高中英语 读后续写.pptx

1、 Winter will eventually pass, and spring is sure to come. The parents with their three-year-old son went to see a film. When they walked into the cinema, the attendant said to them: “ Youll have to go out if your son cries. But well refund( 退款退款) you the tickets.” About half an hour later, the husba

2、nd asked his wife, “ What do you think of the film?” “Ive never seen such a boring film.” His wife answered, “Its not worth seeing.” “I dont think much of it, either.” The husband said, “Wake the child up and_.” let him cry What do you think is a good ending? Learning Aim By the end of the class, we

3、 will be able to: have a clear map of the structure and obtain a good understanding of the text; learn how to analyze, infer, develop and create a logical and reasonable ending of the story by Mind Mapping. logically organize information, ideas and language; learn to develop creative thinking. Intro

4、duction:书面表达书面表达-读后续写读后续写 提供一篇350词以内的材料，要求考生依 据材料内容、所给段落开头语及所标关键词续 写一篇150词左右的短文。 将其发展成一篇与 给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文。 续写部分为2段。原文给出10处左右的标有下划 线的关键词语，所续写短文应使用5个以上。 （满分25分） 短文 内容和 情节 词汇 和语句 1.词数词数:350 2.体裁：体裁：记叙文或夹叙夹议为主记叙文或夹叙夹议为主 3.故事逻辑性故事逻辑性强，有情节，有起伏强，有情节，有起伏 Introduction:测试测试要求要求和特点和特点 1.有自由空间有自由空间 2.合乎情理和

5、逻辑合乎情理和逻辑 -有效续写有效续写 1.至少使用至少使用5个个以上的关键词以上的关键词 2.每段段首句已给每段段首句已给 3.字数：字数：15020 words 半半限定写作限定写作-“戴着镣铐跳舞戴着镣铐跳舞” 第五档（21-25分） （1）与所给短文融合度高，与所提供的段 落开头语衔接合理。 （2）内容丰富，应用了5个以上短文中标 出的关键词语。 （3）所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确。 （4）有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，所 续写短文结构紧凑。 Introduction:阅卷评分标准 阅卷时考虑以下几个方面：阅卷时考虑以下几个方面： (1)与所给短文及段落开头语的与所给短文及段落开头语

6、的衔衔 接程度接程度; (2)内容的内容的丰富性丰富性和对所标出关键和对所标出关键 词语的词语的应用程度应用程度; (3)应用语法结构结构和词汇的应用语法结构结构和词汇的丰丰 富性和准确性富性和准确性; (4)上下文的上下文的连贯连贯。 相关性：相关性：情节与原文的相关性情节与原文的相关性 -情节一定要回照原文；情节一定要回照原文； 开放性：开放性：续写的特性续写的特性 -构思在逻辑上一定要合理，构思在逻辑上一定要合理， -多种可能性择其多种可能性择其优优而续写而续写 所续部分：所续部分：高高立意、立意、正正能量、传递能量、传递积极积极的情感态度的情感态度 原文与后续的融洽度；原文与后续的融洽

7、度； 后续两段间的融洽度；后续两段间的融洽度； 段落开头语与后续语的融洽度。段落开头语与后续语的融洽度。 逻辑权重高于内容、语言和情感；逻辑权重高于内容、语言和情感； 前后逻辑要一致，内容不偏离主旨；前后逻辑要一致，内容不偏离主旨； 逻辑靠内容支撑，内容靠语言表达；逻辑靠内容支撑，内容靠语言表达； Introduction:融洽度高，融洽度高， 衔接合理衔接合理 五个一致： 1.要要与与原文的原文的主题主题或作者的或作者的本来意图本来意图保持一致。保持一致。 2.要要与与原文的原文的体裁、结构、写作手法体裁、结构、写作手法保持一致。保持一致。 3.要要与与原文在原文在人称人称，主体，主体时态时

8、态上上保持一致。保持一致。 4.要与要与人物人物的的思想行为、性格思想行为、性格特点特点保持保持一致。一致。 5.要要与与原文的原文的语言特点和叙事语言特点和叙事风格风格保持保持一一致。致。 Introduction:与原文的融合度与原文的融合度 Introduction: 解题解题思路思路 搞清原文搞清原文 剧情剧情 回扣原文，回扣原文， 结合段首句结合段首句 确定剧情走确定剧情走 向向 融入关键融入关键 词，想象词，想象 细节拟写细节拟写 草稿草稿 丰富细节，丰富细节， 润色润色 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完

9、整的故事。 A funny thing happened to Arthur when he was on the way to work one day. As he walked along Park Avenue near the First National Bank, he heard the sound of someone trying to start a car. He tried again and again but couldnt get the car moving. Arthur turned and looked inside at the face of a y

10、oung man who looked worried. Arthur stopped and asked, “It looks like youve got a problem,” Arthur said. “Im afraid so. Im in a big hurry and I cant start my car.” “Is there something I can do to help?” Arthur asked. The young man looked at the two suitcases in the back seat and then said, “Thanks.

