1、 中考“新冠肺炎类”作文讲解书面表达云南师大附中呈贡校区2020届英语备课组高分写作五要素1.结构：三段式（Hamburger writing）第一段：背景介绍（提出观点）：简单明了，开门见山第二段：故事发展：叙述事件，论证观点第三段：总结观点：不照抄，有升华，有希望，提建议2.要点：全面，围绕中心3.逻辑：运用逻辑过渡词（递进，转折的，总结等）4.语法:词法（用词准确；名词单复数；形副修饰关系；）句法（时态一致；主谓一致；语态；三单；被动）5.亮点：高级词汇，词组，句型；个人情感升华高分写作：三段四步法1.三段：三段式写作2.四步：（1）审题（主题，体裁，时态，人称，内容）（2）打草稿（规避
2、错误，锤炼语言）（3）正文写作（凝练文章，调整词句）（4）检查：a.查内容：内容完整，不遗漏 b.查语法：名词单复数；冠词、介词缺失；时态；语态；三单等；c.变句式新冠肺炎类书面表达讲解与分析An Unexpected Spring Festival2020年1月24日是中国的传统节日一春节，但受新型冠状病毒肺炎的影响，今年全国上下都笼罩在疫情的阴影下，过着一个非比寻常的春节，请以“An Unexpected Spring Festival”为题，记录你度过的这个特殊春节。提示:novel coronavirus pneumonia 新型冠状病毒肺炎 outbreak爆发mask口罩medic
3、al observation at home居家医学观察要求:1.语言流畅、书写规范、卷面整洁，词数不少于60个；2.文中不得使用你的真实姓名、校名，否则以零分计；3.书面表达必须写在答题卡上，如在本卷上作答，一律不得分。新冠肺炎类表达解析：审题An Unexpected Spring Festival2020年1月24日是中国的传统节日一春节，但受新型冠状病毒肺炎的影响，今年全国上下都笼罩在疫情的阴影下，过着一个 非比寻常的春节，请以“An Unexpected Spring Festival”为题，记录你度过的这个特殊春节。提示:novel coronavirus pneumonia 新型
4、冠状病毒肺炎 outbreak爆发mask口罩medical observation at home居家医学观察要求:1.语言流畅、书写规范、卷面整洁，词数不少于60个:2.文中不得使用你的真实姓名、校名，否则以零分计:3.书面表达必须写在答题卡上，如在本卷上作答，一律不得分。主题主题体裁时态人称内容 一个非比寻常的春节（出乎意料的）一个非比寻常的春节（出乎意料的）记叙文（叙事）记叙文（叙事）一般过去时一般过去时第一人称为主第一人称为主疫情的影响；这个春节疫情的影响；这个春节“我我”的不寻常经历的不寻常经历新冠肺炎类书面表达解析：审题审题误区：1.时态错误：你度过的春节 2.人称错误：你度过的
5、春节3.体裁错误：提建议 4.内容错误：(1)春节(2)集中描述疫情而没有提到春节和 自己的经历 (3)大量提建议，教别人如何保护自 己（变成倡议书）一般过去时“我”不是“我们”记叙文寒假（上网课？）新冠肺炎类书面表达解析：打草稿 整理思路（列提纲/要点；设计自己的故事内容）1.以前的春节什么样？(简单描述，对比)一个特别的春节2.今年为什么特殊？(疫情爆发；居家)3.“我”做了什么？(居家；看新闻；学医护知识；看书；学做菜等，详细叙述)4.“我”得到了什么？(团结；直面困难；克服困难；理解他人等）新冠肺炎类书面表达解析：打草稿 词汇及基本表达准备：novel coronavirus pneu
6、monia 新冠肺炎 outbreak爆发mask口罩 medical observation at home居家医学观察1.the outbreak of NCP：新冠肺炎的爆发2.break out:The NCP has broken out during the Spring Festival.3.wear a(face)mask 戴口罩4.under medical observation at home：1)All contacts have been placed under medical observation at home.2)All the Chinese are st
7、aying at home for medical observation.新冠肺炎类书面表达解析：打草稿 词汇及基本表达准备：5.在春节期间：during the Spring Festival6.疾病：disease（具体的疾病）illness（病人主观感受;心理疾病）7.防止病毒传播：avoid virus spreading prevent/stop the virus from spreading8.医护人员：medical staff medical workers 9.白衣天使：angel in white10.强调句：It is/was+adj.+(for sb.)+to do
8、 sth.11.定语从句：n/代词+that/which/who等12.状语从句：when;if;while;等新冠肺炎类书面表达解析：打草稿第一段：背景介绍（春节：特殊/出乎意料/非比寻常）例1：The Spring Festival is one of the most important festivals in China,and it is always the time for family staying together.However,with the outbreak of novel coronavirus pneumonia,this year was quite di
9、fferent from the years before.例2：This year is the year of the rat.But the Spring Festival was really different from the previous years.Because of the outbreak of novel coronavirus pneumonia,everyone had to hide at home and became a“mouse”.the past新冠肺炎类书面表达解析：打草稿第二段：叙述事件（内容积极，有意义；正确价值观）定故事（我在家做的事情），填
10、内容：1）前后对比（转折过渡词）以前春节然后今年（拜年；压岁钱；外出游玩）2）内容简洁明了，不记流水账 描写事件，说明原因，补充论据（为情感升华做铺垫）a.做社区志愿者；（尽力帮助他人）b.学习新技能（记叙学习该技能的过程；分担家务）c.记录每天怎么过的（从早到晚，夹叙夹议；新思考）3）适当列举，或集中叙述一件事 以小见大，带出自己的感悟和思考打草稿：第二段（讲述具体事件）例1：During the Spring Festival,I stayed at home all day for its the best way to prevent the spreading of the viru
