1、概要写作评分标准第五档（概要写作评分标准第五档（2125points）：）：1.理解理解准确准确，涵盖，涵盖所有要点所有要点 2.准确准确使用相应的使用相应的语法结构和词汇语法结构和词汇 3.完全完全使用使用自己的语言自己的语言。(60-80W)4.有效有效地使用了语句间的地使用了语句间的连接成分连接成分，使概要，使概要结构紧凑结构紧凑contents(内容内容)language skills(语言语言)structure(结构结构)Once upon a time,industrial goods were made to last forever.If you bought a car o
2、r a stove,it was a once-in-a-lifetime investment.You paid good money for it,and you took care of it.Nowadays industry has persuaded us that products couldnt last a long time.It is cheaper to throw them away than to repair them.This has led directly to the“throw-away society”which is a great waste of
3、 the earths resources.Just think of the cars that are traded daily,just because they are out of style.Think of the expensive packaging material that is thrown away every time a new object is bought.And we shoppers have to pay for that material!Our industrial society has turned us into spoiled childr
4、en.This wastefulness has got us into the great trouble we are in now.When we have no resources left,then we will start to take care of what we have.But why cant we act before this happens?Why cant we try to build a society in which the prevention of waste is a virtue?（182W）Step 1.Understand the whol
5、e passage and grasp the key points.Once upon a time,industrial goods were made to last forever.If you bought a car or a stove,it was a once-in-a-lifetime investment.You paid good money for it,and you took care of it.Nowadays industry has persuaded us that products couldnt last a long time.It is chea
6、per to throw them away than to repair them.This has led directly to the“throw-away society”which is a great waste of the earths resources.Just think of the cars that are traded daily,just because they are out of style.Think of the expensive packaging material that is thrown away every time a new obj
7、ect is bought.And we shoppers have to pay for that material!Our industrial society has turned us into spoiled children.This wastefulness has got us into the great trouble we are in now.When we have no resources left,then we will start to take care of what we have.But why cant we act before this happ
8、ens?Why cant we try to build a society in which the prevention of waste is a virtue?概要写作难点概要写作难点 1 How to get the key points quickly and correctly?(如何快速、准确地捕捉要点如何快速、准确地捕捉要点)抓住主题句或关键信息，忽略次要信息抓住主题句或关键信息，忽略次要信息Para 1：Once upon a time,industrial goods were made to last forever.If you bought a car or a s
9、tove,it was a once-in-a-lifetime investment.You paid good money for it,and you took care of it.detailed exampleu忽略具体事例忽略具体事例topic sentence概要写作难点概要写作难点 2 How to express the key points by using your own words properly?(如何灵活诠释，规避抄袭的嫌疑如何灵活诠释，规避抄袭的嫌疑)characteristics1.Once upon a time,industrial goods wer
10、e made to last forever._,industrial goods were made _.Some time ago;In the past;Decades agoto be used for a long timeto function well for a long time;durable近义词替换近义词替换You paid good money for it,and you took care of it.Decades ago,industrial goods were made durable.spent much money ontreasuretreat it
11、 kindlyYou spent much money on it and treasure it.Decades ago,industrial goods were made durableYou spent much money on it and treasure it.Para1.use it carefully Nowadays industry has persuaded us that products couldnt last a long time.It is cheaper to throw them away than to repair them.This has le
12、d directly to the“throw-away society”which is a great waste of the earths resources.Just think of the cars that are traded daily,just because they are out of style.Think of the expensive packaging material that is thrown away every time a new object is bought.And we shoppers have to pay for that mat
13、erial!topic sentencedetailed examplescharacteristicsresultu忽略具体事例忽略具体事例 Nowadays industry has persuaded us that products couldnt last a long time.It is cheaper to throw them away than to repair them.This has led directly to the“throw-away society”which is a great waste of the earths resources.Just t
14、hink of the cars that are traded daily,just because they are out of style.Think of the expensive packaging material that is thrown away every time a new object is bought.And we shoppers have to pay for that material!1.Nowadays industry has persuaded us that products couldnt last a long time.2.It is
15、cheaper to throw them away than to repair them.3.This has led directly to the“throw-away society”which is a great waste of the earths resources.Modern Industrymade us believeconvincednot permanentModern industry has convinced us that products are not permanent.short-lived近义词替换近义词替换2.It is cheaper to
16、 throw them away than to repair them.To throw them away is cheaper than to repair them.It is more expensive to repair them than to throw them away.改变主语（形式主语）改变主语（形式主语）正话反说、反话正说正话反说、反话正说This has led directly to the“throw-away society”which is a great waste of the earths resources.which has resulted i
17、n a great waste of the earths resources.改变句式改变句式result in Modern industry has convinced us that products are not permanent.To throw them away is cheaper than to repair them,which has resulted in a great waste of the earths resources.Para2.Para 3：提炼相关信息提炼相关信息 Our industrial society has turned us into
