1、读后续写读后续写 评分原则：评分原则：1）内容：内容的丰富性、故事发展的合理性，续写的完整性2）词汇语法：使用语言的多样性、准确性和恰当性；（语言为交际服务，不可一味使用所谓“高级”语言，要与原文语言特点保持一致。）3）篇章结构：上下文的衔接（包括续写段落之间的衔接）连贯性；4）写作规范：词数少于130的，扣2分；拼写和标点符号错误多将分数降低一个档次；如书写较差，以至影响交际，将分数降低一个档次；写作步骤：写作步骤：“四步答题法”。阅读拟稿润色成稿。Step1 阅读，理清故事情节，找出5W+1How。画出关键词，预测后续故事1.make sense of the main plots of
2、the passange.2.Analyze the two given sentences&underine key words to predict what is to follow.Step2 拟稿Draft work out an outline Step 3 Polish 润色 1.Use the key words and phrases in the passange.2.use different sentense structures.1句式要有变化句式要有变化 复合句复合句(主语主语宾语宾语表语表语同谓语同谓语定语定语状语从句状语从句)倒装句倒装句（1）否定词置于句首（）
3、否定词置于句首（2）only+状语置于句首状语置于句首 强调句型强调句型It is that(who)固定句子结构固定句子结构 tooto sothat not until not onlybut also neithernor 2要使用高级词汇及短语要使用高级词汇及短语 使用高等级词汇使用高等级词汇 He is a good student.excellentextraordinary 使用短语使用短语 I like music.be fond ofbe interested in 使用谚语使用谚语 As the saying goes,“”It goes without saying th
4、at we cannot be young forever.（适用于自编名言）（适用于自编名言）并列并列 选择选择 原因原因 结果结果 比较比较 转折转折 递进递进 举例举例 3.使用连接词，过渡自然，连贯通顺，使用连接词，过渡自然，连贯通顺，and;as well as;also;too,or;eitheror;because(of);owing to;due to;thanks toso;therefore;thus;as a resulton the contrary;compared to,but;yet;however;besides;moreover;in addition for
5、 example;such as;that is;take for example check whether the verb forms and words spelling is correct.step4 Present(成稿）Produce the final work.读后续写讲评读后续写讲评读后续写（满分25分）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。Jenny was the only child in her home.She had a quarrel(争吵)with her mother that afternoon and ran out of th
6、e house angrily.She couldnt help crying when she thought of the scolding(责骂)from her mother.Getting around aimlessly in the street for hours，she felt a little hungry and wished for something to eat.She stood beside a stand(货摊)for a while,watching the middle-aged man busy doing his business.However,w
7、ith no money in hand,she had to leave.The man behind the stand noticed Jenny and asked,“Hey,do you want to have the noodles？”“Oh,yes,but I dont have money.”she replied.“Ill treat you today,”said the man.He brought her a bowl of noodles,the smell so attractive.As she was eating,Jenny cried silently.“
8、What is it?”asked the man kindly.“Actually I was just touched by your kindness!”said Jenny as she wiped her tears.“Even a stranger will give me a bowl of noodles,while my mother drove me out of the house.”Hearing the words,the man smiled,“I only gave you a bowl of noodles.But it is your mother who h
9、as raised you since you were a baby.Can you number the times she cooked for you?Have you expressed your thankfulness to her？”Jenny sat there,speechless；she remembered her mothers familiar face.“A bowl of noodles from a stranger made me feel grateful(感激的).Why havent I thanked my mum for what she has
10、done for me?”On the way home,Jenny made up her mind to make an apology(道歉)to her mother for her rudeness as soon as she arrived home.Paragraph 1：Approaching the doorway,Jenny took a deep breath._Paragraph 2：A gentle touch on her hair called her mind back._How did she feel?what did she do?What did Je
11、nny do before her mother came back?What would she do?第一步，迅速获取故事情节（第一步，迅速获取故事情节（5W+1H)1.who:Jenny,mother,stranger 2.when:one afternoon 3.where:3.What:quarrel with her mother,a stranger gave her a bowl of noodels when she was hungry.4.Why:the strangers word reminded jenny of what her mother had done.5
12、.How:Jenny felt regretful and decided to make an apology.第二步，理清人物情感变化。第二步，理清人物情感变化Storylinehow did Jenny feel about her mother?Beginning:quarrelled,ran out(para1)angryDevelopment:astranger,a bowl of noodles(para2mean and cruelclimax:Strangers words,mothers love(para3&4)regretful&gratefullater develo
13、pment:went home(para5)?version1：Paragraph 1 Approaching the doorway,Jenny took a deep breath.When she knocked at the door,she found the door was locked and her mother was not in.Tired and sad,she sat down in front of the house.“Where could my mother be?”she wondered,“Was she still angry with me?”Aga
14、in,the scene of the quarrel appeared in her mind.She remembered her rudeness to her mother.Realizing that all the scolding from her mother was due to the fact that her mother really cared a lot about her,she felt rather ashamed,and tears began to roll down her cheeks.Paragraph 2 A gentle touch on he
15、r hair called her mind back.She raised her head and saw the familiar face of her mother.“Here you come!Ive been looking for you,”she said,tired and relieved.Jenny couldnt help throwing herself into her mothers arms.“Mum,Im so sorry and thank you for all you have done for me.”She expressed her sincer
