1、原来精彩的句子是这样变来的！洛阳市第二实验中学周华高三期末考试书面表达高三期末考试书面表达 假定你是李晨，你看到美国学生Tom在网上发帖，找人帮他提高汉语水平，请根据以下提示给他写一封电子邮件。1.乐意帮助；2.胜任理由；3.学习要求；4.联系方式（email地址：）注意：1.词数100左右；2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。Dear Tom,Hi,Tom.My name is Li Chen.I am a senior high school student.I am very happy to heard you need help to learn Chinese.Because I
2、am very happy to help you.At the first,I believe I can help you.Because I am good at chinese and I am a chinese.So,I believe I can help you.I very much like Chinese.I can tell you something about my Chinese learning experience.I realized the importance of chinese since I was a junior school student.
3、Every day after I finished my homework,I went to read a lot of books about Chinese.It is helpful for my chinese.Now my Chinese improves a lot.More and more students come to ask for my help.If you want to learn Chinese well.You must learning work hard.You can making a plan about learning Chinese and
4、read many Chinese books.Please consider my advice.You will find learning Chinese is very interesting.Although you are a foreigner,I am sure you can learn Chinese well.If you have question,you can write email to .I am very happy to help.Your Li Chen提要：提要：1.透析考试大纲透析考试大纲2.高考高考“书面表达书面表达”的失分原因的失分原因3.高考高考
5、“书面表达书面表达”的提分策略的提分策略命题思路命题思路通过提示内容要点（或话题）、写作要求考查考生综合运用英语完成书面交际任务的能力，即初步的英语写作能力。具体包括英语语言知识、语篇知识以及语言的组织表达能力。命题原则命题原则话题是考生熟悉的，符合高中生认知水平的，内容既有规定性又有开放性，规定写作手法和字数。“（要求考生）（要求考生）根据提示根据提示，用英语写一篇，用英语写一篇100120100120个个词词的的短文短文。提示的形式有图画、图表、文字等。提示的形式有图画、图表、文字等”（考试说明）“能写出常见体裁的能写出常见体裁的应用文应用文，例如：信函和一般通知，例如：信函和一般通知等等
6、”，“能能描述人物或事件描述人物或事件，并进行，并进行简单的评论简单的评论”（课程标准七级语言技能目标）“能根据用文字及图表提供的信息写能根据用文字及图表提供的信息写短文短文或或报告报告”，“能写出能写出语意连贯语意连贯且且结构完整结构完整的的短文短文，叙述事情叙述事情或或表表达观点和态度达观点和态度”（课程标准八级语言技能目标）字数在100120个词左右的语意连贯的结构完整的有描述、叙述和评论的英语短文短文内容、意思内容、意思形式形式写作手法写作手法（即材料的组织方法）各档次的给分范围和要求：各档次的给分范围和要求：第五档（2125分）完全完成了试题规定的任务。覆盖所有内容要点应用了较多的语
7、法结构和词汇语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致；具备较强的语言运用能力。有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。完全达到了预期的写作目的。第四档（1620分）完全完成了试题规定的任务。虽漏掉一两个次重点，但覆盖所有主要内容。应用的语法结构和词汇所满足任务的要求。语法结构或词汇方面应用基本准确，些许错误主要是因尝试较复杂语法结构或词汇所致。应用简单的语句间连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。达到了预期的写作目的。第三档（1115分）基本完成了试题规定的任务。虽漏掉一些内容，但覆盖所有主要内容。应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，但不
8、影响理解。应用简单的语句间连接成分，使全文内容连贯。整体而言，基本达到了预期的写作目的。第四档（610分）未适当完成试题规定的任务。漏掉或未描述清楚一些主要内容，写了一些无关内容。语法结构单调，词汇项目有限。有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，影响了对写作内容的理解。较少使用语句间的连接成分，内容缺少连贯性。信息未能清楚地传达给读者。第一档（1-5分）未完成试题规定的任务。明显遗漏主要内容，写了一些无关内容，原因可能是未理解试题要求。语法结构单调，词汇项目有限。较多语法结构或词汇方面的错误，影响对写作内容的理解。缺乏语句间的连接成分，内容不连贯。信息未能传达给读者。0未能传达给读者任何信息：内容太
9、少，无法评判；写的内容均与所要求内容无关或缩写内容无法看清失分原因：失分原因：分析高考和平常测试中的低分作文不难发现，作文得低分的原因一般有以下几点：1.审题失误。这主要是因为考生对要点把握不准，没有搞清时态、文体及人称。2.语言基础知识不扎实。（1）单词拼写错误太多；（2）动词用法错误多，时态，语态用法混乱，主谓不一致；（3）名词单复数及冠词使用错误；（4）词性混乱；（5）高级用法掌握不扎实导致的错误；（6）固定句式错误；（7）粗心导致的错误。3.中式英语4.语言啰嗦5.缺乏连贯性6.缺少高级句式，作文缺乏亮点。7.书写潦草，有涂改，增补现象，书写不规范。8.空白卷和抄袭现象。提分策略1.形
10、式“活”起来2.内容“实”起来3.衔接“顺”起来4.书写“美”起来1、形式“活”起来（1）同位My name is Li Chen.I am a senior high school student.【华丽蝶变】My name is Li Chen,a senior high school student.（2）并列句 My name is Li Chen.I am a senior high school student.I am very happy to heard you need help to learn Chinese.Because I am very happy to hel
11、p you.【华丽蝶变】My name is Li Chen,a senior high school student,and I am very happy to hear you need help to learn Chinese.（3）主从复合句At the first,I believe I can help you.Because I am good at chinese and I am a chinese.So,I believe I can help you.I very much like Chinese.【华丽蝶变】At first,I believe I can hel