11、If youre sure it wouldnt be too much trouble, you could help me get these suitcases into a taxi.” “No trouble at all. Id be glad to help.” The young man got out and took one of the suitcases from the back seat. After placing it on the ground, he turned to get the other one. Just as Arthur picked up

12、the first suitcase and started walking, he heard the long loud noise of an alarm. It was from the bank. There had been a robbery (抢劫抢劫)! Park Avenue had been quiet a moment before. Now the air was filled with the sound of the alarm and the shouts of people running from all directions. Cars stopped a

13、nd the passengers joined the crowd in front of the bank. People asked each other, “What happened?” But everyone had a different answer. Arthur, still carrying the suitcase, turned to look at the bank and walked right into the young woman in front of him. She looked at the suitcase and then at him. A

14、rthur was surprised. “Why is she looking at me like that?” he thought. “The suitcase! She thinks Im the bank thief!” Arthur looked around at the crowd of people. He became frightened, and without another thought, he started to run. 注意： 1. 所续写短文的词数应为 150 左右； 2. 应使用 5 个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语； 3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的

15、开头语已为你写好； 4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。 Paragraph 1: As he was running, Arthur heard the young man shouting behind, “Stop, stop!” _ Paragraph 2: The taxi stopped in front of the Police Station and Arthur. _ Introduction:搞清搞清原文原文剧情剧情-六要素六要素 when who where why how what 确定文章的确定文章的主体主体时态时态. 确定发生地点，激活确定发生地点

16、，激活环境环境词汇词汇. 用第几用第几人称人称叙述，确定“入戏”人物，叙述，确定“入戏”人物， 各自扮演何种各自扮演何种角色角色. 通过逻辑，确定故事发展的通过逻辑，确定故事发展的可能性可能性. 确定故事确定故事发展发展的每个阶段的每个阶段:开始的写作开始的写作部分部分. 考查点，通过以上要素，确定续写考查点，通过以上要素，确定续写内容内容. Step 1: Read for elements 情节基调 “A funny thing happened to Arthur when he was on the way to work one day”。 funny: “趣”“趣” A funny

17、 thing cause amusement, laughter, etc. (有趣的，可笑的有趣的，可笑的) a happy ending Step 1: Read for elements 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 A funny thing happened to Arthur when he was on the way to work one day. As he walked along Park Avenue near the First National Bank, he heard

18、 the sound of someone trying to start a car. He tried again and again but couldnt get the car moving. Arthur turned and looked inside at the face of a young man who looked worried. Arthur stopped and asked, “It looks like youve got a problem,” Arthur said. “Im afraid so. Im in a big hurry and I cant

19、 start my car.” “Is there something I can do to help?” Arthur asked. The young man looked at the two suitcases in the back seat and then said, “Thanks. If youre sure it wouldnt be too much trouble, you could help me get these suitcases into a taxi.” “No trouble at all. Id be glad to help.” The young

20、 man got out and took one of the suitcases from the back seat. After placing it on the ground, he turned to get the other one. Just as Arthur picked up the first suitcase and started walking, he heard the long loud noise of an alarm. It was from the bank. There had been a robbery (抢劫抢劫)! Park Avenue

21、 had been quiet a moment before. Now the air was filled with the sound of the alarm and the shouts of people running from all directions. Cars stopped and the passengers joined the crowd in front of the bank. People asked each other, “What happened?” But everyone had a different answer. Arthur, stil

22、l carrying the suitcase, turned to look at the bank and walked right into the young woman in front of him. She looked at the suitcase and then at him. Arthur was surprised. “Why is she looking at me like that?” he thought. “The suitcase! She thinks Im the bank thief!” Arthur looked around at the cro

23、wd of people. He became frightened, and without another thought, he started to run. Step 1: Read for main idea-6w questions _ , when _ was on his way to work walking along _ , he helped _ who couldnt start his car carry a _. Just at that time, a bank robbery happened and the _ street became noisy.Pe

