读后续写：阳光下重生-2024届高三英语写作复习.docx

1、读后续写：阳光下重生续写原文及解析续写原文（温州三模）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Have you ever been so depressed that you cant sleep? You also cant eat.You cant read.You have no friends to call up and nothing is good on TV. So you sigh, press your face down harder into your pillow, and shed a few tears.This was my l

2、ife two years ago. I had just turned 14 but already found life a struggle. As I lay in my bed one Saturday, Mom peeked(瞄)into my room to make her regular Is Emily still alivecheck.I knew that if I spent more time like this, she would begin dusting me.After suggesting a few things for me to do that I

3、 immediately rejected, Mom made her move, “Emily! Get dressed! Im taking the dog out for a walk, and youre coming with me! Why? I protested.Because itll make you feel better.”The thought of moving was unbearable.I felt as if all of my body parts were weighed down by tons of bricks. I couldnt remembe

4、r the last time I had gone outside. Somehow I found the strength to slip on a pair of jeans and a black sweat shirt. Mom was waiting at the door,leash in hand and dog at her side.Then, we stepped outside. It was a warm March day and it had been a long time since the warmth of the sun had touched my

5、cheeks.Mom led the dog and me down some dirt paths,through a big field and reached Halsey Pond. But the signs of spring had yet to appear and the scene was rather colorless throughout the entire journey.“Im tired!Its boring,Mom!When can we go home? Not yet,shed say. Mom stopped to say hi to every jo

6、gger, dog walker, runner, and bicyclist who passed us. Sometimes she would get into a conversation.They would talk about weather, dogs,and all small talk topics. She seemed happy, and was literally glowing(容光焕发). After walking for what seemed an age, Mom finally said it was time to go back.注意：1. 续写词

7、数应为150左右；2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1:When I got home, a new feeling seemed to be awakened. Paragraph 2:A new Saturday found me asking Mom if I could take the dog out. 原文解析Have you ever been so depressed that you cant sleep? You also cant eat. You cant read. You have no friends to call up and n

8、othing is good on TV. So you sigh, press your face down harder into your pillow, and shed a few tears.*主要矛盾：心情emo到失去生机，在床上网抑云。This was my life two years ago. I had just turned 14 but already found life a struggle. As I lay in my bed one Saturday, Mom peeked(瞄) into my room to make her regular “Is Em

9、ily still alive” check. I knew that if I spent more time like this, she would begin dusting me. After suggesting a few things for me to do that I immediately rejected, Mom made her move, “Emily! Get dressed! Im taking the dog out for a walk, and youre coming with me!” “Why?” I protested. “Because it

10、ll make you feel better.”*背景补充：14岁的学生，已然对生活失去兴趣。主要矛盾解决方法：妈妈带我出门遛狗可协同点：续写段落我有所好转之后，妈妈不再是“Is Emily still alive” check，而可以安心地专注于自己的事情，同时也为我的好转而欣喜。The thought of moving was unbearable. I felt as if all of my body parts were weighed down by tons of bricks. I couldnt remember the last time I had gone outs

11、ide. Somehow I found the strength to slip on a pair of jeans and a black sweatshirt. Mom was waiting at the door, leash(狗绳) in hand and dog at her side.*可协同点：后文要写到我主动出去遛狗，可以复现此处leash in hand, dog at her side的动作。Then, we stepped outside. It was a warm March day and it had been a long time since the w

12、armth of the sun had touched my cheeks. Mom led the dog and me down some dirt paths, through a big field and reached Halsey Pond. But the signs of spring had yet to appear and the scene was rather colorless throughout the entire journey.*欲扬先抑：环境暂未摆脱冬天的阴翳，与后文温暖的人与人的互动形成对比。“Im tired! Its boring, Mom!

13、When can we go home?” “Not yet,” shed say. Mom stopped to say hi to every jogger, dog walker, runner, and bicyclist who passed us. Sometimes she would get into a conversation. They would talk about weather, dogs, and all small talk topics. She seemed happy, and was literally glowing(容光焕发). After wal

14、king for what seemed like an age, Mom finally said it was time to go back.*可协同点：后文可复现此处与人交流、small talk的场景。注意：1.续写词数应为 150个左右；2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Paragraph 1: When I got home, a new feeling seemed to be awakened.情节1:具体如何有所好转。情节2: Weekday在学校的生活（与第二段段首句A new Saturday做好时间上的衔接与过渡。）Paragraph2: A new Satu

15、rday found me asking Mom if I could take the dog out.情节3:妈妈的回应情节4:遛狗的经历+感悟总结参考范文When I got home, a new feeling seemed to be awakened. The monotony of my previous days was interrupted by the simple act of walking. The fresh air and the gentle exercise had stirred something within me. I felt a slight

16、shift in my mood. The world outside, which I had forgotten in my isolation, had reminded me that there was more to life than the four walls of my room. I realized that my moms insistence on the walk was not just about physical activity, but a way to reconnect with the world around me.A new Saturday

