1、04 素质教育篇素质教育篇 （一）（一） 根据中文和英文提示，完成一篇不少于 50 词的文段写作。文中已给出内容不计入总词数。所给 提示词语仅供选用。请不要写出你的校名和姓名。 假如你是李华，你们学校正在开展“安全月”宣传活动，倡议大家制作关于安全教育的主题海 报， 你们班交换生 Peter 给你发邮件询问相关事情。 请用英语回复一封邮件， 告诉他海报上交的时间， 并分享你设计海报的一些想法。 提示词语：design，safety rule，careful，protect，picture 提示问题：When should you hand in the poster? What would y
2、ou like to share with Peter about designing the poster? Dear Peter, Im glad to receive your email _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ If there is anything more that I can help with, please let me know. Yours, Li Hua 【写作思路】 这篇作文要求我们以李华的身份给 Peter 写一封邮件， 告诉他关于制作关于安全教育的主题海报 的相关事宜。由题目中给出的提示问题可知，短文中应包括以下内容：首先告诉 Peter 海报上交的时
3、间；然后和他分享一些设计海报的想法。第二个内容应该是短文的主体。题目中并没有规定具体的 写作内容，学生们应联系自己的实际生活，展开合理的想象，将这些内容补充完整后，用正确的英 语表达出来，这是写作中的一个难点。短文应以一般现在时为主、第一、二人称来叙述。写作时应 注意：首先要合理安排短文内容，叙述应有层次、有条理。可以使用一些表示先后顺序的词或短语， 如 First, Second, Last but not least 等等。题目中给出的提示词应该在短文中用上。其次应注意文章的 表达，英语句式的结构与汉语是不同的，因此不能根据汉语思维逐词翻译，应该从句式的整体考虑， 先确定主干结构，然后添加
4、修饰成分。为提升作文档次，应注意使用一些高级词汇、短语以及复合 句、非谓语动词等复杂结构。同时语句之间使用恰当的连接成分，使文意上下连贯，表达流畅。 【满分满分范文】范文】 Dear Peter, Im glad to receive your email. As it is required，you are supposed to hand in the poster before next Friday. Being your close friend，I am extremely willing to share some ideas about designing the poster
5、 with you. First and foremost，the basic safety rules are of great importance，which should be included in your poster. In the second place，following the safety rules is so meaningful and crucial that you had better remind your readers of its significance and advise them to be careful both in and out
6、of school. Last but by no means least， if I were you， I would add a few suggestions about safety awareness， considering that better safe than sorry. In addition，it is a good idea for you to draw a few pictures on your poster so as to make it more lively and acceptable. If there is anything more that
7、 I can help with, please let me know. Yours, Li Hua 【名师点评】 这是一篇优秀的作文，短文作者根据题目要求，给 Peter 写邮件，告诉他制作主题海报的一些事 情。短文有以下几个优点：首先文章内容完整，结构清晰，符合题目要求。除题目中给出的开头和 结尾，短文主要包括两个内容：第一段用一句话告诉 Peter 上交海报的时间；文章的中心和重点是放 在了第二段上，这一段中作者和 Peter 分享了一些制作海报的想法。主要从四个方面进行阐述，内容 非常详实，并使用了 First and foremost, In the second place, L
8、ast but by no means least, In addition 等短 语，分清了这一段的层次，叙述非常有条理。其次短文中使用了正确的时态和人称，语法规范，用 词准确， 并使用了较复杂的句式结构， 表现了作者较强的语言运用能力。 短文中较好的句型有： Being your close friend，I am extremely willing to share some ideas about designing the poster with you.、In the second place，following the safety rules is so meaningful
9、and crucial that you had better remind your readers of its significance and advise them to be careful both in and out of school、In addition，it is a good idea for you to draw a few pictures on your poster so as to make it more lively and acceptable.等。 （二） 日前某校进行了题为“有压力向谁说”的问卷调查（结果如图） ，请你根据要求写一篇英语短文参
10、加该校的征文活动。 向老师倾诉 向朋友倾诉 向家长倾诉 不跟任何人说 内容包括：1. 简要描述调查结果； 2. 你喜欢向谁倾诉压力？为什么？ 3. 提出 2 条缓解压力的建议。 要求：1. 文章必须包括所给要点，但不要逐条翻译，可进行适当拓展； 2. 书写规范，80100 词，开头已给出，不计入总词数； 3. 文中不得出现真实校名、人名。 When teens have stress, they will talk about their stress to different people. Here are the results about our survey. _ _ _ _ _ _
