1、书面表达增加细节的技巧书面表达增加细节的技巧13例例作文复习作文复习(1)by 双老师双老师技巧一:列举具体的实例进行补充说明技巧一:列举具体的实例进行补充说明例例1.我们青少年应尽我们所能保护环境、拯救地我们青少年应尽我们所能保护环境、拯救地球。球。(添加(添加for example)改造前:改造前:We teenagers should do what we can to protect the environment and save the earth.改造后:改造后:We teenagers should do what we can to protect the environme
2、nt and save the earth.For example,we can use recyclable bags instead of plastic bags,refuse to use single-use products and save energy.例例2:我要花一些时间和父母在一起。:我要花一些时间和父母在一起。(添加(添加-ing表伴随)表伴随)改造前:改造前:Ill spend some time staying with my parents.改造后:改造后:Ill spend some time staying with my parents,chatting w
3、ith them and doing some housework.例例3:我想找一个像我一样喜欢旅行的笔友。:我想找一个像我一样喜欢旅行的笔友。(If possible,.)改造前:改造前:Id like to seek a pen pal who is interested in traveling just like me.改造后:改造后:Id like to seek a pen pal who is interested in traveling just like me.If possible,we can travel together or share traveling ex
4、periences.例例4:互联网在我们的日常生活当中变得越来越重:互联网在我们的日常生活当中变得越来越重要。要。(not only.but also.)改造前:改造前:The Internet is playing a more and more important part in our daily life.改造后:改造后:The Internet is playing a more and more important part in our daily life.Not only can we read news from home and abroad,but also send
5、emails and attend on-line courses.技巧二:增添背景信息,如:原因、结果、目的等技巧二:增添背景信息,如:原因、结果、目的等例1:我们打算设计一件属于我们班的服装。(considering)改造前:改造前:We intend to design a uniform suited to our own class.改造后:改造后:Considering that this activity is meaningful,we intend to design a uniform suited to our own class.例例2:我计划在一家外贸公司做兼职。:我
6、计划在一家外贸公司做兼职。(in order to)改造前:改造前:I am planning to take a part-time job in a foreign trade company.改造后:改造后:In order to get some practical experience,I am planning to take a part-time job in a foreign trade company.例例3:我不知道我的申请书和简历上有没有语法错:我不知道我的申请书和简历上有没有语法错误或者不当的格式。误或者不当的格式。(this is.that)改造前:改造前:I d
7、ont know if there might be some grammar mistakes or inappropriate format in my application and the personal resume.改造后:改造后:But this is the first time that I have written an application and the personal resume,so I dont know if there might be some grammar mistakes or inappropriate format in them.例例4:
8、首先,参加中文课程很重要。:首先,参加中文课程很重要。(because)改造前:改造前:First,it is important to take a Chinese course.改造后:改造后:First,it is important to take a Chinese course,because youll be able to learn from the teacher and practice with your fellow students.例例5:我需要一个好好休息,我也会读点书。:我需要一个好好休息,我也会读点书。(for表目的)表目的)改造前:改造前:I need a
9、 good rest and Ill do some reading as well.改造后:改造后:I need a good rest because I feel tired because of the hard work.Also,Ill do some reading for fun and for knowledge as well.例例6:如果可能的话,我会参加一些社会活动。:如果可能的话,我会参加一些社会活动。(so that引导目的状语)引导目的状语)改造前:改造前:If possible,Ill take part in some social activities.改造
10、后:改造后:If possible,Ill take part in some social activities so taht I can know more about the society.例例7:我们的地球正在面临巨大的威胁。:我们的地球正在面临巨大的威胁。(with+宾语宾语+宾补)宾补)改造前:改造前:Our earth is faced with great threat.改造后:改造后:With the global climate becoming warmer and warmer,our earth is faced with great threat.例例8:我们也
11、会与他们一同唱歌、跳舞、玩游戏。:我们也会与他们一同唱歌、跳舞、玩游戏。(which)改造前:改造前:Well also spend some fun time together singing,dancing and playing games.改造后:改造后:Well also spend some fun time together singing,dancing and playing games,which we hope will make them happy.例例9:这个活动是一个让我们学生向父母和老师致谢:这个活动是一个让我们学生向父母和老师致谢的好机会。的好机会。(who)
12、改造前:改造前:This event is a good chance for us students to express our gratitude to our parents and teachers.改造后:改造后:This event is a good chance for us students to express our gratitude to our parents and teachers who have been bringing up and educating us with great efforts.练习练习 1.我们应该学会如何与他人相处。(增加具体实例)2.一些学生在考试前一晚非常担心考试。(增加结果状语)3.然而,很多人没有意识到手机的负面影响。(增加with结构)