读后续写：表姐妹的和解之旅 讲义--高考英语二轮复习写作专项.docx

1、读后续写：表姐妹的和解之旅 讲义读后续写（2024年11月的金华十校高三英语）在2024年11月的金华十校高三英语考试中，续写题目聚焦于亲情与兴趣差异，考查学生如何通过细腻的描写和情感的递进来展现角色的成长与理解。故事以两位性格迥异、兴趣不同的表姐妹Norah和Anita为背景，展现了她们在陌生的环境中逐渐接纳彼此的过程。为帮助学生们更好地把握这篇续写的写作思路，我们特别总结了这篇文章的解题思路，从五感描写、动作链、情感递进等角度进行深入剖析，希望能够为大家的续写提供灵感和指导。阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Knock-knock-knock. “H

2、ello?” I called timidly through my cousin Anitas bedroom door. No answer. Theres no way she forgot I was moving in today, right? I thought. “Anita? Its me, Norah!” I called again.I had only met my cousin once a couple of years ago when Anita and Aunt Sonam had flown to California to visit. Mom had h

3、oped Anita and I would be friends. But all Anita wanted to talk about was soccer, which was practically a foreign language to me. Secretly, I had felt relieved when the visit was over.Now, I was standing in my aunts tiny apartment in New York City, and there was still no answer from Anita. I knocked

4、 again, a little louder this time. Finally, Anita opened the door. She apologized, saying she had been listening to music. But instead of inviting me in, Anita frowned at my massive suitcase.Behind her, I could see a blue beanbag chair crowded next to a bunk bed(上下铺). In my old room in California, I

5、d had a double bed all to myself, and my original artwork had covered all the walls. Anitas walls, on the other hand, were covered with posters of the U.S. womens soccer team. I didnt see any free space to hang anything else.“C-can I come in?”I asked, blushing. Anita nodded, but she barely moved. I

6、had no choice but to squeeze by her into the room. I put my stuff against the wall and Anita started bouncing the soccer ball from her foot to her knee and back again. Suddenly, her foot kicked the ball at an odd angle, and it accidentally flew toward me. “Whoops!” Anita called. “Think fast!”But I w

7、as still taking in the surroundings, so the ball caught me off guard and bounced off my shoulder. Forcing a smile, I pretended it didnt bother me. Unsure of what to do, I took out my sketchbook(素描本) and colored pencils and sat down. Just holding my sketchbook made me feel more at ease. I started ske

8、tching aimlessly while Anita went back to bounce her ball.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。第一段：Suddenly, it dawned on me that I could draw Anita in action.第二段：Anita studied the drawing carefully.解题思路与段落结构分析这篇续写以“亲情与兴趣差异中的和解”为主题，通过五感描写、动作链、以及角色的心理变化来展示主人公Norah与表姐Anita从陌生到逐渐理解、接纳的过程。情感发展遵循从“陌生与不安观

9、察与触动理解与共鸣”的递进关系，以此来增强情节的真实感和情感的层次感。主要解题思路如下：整体情节构思与段落设计第一阶段：陌生与不安情节描述：主人公Norah来到纽约表姐Anita的家中，看到的是一个充满足球元素的房间，与自己在加州的艺术房间形成鲜明对比。Norah感到不安和拘束，五感描写可以帮助传达她在陌生环境中的微妙情绪。同时，通过动作链展示Norah面对Anita冷淡反应时的无措和不安。情感递进：从初次进入新环境的紧张与陌生，到因文化和兴趣差异而产生的不适感。五感描写与动作链： 视觉：描述房间的足球海报，和墙上堆满的运动装备，营造出一种与Norah安静内向的艺术爱好形成对比的氛围。 触觉：