11、 【满分范文】【满分范文】 When teens have stress, they will talk about their stress to different people. Here are the results about our survey. Thirty-five percent of students will talk about their stress to their teachers, forty percent of students will talk to their friends, only fifteen percent of students t
12、alk to their parents but only ten percent of students talk to nobody. For me, I like to tell my friends about the pressure, because we are all the same age, they sometimes feel the same as us .and we can communicate with and understand each other easily. But as a student, we should learn to relieve
13、stress. First of all, we should properly face the pressure. Stress is everywhere in our daily life, so we cant be afraid of them and try our best to deal with them. Secondly, we can listen to light music or do some proper sports, which can let us relax. Finally, believe in yourself. We should believ
14、e in ourselves. We can deal with any trouble with the help of ourselves or others. Stress is everywhere and we must face the pressure properly. 【解析】 1. 题干解读：本篇文章属于话题性图表型作文，根据图表内容说明不同的人对压力的诉说对象不 同的情况，文中会较多的使用数字说明，做一个对比，然后阐述自己的压力喜欢对谁说以及原因， 并且提出该如何缓解压力的几条建议。建议可以从自身实际出发，自己平时是如何缓解压力的可以 一起分享。 2. 例文点评：文章采取
15、三段式，第一段对图表内容进行阐述，以及阐述自己喜欢向谁诉说压力和为 什么？第二段主要给出一些缓解压力的建议，第三段做一个总结，概括压力无处不在，但是要正视 压力。文章结构完整。段落衔接很好，语言表达清晰准确，语句简单易懂。 3. 高分亮点： 短语：talk about；the same as；communicate with；deal with；be afraid of。 句型：so 引导的并列句；because 引导的原因状语从句； （三） 习近平主席呼吁：“共同呵护好孩子的眼睛,让他们拥有一个光明的未来”,为此,学校 广播站邀请 你写一篇关于保护视力的倡议书,请根据以下信息写一篇文章： 现
16、 状 1. 越来越多的孩子带上了眼镜；2. 超过 70%的初中生近视；3. 父母和老师为此担忧； 原 因 1. 学习；2. 电子产品；3. 缺少睡眠； 建 议 1. 每天至少做两次眼保健操； 2. 多进行户外运动； 3. 健康饮食； 视力差：have poor eyesight 要求： 1. 所写内容必须包括以上表格提供的所有信息,并适当发挥； 2. 文章不少于 90 词,开头已给出,不计入总词数； 3. 语意通顺,意思连贯,条理清楚,书写规范； 4. 文中不得出现真实的姓名、校名等信息。 Poor eyesight is a serious problem among the youth o
17、f our country. Its amazing that the situation is going from bad to worse. It is time that we take the problem seriously. _ _ _ _ _ 【满分范文】【满分范文】 Poor eyesight is a serious problem among the youth of our country. Its amazing that the situation is going from bad to worse. It is time that we take the pr
18、oblem seriously. At present, more and more students wear glasses, over 70 % of the middle school students have poor eyesight. Both parents and teachers are worried about it. Here are some main causes. First, some students spend too much time reading or doing their homework without a rest. Second, so
19、me students even like to watch TV or use computers for a long time.Third, some students may not have enough sleep. In order to have good eyesight, we should do eye exercises at least twice a day. We can also try to do more sports in our spare time. We had better eat healthy food. Of course, it is im
20、portant to have a good habit of using our eyes. For example, we shouldnt read in the sun or in bed. I think all of us should understand the importance of protecting eyes and try our best to protect them. 【解析】 题干分析：这是一篇要求写一篇关于保护视力的倡议书，响应习近平主席呼吁：“共同呵护好孩子的 眼睛,让他们拥有一个光明的未来”，观察提示表格，写作内容要包括目前的现在，还有产生这些问题
