1、如何提高书面表达句子的档次如何提高书面表达句子的档次Welcome to our school Now students in China celebrate their birthdays in many ways.Usually,a party is held.Best friends and relatives will come to the party.They usually buy a gift.They show their best wishes.Sometimes,people send short messages too and it is becoming very
2、popular.But I think that its better to help other people.We know that its important to learn to help other people.Helping other people can do us a lot of good.People will help you because youve helped them and youll be happy学生作品（学生作品（1 1）学生作品（学生作品（2 2）学生作品（学生作品（2 2）1.1.要点齐全要点齐全2.2.较多的语法结构和较多的语法结构和高级
3、高级词汇词汇 3.3.全文结构紧凑全文结构紧凑 1.There was an accident happened to two students2.in our school yesterday afternoon.(典型病句）典型病句）There was an accident that happened to two students in our school yesterday afternoon.(定语从句）定语从句）An accident occurred to two students in our school yesterday afternoon.（高级词汇）（高级词汇）A
4、n accident happened to two students in our school yesterday afternoon.2.Tian Li and Duan Kai were riding bikes side by3.side on the way home after school.They were4.talking and laughing loudly.(陈蝉陈蝉)Tian Li and Duan Kai were riding bikes side by side on the way home after school,talking and laughing
5、 loudly.（用分词合并）（用分词合并）3.The traffic lights turned red.They found it4.was too late to stop the bikes.The lights turned red,but they found it was toolate to stop their bikes.(黄颖黄颖)（用连接词连接）（用连接词连接）Seeing the red traffic lights,they tried to stop but it was too late.（用分词合并）（用分词合并）4.Ones left arm was hur
6、t and the others leg was hurt too.(戴靓戴靓)Ones left arm was broken while the others leg got hurt.(边昶边昶)(避免用相同结构和词汇）（高级连词）避免用相同结构和词汇）（高级连词）One had his left arm broken while the other gothis leg hurt./the other was badly hurt in the leg.)(高级结构）高级结构）They were knocked off their bikes,one with theleft arm
7、broken,and the other with one leg hurt.(高级介词短语高级介词短语/独立主格结构）独立主格结构）(昭昭昭昭)5.If we dont obey traffic rules,we might die.a.If we go against traffic rules,we might lose our lives.b.If we go against traffic rules,we might end up in hospital.c.Going against traffic rules might cost us our lives.d.Dont ris
8、k our lives going against traffic rules.(多种表达）多种表达）6.He got up at 7 oclock.（）It was not until 7 oclock that he got up.Not until 7 oclock did he get up.(强调句）强调句）（倒装句）（倒装句）He didnt get up until 7 oclock.1.I had a good idea.a.A good idea occurred to me.b.I came up with a good idea.2.Dont worry.Well try
9、 to help you.make every effort to,make great efforts tospare no efforts to,try every means todo all we can to,do what we can to多种表达多种表达&高级词汇高级词汇Practice:1.There are 80%of the population live on farming.2.At 8 this morning,there were about 50 American students came to visit our school.80%of the popul
10、ation live on farming.At 8 this morning,about 50 American students came to visit our school.Practice:（用分词合并）（用分词合并）1.He had finished his homework.2.He went out to play football.3.2.I was moved by his words.I decided to lend3.him a hand.Moved by his words,I decided to lend him a hand.Having finished
11、his homework,he went out to play football.Practice:（用连接词连接）（用连接词连接）1.The police searched everywhere.The missing2.boy could not be found.The police searched everywhere,but the missing boy could not be found.Though the police searched everywhere,the missing boy could not be found.Practice:(避免用相同结构和词汇）
12、避免用相同结构和词汇）1.I like sports.I like music,too.a.I like sports and music as well.b.I like sports as well as music.2.My favorite subject is English while my sisters favorite subject is history.a.My favorite subject is English while my b.sisters is history.b.My favorite subject is English while my sister
13、 likes history best.My old grandfather fell asleep in the sofa.He had a book on his knees.Practice:（用介词短语）（用介词短语）My old grandfather fell asleep in the sofa with a book on his knees.提高句子档次的小结：提高句子档次的小结：1.1.用分词短语合并句子用分词短语合并句子 用介词短语合并句子用介词短语合并句子 用独立主格结构合并句子用独立主格结构合并句子 用连接词连接句子用连接词连接句子2.2.用高级结构和词汇用高级结构和
14、词汇3.3.用定语从句、主语从句、强调句、倒装句用定语从句、主语从句、强调句、倒装句4.4.用不同结构和词汇用不同结构和词汇 An accident happened to two students in our school yesterday afternoon.School was over.Tianli and Dunkai from Grade 1 were going home by bike.They were talking and laughing happily.When they saw a car which was passing by,they started to
15、 run after it.They thought it was very interesting.The bus stopped when the traffic light turned red.The two students were very close to the bus and they couldnt stop their bikes in time.They fell off the bikes.Tianli broke his left arm and Dunkai hurt his leg.(学生作文）学生作文）An accident happened to two
