（读后续写公开课）读后续写《The-Last-Delivery》课件.pptx

1、The Last DeliveryInterpretation of the Text(6 elements)A storyhowwherewhenwhywhowhata rich couple The porterInterpretation of the Text 文本解读(Who)Strangers Read for the three clues1.Time 2.Plot3.Emotions Task 1:Reading for the time(when)1._ purchasing everything they wanted2._,he settled for$15.3._ pa

2、ssed,_ passed.4._,they went back to the market to inquire5._ hearing that,the husband had tears in his eyes AfterFinallyOne hour two hours UponImmediatelyTask2:Reading for the plot(summary)A rich couple was _(throw)a big party at their house,so they went shopping at the market.After_(purchase)everyt

3、hing they wanted,they called a porter _was an old age,unhealthy looking _(carry)their stuff to their house for a mere$15.They waited _(anxious)for their stuff,_the old porter didnt appear all the time.They took _for granted that the old porter was a thief.Upon hearing the news from another porter,th

4、ey were struck dead with_(embarrass),feeling the blood_(rush)to their face.throwingpurchasing whoitbutto carryanxiouslyembarrassment rushingTask3:Reading for Emotions(T/F)The old porter:The old porter was unwilling to deliver the stuff for a mere$15 though he was poor and unhealthy.()The rich couple

5、:1.The rich couple didnt mind paying a lot for the party.()2.The rich couple showed great sympathy to the old porter and paid him immediately.()3.The rich couple regarded the old porter to be a thief when he couldnt appear in time.()T T F F Lets discuss!1.Discuss with your partners and raise some re

6、asonable questions according to the given sentences.2.Discuss with your partners and form your writing ideas.Task1:Interpretation of the given sentences(首句解读首句解读)New Information Why did the old porter ask the new porter Why did the old porter ask the new porter to to help deliver the goods?help deli

7、ver the goods?Para.1 The angry wife asked him,“Where is that old thief?This is our stuff.”What was the new porters reaction What was the new porters reaction when hearing the angry wifes words?when hearing the angry wifes words?Where was the old porter?Where was the old porter?What happened to the o

8、ld porter?What happened to the old porter?Interpretation of the given information(首句解读)New Information What a life lesson did the wife What a life lesson did the wife learn?learn?Para.2 Upon hearing that,the husband had tears in his eyes and turned to his wife.What did the husband say to his wife?Wh

9、at did the husband say to his wife?How did the wife react to her husbands How did the wife react to her husbands words?words?What lesson can we get from the story?We should respect everyone regardless of their financial and social status.We cant judge a book by its cover.a rich couple The porterTask

10、2:Interpretation of writing ideas 写作思路解读(1)(1)glaring at herglaring at her resentfullyresentfullywas about to add more was about to add more contemptuouscontemptuous comments commentswas was struckstruck deaddead withwith shameshamea rich couple The porterInterpretation of writing ideas 写作思路解读(2)con

11、fusedconfused,responded,responded at once,at once,regretted,regretted,stood stood there there embarrassedembarrassedsmiled and smiled and continued continued his his deliveringdelivering in the sunin the sunThe Micro-skills Training in writing：1.又累又饿，老人在灼热的大中午再也走不动了。又累又饿，老人在灼热的大中午再也走不动了。The old _ go

12、 any further in this heat of the noon.The old _ go any further in this heat of the noon.(运用运用.too.to.too.to.句型句型)_,the old porter couldnt go any further in this heat of the _,the old porter couldnt go any further in this heat of the noon.(noon.(运用形容词作主语补足语运用形容词作主语补足语)was too tired and hungry toTired

13、 and hungry2.2.妻子尴尬地站在那里，满脸涨得通红。妻子尴尬地站在那里，满脸涨得通红。The wife stood there with embarrassment,_.(运用并列句结构)The wife stood there with embarrassment,_.(运用现在分词作状语)The wife stood there with embarrassment,_.(运用介词with的复合结构)The wife stood there with embarrassment,_.(运用独立主格结构)and she felt the blood rushing to her

14、facefeeling the blood rushing to her facewith the blood rushing to her facethe blood rushing to her face3.老人诚实的品质让妻子深受触动，脸上写满了愧疚之情。_,guilt written in her red face.(运用so.that.结构)_,guilt written in her red face.(运用So.that放句首的倒装句型)_,guilt written in her red face.(运用强调谓语动词句型)()_,guilt written in her red

15、 face.(运用强调句句型)The honesty of the old porter did strike the wife a great dealSo honest was the old porter that the wife was struck a great dealIt was the honesty of the old porter that struck the wife a great dealThe old porter was so honest that the wife was struck a great deal4.4.那时，她才意识到不能以貌取人。那时