21、的原因，已经提出的相关建议。 例文点评：这是一篇优秀的例文，很好的完成了试题规定的任务，语言表达符合英语习惯，准确的 运用的时态，例文中运用的是一般现在时。例文第一段首先提出了目前我国青少年视力不良的社会 问题；第二段详细的介绍了产生问题的三点原因；第三段提出有效的建议，号召保护视力。例文还 使用了一些亮点词句，增强逻辑关系，增加上下文意思连贯，用词准确，句子通顺，行文连贯。 高分亮点： 短语：At present 目前；more and more 越来越多；be worried about 担心；too much 太多；like to do sth 喜欢做某事；In order to sth
22、 为了做某事；at least 至少；try ones best to do sth 尽某人最大努力做某事； eye exercises 眼保健操；in ones spare time 在某人空闲时间。 句型： （1）First, some students spend too much time reading or doing their homework without a rest. Sb. spend time (in) doing sth 某人花费时间做某事；（2） Of course, it is important to have a good habit of using o
23、ur eyes. It is +adj. (for sb.) to do sth(对某人来说)做某事时怎样的。 （四四） 假如你是李华，你的表妹 Lily 面对即将到来的期末考试，压力很大，这几天甚至出现了失眠的 状况，请你给她写一封电子邮件，帮助她尽快调整好状态迎接考试。 提示词： relaxed； music； exercise； believe in 要求: 1. 参考提示词,可适当发挥 2. 语句通顺,意思连贯,书写工整； 3. 文中不得出现任何真实信息(姓名、校名、地名等) 4. 词数：不少于 70 词。(开头和结尾已给出，但不计入总词数。) Dear Lily, _ _ _ _ _
24、 _ _ Yours, Li Hua 【满分范文】【满分范文】 Dear Lily, Im sorry that I heard from you. I think proper pressure is normal, because exams are important for us. This happened to me. Let me tell you about my advice. You can do something you like to relax yourself. For example, I like to listen to music because some
25、 soft music can help us relax. I exercise regularly to increase my ability to work under pressure. We have to learn to believe in ourselves. If you think these suggestions is good for you ,you can have a try. I hope my suggestions can help you. Yours, Li Hua 【解析】 1.题干解读：该题目属于信件写作，要求根据来信写回信，信件内容应该完整地
26、给出相关建议，帮 助她尽快调整好状态迎接考试。适当使用副词和连词等增加亮点。写好时，再阅读一遍，减少语法 错误，不要犯单词拼写上的错误。 2.例文点评：这是一篇优秀的例文，完整地给出相关缓解考试压力的建议，避免出现累赘。例文结 构清晰，行文连贯，恰当地运用了副词和连词等用以过渡，增强了整篇文章的逻辑关系。 3.高分亮点： 词组： heard from； proper pressure； my advice； relax yourself； soft music； exercise regularly； believe in ourselves；is good for 等； 句型： I thin
27、k proper pressure is normal, because exams are important for us. /Let me tell you about my advice./For example, I like to listen to music because some soft music can help us relax. /If you think these suggestions is good for you ,you can have a try ./I hope my suggestions can help you. 【点睛】 书面表达： 首先
28、认真审题，看清题目中的要求和要点；然后根据提示内容，列出写作要点及每个要点中可能要 用到的表达， 例如 heard from； proper pressure； my advice； relax yourself； soft music； exercise regularly； believe in ourselves；等；然后紧扣要点，动笔写作，在写作过程中，要注意句与句、段与段之间的 过渡，必要时可适当运用表示转折、因果、并列、比较等关系的连词，使文章过渡平稳，自然流畅， 如 however；最后，要仔细检查有无单词拼写错误、标点符号误用等，还要检查语法结构是否合理， 有无重复、啰嗦的语言
29、，大小写是否正确，词数是否符合要求等。 （五五） 今年 3 月 5 号学雷锋纪念日，你校组织志愿者去夕阳红敬老院开展“学雷锋，送温暖”活动。假 如你是学生张华，请将活动情况介绍给你的美国笔友 Ben，分享这次美好的经历。 活动时间 3 月 5 日 活动地点 夕阳红敬老院（Xiyanghong Nursing Home) 参加人员 学校志愿者 活动内容 1. 送鲜花和水果 2.帮助打扫卫生 3. 活动感想 1.关爱和尊重老人 2. 要求： (1)表达清楚，语法正确，上下文连贯； (2)必须包括表格中的所有信息，并按要求适当发挥； (3)词数：100 左右（开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数） ； (
30、4)不得使用真实姓名、校名和地名等。 Dear Ben, Thank you for your last email. Let me tell you what we did in our school on March 5. _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ Id like to hear about volunteering work in your school. Best wishes, Zhang Hua 【满分范文】【满分范文】 Dear Ben, Thank you for your last email. Let me tell you what we did in our sc
31、hool on March 5. As soon as we got to Xiyanghong Nursing Home, people there gave us a warm welcome. The elderly people were very excited to see us. We brought some flowers and fruits to them. Then, we cleaned the windows and swept the floor for them. After that, some of us took a walk with them, cha
32、tted with each other and some of us played chess with them. When it was time for us volunteers to leave, they were thankful for our kindness and they felt somewhat sad. I promise to myself that I will go to see them whenever Im free. We should care for the elderly people and respect them. Id like to
33、 hear about volunteering work in your school. Best wishes, Zhang Hua 【解析】 1.题干解读：本文是一篇书信作文，你校组织志愿者去夕阳红敬老院开展“学雷锋，送温暖”活动。假 如你是学生张华， 请将活动情况介绍给你的美国笔友 Ben， 分享这次美好的经历。 。 首先要认真审题， 根据提示内容，列出写作要点及每个要点中可能要用到的表达；然后紧扣要点，动笔写作。 2.例文点评：本文时态为一般过去时态，人称主要为第一人称。文章紧扣题目要点，内容完整，表 述准确，语言的表述符合语法的结构，造句符合英语的表达习惯。 3.高分亮点： 短语：
34、as soon as ； get to；give sb. a warm welcome；bring sth. to sb.；take a walk with sb.；be thankful for 句型：As soon as we got to Xiyanghong Nursing Home, people there gave us a warm welcome.；When it was time for us volunteers to leave, they were thankful for our kindness and they felt somewhat sad. （六六） 寒
35、假即将来临，你一定有你的寒假计划吧？你校英语俱乐部开展了以“My plan for the winter holiday”为主题的征文活动，请根据下面的思维导图，写一篇英语短文向英语俱乐部投稿。 寒假计划 学习 1.功课（作业、复习） 2.阅读（类型、原因） 兴趣 1.运动 2.艺术 其他 1.旅游 2. 要求：1）表达清楚，语法正确，上下文连贯； 2）必须包括中所有要点内容，并适当发挥； 3）词数：100 词左右（开头已给出，不计入总词数） ； 4）不得使用真实姓名、校名和地名等。 My plan for the winter holiday Winter holiday is coming
36、. Here is my plan for the winter holiday. _ _ _ _ 【满分范文】【满分范文】 My plan for the winter holiday Winter holiday is coming. Here is my plan for the winter holiday. First, Ill keep on doing some sports such as playing Ping-Pong and running. I think they are good for my health. Next, I hope to relax by re
37、ading some books and watching TV. Whats more, I must finish the exercises left by teachers, because I will go to see my grandparents with mom and dad. I miss them very much. So do they. Finally, I would like to travel somewhere interesting with my parents. Probably Ill go to Hainan. I want to enjoy
38、the beautiful beaches there. This is my plan for the winter holiday. Im looking forward to my happy winter holiday! 【解析】 题干解读：本题列出了详细的思维导图，可以根据这篇思维导图来完成自己的文章，可以按照思维 导图的形式来分段，本文是写自己的寒假计划，所以时态注意要用将来时。 例文点评：本文按照自己的顺序详细地描述了自己的寒假计划，过渡词用的很好，并且时态也是根 据作者所需作出了适当的变化，条理清晰，文笔流畅。 高分亮点： 短语：keep on；good for；Whats
39、more；would like to 句型：I miss them very much. So do they. Finally, I would like to travel somewhere interesting with my parents. （七七） Write at least 60 words on the topic“Weekend or Not？“according to the information given （阅读 以下内容，并以“这是汤姆的周末吗？“为题写一篇不少于 60 个词的短文，标点符号不占格 ） 如今，很多孩子在父母的安排下没有了自己的周末，如下图中的 Tom，请分析图中的这种现 象并谈谈你的看法，以 Weekend or Not？为题写一篇不少于 60 个词的英语短文，向 Parents 杂 志投稿，让父
