1、 2020朝阳一模应用文讲评 CONTENTSCONTENTS 目目 录录 1 评标解读 2 审题构思 3 写作对策 4 语言支撑（补充） 评标解读评标解读 01 应用文：应用文： 内容完整、条理清晰、交际得体、语言准确内容完整、条理清晰、交际得体、语言准确 第一档 13分-15分 完全完成了试题规定的任务。 内容完整，条理清楚； 交际得体，表达时充分考虑到了交际的需求；体现出较强 的语言运用能力。 完全达到了预期的写作目的。 北京高考应用文评分标准北京高考应用文评分标准 情景作文：内容完整、上下文连贯、词汇句式多样、语言准确情景作文：内容完整、上下文连贯、词汇句式多样、语言准确 共四档，先定
2、档后微调，词数不少于共四档，先定档后微调，词数不少于5050 writer 写信人写信人 addressee 收信人收信人 message 如何做到交际得体？如何做到交际得体？ 简洁简洁 concise 精准精准 to the point 总分总分 topic Sentence + supporting details 1.接收了多少信息？接收了多少信息？ 2.接收信息时的感受？接收信息时的感受？ 文字文字单线条传输单线条传输 线团缠绕线团缠绕说话逻辑说话逻辑 简洁精准简洁精准 先总后分先总后分 先主后次先主后次 writer 写信人写信人 addressee 收信人收信人 message 如
3、何做到交际得体？如何做到交际得体？ 语用学语用学 Pragmatics DPR 亲疏远近、权利大小、不便程度亲疏远近、权利大小、不便程度 DPR（Distance, Power, Ranking of Imposition） 换位思考换位思考 put yourself into his shoes 弱化不便弱化不便 lower the ranking of imposition 1.接收了多少信息？接收了多少信息？ 2.接收信息时的感受？接收信息时的感受？ 目标：内容完整、条理清晰、交际得体、语言准确目标：内容完整、条理清晰、交际得体、语言准确 基调：清爽、舒服基调：清爽、舒服 精准简洁、先总
4、后分、弱化不便精准简洁、先总后分、弱化不便 审题构思审题构思 02 20202020朝阳一模应用文朝阳一模应用文 假设你是红星中学高三学生李华。你的美国笔友 Jim 对中国文化十分感兴趣, 你在英文报纸 China Daily 上看到 “中华文化表情包设计大赛 (The China Daily Emoji Design Contest of Chinese Cultural Symbols)征集来自世界各地参赛作品的 活动，请给他写一封邮件，邀请他参加投稿，内容包括： 1.介绍稿件要求； 2.告知投稿时间和方式； 3.询问对方意向。 20202020朝阳一模应用文：审题朝阳一模应用文：审题 假
5、设你是红星中学高三学生李华。你的美国笔友美国笔友 Jim 对对 中国文化十分感兴趣中国文化十分感兴趣, 你在英文你在英文报纸报纸 China Daily 上看到上看到 “中华文化表情包设计大赛中华文化表情包设计大赛 (The China Daily Emoji Design Contest of Chinese Cultural Symbols)征集来自世界各地参赛作征集来自世界各地参赛作 品的活动品的活动，请给他写一封邮件，邀请邀请他参加投稿，内容包括： 1.介绍稿件要求； 2.告知投稿时间和方式； 3.询问对方意向。 写作背景 写作对象 写作目的 详 略 略 应用文：3-5段为宜 寒暄+要
6、点段+尾段，要点3常和尾段结合 可一点一段，但不建议行数差过大(3) 可合为一段，但标志词需简洁抓人 2020朝阳一模应用文：构思 我 笔友Jim 邀请 invite 中华文化中华文化表情包表情包 设计设计大赛大赛 内容：含有中国文化元素内容：含有中国文化元素 功能：模拟表情、表达心情功能：模拟表情、表达心情 格式：线上使用格式：线上使用 jpg/png/gif/jpge 兴趣兴趣 特长特长 收获收获 有意愿 能做好 有好处 锁定对象、建立勾连、拆解关键词 内涵：设计理念内涵：设计理念 外形：吸引人、可爱外形：吸引人、可爱 投其所好、赞美对方、描述益处投其所好、赞美对方、描述益处 写作对策写作
7、对策 03 目标：内容完整、条理清晰、交际得体、语言准确目标：内容完整、条理清晰、交际得体、语言准确 内容完整内容完整翻译二字是精髓翻译二字是精髓 应用文重审题，翻译二字是精髓；你是谁写给谁，写信目的见动词。 条理清晰条理清晰先总后分顺序写先总后分顺序写 事实简内涵多，顺序陈述控比例；先要点再细节先要点再细节， 横向展开纵深入。 交际得体交际得体换位思考若不便换位思考若不便 首尾分靠交际，换位思考弱不便换位思考弱不便；中段分拼内容，锁定对象巧勾连锁定对象巧勾连。 应用文重审题，翻译二字是精髓；我是谁写给谁，写信目的见动词。 I have some good news for you. An e
8、moji design contest of Chinese cultural symbols held by the China Daily is now calling for entries worldwide. Given your keen interest in Chinese culture, Im writing to invite you to participate in it/have a try. 【2020朝阳一模应用文】 假设你是红星中学高三学生李华。你的美国笔友美国笔友 Jim 对中国文化十分感 兴趣, 你在英文报纸 China Daily 上看到 “中华文化表情
9、包设计大赛 (The China Daily Emoji Design Contest of Chinese Cultural Symbols)征集来自世界各地参赛作 品的活动，请给他写一封邮件，邀请邀请他参加投稿，内容包括： 1. 介绍稿件要求； 2. 告知投稿时间和方式； 3. 询问对方意向。 Background Greetings Purpose 内容完整内容完整 9类信件对应目的动词 推荐/建议信：recommend sth. to sb. = make a recommendation of sth. suggest/recommend sb. (should) do sth. /