16、students in our school yesterday afternoon.School was over.Tianli and Dunkai from Grade 1 were going home by bike.They were talking and laughing happily.When they saw a bus which was passing by,they started to run after it.They thought it was very interesting.The bus stopped when the traffic light t
17、urned red.The two students were very close to the bus and they couldnt stop their bikes in time.They fell off the bikes.Tianlis broke his his left arm and Dunkai hurt his leg.An accident happened to two students in our school yesterday afternoon.School was over.Tianli and Dunkai from Grade 1 were go
18、ing home by bike.They were talking and laughing happily.An accident occurred to two students in our schoolyesterday afternoon.After school was over,Tianli and Dunkai from Grade 1 were on their way home by bike,talking and laughinghappily.When they see a bus which was passing by,they started to run a
19、fter it.They thought it was very interesting.The bus stopped when the traffic light turned red.Seeing a passing car,they started to chase it,thinking it great fun.Unfortunately,the bus stopped the moment the traffic light turned red.The two students were very close to the bus and they couldnt stop t
20、heir bikes in time.They fell off the bikes.Tianlis broke his his left arm and Dunkai hurt his leg.The two students were so close to the bus that theywere not able to stop their bikes in time.As a result,they were knocked off the bikes,one with his left arm broken and the other with his leg hurt.An a
21、ccident occurred to two students in our school yesterday afternoon.After school was over,Tianli and Dunkai from Grade 1 were heading home by bike,talking and laughing happily.Seeing a passing bus,they started to chase it,thinking it was great fun.Unfortunately,the bus stopped the moment the traffic
22、light turned red.The two students were so close to the bus that they were not able to stop their bikes in time.As a result,they were knocked off the bikes,one with his left arm broken and the other with his leg hurt.(95 words)Now students in China celebrate their birthdays in many ways.Usually,a par
23、ty is held.Best friends and relatives will come to the party.They usually buy a gift.They show their best wishes.Sometimes,people send short messages too and it is becoming very popular.But I think that its better to help other people.We know that its important to learn to help other people.Helping
24、other people can do us a lot of good.People will help you because youve helped them and youll be happyImprove this composition,try!Improve this composition,try!(1)Now students in China celebrate their birthdays in many ways.(2)Usually,a party is held.Best friends and relatives will come to the party
25、.（用（用where定语从句）定语从句）(3)They usually buy a gift.They show their best wishes.（和并句子）（和并句子）(4)Sometimes,people send short messages too and it is becoming very popular（用（用which定语从句）定语从句）.(5)But(替换）替换）I think（替换）（替换）that its better to help other people.(6)We know that its important to learn to help others
26、.Helping other people can do us a lot of good.(7)People will help you in return and youll be happy（用（用For one thing,For another 替换）替换）.Nowadays students in China celebrate their birthdays in various ways.Usually,a party is held where best friends as well as relatives can get together and have fun.Th
27、ey usually buy a small gift with which to express their best wishes.Sometimes,people send short messages too,which is becoming very popular.However,as far as Im concerned,its better to do something for others.As is known to all,its of importance to help others.Helping others on ones birthday can be
28、not only meaningful but also do you a lot of good.For one thing people will help you in return;for another,youll get happiness out of that.Nowadays students in China celebrate their birthdays in various ways.Usually,a party is held where best friends as well as relatives can get together and have fu
29、n.They usually buy a small gift with which to express their best wishes.Sometimes,people send short messages too,which is becoming very popular.However,as far as Im concerned,its better to do something for others.As is known to all,its of importance to help others.Helping others on ones birthday can be not only meaningful but also do you a lot of good.For one thing people will help you in return;for another,youll get happiness out of that.In short,the best way to celebrate our birthdays is to help others.Thank you!