16、，她才意识到不能以貌取人。_ that we cant judge a book by its cover.(运用“only+状语”放句首的倒装句句型)_ that we cant judge a book by its cover.(运用“Not until”放句首的倒装句句型)_ that we cant judge a book by its cover.(运用“It was not until.that.”的强调句型)Not until then did she realizeOnly then did she realizeIt was not until then that she

17、 realizedShare your story!Group disscussion.Try to infer and write down key words,phrases or sentences on the paper and then put them into a complete story.Writing Criteria:1.Your story should be coherent(连贯连贯)，logical and reasonable.2.Your writing should be rich in vocabulary and sentence pattern.C

18、ontiunationContiunation Writing WritingPossible version 1 Paragraph 1The angry wife asked him,“Where is that old thief?This is our stuff.”She was about to add more contemptuouscontemptuous comments on the old porter when she suddenly noticed that the man was glaring at herglaring at her resentfullyr

19、esentfully.“Madam,please calm down.Jack is not a thief!”retortedretorted the porter,“He is actually terribly sick and isnt able to earn enough to even have a single meal of the day.Just now,on the way to deliver your stuff,he was too weak to go any further in this heat of the noon.Despite falling do

20、wn,he never forgot his promise and handed me$15,keeping telling me to deliver it as fast as possible”Possible version 1 Paragraph 2Upon hearing this,the husband had tears in his eyes and turned to his wife.“He was hungry,he was poor,but he was truly an honest man,”the husband admitted with trembling

21、 voice.At that,the wife was struck dead with shame,heart beating painfully fast and banging against her ribs.How could she be angry with such a kind and responsible man?Like a child who made a mistake,she had no courage to look into her husbands eyes.Through all these unexpected things,it eventually

22、 dawned on her that honesty has no class and she should respect everyone regardless of their financial and social status.评点：妻子的傲慢与年轻工友的义愤填膺，丈夫的热泪盈眶与妻子的满脸窘迫，这些细节的描写，都使人物的鲜明的性格跃然纸上。“contemptuous”,“resentfully”,“retort”,“struck dead with shame”等与情感有关的高级词汇的使用，使文章变得有血有肉，读起来津津有味。最后，妻子的幡然悔悟对文章进行了一个主题上的升华，通

23、过人物的改变给故事画上了圆满的句号。Possible version 2 Paragraph 1The angry wife asked him,“Where is that old thief?This is our stuff.”BaffledBaffled,the porter responded at once,“You mean Jack?He is not a thief!He is the best guy Ive ever known.”However,the wife sneeredsneered,“You must be his accomplice,or our stuf

24、f couldnt have ended in your cart.”The porter,his face flushingflushing withwith irritationirritation,retortedretorted,“We are not thieves.We earn our living in an honest way!Actually Jack had a car accident after he set off with your shopping.Though badly injured,he anxiously called me up and hande

25、d me$15 to help him deliver it for you.”Possible version 2 Paragraph 2Upon hearing this,the husband had tears in his eyes and turned to his wife.“Honey,we did misunderstand such an honest man.We owe him a sincere apology,”regrettedregretted the husband,seeking for his wifes advice.But then came a de

26、ad silence for a while.The wife stood there embarrassedembarrassed,the blood rushing to her face.Never did she realize such a poor man should be so honest and responsible.With quivering With quivering voicevoice,the wife politely apologized and then decided to visit Jack at once.Gazing afterGazing a

27、fter the rich couple until they vanished from his sight,the porter smiled and continued his delivering in the sun.Amazingly,he didnt feel unbearably hot any longer.评点：评点：妻子不但怀疑老人是小偷，还怀疑他的工友是同谋，将故事的矛盾激化到了极致，使文章充满了张力。结尾处妻子一改之前傲慢嚣张的脾气，诚挚地道歉，并决定去看望老人。工友看着夫妻两人离去，微微一笑，似乎炎热的天气也变得没有那么热，这些描写使文章变得节奏缓慢，却又触动人心。

28、总之，张弛有度，节奏把握得很好。另外，“baffled”,“sneer”,“flush with irritation”,“regret”,“quivering voice”,“gaze after”等与情感有关的动作神态的描写，使文章充满画面感，增强了故事的感染力，使人物形象栩栩如生。What have we learnt today?Step 1:Read the passage and answer the 5w questions to get the main idea.Step 2:Analyze the feeling and plot development.Step 3:Infer the ending by the key words and given sentences.Step4:Begin to write.Add more details.(feelings,actions,dialogues,etc.)Step 5:Polish your writing.Write down your story and polish your writing with your partner.Assignment