18、 spoiled children.This wastefulness has got us into the great trouble we are in now.When we have no resources left,then we will start to take care of what we have.But why cant we act before this happens?Why cant we try to build a society in which the prevention of waste is a virtue?过渡句过渡句We need to
19、save resources before its too lateThis wastefulness has caused us a lot of trouble.We are running out of resources and we need to take action.This wastefulness has caused us a lot of trouble.We are running out of resources and we need to take action.We need to save resources before its too late.Para
20、3.This wastefulness has caused us a lot of trouble.We are running out of resources.We need to save resources before its too late.Decades ago,industrial goods were made durable.We spent much money on it and treasure it.Modern industry has convinced us that products are not permanent.To throw them awa
21、y is cheaper than to repair them,which has resulted in a great waste of the earths resources.This wastefulness has caused us a lot of trouble.We are running out of resources.We need to save resources before its too late.(71W)Polish your writing有效有效地使用了语句间的地使用了语句间的连接成分连接成分，使概要结构紧凑，使概要结构紧凑1921分分Howeve
22、r,Therefore,Step 1：Step 2:Step 3:Step 4:读懂文章大意读懂文章大意抓住主题句或关键信息，忽略次要信息抓住主题句或关键信息，忽略次要信息How to write a good summary?Conclusion灵活运用语言，对关键信息进行改编灵活运用语言，对关键信息进行改编添加有效连接成分，使概要结构紧凑添加有效连接成分，使概要结构紧凑 The food we eat seems to have a great effect on our health.Although science has made big steps in making food m
23、ore fit to eat,it has,at the same time,made many foods unfit to eat.Some research has shown that perhaps eighty percent of human illness is related to food and forty percent of cancer is related to food as well.That food is related to illness is not a new discovery.In 1945,some researchers realized
24、that things commonly used to keep colour in meats and other food additives（添加剂）（添加剂）caused cancer.Yet,these additives remain in our food,and it is difficult to know which things on the wrappings（包装）（包装）of foods are helpful or harmful.The additives which we eat are not all so direct.Farmers often giv
25、e penicillin to their animals,and because of this,penicillin has been found in the milk of cows.Sometimes similar tings are supplied to animals not for their health,but just to make a profit.The farmers are simply trying to fatten the animals in order to get a higher price on the market.Although som
26、e countries have tried to control such things,the practice continues.（201W）The food we eat seems to have a great effect on our health.Although science has made big steps in making food more fit to eat,it has,at the same time,made many foods unfit to eat.Some research has shown that perhaps eighty pe
27、rcent of human illness is related to food and forty percent of cancer is related to food as well.That food is related to illness is not a new discovery.In 1945,some researchers realized that things commonly used to keep colour in meats and other food additives（添（添加剂）加剂）caused cancer.Para 1：(1.)The f
28、ood we eat seems to have a great effect on our health.(2.)Although science has made big steps in making food more fit to eat,it has,at the same time,made many foods unfit to eat.(3.)Some research has shown that perhaps eighty percent of human illness is related to food and forty percent of cancer is
29、 related to food as well.1.Our food affects our health.2.Although science has greatly improved the quality of our foods,some are still unsafe to eat.(3.)Some research has shown that perhaps eighty percent of human illness is related to food and forty percent of cancer is related to food as well.3.Re
30、search has proved that most of our diseases are caused by food,including cancer.Our food affects our health.Although science has greatly improve the quality of our foods,some are still unsafe to eat.Research has proved that most of our diseases are caused by food,including cancer.Para 1：Para 2：Yet,t
31、hese additives remain in our food,and it is difficult to know which things on the wrappings(包包装装)of foods are helpful or harmful.The additives which we eat are not all so direct.Farmers often give penicillin to their animals,and because of this,penicillin has been found in the milk of cows.Sometimes
32、 similar tings are supplied to animals not for their health,but just to make a profit.(1.)Yet,these additives remain in our food,and it is difficult to know which things on the wrappings of foods are helpful or harmful.(2.)The additives which we eat are not all so direct.(3.)Sometimes similar tings
33、are supplied to animals not for their health,but just to make a profit.1.We can hardly tell whether the additives in our food are harmful or not.2.They affect our body indirectly.(3.)Sometimes similar tings are supplied to animals not for their health,but just to make a profit.3.Some farmers raise t
