1、读后续写真题解析读后续写真题解析2 0 2 1 浙 江 高 考 首 考浙 江 高 考 首 考 - 万 圣 节 南 瓜 趣 事万 圣 节 南 瓜 趣 事1分析原文2构思布局3语言润色4范文赏析目录CONTENTS2021原文分析历年高考英语读后续写真题分析01Pumpkin (南瓜）carving at Halloween is a family tradition. We visit a local farm every October. In the pumpkin field, I compete with my three brothers and sister to seek out
2、the biggest pumpkin. My dad has a rule that we have to carry our pumpkins back home, and as the eldest child I have an advantage I carried an 85-pounder back last year.原文分析原文分析介绍万圣节的传统：带最大的南瓜回家。介绍万圣节的传统：带最大的南瓜回家。由compete with， the biggest判断人物情感：人物情感：excitedThis year, it was hard to tell whether my p
3、rize or the one chosen by my 14-year-old brother, Jason, was the winner. Unfortunately, we forgot to weigh them before taking out their insides, but I was determined to prove my point. All of us were hard at work at the kitchen table, with my mom filming the annual event. Im unsure now why I thought
4、 forcing my head inside the pumpkin would settle the matter, but it seemed to make perfect sense at the time.原文分析原文分析讲述了比赛的过程。讲述了比赛的过程。通过这些细节词可以得知我当时的情感是通过这些细节词可以得知我当时的情感是competitiveWith the pumpkin resting on the table, hole uppermost, I bent over and pressed my head against the opening. At first I
5、 got jammed just above my eyes and then, as I went on with my task, unwilling to quit, my nose briefly prevented entry. Finally I managed to put my whole head into it, like a cork (软木塞) forced into a bottle. I was able to straighten up with the huge pumpkin resting on my shoulders.原文分析原文分析讲述了我为了证明我的
6、南瓜讲述了我为了证明我的南瓜大把头伸进南瓜里面的过程。大把头伸进南瓜里面的过程。捕捉细节词，可以得知我的情感是捕捉细节词，可以得知我的情感是excitedMy excitement was short-lived. The pumpkin was heavy. “Im going to set it down, now,” I said, and with Jason helping to support its weight, I bent back over the table to give it somewhere to rest. It was only when I tried t
7、o remove my head that I realized getting out was going to be less straightforward than getting in. When I pulled hard, my nose got in the way. I got into a panic as I pressed firmly against the table and moved my head around trying to find the right angle, but it was no use. “I cant get it out!” I s
8、houted, my voice sounding unnaturally loud in the enclosed space.原文分析原文分析故事的转折故事的转折捕捉细节词，可以得知我的情感是捕捉细节词，可以得知我的情感是panicked。Paragraph 1 ：I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer. _Paragraph 2 ：That video was posted the day before Halloween._原文分析原文分析根据下面的推断，本段应该是我的头根据下面的推断，本段应该是我的
9、头被拔出来的过程。被拔出来的过程。表明上一段落我的头被卡在南瓜中的的过程被拍下了视表明上一段落我的头被卡在南瓜中的的过程被拍下了视频。侧面反映上一段我的头应该是从南瓜里弄出来了。频。侧面反映上一段我的头应该是从南瓜里弄出来了。最后一句的主旨升华。最后一句的主旨升华。222021构思布局历年高考英语读后续写真题分析02Paragraph 1Paragraph 1 ：I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer.I can not breath.My mother came to help me .She undo m
10、y rubber band to make more room for breath.Eventually I was rescued.Paragraph 2Paragraph 2 ：That video was posted the day before Halloween.The post gain too much shares and likes.I was embarrassed.He learn a lesson.look before you leap222021语言润色历年高考英语读后续写真题分析03句子润色1. 我还记得我是怎么获救的。I still remembered h
11、ow I got rescued. Be/get rescued句子润色2. 我在南瓜里面焦急的快不能呼吸了。I cant breath in the pumpkin with anxiousness.The air inside the hollow vegetable was full of my anxious breath.The hollow vegetable句式升级句式升级句子润色3. 当看到发生了什么，焦急又害怕，妈妈放下手机，向我走来。When my mother see what happened, she laied down her phone, and walked
12、towards me, anxiously and fearfully.Upon seeing what had happened, overwhelmed with anxiety and fear, mom laid down her phone and approached towards me in a flash. Upon seeing what had happenedlaid down her phone动词的替换动词的替换句子润色4. “不要用尽你的氧气！“她喊道，把我的头进一步推进南瓜里，这样她就可以伸进去解开我头上的橡皮筋。“Dont use up all your ox
13、ygen!” she shouted, and push my head farther into the pumpkin so that she could reach in and undo my rubber band.“Dont use up all your oxygen!” she cried, pushing my head farther into the pumpkin so that she could reach in and undo my rubber band. Push ones head farther intoundo my rubber band非谓语动词结