10、Norah推着沉重的行李箱穿过狭窄的空间，表现出她的不自在感。 听觉：描述Anita脚下足球的拍击声，增加一种运动的节奏感，与Norah的文静形成对比。 动作链：Norah轻轻敲门、低声询问、推开门，显示出她对新环境的谨慎和试探。第二阶段：观察与触动情节描述：当Anita开始踢球并要求Norah“快速反应”时，Norah被突如其来的足球弄得措手不及，但她假装不在意以避免尴尬。Norah从随身携带的素描本中找到了安慰，慢慢放松下来，开始观察表姐的动作并产生共鸣。通过五感描写和动作链的使用，展示Norah如何逐渐从陌生的环境中找到安慰。情感递进：从不安到放松，再到对Anita踢球的动作产生好奇与共

11、鸣。五感描写与动作链： 视觉：描述Norah观察Anita踢球时，注意到她动作的轻盈和专注的表情，逐渐被她的激情所吸引。 触觉：Norah手指在素描本上轻轻划动，逐渐放松，找到了属于自己的舒适区。 听觉：足球在地上弹跳的节奏声，与Norah内心逐渐安稳的情绪形成共鸣。 动作链：Norah从迷茫无措，到拿出素描本静静观察，再到手指描绘表姐的动作，表现出她情绪的逐渐放松。第三阶段：理解与共鸣情节描述：当Norah完成了表姐踢球的素描后，将画递给Anita，Anita对这幅画产生了强烈的共鸣与欣赏。她开始意识到，虽然两人兴趣不同，但Norah的绘画和她的足球一样，都是一种热爱的表达。通过Anita的

12、认可，Norah感受到一种被接纳的温暖，两人之间的隔阂逐渐消失。Anita甚至提议在房间里挂上Norah的画，象征着两人对彼此兴趣的接纳与理解。情感递进：从因共鸣而产生的好奇到欣赏，最终两人之间的隔阂被消除，达成理解与接纳。五感描写与动作链： 视觉：Anita细细打量Norah的素描，目光中充满了欣赏，展示出她对表妹的重新认识。 触觉：Anita用手指轻轻触摸画纸的质感，传递出她对画作的爱护与珍视。 动作链：Anita接过画，仔细端详，眼神流露出欣赏和尊重，进一步表现出两人关系的拉近。续写段落第一段Suddenly, it dawned on me that I could draw Anit

13、a in action. As I watched her juggle the soccer ball effortlessly, each movement was full of grace and strength. Her eyes sparkled with focus, and I could almost feel her energy radiating through every kick. I pulled out my sketchbook, and with every stroke of my pencil, I captured her determination

14、 and passion. The noise of the bouncing ball faded into the background, and all I saw was Anita, absorbed in her own world. For the first time, I felt that maybe, just maybe, we werent so different after all.语法使用： 现在分词短语：“watching her juggle the soccer ball”开篇点出动作，增强画面感。 比喻与感叹句：如“Her eyes sparkled w

15、ith focus”描绘表姐专注的神态。 动作链：如“pulled out my sketchbook, and with every stroke of my pencil”展现Norah对画作的投入，表现情绪的逐步深入。第二段Anita studied the drawing carefully. Her face softened, a look of surprise and admiration spreading across her features. “I didnt know you could draw like this,”she murmured, eyes linge

16、ring on the details. “You made me look. powerful.”Her words filled me with a warmth I hadnt expected. Anita glanced at her walls covered with soccer posters, then back at me. “Maybe we can make some room for one of your drawings here,”she suggested, her voice gentle. I felt a surge of pride, knowing

17、 that in that moment, we had found a way to connect.语法使用： 直接引语：如“I didnt know you could draw like this”展示表姐对画作的欣赏。 过去分词短语：“filled me with a warmth”表现Norah的情感变化，增加细腻感。 动作链：如“Her face softened, a look of surprise and admiration”展现Anita的内心变化与情感逐步深入。亮点分析与总结五感描写的丰富运用：通过视觉、触觉、听觉的细腻描写，增强情景感，帮助读者代入主人公的情绪和场景。动作链的逐层递进：细腻描写人物动作和表情，展现出角色之间的情感递进，使得情节更具代入感。情感的渐进递进：情感从陌生到理解，再到最终的共鸣与接纳，自然地呈现出角色的成长与心理变化。