12、p you because I am good at Chinese.I like Chinese very much.If you want to learn Chinese well.You must learning work hard.【华丽蝶变】If you want to learn Chinese well,you must work hard.As long as you work hard,you can learn Chinese well.（4）使用非谓语动词Every day after I finished my homework,I went to read a l
13、ot of books about Chinese.【华丽蝶变】Every day having finished my homework,I always went to read Chinese books as many as possible.（5）特殊句式Although you are a foreigner,I am sure you can learn Chinese well.【华丽蝶变】Foreigner as you are,I am sure you can learn it well.I realized the importance of chinese since
14、 I was a junior school student.【华丽蝶变】I didnt realize the importance of Chinese until I came into the junior middle school.It was not until I came into the junior middle school that I realized the importance of Chinese.2.内容“实”起来（1）词性多样性【示例1】Now my Chinese improves a lot.【华丽蝶变】Since then,my Chinese ha
15、s experienced a steady increase.【示例2】It is helpful for my chinese.【华丽蝶变】It helps my Chinese a lot./It is of great help for my Chinese.(2)同义词的使用【示例1】More and more students come to ask for my help.【华丽蝶变】An increasing number of people come to ask for my help.【示例2】You will find learning Chinese is very
16、interesting.【华丽蝶变】You will find learning Chinese is a lot of fun.(3)短语代替单词【示例1】You can making a plan about learning Chinese and read many Chinese books.【华丽蝶变】You can come up with a plan about learning Chinese and read more Chinese books.【示例2】Please consider my advice.【华丽蝶变】Please take my advice into
17、 consideration.3.衔接“顺”起来Dear Tom,Hi,Tom.My name is Li Chen,a senior high school student,and I am very happy to hear you need help to learn Chinese.On the one hand,I believe I can help you because I am good at Chinese.Whats more,I like Chinese very much.I can tell you something about my Chinese learn
18、ing experience.On the contrary,it was not until I came into the junior middle school that I realized the importance of Chinese.Every day having finished my homework,I always went to read Chinese books as many as possible.It is of great help for me.Now my Chinese improves a lot.Because of this,an inc
19、reasing number of people come to ask for my help.On the other hand,if you want to learn Chinese,you must work hard.You can come up with a plan about learning and read more Chinese books.Please take my advice into consideration.You will find learning Chinese is a lot of fun.Certainly,foreigner as you
20、 are,I am sure you can learn it well.At last,if you have question,you can write emails to .Looking forward to your early reply.Yours Li Chen表顺序表顺序表举例表举例表因果表因果表总结表总结表转折表转折 连接词连接词firstlydue toas followson the wholeon the contrarywhats morein shortthereforefurthermorethusfor instancein a wordowing tobe
21、sidesinsteadand so on4.书写“美”起来仔细审题仔细审题：内容、形式（文体）、词数、其他注意事项。勾勒框架勾勒框架：分几个段落，每段写什么，怎么写？（观点、举例、分析、结论）信息处理信息处理：用什么词汇、句型来表达每个信息要点？词汇丰富、句型多样,多用高级表达。完成初稿完成初稿：内容连贯、衔接自然。检查修改检查修改：语法、拼写、大小写、标点、漏字等。终稿誊写终稿誊写：页面美观、杜绝涂改、字迹清楚Jean Wyrick,2008,成功写作入门第10版（Steps to Writing Well），北京大学出版社Flower,Aaron,2007,李特-布朗英文写作手册第9版（
22、The Little,Brown Handbook），北京大学出版社Scott,Krigline,2008,高级实用英语写作（Successful Writing for the Real World），外语教学与研究出版社Naraynnaswami,2007,简明英语写作教程第3版，（Strengthen Your Writing），外语教学与研究出版社Kanar,2011,英语写作教程第5版，（The College Writer），北京大学出版社Christopher Black,2010,新SAT官方指南详解写作分册，北京语言大学出版社Sara Cushing Weigle,2010,写作评价（Assessing Writing），外语教学与研究出版社Bailey and Powell,2008,实用写作（The Practical Writer），北京大学出版社Nancy Herzfeld-Pipkin,2007,高级实用英语写作（引进版），中国人民大学出版社Ann Hogue,2003,The Essentials of English:A Writers Handbook,Pearson Education,Inc.