14、构替换非谓语动词结构替换句子润色5. 只有当妈妈给我留出足够的空间时，我才成功地走出困境，尽管我的下巴和鼻子都很痛。When mom spared enough space for me, I manage to get out of it successfully, though my chin and nose were full of pain.Only when mom spared enough space for me did I manage to get out of it successfully, though my chin and nose were full of p
15、ain. my chin and nose were full of painmanage to get out of倒装句替换倒装句替换句子润色6. “我成功了！”我松了一口气。我14岁的弟弟杰森站在我面前，我才意识到他一直在拍视频。“I made it!” I let out a cry of relief. My 14-year-old brother, Jason, standing in front of me, then I realized hed been filming the whole time.“I made it!” I let out a cry of relief
16、. My 14-year-old brother, Jason, standing in front of me, it was only then that I realized hed been filming the whole time.I made itlet out a cry of relief强调句升级强调句升级句子润色7. 令人惊讶的是，这段视频获得了数十万次的浏览量。Surprisingly, the video gained hundreds of thousands of views.Surprisingly, it became a hit that the vide
17、o started racking up hundreds of thousands of views. To ones surprise surpriselyhundreds of thousands of viewsstarted racking up句子润色8. 一开始，当我被认出是视频中的那个人时，我几乎无法控制自己的尴尬。At the very beginning, I could hardly contain my embarrassment when I was recognized as the one in the video.At the very beginning, h
18、ardly could I contain my embarrassment when I was recognized as the one in the video. At the very beginningcontain my embarrassment倒装句的升级倒装句的升级Hardlywhen; no sooner than句子润色9. 然而，随着时间的流逝，我的生活又回到了正轨。However, with time trickling by, my life was back on track. with time trickling byBe back on track句子润色
19、11. 每当我想起头被南瓜卡住的那一天，我都忍不住大笑起来。Whenever I thought about the day when I got my head stuck in a pumpkin, I couldnt help but laugh out loud.Whenever I thought about the day on which I got my head stuck in a pumpkin, I couldnt help but laugh out loud. couldnt help but laugh out loud非限制性定语从句替换非限制性定语从句替换句子
20、润色10. 尽管万圣节南瓜雕刻是一个家庭传统，但是第二年则是一个更加庄重的节日。Though pumpkin carving at Halloween was a family tradition, the following year was a more sedate affair.A family tradition as pumpkin carving at Halloween was, the following year was a more sedate affair. pumpkin carving at Halloweenmore sedate affair状语从句的倒装状语
21、从句的倒装句子润色12. 我想说我吸取了教训-三思而后行！I would say I learned my lesson look before you leap!look before you leap222021范文赏析历年高考英语读后续写真题分析04续写赏析It was five or six minutes though it felt much longer. I still remembered how I got rescued. The air inside the hollow vegetable was full of my anxious breath. Upon see
22、ing what had happened, overwhelmed with anxiety and fear, mom laid down her phone and approached towards me in a flash. 注意介词短语的使用。续写赏析“Dont use up all your oxygen!” she cried, pushing my head farther into the pumpkin so that she could reach in and undo my rubber band. Only when mom spared enough spa
23、ce for me did I manage to get out of it successfully, though my chin and nose were full of pain. “I made it!” I let out a cry of relief. My 14-year-old brother, Jason, standing in front of me, it was only then that I realized hed been filming the whole time.注意非谓语动词的使用。学会使用常用的倒装句。续写赏析The video was po
24、sted the Monday before Halloween. Surprisingly, it became a hit that the video started racking up hundreds of thousands of views. At the very beginning, hardly could I contain my embarrassment when I was recognized as the one in the video. However, with time trickling by, my life was back on track. A family tradition as pumpkin carving at Halloween was, the following year was a more sedate affair. Whenever I thought about the day on which I got my head stuck in a pumpkin, I couldnt help but laugh out loud. I would say I learned my lesson look before you leap!写作中常用的高分句型。THANK YOU