10、 suggest doing sth. provide you with some suggestions/ a piece of advice U 邀请信：invite sb. to do sth. 咨询信：inquire sth. = ask for information about 申请信：apply for sth. = make an application for sth. 介绍信：introduce sth. to sb. = make an introduction to sth. 祝贺信：congratulate sb. on sth. 感谢信：thank sb. for
11、sth./doing sth. express my gratitude U (to you) for sth. 道歉信：apologize (to sb.) for sth. = make an apology for sth. 投诉信：complain about sth. = make a complaint about sth. 难词的翻译难词的翻译 泛化、回归本质泛化、回归本质 I have some good news for you. An emoji design contest of Chinese cultural symbols held by the China Dai
12、ly is now calling for entries worldwide. Given your keen interest in Chinese culture, Im writing to invite you to participate in it/have a try. 【2020朝阳一模应用文】 假设你是红星中学高三学生李华。你的美国笔友美国笔友 Jim 对中国文化十分感 兴趣, 你在英文报纸 China Daily 上看到 “中华文化表情包设计大赛 (The China Daily Emoji Design Contest of Chinese Cultural Symbo
13、ls)征集来自世界各地参赛作 品的活动，请给他写一封邮件，邀请邀请他参加投稿，内容包括： 1. 介绍稿件要求； 2. 告知投稿时间和方式； 3. 询问对方意向。 Background Greetings Purpose 征集/招募 look for/search for/call for/seek We are searching for volunteers, who are willing to help us on the 7th German Chamber Soccer Cup 2019 in Tianjin. We are seeking entries worldwide/fro
14、m all over the world. recruit v./n. We are recruiting new members to our club. We are seeking new recruits. New recruits are wanted/needed. 1.The requirements for the works/entries/submissions are as follows. 2.As for/Regarding/Concerning/When it comes to the requirements, Chinese cultural symbols s
15、hould be included in your submitted works. 3.You are required/expected/supposed to give your work a name and explain designing ideas and its culture meanings. 4.Aiming to spread Chinese culture in a(n) vivid/innovative way, the competition requires participants to perfectly blend/incorporate Chinese
16、 cultural elements into charming emojis that can express peoples feelings in online communication. 5.The emojis should be centered around the subject of Chinese culture, presenting classic or popular cultural images in the form of emojis. 要点一：介绍稿件要求要点一：介绍稿件要求 Topic Sentence 目的目的 内容内容 功能功能 外形外形 词性转换词
17、性转换 应用文重审题，翻译二字是精髓；我是谁写给谁，写信目的见动词。 内容完整内容完整 The requirements for your works are threefold. The requirements for your works are as follows. For one thing, First, For another, Second, Still another, Third, Besides/Apart from that/On top of that, First and foremost, Apart from that, Last but not least,
18、 In addition, (常放最后一条，表补充添加) Link 事实简内涵多，顺序陈述控比例；先要点再细节，事实简内涵多，顺序陈述控比例；先要点再细节， 横向展开纵深入。横向展开纵深入。 条理清晰条理清晰 事实简内涵多，顺序陈述控比例；先要点再细节，事实简内涵多，顺序陈述控比例；先要点再细节， 横向展开纵深入。横向展开纵深入。 条理清晰条理清晰 【2020朝阳标范】 I am writing to tell you about The China Daily Emoji Design Contest of Chinese Cultural Symbols organized by Chin
