1、,How to mark and better a composition?,-重庆实验外国语学校杜云珠 Pearl,近年来由于环境污染和资源浪费的加剧给地球带来了沉重的负担，保卫我们唯一的家园-地球这项使命迫在眉睫。请你以中学生的身份写一份号召大家从身边的小事做起保护环境，节约资源的发言稿，提出自己的意见和看法。要求：1.字数: 80-120.开头以给出，不计入总字数。2. 至少写出两点以上解决问题的措施。参考要点：1. 提出问题。2. 提出解决措施。3. .,Lead in,What should we do today?,*Work with your group members to
2、mark one of the compositions in a group. 1. Have a clear mind about the criteria(标准） to mark a composition, and then mark the compostion step by step according to the criteria.2. Give a total score to the compositon based on the full score of 18.,*Better your composition and make it worth a high sco
3、re.(If we have time, we will do this in class. If not, do it as your homework),What are the things you have to pay attention towhen you mark a composition?,Check the handwriting (4)Check the layout(结构布局）and the beginning and the ending(3)Check the grammar(4)Check the words and sentence patterns(5)Ch
4、eck the logic (2),Criteria（评价标准）,18,Lets see how important the handwriting could be!,Handwriting,这篇作文看起来让人完全没有好心情，只得了6分。,后来仔细看这篇作文，其实写得蛮好的。但当时只给了9分。,因为太多的黑团，这篇作文只得了6分。,Have you realized that our earth is crying because of her dirty sky and smelly water? We dont have enough trees, water, oil or clean
5、 air for our future. People will surely disappear as all the things are gone. Although students cant change the serious situation completely, there are still some things for us to do to save the earth. We can start by doing the 3 Rs: Reduce, Reuse and Recycle. First ,reduce. Reduce is using less. Fo
6、r example, if you go to a restaurant , order what you can eat. Second, reuse. Reusing is using again. The clothes and the toys can be given away to others babies if your child has grown older. You dont have to buy trendy clothes because it is just a waste of money. Third, recycle. Recycling is makin
7、g new things from the old things. There are lots of things which can be recycled in our daily life., such as paper, cans, and plastic bags. So it is necessary for us to sort the garbage out. If we follow the 3Rs, well save more natural resources. Dear friends, lets take action to do it from little t
8、hings! Only when we make great efforts to save our earth, will we probably enjoy a wonderful life.,layout,Have you realized that our earth is crying because of her dirty sky and smelly water? We dont have enough trees, water, oil or clean air for our future. People will surely disappear as all the t
9、hings are gone. Although students cant change the serious situation completely , there are still some ways for us to do to save the earth. We can start by doing the 3 Rs: Reduce, Reuse and Recycle. First ,reduce. Reduce is using less. For example, if you go to a restaurant , order what you can eat.
10、Second, reuse. Reusing is using again. The clothes and the toys can be given away to others babies if your child has grown older. You dont have to buy trendy clothes because it is just a waste of money. Third, recycle. Recycling is making new things from the old things. There are lots of things whic
11、h can be recycled in our daily life., such as paper, cans, and plastic bags. So it is necessary for us to sort the garbage out. If we follow the 3Rs, well save more natural resources. Dear friends, lets take action to do it from little things! Only when we make great efforts to save our earth, will
12、we probably enjoy a wonderful life.,A good beginning and a good ending,How to give a good beginning?,Have you realized that our earth is crying because of her dirty sky and smelly water? We dont have enough trees, water, oil or clean air for our future. People will surely disappear as all the things
13、 are gone. Although students cant change the serious situation completely, there are still some things for us to do to save the earth. We can start by doing the 3 Rs: Reduce, Reuse and Recycle.,Raise a problem,提出问题,Problems in detail,Problems in detail,Problem in detail,阐述问题,Lead in body part,引出下文,T
14、ransitional Sentences(过渡句）,Let me tell you my ways to Heres my advice.Here are my suggestions.,How to give a good ending?,If we follow the 3Rs, well save more natural resources. Dear friends, lets take action to do it from little things! Only when we make great efforts to save our earth, will we pro
15、bably enjoy a wonderful life.,Coordinate with the beginning.,首尾呼应,提出倡议,Make a proposal.,grammar,common mistakes in grammar常见语法错误,Parts of speech 词性,Forms of words 词的形式,Tenses of verbs 动词时态,Wrong words 用错词,Wrong sentence patterns 用错句型,Do you know how to study English good? First, read a lot makes you
16、r vocabulary larger. Second,dont be afraid to make mistake when you are talking to others in English. Third, if you found watching English movies interesting, you can practise your listening with watching English movies without look at the English subtitles. Atlast, to make sure to practise English
17、every day.,Find the grammatical mistakes,well,Parts of speech 词性,reading,Forms of words 词的形式,mistakes,Forms of words 词的形式,find,Tenses of verbs 动词时态,by,Wrong words 用错词,looking,Forms of words 词的形式,wrong sentence patterns,make sure,Words and sentence patterns,Better words and sentence patterns can make
18、 the writing more vivid (生动的) and meaningful.,Words:Wonderful phrases ( 短语) can be used instead of common words.,1). It can make us understand the world, and it can make us feel relaxed. 2). We should keep the reading room quiet and clean.3). I try to be on time when I meet my friends.4). We almost
19、won that game.,have a better understanding of,are supposed to,make an effort,were close to winning,Words:More suitable words can also be used according to the context.,1). You cant make noise or put rubbish on the ground.,throw / drop,2). I hope my advice can be good. More people will like reading.,
20、useful/helpful,enjoy/love,3). The pictures at the fair are very beautiful.,attractive/fascinating/wonderful,Sentence patterns:Simple sentences can be put into complex sentences (复合句) for better.,1). There are many good suggestions from my readers. I dont know which one to choose.,There are so many g
21、ood suggestions from my readers that I dont know which one to choose.,2). Walking helps us keep fit. It also has great effects on cutting down the air pollution.,Walking not only helps us keep fit , but also has great effects on cutting down the air pollution.,3) My mother bought me a bagpack. The p
22、agpack is out of fashion.,My mother bought me a packpack which is out of fashion.,1.表示顺序: to begin with, firstly, first (of all), second(ly),third(ly) next, later, finally, last; 2.表示强调: also, besides, whats more, actually, in addition;3.表示并列或递进: and, as well as, bothand, not onlybut also, neitherno
23、r;4.表示选择: or, eitheror;5.表示转折: but, however, although, though, after all; 6.表示因果: because, so, therefore;7.表示条件: if , unless;8.表示对比: instead, notbut; on the one handon the other hand;9.表示解释举例: for example, for instance, such as, that is to say, in other words;10.表示结论: all in all, altogether, in a wo
24、rd, generally speaking=in general;,Logic,Review,Handwriting,Layout+beginning and ending,Grammar,Words and sentence patterns,Logic,Homework :,Better your composition and make it worth a higher score.,Thank you!,U盘、电脑坏了？教学资料不见了？以前的资料没保存？每一届重复劳动？找不到精品课件、试题、教案反思？各大文库价格昂贵？来【163文库】吧，你可以：上传分享资料赚取零用钱；创建教学空间，分类收藏存储资料；方便下届使用；
