1、WritingPhones: useful or harmful?,1. I can by using my phone. eg: I can take photos by using phones.2. We are able to doinstead of doing by phones.3. I prefer doing to doing on the phone during my free time.4. Phones are used to do more and more things, such as, , and5. Phones have many advantages.
2、For example,useful or harmful?,Playing phones takes up too much time and we dont have time for study or exercise.,We may have a bad eyesight.,When friends are having a meal together, its common for them to check their phones and people dont talk to each other .,Students stay up late and its bad for
3、their health.,People have fewer and fewer face-toface communications.,Students cheat in the exams by their phones.,Attitude is everything !(态度决定一切）,I think we shouldnt We can doinstead of doingIts harmful to doWed better doIf we, we willWe are supposed to dorather than,Attitude,We can control the ti
4、me we spend on the phones.,We can give up using phones.,Wed better communicate with others face to face instead of on the phones.,We are supposed to develop other interests such as reading or doing sports rather than playing phones all day long.,新城实验学校九年级9班同学就话题 “ Phones: useful or harmful ? ” 进行了一次
5、大讨论，请你将讨论的内容写出来。 要点提示： 1. 手机的用途及优点 2.手机的危害( be harmful to, have an bad effect on, go out of control) 3. 你对手机的态度(develop other interests, make good use of ) 注意： 1.词数80-100,开头结尾已经给出，不计入总数。 2.请不要逐句翻译，可适当发挥。,How to write?,Step 1,Step 2,Step 3,Step 4,Read the topic ( 审题 ),Write the outlines ( 列提纲 ）,Conne
6、ct the sentences (连句子),Correct the sentences (改、润色句子）,How many paragraphs are we going to write?,What do we need to write?,What do we plan to write for each paragraph?,After reading the topic,1.,2.,3.,Para2 . The body part (手机的危害),Para1 .The beginning part (手机的用途及优点),Para3 . The ending part(你的态度),Yo
7、ur writing,Whats more: besides，in addition (而且，此外） Whats worse （更糟糕的是） On the one hand.On the other hand Last but not the least ( 最后但同样重要) All in all (总的来说) In my view/opinion As we all know, Firstly, exchange your compositions. Secondly, try to find more mistakes in your partners compositions. Thir
8、dly, underline the best sentences you like. Finally, give a mark to your partners compositions according to the grading system.,中考作文评分标准(grading system) ：一类（21-25分）：写出全部内容要点，语句流畅。基本无语法和词汇方面的错误。二类（16-20分）：写出大部分要点，语句较流畅。有少量语法和词汇方面的错误，但不影响理解。三类（11-15分）：写出部分要点，语句基本通顺。有少量语法和词汇方面的错误。四类（6-10分）：写出一两个要点，且语法和
9、词汇错误较多。五类（ 0-5分 ）：基本上没有写出内容要点，语法、词汇、单词写错误较多，基本上没有通顺的句子。只写出一些单词，不知所云。,Summary,1.Four steps to write a composition.“Shall we send children to study abroad?”“Should we be allowed to surf the Internet?”2. Look at both sides of a problem, try to find ways out and solve it!,Thank you for your listening !,U盘、电脑坏了？教学资料不见了？以前的资料没保存？每一届重复劳动？找不到精品课件、试题、教案反思？各大文库价格昂贵？来【163文库】吧，你可以：上传分享资料赚取零用钱；创建教学空间，分类收藏存储资料；方便下届使用；百万教学资源供你下载；【平台地址：】,
