1、Writing a Travel Diary 新目标八年级上册新目标八年级上册unit 1 通过这节课的学习，同学们需要达到下列要求。 Knowing how to correct a composition. Understanding the standards of a good composition. Being able to write a travel diary. Learning to work and exchange opinions with others. Wanfo Lake Mount Huang lets readlets read August 24,201
2、6 Tuesday Sunny I went to visit the Great Wall with my friends during the summer vacation. We went there by bus. It took us about two hours to get to there. It was hot and windy . There were thousands people. When we saw a group of foreigners,we went up and talked with them. We told them lots of his
3、tory of the Great Wall. They were very surprised when they saw that our English were exellent and we knew a lot about the Great Walls history. They thanked us a lot and we really had a good time. We feel proud of ourselves and being Chinese. It was a pleasant trip . I will never forget it. What does
4、 the writer want to express? When to go With whom Where to go How to get What to do How to feel August 24,2016 Tuesday With friends The Great Wall By bus Talked with foreigners about the Great Wall A pleasant trip, never forget Travel to the Great Wall Lets get main information from the diary. Augus
5、t 24,2016 Tuesday Sunny I went to visit the Great Wall with my friends during the summer vacation. We went there by bus. It took us about two hours to get to there. It was hot and windy . There were thousands people. When we saw a group of foreigners,we went up and talked with them. We told them lot
6、s of history of the Great Wall. They were very surprised when they saw that our English were exellent and we knew a lot about the Great Walls history. They thanked us a lot and we really had a good time. We feel proud of ourselves and being Chinese. It was a pleasant trip . I will never forget it. 作
7、文修改的思路作文修改的思路 连词：连词：适当运用连词使文章的结构更紧凑。适当运用连词使文章的结构更紧凑。 but, because, when, if, at first, after that, finally, that is to say 句型：句型：适当用一些主从复合句，如定语从句，适当用一些主从复合句，如定语从句， 宾语从句，状语从句等使语言更丰富。宾语从句，状语从句等使语言更丰富。 语法语法: 时态，语态，拼写，词性，主谓一致，时态，语态，拼写，词性，主谓一致， 名词单复数，词的搭配等方面避免错误。名词单复数，词的搭配等方面避免错误。 Eg Eg ：Correct these se
8、ntences.Correct these sentences. I go to the beach yesterday morning. Jack like playing tennis very much. We entered into a history museum. I got lost . I arrived there late. You should drive as careful as possible went s so carefully Discuss Discuss how to correct the diary how to correct the diary
9、 with your partner with your partner August 24,2016 Tuesday Sunny I went to visit the Great Wall with my friends during the summer vacation. We went there by bus. It took us about two hours to get to there. It was hot and windy . There were thousands people. When we saw a group of foreigners,we went
10、 up and talked with them. We told them lots of history of the Great Wall. They were very surprised when they saw that our English were exellent and we knew a lot about the Great Walls history. They thanked us a lot and we really had a good time. We feel proud of ourselves and being Chinese. It was a
11、 pleasant trip . I will never forget it. of was It was a pleasant trip that I will never forget. excellent felt 一篇好作文的要求一篇好作文的要求 1. 切中题意，包含所有要点。切中题意，包含所有要点。 2. 条理清楚，层次分明，条理清楚，层次分明， 分段准确。分段准确。 3. 语句通顺、准确、连贯，语句通顺、准确、连贯， 适当用一些连词。适当用一些连词。 4. 杜绝任何不应出现的小错误。杜绝任何不应出现的小错误。 5. 书写工整、清晰，无涂改。书写工整、清晰，无涂改。 Discuss
12、 if this diary is a good composition May 6, 2017 Saturday cloudy Today I visited Sanhe Town with my family. We took the bus there. It took about forty minutes to get there. Though it is a small town, there are lots of interesting things to do. Firstly, we enjoyed the acient houses as we were taking
13、a walk in the streets. The houses in Hui style were built handreds of years ago. And we also visited the homes of some famous people. At noon ,we had lunch in a small restaurant. We had some rice dumplings and the wine which was made from rice. They were delicious and famous. After that we went boat
14、ing on the river. Before going back home, we bought a box of rice wine. We enjoyed ourselves there. Even though we felt a bit tired, it was a pleasant trip. May 6, 2017 Saturday cloudy Today I visited Sanhe Town with my family. We took the bus there. It took about forty minutes to get there. Though
15、it is a small town, there are lots of interesting things to do. Firstly, we enjoyed the acient houses as we were taking a walk in the streets. The houses in Hui style were built handreds of years ago. And we also visited the homes of some famous people. At noon ,we had lunch in a small restaurant. W
16、e had some rice dumplings and the wine which was made from rice. They were delicious and famous. After that we went boating on the river. Before going back home, we bought a box of rice wine. We enjoyed ourselves there. Even though we felt a bit tired, it was a pleasant trip. 时间与天气时间与天气 总体介绍总体介绍 详细说
17、明详细说明 连词使文章连词使文章 结构更紧凑结构更紧凑 多种句子结多种句子结 构使文章构使文章 更具文采更具文采 总结概括总结概括 条理清楚，层次分明，结构合理。条理清楚，层次分明，结构合理。 写作思路写作思路 What am I going to write about? What details am I going to include in the diary? How am I going to organize the details? 细节细节 lets write a travel diary Discuss the questions with your partners.
18、Where did you go? Why did you choose to go there? How did you get there? With whom did you go there? What did you do? What did you see or hear? Was there anything special? If so ,what was it? What did you think of the trip? Write your own travel diary. Read your partners diary, and give your advice on how to make it better. Correct your own diary to make it better. lets try writing a travel diary Bye -bye