24、ople were curious and confused. Arthur walked into _ and she mistook him for the _ because he was still carrying the suitcase. He was surprised and _ so he started to _ . One day Arthur Park Avenue a young man suitcase bank thief run frightened quiet a young woman Main plot：How would the story devel

25、op? Money or Other things Step 2: Read for the spot 核心矛盾Mind map the young man or another man Thief Not thief 矛盾身份矛盾身份 矛盾中心矛盾中心 关键人物关键人物 箱子里箱子里 所属人所属人 Young man 身份身份 可能情节发展可能情节发展 1 Money the young man thief 碰巧抓住抢劫犯（即结尾1） 2 not thief 碰巧把刚从银行取钱赶路的人当劫犯，最后 到警局传来抓到劫犯消息 3 another man thief 碰巧碰到一个刚偷了其他人钱的小

26、偷，最后 到警局传来抓到劫犯并找回银行失钱的消息， 最后在Arthur帮助下抓到另一个小偷 4 not thief 路遇一个路人帮人搬运装满钱的行李箱，而 Arthur错把路人当劫犯，最后澄清消除误会 5 Other things the young man thief 错把普通小偷当劫犯，最后帮助抓到该小偷 6 not thief 错把路人当劫犯（即结尾2） 7 another man thief 碰巧碰到一个刚偷了其他人东西的小偷，最 后到警局传来抓到劫犯并找回银行失钱的消 息，最后在Arthur帮助下抓到另一个小偷 8 not thief 路遇一个路人帮人搬运普通行李箱，而 Arthur

27、错把路人当劫犯，最后澄清消除误会 Step 2 Gather ideas 故事发展 The young man：look worried/in a big hurry/shouting behind Arthur：glad to help/surprised/frightened/quick-minded(run without another thought) Background：a long loud noise of an alarm from the bank a young man Arthur Run after Stop, stop! ? To the PS Step 3: M

28、ake predictions 故事框架 The 10 underlined key words or phrases Where (place) Who (character) What (event) Park Avenue, the bank the young man, people, the bank thief suitcase, in the back seat, loud noise of an alarm, robbery, the shouts Step 3: Make predictions 故事框架 Paragraph 1: As he was running, Art

29、hur heard the young man shouting behind, “Stop, stop!” _ Paragraph 2: The taxi stopped in front of the Police Station and Arthur. _ 顺延故事发展顺延故事发展 创意故事结尾创意故事结尾 顺延顺延 逆转逆转 1. What would Arthur do when he heard the shouting? Then what would the young man do? 2. Who would take a taxi? What would the perso

30、n say to the driver? Where would they go? 3. What would happen in the Police Station? 4. What could be in the suitcase? Who could the young man be? Beginning (character and setting) Process Climax (the main problem or conflict) Ending (a time to solve the problem / how things end up) ? Story Mountai

31、n Step 3: Make predictions 故事框架 Step 4: Draft a continuation(起草起草续篇续篇) 1.Arthur可能意识到那个年轻人就是银行小偷。可能意识到那个年轻人就是银行小偷。 Arthur might realize that the young man was the bank thief. 2.他乘出租车去了警察局。他乘出租车去了警察局。 He took a taxi and went to the police station. 3.他手里提着箱子，跳上车，跟司机说：他手里提着箱子，跳上车，跟司机说：“去警察局。在我后面叫喊的那去警察局

32、。在我后面叫喊的那 个人是银行小偷。个人是银行小偷。” With the suitcase in hand, he jumped into the taxi and said to the driver, “Go to the police station, please. The man shouting behind me is the bank thief! 4.Arthur告诉警察在告诉警察在Park Avenue发生了什么。发生了什么。 Arthur told the police what had happened on Park Avenue. 5.结果证明那个年轻人就是银行小偷

33、，而且箱子里装着一大笔钱。结果证明那个年轻人就是银行小偷，而且箱子里装着一大笔钱。 It turned out that the young man was the bank thief, and there was a large sum of money inside the suitcase. 6.人们很高兴抢劫犯被抓住了。人们很高兴抢劫犯被抓住了。 People were happy that the robber was caught. Step 5: Polish your writing Add some details Use different structures Use

34、transitional words 1.想想他的行为，他意识到那个年轻人就是银行小偷。（分词做 状语） Thinking about the way the young man had behaved, he realized the young man might be the bank thief. 2.他一坐上出租车就告诉司机在他后面叫喊的那个人就是银行小 偷（the moment） The moment he got into the taxi, he told the driver the man shouting behind him was the bank thief. 3.

