2023届高考英语写作专项复习读后续写（ppt课件）.pptx

1、读后续写真题精讲读后续写真题精讲Step1:The key elements(要素要素)of a story A story always involves characters ongoing actions and feelings in different settings.A story Characters(who)1.Actions(what)2.Feelings(how+why)3.Settings(when+where)Other aspects:literary formtensepersonStep2:Reading“I wish you could see him,”sh

2、e said to her own children,John,Harry,and Clara.“He is such a help to his mother.He wants very much to earn some money,but I dont see what he can do.”记叙文一般过去时第三人称 文文体体 时态时态 人称人称Task1:passage analysis whatA boy named Bernard was in need；Mrs.Meredith and her children John,Harry,Clara wanted to help.wh

3、yA man(Bernards dad)was sick in bed；his wife,who took care of him could not go out to work.howThey decided to make popcorn,and put it into paper bags.Bernard could take it around to the houses and sell it.Whenthe economy was in declinewhere a small communityTask2:Read for the key information who1.Mr

4、s.Meredith2.her children John,Harry and Clara3.Bernard and his mom and dad In a small community,when the economy was in decline,people lost their jobs.Mrs.Meredith was warm-hearted and helping people in need.She told her children about a family who was in a state of poverty.A boy named Bernard was i

5、n need.His dad was sick in bed while his mom,who took care of him,could not go out to work.All the three children wanted to help Bernard and John thought up the popcorn plan.They decided to make popcorn,and put it into paper bags so that Bernard could take it around to the houses and sell it.Task3:R

6、ead for the plotsummaryReread the story and figure out the plot.背景介绍when：during the Great Depressionwhere:a small communityw h o:M r s.M e r e d i t h;h e r children John,Harry and Clara;Bernard and his mom and dad 一直乐于助人的Mrs.Meredith对三个孩子讲述Bernard一家人的情况。三个孩子都渴望帮助Bernard，John想出了制作并出售爆米花的计划。续写部分 续写部分

7、难点剖析难点剖析Para.1:When Mrs.Meredith heard of Johns idea,she thought it was a good one,tooPara.2:With everything ready,Bernard started out on his new business.文章的难点就在于故事后续的起承转折和故事场景的刻画。第一段要写的内容在第一段要写的内容在第二段开头有所暗示，第二段开头有所暗示，第二段首句With everything ready,那这个everything都包含了哪些准备工作呢？这些都是需要我们在第一段要去刻画的,即第一段刻画他们实施卖

8、爆第一段刻画他们实施卖爆米花计划的具体过程，而结尾要写他们完成了准备米花计划的具体过程，而结尾要写他们完成了准备,与第二段开头With everything ready,Bernard started out on his new business做好衔接做好衔接。第二段可以刻画他们卖爆米花遇到困难和最后解决问题大获成功的结局，并且升华文章主旨，即大家一起帮到了Bernard，体现真善美的结局。但是大家在设计情节的时候，有多种方案可以让可以让Bernard和大家一起努力，十分顺利地解决问题；也和大家一起努力，十分顺利地解决问题；也可以人为地增加一些小波折，让可以人为地增加一些小波折，让Bern

9、ard在大家的帮助下共同解决问题。最后一句要在大家的帮助下共同解决问题。最后一句要交代主旨。交代主旨。Paragraph 1 When Mrs.Meredith heard of Johns idea,she thought it was a good one,too.how and who to make popcornwho to tell the plan to Bernard Bernards response to the plan1.How and who to make popcorn?2.Who to tell the plan to Bernard?3.What was Be

10、rnards response to the plan?A1+2润色：润色：With moms approval,John got to prepare the oven and paper bags,Harry went to check the corn that Uncle John sent them,while Clara wasted no time in telling Bernard their plan,hoping he would accept their kindness.A3润色：润色：Having heard of their plan,Bernards blue

11、eyes watered with happiness and gratitude.The children started to prepare the necessities for making popcorn.Clara went to tell Bernard their plan.Bernard accepted their kindness and thanked them.When Mrs.Meredith heard of Johns idea,she thought it a good one,too.【1】With moms approval,John got to pr

