1、 based on whenwherewhowhathowwhyA storyElements of a storyJaneOne weekend in JulyAfter she climbed to As the night began to fallAt the break of the dayAs she picked her wayA few minutes latera lake in the forestCamp overnight/quarrel /walked away angryno path to follow/ forest far beyond saw nothing
2、/losthelplessIn the darkstop for the nightregretfulwater trickling at the distance/ sound to the streamsaw/drank/ taste berriesstrongerThe trees impossible to see her heard a helicopter happy/excited/ upsetanother helicopter/open area flag yellow blousehopeful Jane Tom lake walked climbed at a dista
3、nce stream to her great joy helicopter yellow blouseDivide the underlined words into different elementsPara. 7:But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again.Para. 8:It was daybreak when she woke up. In para.7, If Jane & Tom still didnt find each other,In para.7, If Jane & Tom finally fo
4、und each other,Possibility 1Possibility 2 she probably spent another night in the forest.In para.8, Jane was finally rescued. she may spend the second night at home/in the hospital.In para.8, Jane woke up and they shared loving words.Infer the developmentPara. 7:But no more helicopters came and it w
5、as getting dark again. Possibility 1: If Jane & Tom still didnt find each otherWhat is the darkness like? How did Jane feel/think?What could Jane do? Infer the development(Group Writing)Q2: How did Jane feel/think?(emotion) Q3: What could Jane do? (plot)Q1: What is the darkness like?(setting)upsetcl
6、imbed up a tree to flag her yellow blouse but failed.stayed in the forest for another nighttired too dark to see anythingcriedlonelymissed Tomdecided to go out of the forestfell asleepPolish the sentences1. Jane was lonely.(修辞修辞)2. It was too dark.(增加细节描写增加细节描写)3.Jane was upset but decided to go out
7、 of the forest.( as 的倒装句的倒装句)4.She wanted to climb up a tree to flag her yellow blouse but failed.(非限制性定语从句非限制性定语从句, turn out, failure)5.Jane was tired and she missed Tom.(动词动词ing形式做伴随形式做伴随状语）状语）6.She cried and fell asleep.（with 的复合结构）的复合结构）She felt excited.Overwhelmed with excitement, she couldnt h
8、elp shouting. Heart brimming with wild excitement, she hugged Tom tightly.Barely can she conceal her excitement, she hugged Tom tightly, as if they had been taken apart for thousands of years.Polish the sentencesPolish the sentences1.Jane was lonely.(修辞修辞)2. It was too dark.(增加细节描写增加细节描写)3.Jane was
9、upset but decided to go out of the forest.( as 的倒装句的倒装句)4.She wanted to climb up a tree to flag her yellow blouse but failed.(非限制性定语从句非限制性定语从句, turn out, failure) Loneliness flooded over her mind. The sun hid himself behind the mountains, making it hard to see anything in the thick darkness. Upset a
10、s she was, Jane was determined to go out of the forest. She desired to climb up a tree，flagging her yellow blouse，which turned out to be a failure.5.Jane was tired and she missed Tom.(动词动词ing形式做伴形式做伴随状语随状语)6.She cried and fell asleep.（with 的复合结构）的复合结构） Jane, exhausted and scared, lay down near a sto
11、ne, missing Tom at a distance. She fell asleep with shining tears in her eyes.时间先后：later, soon, then, with time going by, eventually, 因果或转折关系: consequently, therefore, so, however, instead, whereas(but), suddenly, on the contrary, on the other hand.递进关系 whats more ,whats worse,并列关系 Besides, meanwhil
12、e, at the same time, in addition, whats more/furthermore, Make paragraphs coherent by using transitional wordsWritingPossible version for Para.7But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. The sun hid himself behind the mountains, making it hard to see anything in the thick darkness.
13、Upset as Jane was, she didnt give up. Instead, determining to go out of the forest. she climbed up a tree, flagging her yellow blouse, which turned out to be a failure. With time going by, loneliness flooded over her mind. Jane, exhausted and scared, lay down beside a stone, missing her husband Tom.
14、 “If only he could be with me.” Jane murmured. Just at that time, she suddenly realized it was her foolish decision that made herself in trouble. she could not help bursting into tears. Soon Jane fell asleep with shining tears in her eyes.Assessment Criteria for Writing Items （条目）（条目）Levels （档次）（档次）
15、Cohesion（与所给短文和段落开头衔接融合程度）（与所给短文和段落开头衔接融合程度） Use of underlined words（下划线词汇使用情况）（下划线词汇使用情况） Content（内容的丰富性）（内容的丰富性） Accuracy of language（语法结构和词汇使用的准确性）（语法结构和词汇使用的准确性） Variety of language（语法结构和词汇使用的丰富性）（语法结构和词汇使用的丰富性） Coherence（上下文以及语句间的连贯性）（上下文以及语句间的连贯性） Writing Stepsfind elements of the narrative dr
16、aw the mind mapsummarize the main plot of the story analyze the underlined words and given sentences ask and answer questions polish the sentences handwriting1. Finish writing paragraph 8 with the help of the mind map. 2. Memorize the sentence patterns and structures youve learned in this lesson.Homework