19、a Daily. I know youre keen on traditional Chinese culture, so why not have a try? You may choose any symbol that best represents Chinese culture in your eyes, such as the panda, kung fu, the Great Wall and so on. There is no limit on the style, but be sure to give your work a name and explain design
20、ing ideas and its culture meanings. Your work should be submitted online with required personal information by the end of September. All winning designs will be shared and promoted on the China Daily app, and winning designers will receive prizes! Are you interested? If you need any help, I would be
21、 very glad to help. Let your creative juices flow! 抽象抽象具象具象 事实简内涵多，顺序陈述控比例；先要点再细节，事实简内涵多，顺序陈述控比例；先要点再细节， 横向展开纵深入。横向展开纵深入。 条理清晰条理清晰 时空延展时空延展 形式形式内涵内涵 详写的要点详写的要点 横向展开横向展开2-3条条 【2020朝阳标范】 I am writing to tell you about The China Daily Emoji Design Contest of Chinese Cultural Symbols organized by China
22、Daily. I know youre keen on traditional Chinese culture, so why not have a try? You may choose any symbol that best represents Chinese culture in your eyes, such as the panda, kung fu, the Great Wall and so on. There is no limit on the style, but be sure to give your work a name and explain designin
23、g ideas and its culture meanings. Your work should be submitted online with required personal information by the end of September. All winning designs will be shared and promoted on the China Daily app, and winning designers will receive prizes! Are you interested? If you need any help, I would be v
24、ery glad to help. Let your creative juices flow! 首尾分靠交际，换位思考弱不便；中段分拼内容，锁定对象巧勾连。首尾分靠交际，换位思考弱不便；中段分拼内容，锁定对象巧勾连。 交际得体交际得体 【2020朝阳标范】 I am writing to tell you about The China Daily Emoji Design Contest of Chinese Cultural Symbols organized by China Daily. I know youre keen on traditional Chinese culture
25、, so why not have a try? You may choose any symbol that best represents Chinese culture in your eyes, such as the panda, kung fu, the Great Wall and so on. There is no limit on the style, but be sure to give your work a name and explain designing ideas and its culture meanings. Your work should be s
26、ubmitted online with required personal information by the end of September. All winning designs will be shared and promoted on the China Daily app, and winning designers will receive prizes! Are you interested? If you need any help, I would be very glad to help. Let your creative juices flow! 基调：清爽、舒服基调：清爽、舒服 精准简洁、先总后分、弱化不便精准简洁、先总后分、弱化不便 目标：内容完整、条理清晰、交际得体、语言准确目标：内容完整、条理清晰、交际得体、语言准确 应用文重审题，翻译二字是精髓；我是谁写给谁，写信目的见动词。 事实简内涵多，顺序陈述控比例；先要点再细节先要点再细节，横向展开纵深入。 首尾分靠交际，换位思考弱不便换位思考弱不便；中段分拼内容，锁定对象巧勾连锁定对象巧勾连。 Pragmatics: DPR（Distance亲疏远近亲疏远近, Power权利大小权利大小, Ranking of Imposition不便程度）不便程度） 清爽、舒服清爽、舒服