34、heir animals with additives to earn more money.We can hardly tell whether the additives in our food are harmful or not.They affect our body indirectly.Some farmers raise their animals with additives to earn more money.Para 2：Para 3：The farmers are simply trying to fatten the animals in order to get
35、a higher price on the market.Although some countries have tried to control such things,the practice continues.Some countries have taken measures to stop such things,but in vain.Our food affects our health.Although science has greatly improved the quality of our foods,some are still unsafe to eat.Res
36、earch has proved that most of our diseases are caused by food,including cancer.We can hardly tell whether the additives in our food are harmful or not.They affect our body indirectly.Some farmers raise their animals with additives to earn more money.Some countries have taken measures to stop such th
37、ings,but in vain.(77W)it有效有效地使用了语句间的地使用了语句间的连接成分连接成分，使概要结构紧凑，使概要结构紧凑because Weight loss is most likely to be successful when people change their habits.Here are several ways to make that happen.Regular physical activity burns calories and builds muscles-both of which help you look and feel good and
38、keep weight off.Walking the family dog,cycling to school,and doing other things that increase your daily level of activity can all make a difference.One reason people get less exercise these days is because of an increase in“screen time”-the amount of time spent watching TV,looking at the computer,o
39、r playing video games.Limit recreational screen time to less than 2 hours per day.When you really get away from“screens”,such as TV,computers,IPad or mobile phones,you will really benefit a lot.Portion sizes are bigger than they used to be,and these extra calories contribute to obesity.Another key f
40、actor in weight gain is that more people drink sugary drinks,such as sodas,juice drinks,and sports drinks.So choose smaller portions(or share restaurant portions)and go for water or low-fat mild instead of soda.People who skip breakfast often feel so hungry that they eat more later on.So they get mo
41、re calories than they would have if they ate breakfast.In fact,people who skip breakfast tend to have higher BIMs than people who eat breakfast.If you really put the above into practice at once,you will definitely reduce your weight gradually.And wish you have a good figure.Weight loss is most likel
42、y to be successful when people change their habits.Here are several ways to make that happen.Regular physical activity burns calories and builds muscles-both of which help you look and feel good and keep weight off.Walking the family dog,cycling to school,and doing other things that increase your da
43、ily level of activity can all make a difference.Changing some habits may be a good way to lose weight.If people change their habits,they will surely succeed in losing weight.Whether people can lose weight or not depends on their living habits.Taking more physical exercise will make much difference t
44、o peoples health.Increasing the amount of regular exercise will benefit people a lot.One reason people get less exercise these days is because of an increase in“screen time”-the amount of time spent watching TV,looking at the computer,or playing video games.Limit recreational screen time to less tha
45、n 2 hours per day.When you really get away from“screens”,such as TV,computers,IPad or mobile phones,you will really benefit a lot.Portion sizes are bigger than they used to be,and these extra calories contribute to obesity.Another key factor in weight gain is that more people drink sugary beverages,
46、such as sodas,juice drinks,and sports drinks.So choose smaller portions(or share restaurant portions)and go for water or low-fat milk instead of soda.It is necessary to limit“screen time”if people want to lose weight.We are supposed to reduce“screen time”.Sticking to smaller portions and avoiding su
47、gary drinks contribute to weight loss.Watching out for portion sizes and drinking water instead of sugary drinks are also a key to weight loss.People who skip breakfast often feel so hungry that they eat more later on.So they get more calories than they would have if they ate breakfast.In fact,peopl
48、e who skip breakfast tend to have higher BIMs than people who eat breakfast.If you really put the above into practice at once,you will definitely reduce your weight gradually.And wish you have a good figure.People should avoid skipping breakfast.Skipping breakfast is actually not a wise way to lose
49、weight.People will have a good figure if they take the above suggestions.Changing some habits may be a good way to lose weight.Taking more physical exercise will make much difference to peoples health.We are supposed to reduce“screen time”.Sticking to smaller portions and avoiding sugary drinks cont
50、ribute to weight loss.People should avoid skipping breakfast.People will have a good figure if they take the above suggestions.(58W)First,Meanwhile,Besides Finally Rats eat our food or make it so dirty that it isnt fit for people at all.Thats why people often kill them by laying down poison.After a