12、epare the oven and paper bags,Harry went to check the corn that Uncle John sent them,while Clara wasted no time in telling Bernard their plan,hoping he would accept their kindness.【2】Having heard of their plan,Bernards blue eyes watered with happiness and gratitude.【3】Very soon the three children,to

13、gether with Bernard,were busy popping the corn,like little fuzzy bees dancing in Mrs.Merediths kitchen.【4】And it wasnt long before their hard work paid off.Paragraph 1with(介词短语)现在分词作状语water（具体动词)with(介词短语)比喻修辞非谓语动词Paragraph 2 With everything ready,Bernard started out on his new business.how and wher

14、e to sell the popcornwho and why to buy the popcorn the result of the plan 1.How and where to sell the popcorn?2.who and why to buy the popcorn?His joyous shouts rang through the whole neighbourhood,attempting to sell popcorn from door to door.People were willing to do their bits for the“little pop-

15、corn boy”,considering that they felt sympathy for his tough situation.3.What was the result of the plan?思路分析：思路分析：Bernard:卖完，赚钱，感激卖完，赚钱，感激The Meredith：友善：友善As night fell gradually,he sold out all the popcorn and earned a lot.With all money in his hands,he was more than delighted and grateful to thos

16、e helping people,especially Mrs.Meredith and her three kids.Meanwhile,the Meredith learned that with a heart full of determination and kindness,they could change the world for a better one.3.What was the result of the plan?With everything ready,Bernard started out on his new business.His joyous shou

17、ts rang through the whole neighbourhood,attempting to sell popcorn from door to door.People were willing to do their bits for the“little pop-corn boy”,considering that they felt sympathy for his tough situation.As night fell gradually,he sold out all the popcorn and earned a lot.With all money in hi

18、s hands,he was more than delighted and grateful to those helping people,especially Mrs.Meredith and her three kids.Meanwhile,the Meredith learned that with a heart full of determination and kindness,they could change the world for a better one.Paragraph 2Step6 Polishing说 say大声说 shout/call out 鼓励地说 e

19、ncourage补充说 add 尖叫 scream继续说 continue 耳语 whisper解释说 explain She nodded with a smile and encouraged the children,“Lets get started”.He called out,”Popcorn!50 cents for one extra-large pack!”The first time they smelt the sweet taste,they couldnt help screaming.词汇润色词汇润色 tears well up in ones eyes be mo

20、ved to tears be filled with gratitude for the kindness of words failed sb.when.Words failed him and tears welled up in his eyes when he heard of the popcorn plan.词汇润色词汇润色 utterly amazed 描写了人们的惊讶 pleasant air;sweet taste of helping others 描写助人后的愉悦 his bright smiling face 描写男孩喜悦的心情词汇润色词汇润色 utterly ama

21、zed Immediately,Clara volunteered.can hardly wait to deeply moved.laughingly explained 副词副词 Having heard their plan,Bernard really appreciated their help.Carrying all the paper bags,he called out Welcomed by the crowd,Bernard sold out all popcorn within no time.People were utterly amazed to see such

22、 a little,poorly-dressed boy selling popcorn at their doors.非谓语动词非谓语动词第五档：第五档：21分分-25分分1.与所给短文融洽度高融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接合语衔接合(Reasonable and logical);2.内容丰富，情节合理，有细节描写(动作，情感，环境，对话等)(5W+1H)3.所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不 影响意义表达(Good vocabulary&varied structures);4.巧妙地利用了前文的伏笔前文的伏笔，使所续写短文精巧精巧。(Using a brush-up)Tips for a good ending1.写好两段首尾句两段首尾句；（逻辑衔接好）2.“问题问题”与“解决解决”；（结构完整）3.动作动作与感情感情双曲线；（情节好）4.抓准伏笔伏笔，回扣前文。（点亮全文）Most importantly:Love to read and write stories!故事也许是虚构的，但是故事里的情感却真实。