事的特别要弄清故事的人物

9、人物，时态时态(通常是一般通常是一般过去时过去时)，事件事件(故事的起因和经过故事的起因和经过)，语言语言特色特色(以便在续写时语言特色前后一致，保以便在续写时语言特色前后一致，保持持不变不变)，等等。，等等。人物时态和事件人物时态和事件 语言特色不要变语言特色不要变写写作过程作过程characterscharacterstensetense eventseventsI,the shop assistant,a teenage boy,a young mother,simple past tenseI always wondered how people would react if I tr

10、ied to approach a total stranger for help.Yesterday I had a taste of being stuck in such a desperate situation.I picked up my phone from my pocket to call my driver waiting in the parking lot and my phone was dead.I waited a bit longer in the mall but it seemed nobody bothered to look at me.语言特色语言特色

11、1.定语定语从句从句I personally have always hurried past a stranger.2.with的复合结构的复合结构，分词短分词短语语等等的的使用使用I stood there with people rushing by,looking at their faces to see if there was a sign of kindness on their face.with的复合结构因为有小男孩带路，我们很容易找到了房子。With the little boy leading the way,we found the house easily.所有东西

12、买好之后，她开心地回家了。With all the things bought,she went home happily.Can you find more examples for the sentences patterns？2细读首句，细读首句，构思框架构思框架 两段首句定一框两段首句定一框 由续写的第一段首句与第由续写的第一段首句与第二段首句确定第一段的框架。二段首句确定第一段的框架。二框二首正能量二框二首正能量 第二段的框架，由第二段第二段的框架，由第二段首句与正能量结尾来确定。首句与正能量结尾来确定。At that point I saw a young mother with

13、her two kids.（就在那时，我看见了一个年轻的母亲带着她的两个就在那时，我看见了一个年轻的母亲带着她的两个孩子孩子）Finally a man wearing a cheap T-shirt and dirtyjeans seemed to notice me.（最后，一个穿着廉价（最后，一个穿着廉价T恤和脏牛仔裤的男人似乎注恤和脏牛仔裤的男人似乎注意到了我意到了我。）构思框架由第由第1段首句段首句“At that point I saw a young mother with her two kids.”可知，作者此可知，作者此时寄希望于年轻母亲来帮助自己。时寄希望于年轻母亲来帮助

14、自己。01.由第由第2段首句段首句“FinallyFinally a man wearing a cheap T-shirt and dirty jeans seemed to notice me.”可知年轻的妈妈并不会帮可知年轻的妈妈并不会帮助作者，下段才会出现转机。助作者，下段才会出现转机。02.两段首句定一框两段首句定一框。Paragraph 1Paragraph 1：本段本段依然是写作者在商场中也没有得到这个依然是写作者在商场中也没有得到这个年轻的母亲的帮助年轻的母亲的帮助。注意结尾要与下段语义。注意结尾要与下段语义衔接。衔接。构思框架由续写的第二段首句由续写的第二段首句“Finall

15、y”可知，可知，没有接受到任何人的帮助的作者应该没有接受到任何人的帮助的作者应该会会得到这个普通的男人的帮助得到这个普通的男人的帮助。01.由正能量结尾，可知，作者没有想到由正能量结尾，可知，作者没有想到的是的是最后帮助自己的却是一个普通的最后帮助自己的却是一个普通的男人。进而总结全文中心思想男人。进而总结全文中心思想“真正真正的善良不能通过外貌衡定的善良不能通过外貌衡定”。02.Paragraph Paragraph 2 2：二框二首正能量二框二首正能量。3增加细节，增加细节，开始写作开始写作 在已定在已定框架框架范围内范围内，依据依据情节发展和生活常识，情节发展和生活常识，推断故事推断故事

16、中人物中人物所见、所见、所闻、所闻、所思、所思、所说、所说、所做所做等等给给每段增每段增加加几几个个具体细具体细节节。构思Paragraph 1从所给材料结尾和本段首句可知，作者也不会受到年轻妈妈的帮助;从下段首句Finally a man seemed to notice me.才会出现转机，所以本段应是作者接着被拒绝帮助。因此，本段可以这样构思：Paragraph 1:At that point I saw a young mother with her two kids.Paragraph 2:Finally a man wearing a cheap T-shirt and dirty

17、 jeans seemed to notice me.所遇作者遇事，无人相作者遇事，无人相助助所想遇见母亲遇见母亲，慈眉善目，慈眉善目满怀期待，寻求帮助满怀期待，寻求帮助上前询问上前询问，拒绝帮助，拒绝帮助待在原地，心情沉重待在原地，心情沉重构思Paragraph 2从本段首句可知，会出现转机，上段末作者希望有人相助，那么，“最后”应是有人帮助了。从正能量原则可知，作者受到好心人的帮助。因此，可以这样构思：Paragraph 1:At that point I saw a young mother with her two kids.Paragraph 2:Finally a man wear

18、ing a cheap T-shirt and dirty jeans seemed to notice me.微笑致意，继续求助微笑致意，继续求助询问帮助，毫不犹豫询问帮助，毫不犹豫感动不已，接受帮助感动不已，接受帮助学做好人，传递善良学做好人，传递善良 4修改润色，修改润色，整洁誊写整洁誊写 审读初稿，注意语义是审读初稿，注意语义是否衔接，前后是否连贯，事否衔接，前后是否连贯，事件是否符合逻辑，语言特色件是否符合逻辑，语言特色是否与前文一致。在修改润是否与前文一致。在修改润色之后，整齐工整地誊写在色之后，整齐工整地誊写在答卷上。答卷上。Paragraph 1 I thought that

19、a beautiful woman with charming blue eyes must be willing to help me.So,I walked towards her with an appropriate smile on my face,and requested if she could be kind enough to make a phone call for me.However,without a word,she pulled her kids to escape from me,as if scared by a murderer.I stood ther

20、e,motionless,with a blank face and a sinking heart.参考范文参考范文Paragraph 2 I squeezed a smile though it failed to mask my exhaustion and disappointment,and requested him the same thing.Unexpectedly,he took out his mobile phone for me without hesitation.Dancing in his eyes was the real kindness that I ha

21、d been struggling to seek for so long.From that day on,I began helping other strangers in trouble,just like the poor-looking but kind man,with the aim of passing kindness and melting the ice in many peoples hearts.(1)定语定语从句从句Dancing in his eyes was the real kindness that I had been struggling to see

22、k for so long.(2)with的的复合结复合结构构I walked towards her with an appropriate smile on my face,.续写中有效地使用了使前后连贯的So，However，Unexpectedly等衔接性词。1.与与前前文语义衔接文语义衔接，前，前后连贯后连贯2.与原文语言风格基与原文语言风格基本本一致一致范文评析范文评析Homework：Review the tips and guidance of continuous wrting.Finish the story accordingly to what we have learned and discussed today.