12月月考作文-读后续写讲评（ppt课件）作文复习专项-2024新牛津译林版（2020）《高中英语》必修第一册.pptx

1、12.22作文讲评作文讲评题干分析题干分析素材积累素材积累高分句型高分句型范文欣赏范文欣赏目 录目 录题干分析第一部分应用文写作（15分）66.假定你是某中学英文报的编辑Allen，收到一封署名为Worried的求助信。信中该同学向你诉说因为身材肥胖，遭到同学们的嘲笑，不能集中注意力学习。请根据以下要点给他写一封回信，内容包括：1.给予安慰。2.提供建议（至少两条）。注意:1.词数80左右；2.信中不能出现与本人相关的信息；3.信的开头与结尾已为你拟好，不计入总词数。4分4+4分语言流畅度2分 书写整洁1分框架设计（三段式）第一段：描述问题，表达安慰、理解+给你一些建议第二段：建议1+原因/影

2、响建议2+原因/影响（建议3+原因/影响）第三段：希望这些建议对你有用、美好祝愿等素材积累第二部分词汇积累提建议词汇：正常的：建议：重要的：此外：题干信息：嘲笑：集中注意力：naturalnormaladvicesuggestionsignificantimportantbesidesadditionallylaugh at sbmake fun of sbconcentrate on sth/doing sth可行性建议：和嘲笑你的同学好好沟通表达你的真实想法，告诉他们不要以貌取人。积极参与各种活动，展现自己的优点，让同学愿意和你交朋友。如果你真的超重，健康地减肥很重要，你可以规律作息、均衡

3、饮食、多锻炼等。句子翻译123To begin with have a full and frank talk with your classmates about how you feel and tell them not to judge a book by its cover,which is a wise way to let your dark thoughts out.Additionally,take part in more activities in class and show yourself bravely,and your classmates will find

4、you a good person to make friends with.Most importantly,if you are dangerously overweight,it is very important that you should try to lose weight properly.高分句型第三部分美化句子例：你应该均衡饮食以及多锻炼。You should have a balanced diet and get plenty of exercise.亮点句型1：It is of great importance/significance that you shoul

5、d have a balanced diet and get plenty of exercise.亮点句型2：Personally,it would be wise of you to have a balanced diet and get plenty of exercise.亮点句型3：I strongly suggest/advise/recommend that you have a balanced diet and get plenty of exercise.亮点句型4：Why dont you have a balanced diet and get plenty of e

6、xercise?=Why not have a balanced diet and get plenty of exercise?范文欣赏第四部分范文赏析Hi,Worried,Im sorry to know that youre having such a bad time at the moment.I definitely understand how you feel.Such problems are quite normal.Perhaps the following suggestions are helpful.To begin with,have a full and fra

7、nk talk with your classmates about how you feel and tell them not to judge a book by its cover,which is a wise way to let your dark thoughts out.Additionally,why not take part in more activities in class？Show yourself bravely so that your classmates will find you a good person to make friends with.M

8、ost importantly,if you are dangerously overweight,it is of great importance that you should try to lose weight properly.Of course,dont turn to extreme methods to slim down quickly.You should have a balanced diet and get plenty of exercise.I hope youll soon feel happy and carry on as normal.Yours,All

9、en12.22读后续写讲评读后续写讲评原文分析第一部分 Peter woke up early in the morning.He went downstairs in a hurry and started to have his breakfast as quickly as possible.“Why are you in such a hurry,early bird?”Mum asked him.“We will have an English spelling test today,Mum,”Peter said.“Mr.White promised to offer prizes

10、 to those who get 100 scores.Ive been studying the word list since last week.Although the words are difficult,I am well prepared for them.”Peter reviewed the spelling of each word once more carefully when Dad drove him to school.At last,it was time for the students to have a test.“Responsibility,”Mr

11、.White started.Peter wrote it on his test paper quickly and confidently.“The second word:contribution,”Mr.White said.“So easy,”Peter thought.He quickly wrote the word down.Thirty words later,the test papers were collected by Mr.White.“I am to mark your papers now,”he told the class.After marking the

12、 test papers,Mr.White said,“Three of you won a prize today for excellent test scores.Peter,David and Mary got full marks on the spelling test!”Mr.White praised them.Meanwhile,he gave the three students each a dictionary the one he liked best.Peter was so excited that he held it high when his classma

13、tes cheered.“This is my happiest moment,”Peter thought.After Mr.White gave the test paper back.Peter had a look at the words,feeling proud of his spelling.All of a sudden,the word“contribusion”confused him.It didnt seem right.Peter began to compare them after taking out the wordlist.“C-O-N-T-R-I-B-U

14、-S-I-O-N,”he whispered.He spelled it wrong.“What should I do?”Peter said to himself.“I expect my classmates to think Im a master at spelling.If I tell Mr.White one of my spelling words is wrong,Ill have to give my prize back,or Ill become an example for telling a lie.”Staring at the full marks writt

15、en on his test paper,Peter was lost in thought.After a while,he remembered a lesson Mum used to teach him,“We ought to be an honest person.”Paragraph 1:Slowly,Peter raised his hand._Paragraph 2:Peter looked around._【详解】1.段落续写：由第一段首句内容“彼得慢慢地举起手来。”可知，第一段可描写Peter举起手后，如何向老师说明自己的错误，以及老师是如何做出回应的。由第二段首句内容“

16、彼得环顾四周。”可知，第二段可描写看到Peter诚实的行为之后，大家的反应。2.续写线索：老师 同学 送词典表达 （情绪）承认错误表扬鼓励高兴素材积累第二部分词汇激活行为类举手：犯错误：给某人教训：情绪类惊讶：感谢：raised ones handput up ones handmake a mistakecommit an errorteach sb.a lessongive sb.a lessonwith surprisein astonishmentexpress ones thanksexpress ones gratitude范文欣赏第三部分范文赏析Paragraph 1:Slowl

17、y,Peter raised his hand.“Mr.White,I didntget full marks on the test.I made a mistake.”He stood up and handed his teacher the dictionary he liked best and his test paper,“I spelled contribution withs-iinstead oft-i.”Peter could feel his classmates looking at him with surprise as he walked back to his

18、 desk.Mr.White held up Peters test paper.“Class,”he said,“Peter did something ever more important than spelling every word correctly on a test.”Mr.White smiled at Peter,“He taught us all a lesson on being honest.”One possible version:范文赏析Paragraph 2:Peter looked around.He found many of his classmate

19、s were smiling at him.“Peter,I want you to have this dictionary because you set a good example for all of us,”Mr.White said.Peter took the dictionary from his teacher and expressed his thanks to Mr.White.Meanwhile,he couldt wait to show it to Mum and tell her one of his best days ever.One possible version: