1、Academic Writing Task 12IELTS WritingSaturday/Thursday Morning3rd paper Test3Question BookletTask 1Report(Academic)/Letter(General)150w,20mTask 2Essay250w,40m4Writing BookletWriting Bookletningboyu_ Password:ieltswritingPencil and Eraser5ScoringExaminerTask 1 and 2:0-9Writing BandT1 *1/3+T2*2/36 6.5
2、Overall Band6RequirementAcademic Overall ScoreLanguage School 5.5Undergraduate 6Graduate 6.5 Famous Universities+0.5 Popular Majors+0.578 9RegistrationObjectiveAn acceptable score within the shortest timeThe earlier,the more choices!No deadline,no completion!10RegistrationSelf-AnalysisNCEE 1004.5NCE
3、E 130or CET-4 425 5.0CET-4600or CET-6 4255.5CET-6 600or NETEM 706.04hrs/day,1 point/per 2 months11Considerate IELTSTest as often as possibleReschedule(+500 RMB)Refund(-750 RMB)Teaching Material雅思写作胜经雅思写作胜经、群言出版社、群言出版社1213Task 1-Question GroupingFigure(75%2008Q1)Multiple/SingleNon-Figure(25%2008Q1)Fl
4、ow chart/Map14Writing ProcedureRead+Plan(3 mins)Write(16 mins)Check(1 mins)15ReadWords:paragraph 2Pictures:Words(title,legend,axis)Number(unit,digit)Make notes on the question booklet!Numbers10 million/millionsthousands ofmillions ofbillions of17Scoring CriterionTA:ContentCC:StructureLR:WordsGRA:Sen
5、tences18Marking CriterionUNDERLENGTHNO OF WORDSPENALTYOFF-TOPICMEMORISEDILLEGIBLE19Plan-ContentSummarize Features,not list dataa1,a2,a3,an Trend Max/Min SlopeA,B,C,Max/Min20Paragraph 3Comparisons within the chart or between the chartsSelect Main Features(recreates the picture in the examiners mind)S
6、upporting DataReport facts,not opinions21Plan-StructureParagraph or not?reader friendlyHow to Paragraph?A new idea,a new paragraphIntroduction /Conclusion(if needed)22Thinking Style23ParagraphsMultiple ChartsIntroductionChart 1Chart 2ComparisonSingle ChartIntroductionFeature 1Feature 2 Conclusion(if
7、 needed)24Plan-StructureLinking Devices(LD)Between paragraphsBetween featuresWithin sentences25Language RequirementWordCorrect spelling enviroment/environmentWord Level get/achieve a band 8Word Variety(Avoid repetition)a good/well-paid/satisfactory/decent job26SentenceGrammatical AccuracyThere is a
8、boy asks you out.Sentence LengthBand 9:20+Band 7:15Structure VarietyA new challenger comes here.Here comes a new challenger.27Word&TimeMultiple /Single ChartsIntro./Intro.(30w,1s)Chart 1 /Feature 1(50w,4s)Chart 2 /Feature 2(50w,4s)Comparison/Conclusion(30w,1s)Paragraph 2Copied phrases will not be co
9、untedParaphrase the rubricIntroductionchart=graph=diagramline,curvebar,columnpietable=figures=statisticsSave belowWord(B-78)give information aboutrevealindicatedemonstrateSimple Present TenseWordthe UKBritainmost popularfavorite/fashionable/stylishcountrynationWordUK residents to visitUK travelers/v
10、isitors/touristsSpecificin 1999Passive VoiceThe chart shows A.(do)A is shown by the chart.(be done)The line chart reveals visits to and from the UK.Visits to and from the UK are revealed in the line chart.Structure VarietyThe line chart reveals ,and the bar graph indicates The line chart reveals,and
11、 are indicated in the bar graph.Compound SentenceIntroductionThe line chart reveals visits to and from Britain and UK travelers top 5 favorite nations in 1999 are indicated in the bar graph.Linking DevicesBetween paragraphs(B-78)According to the chart,line chart upper/lower chart chart 1 chart of vi
12、sits to and from the UKBetween Features(B-51)also/besides/on the other handbut/however/converselywhile/in particularBasic Structure 1 The visits increased greatly (1)(2)(3)from about 12 to 57 million (4)from 1979 to 1999.(5)(1)SubjectsLegendvisits abroad by UK residentsParagraph 2travel from the UKS
13、ynonymsUK visitors/travelers/tourists(1)Subjectsit/theyThe visits increased from 1979 to 1999.In particular,they increased most quickly from 1985 to 1988.(2)Verbsincrease:decrease/rise:fallgo up:come downclimb:slideascend:declinerocket:collapse(2)VerbsTenseincreasedincreaseis expected/predicted to i
14、ncrease(3)Adverbssharply/rapidly/swiftlyslowly/gradually/tardilygreatly/vastly/considerablyslightly/marginally/minutely(3)Adverbs&(4)Numbersabout/around/roughly/more or lessfrom about 12 to 53 million(5)Timefrom 1979 to 1999between 1979 and 1999during the 20 years/two decadesstarting from 1979Chart
15、1(Band 6.5)According to the line chart,visits abroad by UK residents increased from about 12 to 57 million from 1979 to 1999.While,overseas travelers to Britain went up from about 10 to 27 million.It is obvious that UK tourists were more and climbed faster than overseas ones during the period.Basic
16、Structure 2There was a sharp increase in the visits (3)(2)(1)from about 12 to 53 million (4)from 1979 to 1999.(5)Basic Structure 3A sharp increase was seen in (3)(2)(6)the visits from about 12 to 53 million (1)(4)from 1979 to 1999.(5)48A sharp increase(2)&(1),(6)a sharp/slow/great/slight increasean
17、upward/rising/increasing tendencya downward/falling/decreasing trendshow/prove/witness(2)Verbkeep/remainunchanged/constant/stablefluctuateupward/downwarddouble/triple/quadrupleChart 1According to the line chart,both UK tourists abroad and overseas ones to the UK went up from 1979 to 1999 and the for
18、mer climbed more markedly than the latter.In 1979,UK visitors were only around 2 million more than their overseas counterparts,being approximately 12 and 10 million respectively.However,two decades later,they almost doubled the foreign travelers to Britain(roughly 53 and 27 million separately).Chart
19、 2(Band 6.5)The bar graph demonstrates that the most UK visitors went to France and Spain,which were 11.0 and 9.5 million.Also,many British travelers were attracted by the USA(4.0 million),Greece(3.5 million)and Turkey(2.0 million).Chart 2The bar graph demonstrates that France and Spain were the fav
20、orite countries for UK tourists in 1999,which attracted around 11.0 and 9.5 million UK visitors respectively.Remotely following were the USA,Greece and Turkey with 4.0,3.5 and 2.0 million travelers separately.Comparison(band 6.5)What is also worth mentioning is that almost 40%UK tourists selected Fr
21、ance and Spain in 1999,if the two diagrams are considered as a whole.ComparisonWhat is also worth mentioning is that France and Spain alone accounted for almost 40 percent of UK tourists abroad in 1999,if the two diagrams are considered as a whole.Professional Ethestreet TVCheckSample Answer(I4-168)
22、ScriptComment Script CorrespondingCommentuTAuUnder lengthu&dollaruNo comparisonuCCuNo referenceuLR&GRAuNarrow sentence typeuBasic errorsI4-54udemanduused/need/requirement/consumption utypicaluaverage/representativeuuseuconsumeuhomeuhousehold/familyupassive voice&compound sentenceIntroductionuThe cur
23、ve chart reveals electricity used in England during average days in winter and summer and how electricity is consumed in a typical English household is indicated in the pie graph.Read Chart 1Unithrs/yrsoclock:am,a.m.AM,A.MNumber38,000 unitsRead Chart 2Everyday wordskettlemicrowave ovenrange hoodPlan
24、Winter summerNumbers:Max&Min/AverageWinter,Summer:Numbers:Max&MinWordspeak/summit/highest pointnadir/touch the bottom/lowest pointunchanged/constant/stable/stationary phaseChart 1(Band 6.5)According to the curve chart,daily electricity need is higher in winter(38,000 units on average)than in summer(
25、18,000 units on average).In winter,electricity consumption peaks at 2:00 am and 10:00 pm while it touches the bottom at 0:00 am and 8:00 am.On the other hand,in summer,it summits at 2:00 pm and 11:00 pm,but has a nadir at 9:00 am and a lower stationary phase from 4:00 pm to 9:00 pm.Chart 1According
26、to the curve chart,daily electricity need is higher in winter(38,000 units on average)than in summer(18,000 units on average),although both of them are uneven during the day.In winter,electricity consumption peaks at 2:00 am and 10:00 pm while it touches the bottom at 0:00 am and 8:00 am.In contrast
27、,the summer summits come later than winter ones at 2:00 pm and 11:00 pm.A nadir is seen nearly 9:00 am and a lower stationary phase is witnessed from 4:00pm to 9:00pm.occupybe shared byaccount forbe responsible forbe in charge ofbe in the charge ofPercentagea small percentage of (20%)a quarter of th
28、e minority of (40%)half of the majority of (60%)three quarters of most of (80%)one-fifth/one-thirdStructuresu1 occupies/accounts for the majority of A(x%).uy%of A is shared by/is in the charge of 2.u3 and 4 are responsible for/in charge of the rest,with z%and w%respectively.Chart 2(Band 6.5)uThe pie
29、 graph demonstrates that heating rooms and water occupies the majority of electricity consumption(52.5%).Then,17.5%of the electricity demand is shared by ovens,kettles and washing machines.Lighting,TV,radio and vacuum cleaners,food mixers,electric tools are responsible for the rest,with 15%each.Char
30、t 2uThe pie graph demonstrates that the majority of electricity consumption(52.5%)is shared by heating rooms and water.Then,ovens,kettles and washing machines occupy 17.5%of the electricity demand.The rest is in the charge of lighting,TV,radio and vacuum cleaners,food mixers,electric tools,with 15%e
31、ach.Comparison(Band 6.5)What is also worth mentioning is that heating rooms and water is the reason for the higher electricity demand in winter than in summer,if the two diagrams are considered as a whole.ComparisonWhat is also worth mentioning is that electricity for heating rooms and water is prob
32、ably the major cause for the higher electricity demand in winter than in summer,if the two diagrams are considered as a whole.I4 164TAComparison within/between the chartsConfusing time expressionsCCPoor paragraphingLR&GRASpelling errors(5)I4-31proportionpercentage/share/figurescategorytype/kind/grou
33、pfamilyhouseholdPlanaged vs not agedsingle vs doublewith vs without childrenI4 162give a breakdown ofHow to include numbers?A(11%)A,which is A,with/at A,comprising/consisting of Model AnswerIt is noticeable that (word filler)It is obvious that It is easy to see that Overall,the table suggests that 2
34、003年年9月月20日日The diagram below shows the method of obtaining water outdoors.ObjectContentUnderstand the important stagesFind a place to startStructureIntroductionPreparationProcedure(Time/Sequence)Conclusion(if needed)Linking Device-TimeTo begin with Next Then LaterFinallyAt the same time/MeanwhileSe
35、quencethe first stage involves in the next stage in the following stage in the last stage Purposein order thatso thatin order to/in order not to so as to/so as not to LanguageOpening SentencesVarying vocabularyPresent simple/Passive VoiceOpening SentencesThe picture illustrates The whole procedure c
36、an be divided into stages.Varying Vocabularyobtain,accumulate,collect,gathervaporThe water turns into gas,rises and turns back into liquid when it accumulates on the sheet of plastic.2006年年1月月14日日The diagram below shows the process of glass recycling.Flow ChartWhen the cleaning is done,the bottles a
37、re transported to a glass factory where they are broke into glass pieces which are then poured into a furnace.2003年年9月月20日日The map below is of the town of Garlsdon.A new supermarket(S)is planned for the town.The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.ContentTransportationParking90Site Sele
38、ctionIntroductionS1(Varying Vocabulary)S2Conclusion91Development(080329 Bridgetown)IntroductionMap 1Map 2Relationship between development9293Writing RulesuNo TitleuBigger,bigger and biggeru10-12 w/line94 Four score and seven years ago,our fathers brought forth upon this continent a new nation:concei
39、ved in liberty,and dedicated to the proposition that all men are created equal.Now we are engaged in a great civil war.testing whether that nation,or any nation so conceived and so dedicated.can long endure.We are met on a great battlefield of that war.We have come to dedicate a portion of that fiel
40、d as a final resting place for those who here gave their lives that that nation might live.It is altogether fitting and proper that we should do this.But,in a larger sense,we cannot dedicate.we cannot consecrate.we cannot hallow this ground.The brave men,living and dead,who struggled here have conse
41、crated it,far above our poor power to add or detract.The world will little note,nor long remember,what we say here,but it can never forget what they did here.It is for us the living,rather,to be dedicated here to the unfinished work which they who fought here have thus far so nobly advanced.It is ra
42、ther for us to be here dedicated to the great task remaining before us.that from these honored dead we take increased devotion to that cause for which they gave the last full measure of devotion.that we here highly resolve that these dead shall not have died in vain.that this nation,under God,shall
43、have a new birth of freedom.and that government of the people.by the people.for the people.shall not perish from the earth.95 Four score and seven years ago,our fathers brought forth upon this continent a new nation:conceived in liberty,and dedicated to the proposition that all men are created equal
44、.Now we are engaged in a great civil war.testing whether that nation,or any nation so conceived and so dedicated.can long endure.We are met on a great battlefield of that war.We have come to dedicate a portion of that field as a final resting place for those who here gave their lives that that natio
45、n might live.It is altogether fitting and proper that we should do this.But,in a larger sense,we cannot dedicate.we cannot consecrate.we cannot hallow this ground.The brave men,living and dead,who struggled here have consecrated it,far above our poor power to add or detract.The world will little not
46、e,nor long remember,what we say here,but it can never forget what they did here.It is for us the living,rather,to be dedicated here to the unfinished work which they who fought here have thus far so nobly advanced.It is rather for us to be here dedicated to the great task remaining before us.that fr
47、om these honored dead we take increased devotion to that cause for which they gave the last full measure of devotion.that we here highly resolve that these dead shall not have died in vain.that this nation,under God,shall have a new birth of freedom.and that government of the people.by the people.fo
48、r the people.shall not perish from the earth.96Punctuation u,.?u、!uI.study.IELTS.every.day.97,u宁柏宇早晨起床宁柏宇早晨起床,他睁开了双眼他睁开了双眼,他闭上了他闭上了双眼双眼。u（情感分句，正确）（情感分句，正确）uNBY got up in the morning,he opened his eyes,he closed his eyes.u（逻辑分句，错误）（逻辑分句，错误）NBY got up in the morning,he opened his eyes,and he closed his eyes.98WordsuNo ambiguous spellinguIm-I am,Thats-That isuI am studying IELTS Writing now.99RevisionuEraseruInsertionu“?”or“?”?uA sentence?SummaryContent+LanguageI4-31,54,100I5-29,52,75,98I6-30,75B-89,93,98100English for International O your best/Remind yourselfPatience/Perseverance