16、e apology and great gratitude.Hearing this,her mother smiled,patting her back gently.重点单词和短语 scene场景 quarrel 吵架 rudeness粗鲁 raise 抬起 took a deep breath 深呼吸 knock at 敲门 be angry with 对.生气 due to 因为 cared a lot about 非常关心 be/felt rather ashamed感到很羞愧roll down 滚下couldnt help dong 情不自禁做.throwing oneself i
17、nto sbs arms 投入某人的怀抱 express great gratitude 表达感激亮点句型亮点句型1.Tired and sad,she sat down in front of the house.（形容词短语作原因状语）2.Realizing that all the scolding from her mother was due to the fact that her mother really cared a lot about her,she felt rather ashamed,and tears began to roll down her cheeks.（
18、v-ing 作时间状语，第一个that 引导宾语从句，第二个That引导定语从句）4.“Here you come!Ive been looking for you,”she said,tired and relieved.(作伴随状语）5.Hearing this,her mother smiled,patting her back gently.（V-ing 作时间状语，第二个V-ing 作伴随状语）Vesion2 Paragraph 1 Approaching the doorway,Jenny took a deep breath.She felt a little nervous,b
19、ut she opened the door at last.“Mom,mom.”She said weakly.However,nobody answered.She couldnt find her mother anywhere at home.She thought：“My mother had left me!”At that time,she couldnt help crying.She thought of the things her mother did for her.for example,her mother cooked for her,looked after h
20、er,washed her clothes and so on.She regretted very much now.Paragraph 2 A gentle touch on her hair called her mind back.“Oh!My baby,you had come back.I went out to find you.Are you crying?What happened?”Her mother said.She looked at the familiar face and smiled.She hugged her mother and said:“Mom,Im
21、 so sorry.I should make an apology for my rudeness to you.I shouldnt quarrel with you.Mom.I love you.Thanks for all the things you did for me.”“Im very happy that you can understand me.My dear,I love you forever.”Her mother said warmly.On that afternoon,she grew up.重点单词和短语 weakly regret hug couldnt
22、help make an apology for grow up亮点句型亮点句型1.She felt a little nervous,but she opened the door at last.（but连接的并列句）连接的并列句）2.She thought of the things her mother did for her.（省略（省略that 的定语从句）的定语从句）3.Im very happy that you can understand me（Be+表情感的表情感的adj+that 宾语从句）宾语从句）课堂练习课堂练习 第二节读后续写 阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开
23、头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。My brother and I were alone at home because my parents had gone for a meeting and they had left me in charge.I was doing my homework while my younger brother was watching TV.Suddenly the doorbell rang.My younger brother rushed to the door thinking that our parents had
24、 come home;he unlocked the door and opened it.Outside stood a tall man wearing a black raincoat and black rubber boots.He said he was a salesman and asked politely if our mother or father was at home Without thinking,my brother said:“No.”He asked if we would like to buy some comic books which he was
25、 selling.I quickly explained that we were not supposed to buy anything without our parents permission.Then,as I was about to close the door,he forced his way into our house.He took out a knife and forced me to tie up my brothers hands with some rope which he took out from his pocket.I tied up his ha
26、nds but tied them in a special way so my brother could untie himself.The man then tied my hands up and locked both of us in the kitchen.Soon,he went upstairs to search the bedroom for valuables.I managed to teach my brother to untie the rope on his hands.He then untied me.I rushed to the telephone t
27、o call the police,but the line was dead.One possible version:The doors were all locked from the outside and what was worse,I did not have the keys.But luckily,the man forgot to lock the kitchen window.Both my brother and I managed to get out of the house through the window and we ran to the nearby p
28、olice station and asked them for help.The police arrived at our house as soon as possible.And as a result,the man was caught.Just at the same time our parents came back home.The police asked my family to go to the police station.It was at there that the police told us the man was a wanted robber pre
29、tending to sell comic books and that they had been looking for him for a long time.The police praised my brother and me for our brave behaviour.After we went back home,I told my parents the whole story about the robbery.They were thankful that we were not hurt but they scolded me for not stopping my brother from opening the door to strangers.I learned a lesson on safety and responsibility.
