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1、读后续写课例编者按：5月19日在xx三中听胡xx老师高三复习课。胡老师根据“内容要创造，语言要模仿”思想，用浙江三地联考试题设计读后续写课。课后我问她如何设计此课，她坦言：细读了王初明教授文章，模仿“读思言八堂课”。教学材料：根据下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。Carter enjoyed riding the school bus home. The ride home gave him some time to relax after a busy day of fifth grade. He usually sat alone and enjoyed that t

2、oo. With four siblings (兄妹) he didnt get much time alone. Sometimes he sat with his younger brother, Jackson, but Jackson was sick at home today.The bus stopped and the tallest boy in his class, Dexter, stepped off followed by his younger brother, Billy. As the bus pulled away, Carter looked back ov

3、er his shoulder to watch the boys. Dexter was yelling and waving his hands at his little brother. Billy said something Carter could not hear. Dexter yelled, gave his younger brother a hard shove (猛推) and knocked him to the ground. Billy was on the ground wiping at his eyes, but Dexter walked away.Ca

4、rter turned in his seat, feeling disgusted. He hated seeing little kids get picked on (欺负). The sight of Billy on the ground crying was burned into his memory. He tried to think of something else.He thought of the model car he was working on at home, a 1967 Corvette. He started building it over a we

5、ek ago and just finished putting it together last night. Tonight, as soon as he finished his homework, he could start painting the car. That was his favorite part. He already had the perfect color of blue picked out.He hurried off the bus, ran through his yard, and breezed through the kitchen with a

6、 quick hello to his mom. She was making spaghetti, which smelled delicious. He ran up the stairs two at a time and rushed into his room.“Surprise!” his brother Jackson said, throwing his arms into the air. “What are you doing in my room? I thought you were sick!” “I feel better!”“Whats on your face?

7、 Are you bleeding?”“No! Im not bleeding.” Jackson wiped at his face. “Its probably just paint. Look! Look what I did!” He pointed at the desk in the corner of Carters room.Paragraph 1: Carter looked down at his desk in horror.Paragraph 2: Carter took a deep breath and then unfolded his fist.注意: 1.续写

8、词数应为150左右; 2.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。教学过程：读：明大意，理情节导读：导任务、导情感、导方法。默读：340词默读几分钟？要求学生手到心到。理解：引导学生回答3个与续写相关的问题。Q1: How many persons are there in the story?A: Five. They are Carter and Jackson, Dexter and Billy, Carters mother.Q2: What was Carter feeling when he saw Dexter beat up his younger brother?A: Ca

9、rter was feeling disgusted in sight of that scene.Q3: What did Carter see in his room when he got home?A: He saw that his model car was painted red by Jackson.思：抓重点、搭支架设计思路：教师提出2个探究性问题，为续写做铺垫。Q1: What did Carter think of his model car? 请写出4个动词（短语）、3个形容词。动词：work on, start building, finish putting, st

10、art painting形容词：favorite, blue, perfectQ2: Do you think Carter would beat his brother? Why or why not? (Say two reasons)A: I think Carter would not beat his brother, because he loved Jackson (Sometimes he sat with his younger brother, Jackson) and he hated Dexters rough behaviors (yelled, gave his y

11、ounger brother a hard shove and knocked him to the ground).言：定要点、写短文定要点：根据阅读材料和两段提示句，每段确定3个要点（汉英均可）。第一段要点：所见、生气、道歉第二段要点：反思（欺凌）、原谅、和解教师习作：Carter looked down at his desk in horror. He found his model car was painted red! “My Corvette!” he cried and yelled at his brother: “Why did you paint it red?” At

12、 that moment, Carter folded his fist and tried to throw at Jackson. Never had he seen Carter so angry. Jackson lowered his head and sobbed. “I wanted to give you a surprise. I thought red was your perfect color. Please forgive me, brother.” Hearing this, Carters fist froze in the air. (75 words)Cart

13、er took a deep breath and then unfolded his fist. Suddenly he found himself too rough. “I cannot be as rude to my brother as Dexter was,” he said to himself. “Jackson is so young and I must be kind to him.” Thus, Carter went over and gently touched Jacksons head. “Im sorry, Jack. Id like to give you

14、 this red car if you like it. Ill start building a new one next week and paint it blue, my favorite color.” Hearing this, Jackson turned sadness into joy. The brothers went to dinner hand in hand. (86 words)点评：本“续作”突显了Carter“爱弟弟爱车模”的主题主线。“爱弟弟”，Carter与Dexter形成鲜明的反差；“爱车模”从制作车模到车模被弟弟“毁容”，再到重新制作，表明Carter对所爱好事物的执着。胡老师没有操练词语形式，而是从意义入手，在理解意义过程中加工词语、搭建支架。整体上，续写内容前后呼应、自圆其说，且言之成理。特别是，她引导学生确定“道歉反思原谅”等续写要点，开发自由言说的空间，体现了“内容要创造”的“续论”思想。此外，续作中“和解”是开放性，允许描写不同的结局。