17、found me asking Mom if I could take the dog out. This time, it was my idea. I was eager to step out into the sunlight again, to feel the warmth on my skin and the breeze in my hair. As I walked, I began to notice the subtle changes in nature that I had missed before. Buds were forming on trees, and

18、the once barren ground was starting to show signs of new life. The walk wasnt just a physical journey. With each step, I felt a little more alive, a little less trapped by my own thoughts. The dogs joyful presence also added to the experience.参考范文：ChatGPT版本When I got home, a new feeling seemed to be

19、 awakened. As I sat on my bed, reflecting on the walk with my mom and the dog, I realized that something had shifted inside me. The heaviness that had engulfed my body seemed to have lightened, replaced by a faint glimmer of hope. For the first time in a long while, I felt a small spark of curiosity

20、 about the world outside my bedroom. Inspired by my moms infectious happiness, I decided to venture out on my own. I started by opening the curtains and allowing the sunlight to flood my room. It felt like a small victory, a step towards embracing life again. I picked up a book that I had abandoned

21、months ago and began to read. The words on the pages, once meaningless and dull, now transported me to different worlds, igniting my imagination.A new Saturday found me asking Mom if I could take the dog out. Surprised by my request, she agreed, a smile spreading across her face. With the leash in m

22、y hand and the dog excitedly trotting beside me, I embarked on a solo adventure. We strolled through the familiar paths, but this time, I noticed the subtle changes. Spring had arrived, and vibrant colors burst forth from the previously colorless landscape. The cherry blossoms bloomed, sprinkling de

23、licate petals on the ground, and the soft breeze carried the sweet scent of flowers. As I continued walking, I greeted the joggers, dog walkers, runners, and cyclists just as my mom had done before. Engaging in brief conversations, I discovered that these encounters, however fleeting, could brighten

24、 someones day and create connections. The simple act of saying hello and sharing a few words brought a sense of warmth and belonging. By the time I returned home, my spirits were lifted, and a newfound sense of purpose coursed through my veins. The world outside was no longer daunting; it held endle

25、ss possibilities and experiences waiting to be discovered. I realized that even the smallest steps towards engagement and connection could have a profound impact on my well-being. That day marked the beginning of my journey towards healing and self-discovery.当我回到家时，一种新的感觉似乎被唤醒了。当我坐在床上，回想着与妈妈和狗狗一起散步的

26、情景时，我意识到我的内心发生了变化。笼罩着我身体的沉重似乎减轻了，取而代之的是一丝微弱的希望。很长一段时间以来，我第一次对卧室外的世界产生了一丝好奇。受到妈妈那种富有感染力的快乐的鼓舞，我决定自己去冒险。我拉开窗帘，让阳光照进房间。这感觉就像一个小小的胜利，朝着再次拥抱生活迈出了一步。我拿起一本我几个月前丢弃的书，开始读起来。书页上的文字，曾经毫无意义，枯燥乏味，现在却把我带到了不同的世界，点燃了我的想象力。一个新的星期六，我问妈妈我能不能带狗出去。她被我的请求吓了一跳，同意了，脸上绽开了笑容。我手里拿着皮带，狗在我身边兴奋地小跑着，我开始了自己的冒险之旅。我们在熟悉的小路上漫步，但这一次，我

27、注意到了细微的变化。春天来了，生机勃勃的色彩从先前毫无生气的景色中迸发出来。樱花开了，娇嫩的花瓣洒在地上，柔和的微风带着花香。我一边继续走，一边向慢跑者、遛狗者、跑步者和骑自行车的人打招呼，就像我妈妈以前做的那样。通过简短的交谈，我发现这些相遇，无论多么短暂，都可以照亮一个人的一天，并建立联系。简单的打招呼和分享几句话就能带来温暖和归属感。当我回到家时，我的精神振奋起来，一种新的使命感在我的血管里流淌。外面的世界不再令人生畏;它有无限的可能性和经验等待被发现。我意识到，即使是朝着参与和联系迈出的最小的一步，也会对我的幸福产生深远的影响。那一天标志着我疗伤和自我发现之旅的开始。参考范文：简单版W

28、hen I got home,a new feeling seemed to be awakened. I no longer felt the crushing weight of despair, and there was a strange lightness to my steps. At dinner, I even managed a smile, surprising both my parents. That night, as I lay in bed, the echo of laughter and chatter from the walk lingered in m

29、y mind. I realized that the simple act of stepping outside had ignited a spark within me. This spark, faint yet undeniable, promised that things might start looking up, leading right into the next part of my story. A new Saturday found me asking Mom if I could take the dog out. “Can I take the dog o

30、ut today?” I asked eagerly, surprising my mom with my newfound enthusiasm. With her nod, I grabbed the leash and felt an unexpected rush of excitement. As we walked the same paths as before, I noticed the buds beginning to bloom, and the world seemed to embrace me back. Returning home, I felt a profound sense of connection, not just to nature but to life itself. Through these walks, I learned that even in our darkest moments, there are threads of hope woven into the fabric of everyday life.