11、s.On the New Years eve,when I was staying with my family and enjoying the dinner,the medical staff gave up reuniting with their loved ones and stuck to their post fighting against the virus.I was deeply moved and wanted to offer some help.But I have neither the ability to cure the disease nor save p
12、eople.Just when I was sad,my father found a way for online donation,so I decided to donate all my lucky money through the internet.Although it was not much money,I tried my best and I felt happy and proud.medical workerswerethere was nothing much I can dostopadvised me to give my lucky money to peop
13、le in need 打草稿：第二段（讲述具体事件）例2：All my family stayed at home during this special festival.At the beginning,I did not think it was necessary for us to stay at home.But after watching the news,I have learnt that so many people died because of this serious disease.At that moment,I suddenly realized that w
14、e were going to experience a hard time.Those days were like a big black cloud hanging over my home,I felt so sad that I did not want to talk.However,on January 26th,I got good news from my father that a scientific group from Shanghai had already developed a new medicine which could prevent the novel
15、 coronavirus from spreading.I felt so excited and the black cloud suddenly went away.firstwouldhavestopscientists/doctors found打草稿：第三段（总结，情感升华）例1：The disease is terrible,but the power of all Chinese is even greater.I believe that we can defeat this virus.I am looking forward to taking off my mask an
16、d breathe the fresh air in the coming spring.例2：In this“hiding”Spring Festival,I had more time to read books,do homework,I also learned how to prevent virus and protect myself.I believe we can overcome this,when the spring flowers are blooming and the sun is shining,let us go to Wuhan to enjoy the c
17、herry blossom.话题相关词汇及句子补充1.病毒：virus2.发热门诊：fever clinic3.防护服：protective clothing4.疫苗：vaccine5.自我隔离：quarantine oneself6.误报，不实的信息：misinformation7.保持冷静：stay calm8.延长春节假期：extend the Spring Festival holiday9.生命重于泰山：Saving lives is of paramount importance.10.呼吸困难：have difficulty in breathing话题相关词汇及句子补充11.勤
18、洗手：wash hands frequently and thoroughly(彻底地）12.人传人：person-to-person/human-to-human transmission13.一线医护人员：front-line medical workers/staff14.延长春节假期：extend the Spring Festival holiday15.病毒无情，人有情：The virus is cruel,the world is full of love16.疫情无国界，人间有真情：Virus knows no borders,but the worst of times re
19、veals the best in people.17.避免到人群密集的地方：Avoid going to crowded places话题相关词汇及句子补充18.同舟共济，苦尽甘来：Lets help each other and expect happiness to come.19.万众一心，共克艰难：Lets overcome difficulties with one heart and one mind.20.打喷嚏或者咳嗽时用纸巾捂住口鼻：Cover your mouth and nose with a tissue when you cough or sneeze.21.保持室内空气流通：Make sure that shared spaces have good air flow.