35、 结果证明那个年轻人就是银行小偷，而且箱子里装的就是一大 笔钱。（完全倒装） It turned out that the young man was the bank thief, and inside the suitcases was a large sum of money. Introduction: 润色润色，标出关键词，标出关键词 润色包括连接词的使用、句型和词汇的升级替润色包括连接词的使用、句型和词汇的升级替 换换 标出关键词（下划线，题型要求。在使用关键标出关键词（下划线，题型要求。在使用关键 词语时根据时态和语态的需要，可以改变动词词语时根据时态和语态的需要，可以改变动词

36、的形式，可以改变名词的单复数，但不要改变的形式，可以改变名词的单复数，但不要改变 关键词语在原文中的含义和词性。）关键词语在原文中的含义和词性。） 【Possible version 1】 As he was running, Arthur heard the young man behind him shouting, “Stop, stop!” Thinking about the way the young man had behaved, he realized the young man might be the bank robber. So, Arthur ran fast an

37、d stopped a taxi. The moment he got into the taxi, he told the driver the man shouting behind him was the bank thief and asked him to drive to the nearest police station. The driver did as Arthur asked and drove away. The taxi stopped in front of the police station, and Arthur thanked the driver and

38、 went inside. Just as Arthur was describing what had happened on Park Avenue and reporting the young man to the police, he heard a voice outside: “Help! Help!” To Arthurs surprise, it was the young man. He had followed Arthur in another taxi. It turned out that the young man was innocent, and inside

39、 the suitcases was just some clothing. Arthur felt embarrassed, but the policemen thanked him anyway. 【Possible version 2】 As he was running, Arthur heard the young man behind him shouting, “Stop, stop!” And at that same moment, Arthur suddenly realized that the young man might be the bank robber. S

40、o, Arthur didnt stop but continued to run until he saw a taxi. He stopped it, jumped in with one of the suitcases, and said to the driver, “Go to the police station, please. The man shouting behind me is the bank thief! The taxi raced away as fast as the wind. The taxi stopped in front of the police

41、 station, and Arthur told the police what had happened. Obviously, the police already knew about the robbery. They opened the suitcase and there was a large sum of money inside, as Arthur had expected. Then the police asked Arthur to describe the young man and the other suitcase. Later, with this in

42、formation, the police caught the robber. The police and the bank both thanked Arthur. People were happy that the robber was caught. 续写中常出现的问题 一一、书写书写潦草潦草，卷面，卷面涂改涂改； 二、二、上下文的上下文的连贯性连贯性差差； 三三、错词错句多，好词好句错词错句多，好词好句少；少； 四四、没有没有丰富和生动的细节丰富和生动的细节推动情节推动情节的的发展；发展； 五五、与所给短文及段落开头语的与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度衔接程度差差； 六、没有六、

43、没有使用使用5 5个或个或5 5个以上个以上原文中的划线词语原文中的划线词语，没有，没有划出划出所所 用用的划线的划线词语。词语。 Writing ：阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。 Jenny was the only child in her family. She had a quarrel with her mother that afternoon and she ran out of the house angrily. She couldnt help weeping sorrowfully when she thought of the scold-

44、 ing from her mother. Having wandered aimlessly in the street for hours, she felt a little hungry and wished for something to eat. She stood beside a stand for a while, watching the middle-aged seller busy doing his business. However, with no money in hand, she gave a sigh and had to leave. The sell

45、er behind the stand noticed the young girl and asked, “Hey, girl, you want to have the noodles?” “Oh, yes, but I dont have money on me,” she replied. “Thats nothing. Ill treat you today,” said the man.“Come in.” The seller brought her a bowl of noodles, the smell so attractive. As she was eating, Je

46、nny cried silently. “What is it?” asked the man kindly. “Nothing. Actually I was just touched by your kindness!” said Jenny as she wiped her tears. “Even a stranger on the street will give me a bowl of noodles, while my mother drove me out of the house. She showed no care for me. She is so merciless

47、 compared to a stranger!” Hearing the words, the seller smiled, “Girl, do you really think so? I only gave you a bowl of noodles and you thanked me a lot. But it is your mother who has raised you since you were a baby. Can you number the times she cooked for you? Have you expressed your gratitude to her?” Jenny sat there, speechless a