读后续写：Emma从面对挑战到最终获胜 讲义.docx

1、读后续写：Emma从面对挑战到最终获胜 讲义读后续写阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。In the small town of Willow Creek, autumn was a season of change and anticipation. The leaves on the trees turned into a palette of gold and red, and the air carried the sweet scent of ripe apples. It was the time when the annual Harvest

2、 Festival took place, a tradition that brought the community together to celebrate the reward of the season. This year, the festival was more significant than ever. It marked the 100th anniversary, and the whole town was buzzing with excitement. Preparations were underway for weeks, with local busin

3、esses and residents decorating the streets and setting up stalls for the grand event. Among them was the Johnson family, who had been running the towns oldest apple orchard (果园) for generations. Emma Johnson, a high school senior, was particularly excited about the festival. She had volunteered to h

4、elp her family set up their apple-themed stall, where they would sell freshly baked apple pies, apple cider, and other delicacies. Emma had always been passionate about her familys orchard and the festival that showcased their hard work. On the morning of the festival, the town square was a sea of a

5、ctivity. Families and friends gathered, laughter and music filled the air, and the delicious smell of various foods wafted through the crisp autumn breeze. Emma, wearing a red checkered apron, was busy at the Johnson family stall, serving customers and sharing stories about the history of their orch

6、ard. As the day progressed, a friendly competition caught everyones attention. The towns mayor announced a new event for the centennial celebration: a pie-baking contest. The winner would not only receive a cash prize but also the honor of having their pie featured at next years festival. Emmas eyes

7、 sparkled with determination as she decided to enter the contest, hoping to bring pride to her family and the town.注意：1. 续写词数应为150个左右；2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Paragraph 1: “I need my family recipe,” Emma thought, her heart racing.Paragraph 2: The judges walked over to Emmas pie, looking serious.解题思路与段落结

8、构分析本篇续写短文围绕小镇秋季丰收节的主题，展现了Emma Johnson通过家庭传承的苹果派食谱，参与并赢得派制作比赛的故事。情节发展强调了Emma对家族传统的热爱，以及她通过比赛为家庭争光的心路历程。本文情节结构主要分为五个阶段：“突发事件情感转折紧张准备情感冲突成功胜利”，展现了主人公从面对挑战到获得成功的完整过程。在续写过程中，情感与动作的描写紧密结合，通过细腻的心理变化和竞争过程中的紧张氛围，突出了Emma的努力、坚持和成功。以下是详细的解题思路及段落内容分析。具体解题思路1.开始阶段（突发事件）：故事的前文铺垫了丰收节和派比赛的背景。在续写的第一段，Emma得知有一个派比赛即将举行

9、，她的反应是“心跳加快”，并决定参与比赛。这一时刻标志着故事情节的第一个转折点：Emma从简单的节日参与者变成了比赛的竞争者。情感与心理描写：Emma的心情从最初的平静转为紧张和兴奋，她立刻想到要用家族的秘方来赢得比赛。这种“心跳加快”和“决心”突显了她的内心动力，推动情节进入下一个阶段。2.发展阶段（情感转折）：在第一段中，Emma迅速行动，决定向她的祖母寻求家族秘方。这一动作不仅体现了她对家族传统的重视，也展示了家族对她的支持和信任。祖母将秘方交给Emma的时刻，象征着家庭之间的情感传递，以及Emma从家庭继承者转变为传承者的过程。情感转折：通过祖母的微笑和交给Emma“磨损的配方卡”的细

10、节，表达出祖母对Emma的骄傲以及她对家族传统的期待。Emma则从内心焦急转变为沉着冷静，开始用心制作苹果派。3.矛盾阶段（紧张准备）：接下来的准备过程是情节的核心部分。在比赛开始前，Emma需要快速而准确地完成她的派。这一阶段既表现了她对秘方的依赖，也表现了她在比赛中的紧张和压力。尽管准备过程中她充满焦虑，但Emma凭借家族的秘方和祖母的教导坚持了下来。紧张气氛：描写Emma的动作细节（如“快速准备”，“手指飞快移动”），表现她在有限时间内投入全部精力，同时暗示比赛的紧张气氛。4.解决阶段（情感冲突）：在第二段，评委走向Emma的派，这个时刻是情感冲突的顶点。Emma内心充满了期待与焦虑，担

11、心自己的派是否能得到评委的认可。通过评委的表情变化，逐渐引导读者进入最后的情感释放和解决阶段。心理描写：通过“心跳加速”和“慢动作感知”等描写，突出了Emma在等待结果时的紧张与期待。评委脸上“微笑”的变化，标志着情感转折的来临，为最终胜利奠定了基础。5.结局阶段（成功胜利）：最终，Emma不仅赢得了比赛，还获得了全场的掌声与荣誉。她成功地将家族的传统通过派比赛传承了下去。这一胜利不仅是个人成就，也代表了她对家庭的责任和对传统的传承。情感升华：通过描写Emma赢得蓝丝带时的“骄傲”和对家人的感激，展示了她不仅完成了自己的目标，还为家族争得了荣誉。这种情感的升华让故事在欢快和感动中结束，呼应了家

12、庭、传承和成功的主题。续写段落第一段：Emma寻求家族秘方，准备派比赛“I need my family recipe,” Emma thought, her heart racing. She quickly dashed back to their stall, where her grandmother sat proudly behind the counter. “Grandma, I want to enter the contest, but I need our secret pie recipe,” Emma said breathlessly. Her grandmothe

13、r smiled, eyes twinkling with pride. “I knew this day would come,” she said, handing Emma a small, worn-out recipe card. “Just remember, its not just about the ingredients; its about the love you put into it.” Emma rushed to the contest kitchen, carefully following every step of the cherished family

14、 recipe, her hands moving with determination.语法点使用与好处：1.定语从句（where her grandmother sat proudly behind the counter）：定语从句进一步描述了祖母的场景，增加了情节的细节感，也有助于突出祖母的骄傲和对家族传统的坚持。2.现在分词短语（her hands moving with determination）：用现在分词短语修饰Emma的动作，体现她在制作派时的专注与决心，使得情感表达更为流畅自然。第二段：评委评审，Emma胜出The judges walked over to Emmas

15、pie, looking serious. Her heart pounded as they took their first bite. Time seemed to slow down as she watched their expressions. Then, a smile crept onto the head judges face, and he nodded approvingly. “This is one of the best pies weve tasted,” he announced. Emmas face lit up with joy. The crowd

16、cheered as she was declared the winner. Holding the blue ribbon, Emma looked at her family with pride, knowing that she had honored their tradition and secured a legacy for the orchards future.语法点使用与好处：1.时间状语从句（as they took their first bite）：时间状语从句用来表示评委品尝派的过程，与Emma的内心紧张相呼应，使情节更具戏剧性。2.虚拟语气（knowing that she had honored their tradition and secured a legacy）：虚拟语气表达了Emma对家族传统的尊重和延续，突显出故事的情感升华，赋予故事更深的意义。总结本文通过对情感变化的细腻描写和情节推进，展现了主人公Emma从面对挑战到最终获胜的过程。每个阶段的情感转折都通过细致的动作、心理和对话描写得以展现，成功突出了传承与成长的主题。语法点的合理使用不仅丰富了句式，还增强了情感表达的力度，使整个故事更加生动、感人。