高中英语2024届高考读后续写指导（不要重复同样的错误）.doc

1、高考英语读后续写指导不要重复同样的错误【读后续写原文本】一、文本分析01.Read for vocabulary2.2 demonstrate示范，演示5.2 grab抓住，grabbing, grabbed5.3 make ones way前进，前行6.1 issue问题6.2 tip over倾倒，翻倒6.2 significant重要的6.3 storm off愤然离开02.Read for appreciation1.1 I stood in the restaurant kitchen, my eyes wide, arms hanging awkwardly, ready to w

2、ork but unsure of what to do.分句1：独立主格结构分句2：独立主格结构分句3：形容词短语做状语3.2 he shouted, his voice sharp with urgency. 独立主格结构3.2-3 My hands, slippery with bubbles from the bowl I was washing, nearly let it slip through my fingers. 形容词短语作后置定语6.1-2 A nearly full cup of beer had tipped over, creating a small lake

3、on the floor. 悬垂结构：分词短语做状语二、写作分析（一）运用好三条线：1.人物线：梳理原文本中出现的所有人物，并根据情节推导确定出场人物。Aaron(my manager)workmate2.地点线：梳理原文本中出现的所有地点，并根据情节推导确定续写情节可能发生的地点。restaurantkitchen3.情感线：运用情感线构思情节，可以丰富情节内容，并使语言更加生动。（二）逆推法+情感线推导丰富故事情节在构思两段话的情节时，借助逆推法，通过续写文本第二段首句推导续写文本第一段末句的可能情节，以达成两段话的相互衔接。同时，要结合情感线索进行续写情节的合理推导，使续写文本的文字更加

4、生动。01.续写第一段情节推导情节三：“我”去清理桌下的水渍（连续的动作描写）情节一：Aaron指责“我”粗心大意（情感线：生气）情节二：“我”向Aaron道歉（情感线：怯懦胆怯）02.续写第二段情节推导情节一：“我”的心理活动情节二：“我”和Aaron的互动（情感线：我道歉-Aaron安慰）情节三：结局：Aaron的话成为“我”人生的一盏明灯03.注意事项为了在情节合理的基础上使文本词汇和句法结构运用的更加高级，需有意识的加入人物的情感描写和动作描写，这样才能把高级句式结构充分发挥出来。（三）利用原文本已知信息增强续写文本的逻辑性要充分挖掘原文本中的已知信息，对续写文本进行逻辑衔接。01.续

5、写第一段原文本第一段指明英语是我的第二外语，因此我的英语水平是比较蹩脚的Aaron要求作者do remember to check every detail；续写文本中“我”犯错后Aaron生气地重复了这句话。 02.续写第二段续写文本第二段提及“我”在思考Aaron的话，因此续写部分的结尾部分可以提升主题：Aaron的话一直鞭策和指引自己一路前行。三、范文示例01Paragraph1I had just rushed out when I found Aaron standing in my way. “Cant you do anything right?” He stared at me

6、, with his eyes burning with great fury. With the dry rags hidden behind, I bit my lips, uttering an apology in a low voice. Dead silence enveloped the whole room. Aaron urged me to do my task, adding again, “do remember to check every detail!” I dashed as if on wings towards the mess under the tabl

7、e without hesitation, went down on my knees and absorbed the small lake with the dry rags. (81 words)译文第一段：我刚冲出去，就发现亚伦挡了我的路。“你真是成事不足，败事有余！”他瞪着我，眼睛里充满了怒火。我把干布藏在背后，咬着嘴唇，低声道歉。死一般的寂静笼罩着整个房间。亚伦催促我完成任务，并再次补充道:“一定要记得检查每一个细节!”我就像插了翅膀一样，毫不犹豫地奔向桌子底下那堆乱糟糟的东西，双膝跪在地上，用干抹布吸干了那一小片水。02Paragraph2After cleaning up th

8、e mess, I reflected on Aarons words. “Its really my mistake not to take Aarons words seriously!” I murmured, memories of my work flashing through my mind. I inched towards Aaron and apologized to him for my mistake and ignorance of his words, mustering the strength for each word. Aaron looked into m

9、y eyes, saying softly, “Its not uncommon to make mistakes, but do remember not to repeat the same one!” In my ears echoed his words, which became a motto for my life, guiding me like a lighthouse. (82 words)译文第二段：收拾完残局后，我回想起亚伦的话。“没有把亚伦的话当真是我的错!”我喃喃地说，工作的记忆在我脑海里闪过。我慢慢走向亚伦，为我的错误和对他的话的无知向他道歉，鼓起勇气说出每一个字

10、。亚伦看着我的眼睛，轻声说:“犯错误并不罕见，但请记住不要重复同一个错误!”他的话在我耳边回响，成为我一生的座右铭，像灯塔一样指引着我。【示范作文解析】利用各种高级表达提升语言的丰富性：1.with his eyes burning with great fury运用无灵主语+独立主格结构2.uttering an apology in a low voice. 低声道歉3.Dead silence enveloped the whole room. 运用无灵主语结构，其中envelop是动词，意为“包裹，包围”4.dashed as if on wings towards the mess

11、under the table 比喻修辞，“像插了翅膀一样”5.without hesitation毫不犹豫地6.went down on my knees 跪下7.I murmured, memories of my work flashing through my mind.运用无灵主语结构8.inched towards用inch(v.缓慢移动)表达怯懦的情感9.mustering the strength for each word说出每个字都要鼓足勇气10.Its not uncommon to make mistakes双重否定句表达肯定意义11.In my ears echoed his words介宾短语置于句首产生完全倒装结构3