1、如何得高分？如何得高分？The Last DeliveryThe Micro-skills Training in writing 表达微技能：之动作、语言描写：惊讶或尴尬篇我们可以通过对人物的动作、语言、心理活动、表情和环境等我们可以通过对人物的动作、语言、心理活动、表情和环境等细节的描写以及修辞等多种方式来丰富内容，增强叙述的画面细节的描写以及修辞等多种方式来丰富内容，增强叙述的画面感和内容的厚实感。已知文本侧重描写人物的动作和神态描感和内容的厚实感。已知文本侧重描写人物的动作和神态描写，使得文章充满可读性。在续写中我们要延续这种写作风写，使得文章充满可读性。在续写中我们要延续这种写作风格
2、，聚焦人物的外在动作和内心情感的变化。为了更好地提高格，聚焦人物的外在动作和内心情感的变化。为了更好地提高表达能力，我们可以从已知文本和课外素材中积累各种好的词表达能力，我们可以从已知文本和课外素材中积累各种好的词汇和表达，通过训练不同的句型，达到表达多样化和内容丰富汇和表达，通过训练不同的句型，达到表达多样化和内容丰富化的效果。化的效果。The Micro-skills Training in writing 表达微技能：之动作、语言描写：安慰的肢体动作和语言篇I.词汇的积累：名词：complaint 动词：throw,mind,argue,bargain,settle for,strugg
3、le,trust,inquire,file,stop形容词：rich,fixed,mere,single,poor,happy,angry 副词：still,always,immediately II.词块和句的积累：1.throw a party,be of high cost,fixed price,purchase,drop.off,healthy,looking,torn,meet ones daily needs,quote,bargain with,settle for,be struggling to do.,get angry at sb.,feed oneself,inqui
4、re,file a complaint against sb.2.They wanted to maintain their high living standards so they didnt mind paying a lot for it.3.His clothes were torn,and he looked as if he wasnt even able to meet his daily needs.4.Yet,the couple argued and bargained with the porter,and finally he settled for$15.2.妻子尴
5、尬地站在那里，满脸涨得通红。The wife stood there with embarrassment,_.(运用并列句结构)Have a try 牛刀小试：句子翻译与句型转换1.又累又饿，老人在灼热的大中午再也走不动了。The old _ go any further in this heat of the noon.(运用.too.to.句型)_,the old porter couldnt go any further in this heat of the noon.(运用形容词作主语补足语)Tired and hungrytoo tired and hungry toand sh
6、e felt the blood rushing to her face The wife stood there with embarrassment,_.(运用现在分词作状语)The wife stood there with embarrassment,_.(运用介词with的复合结构)The wife stood there with embarrassment,_.(运用独立主格结构)feeling the blood rushing to her face the blood rushing to her facewith the blood rushing to her face
7、3.老人诚实的品质让妻子深受触动，脸上写满了愧疚之情。_,guilt written in her red face.(运用so.that.结构)_,guilt written in her red face.(运用So.that放句首的倒装句型)_,guilt written in her red face.(运用强调谓语动词句型)The honesty of the old porter did strike the wife a great deal So honest was the old porter that the wife was struck a great dealThe
8、 old porter was so honest that the wife was struck a great deal The wife stood there with embarrassment,_.(运用独立主格结构)the blood rushing to her facePossible version 1 Para.1The angry wife asked him,“Where is that old thief?This is our stuff.”She was about to add more contemptuous comments on the old po
9、rter when she suddenly noticed that the man was glaring at her resentfully.“Madam,please calm down.Jack is not a thief!”retorted the porter,“He is actually terribly sick and isnt able to earn enough to even have a single meal of the day.Just now,on the way to deliver your stuff,he was too weak to go
10、 any further in this heat of the noon.Despite falling down,he never forgot his promise and handed me$15,keeping telling me to deliver it as fast as possible”Possible version 1 Para.2Upon hearing this,the husband had tears in his eyes and turned to his wife.“He was hungry,he was poor,but he was truly
