1、We-talk Evaluation criteria Students in writing 踩不中点，既怕 不完整，又怕太 繁琐 ContentLanguage Logic 找不到替换词和 句式 段与段关系不明， 不会用连接词 Solution: steps Read for structure and organize your writing coherently. Step3 Read for key points and rewrite them correctly and concisely. Step2 Read for theme buildestablish friends
2、hip keep friendship: maintain friendship key:sth.is importantessentialcrucialvital; sth. plays an important role in; sth. is of importance Learn from peers Tip3 巧用句型，整合关键信息。 Which version is the best one? Why? 1.Using “we-talk” is vital to making friends and maintaining friendship. (v-ing作主语） 2.“We-
3、talk” can play a crucial role in building and maintaining the friendship. (句型sth. plays a crucial role in doing sth.） 3.Despite the obstacles in establishing and maintaining friendship, “we- talk” may be of assistance. (despite引导的让步状语从句） Possible version “We-talk” plays a crucial role in establishin
4、g and maintaining friendship. correct “partnership”; “interdependent” and “happier and healthier relationship”. ) I individual partnership “We” interdependent Tip5 借助思维导图， 厘清抽象概念。 Learn from peers 1. According to their study, the more you use “we” and “us”, the happier and healthier you will be. (句型
5、 “the+比较级,the+比较级”) 2. Frequently using “we” is associated with healthier relationship and motivates individuals into a group. (将is linked to改写为is associated with; move改写为motivate) 3. The research demonstrates “we-talk”,with plenty of “we” and “us”, promotes harmonious relationships by mingling peop
6、le to a community. (将happier and healthier改写为harmonious; move改写为mingle; 借助v-ing连接主次要点) Possible version As a study reveals, “we-talk” contributes to healthier relationships, motivating individuals into a group and to rely on each other. Which version is the best one? Why? 主次要点逻辑 清晰 be helpful for: P
7、ara.3 Another advantage of “we-talk” Their research also found that “we-talk” is helpful for solving conflicts. “The primary point is that interdependence may bring about supportive behaviors and positive ideas of the partner especially important in times of stress and conflict,” according to a stat
8、ement released by Robbins lab. “we-talk” is helpful for solving conflicts. 研究结果(主要点) 解释说明(次要点) benefitbe beneficial tobe conducive tocontribute to solve:conflict:settleaddresstackledeal withcollisiondisagreementargumentdispute Possible version Support from such interdependence is beneficial to addre
9、ss collisions. Tip6 巧用限定词，省略重复信息。 Some researches show that “we-talk” not only can make relationship happier and healthier, but also can help us to deal with some conflicts between friends. Thinking：The following version combines the points in para.2 and para.3 into one sentence. Do you think it pro
10、per? Why? Tip7 概括较长段落时，各要点独立成句，以免丢失次要点。 点评：此生虽能借助“not onlybut also”句型体现para.2和para.3两段的 并列关系，且能抓住两段的主要点，但合并处理不利于次要点的整合。 要点2 要点3 Para.4 The disadvantage of “I-talk” Contrary to “we-talk”, there is “I-talk”, which refers to the frequent use of first-person singular pronouns, such as “I”, “me”, and “mi
11、ne”, when writing or speaking. Earlier this year, researchers from the University of Arizona, US, analyzed a set of data that came from 4,700 people in Germany and the US. They found that too much “I-talk” was an accurate linguistic marker（语言标记）that someone is likely to feel stressed or experiencing
12、 negative emotions. Contrary to “we-talk”, there is “I-talk”, which refers to the frequent use of first-person singular pronouns, such as “I”, “me”, and “mine”, when writing or speaking. Earlier this year, researchers from the University of Arizona, US, analyzed a set of data that came from 4,700 pe
13、ople in Germany and the US. They found that too much “I-talk” was an accurate linguistic marker( (语言标记语言标记) )that someone is likely to feel stressed or experiencing negative emotions. an accurate linguistic marker:indicate;symbolize;demonstrate;show “I-talk” indicates pressure or negative feelings.
14、Possible version stressed: tense;anxious;strained;under the pressure 研究结果(主要点) Para.5 The suggestion As you can see from the two studies, too much “I-talk” can make you feel depressed. But “we-talk” can encourage you to become more positive and create a ripple effect of healthy interdependence with
15、others. So next time youre talking to a friend, try using more “we-talk”. You may find yourself feeling more positiveand the effect it will have on your friend will have on your friend will be positive as well. As you can see from the two studies, too much “I-talk” can make you feel depressed. But “
16、we-talk” can encourage you to become more positive and create a ripple effect of healthy interdependence with others. So next time youre talking to a friend, try using more “we-talk”. You may find yourself feeling more positiveand the effect it will have on your friend will have on your friend will
17、be positive as well. 建议内容(主要点) 建议效果(次要点) 表建议:its necessaryrecommendedsuggestedadvisedproposeda must to do sth. Possible version Its advisable to use “we-talk” in the benefit of you and your friends. Tip8 巧用介词短语、非谓语动词、定语从句等语法，连接主次要点。 Read for structure and organize your writing Step3 Read for the and
18、 draw a mind map Suggestion (Para.5) Introduction (Para.1) Advantage 1 (Para.2) Advantage 2 (Para.3) Disadvantage (Para.4) 并并 列列 转转 折折 因果因果 Fill in the blanks with proper logical words “we-talk” plays a crucial role in establishing and maintaining friendship. As a study reveals, “we-talk” contribute
19、s to healthier relationships, motivating individuals into a group and to rely on each other. , support from such interdependence is beneficial to address collisions. “I-talk”, , indicates pressure or negative feelings. , its advisable to use “we- talk” in the benefit of you and your friends. 并列:also
20、; additionally; besides; whats more; furthermore; moreover; in addition to Possible version 转折:however; on the contrary; contrarily; by(in) contrast; whereas; conversely;nevertheless 结果: so; therefore; thus; hence; consequently; in consequence; as a resultconsequence Additionally by contrast Thus Step1: Read for theme & main idea Step2: Read for key points and rewrite them correctly and concisely. Step3: Read for structure and organize your writing coherently. Conclusion Assignments 1. Polish your writing with the 8 tips youve learnt. 2. Review the newly-learnt words and sentence patterns.