11、 an honest man,”the husband admitted with trembling voice.At that,the wife was struck dead with shame,heart beating painfully fast and banging against her ribs.How could she be angry with such a kind and responsible man?Like a child who made a mistake,she had no courage to look into her husbands eye
12、s.Through all these unexpected things,it eventually dawned on her that honesty has no class and she should respect everyone regardless of their financial and social status.打包读后续写高考英语作文新题型5打包读后续写高考英语作文新题型5Possible version 1 评点：妻子的傲慢与年轻工友的义愤填膺，丈夫的热泪盈眶与妻子的满脸窘迫，这些细节的描写，都使人物的鲜明的性格跃然纸上。“contemptuous”,“res
13、entfully”,“retort”,“struck dead with shame”等与情感有关的高级词汇的使用，使文章变得有血有肉，读起来津津有味。最后，妻子的幡然悔悟对文章进行了一个主题上的升华，通过人物的改变给故事画上了圆满的句号。打包读后续写高考英语作文新题型5打包读后续写高考英语作文新题型5Possible version 2 Para.1The angry wife asked him,“Where is that old thief?This is our stuff.”Baffled,the porter responded at once,“You mean Jack?He
14、 is not a thief!He is the best guy Ive ever known.”However,the wife sneered,“You must be his accomplice,or our stuff couldnt have ended in your cart.”The porter,his face flushing with irritation,retorted,“We are not thieves.We earn our living in an honest way!Actually Jack had a car accident after h
15、e set off with your shopping.Though badly injured,he anxiously called me up and handed me$15 to help him deliver it for you.”打包读后续写高考英语作文新题型5打包读后续写高考英语作文新题型5Possible version 2 Para.2Upon hearing this,the husband had tears in his eyes and turned to his wife.“Honey,we did misunderstand such an honest
16、man.We owe him a sincere apology,”regretted the husband,seeking for his wifes advice.But then came a dead silence for a while.The wife stood there embarrassed,the blood rushing to her face.Never did she realize such a poor man should be so honest and responsible.With quivering voice,the wife politel
17、y apologized and then decided to visit Jack at once.Gazing after the rich couple until they vanished from his sight,the porter smiled and continued his delivering in the sun.Amazingly,he didnt feel unbearably hot any longer.打包读后续写高考英语作文新题型5打包读后续写高考英语作文新题型5Possible version 2 评点：评点：妻子不但怀疑老人是小偷，还怀疑他的工友
18、是同谋，将故事的矛盾激化到了极致，使文章充满了张力。结尾处妻子一改之前傲慢嚣张的脾气，诚挚地道歉，并决定去看望老人。工友看着夫妻两人离去，微微一笑，似乎炎热的天气也变得没有那么热，这些描写使文章变得节奏缓慢，却又触动人心。总之，张弛有度，节奏把握得很好。另外，“baffled”,“sneer”,“flush with irritation”,“regret”,“quivering voice”,“gaze after”等与情感有关的动作神态的描写，使文章充满画面感，增强了故事的感染力，使人物形象栩栩如生。打包读后续写高考英语作文新题型5打包读后续写高考英语作文新题型5打包读后续写高考英语作文新
19、题型5打包读后续写高考英语作文新题型5 1.沈从文的创作风格趋向浪漫主义，他要求小说的诗意效果，融写实、纪梦、象征于一体，语言格调古朴，句式简峭、主干突出，单纯而又厚实，朴讷而又传神，具有浓郁的地方色彩，凸现出乡村人性特有的风韵与神采。2.沈从文创作的小说主要有两类，一种是以湘西生活为题材，一种是以都市生活为题材，前者通过描写湘西人原始、自然的生命形式，赞美人性美；后者通过都市生活的腐化堕落，揭示都市自然人性的丧失。3.从作者的描述看，作者的观察敏锐，记忆超强，对现象世界十分倾心，对大自然的声音、气味，社会上的人与事怀有浓厚的兴趣。他把大自然与社会生活称为一本“大书”，他从这本“大书”中学到了
20、许多书本上没有的东西，他在自然和社会中倾心体验，尊重生命本真的做法，并非不爱学习，而是为了更好的学习。4.不少评论家觉得沈从文擅长写景，且晴朗明澈，但是缺少深度。也有评论家认为好就好在没有深度，因为没有深度的“看”风景，其实就不为一般的社会价值所局限，这样也就抛弃了自以为是的优越感和置身事外的位置，而是在宇宙万汇的动静之中“看”。5.一次眼光看风景万物，多了一份包涵和宽容，看到的历史也就不是战争、王朝更迭之类的东西，而是千百年来凡夫俗子们的哀乐、努力和命运。它们代表了更为现实逼真的生存和价值。6.抒发的感情真诚感人，不写自己的品学兼优、勤奋用功，而是如实地展现自己的天生的野性，充满了阅读和学习“生活”这本大书所得到的欢欣鼓舞的生命体验，表现了对自然和生命无比好奇和热爱以及泰然面对一切残忍和苦难的生活观。7.学习了这篇传记让我们了解到了沈从文从小如何“读社会这本大书”，感受到他青春期的悲欢得失。由于传主生活经历的太多苦难，加上作者在回忆中不时融入淳厚的情感，让我们读来有某种沉重与辛酸，也让我们学生受到启发：对于强者，生活中的风霜雨雪也和阳光雨露一样，都从不同侧面或者以不同的方式滋润着我们的生命，现实中的曲折、坎坷、苦难可能拓展人的精神空间，让人能更加以阔大的心胸与坚强的意志，去感受生命，理解生活的意义。打包读后续写高考英语作文新题型5打包读后续写高考英语作文新题型5
