1、Through the ice 读后续写（满分25分） 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 About a half-mile behind our Minnesota farm lay a pond. In summer, my brother Harry and I would run through a stand of oak trees to skip stones there. The pond wore a collar of black mud. It was not a place for swimming. In late summer, the
2、pond would be covered by a green and bubbly scum(起泡的浮渣). Sometimes a strong, unpleasant smell rose from it. We stayed away. When winter came, the pond was once again an inviting place. One day when ice covered it, Harry said to me, “Try walking across.” The ice looked solid. No water showed through
3、it, but I hesitated. “Go ahead.” Harry urged. “Try it. Youre lighter than I am. If the ice holds, we can run and slide carefully on it. Itll be fun.” I wanted to please Harry, and I thought about the fun of a long slide on the ice. I began to slide across the pond. In the middle of the pond, the ice
4、 gave way with a sudden crack(裂缝)! I stretched out(伸展) my arms. The next thing I knew I was hanging on to the edge of a hole in the ice by arms outstretched on the ice. From my shoulders down I hung in icy water. I thought of the bottom of the pond. I knew it would be black and awful down there, ful
5、l of mud and maybe rotting creatures. I tried to climb out of the hole, but when I got a knee on the ice, it broke like window glass. Again and again I tried to get out. Again and again the ice broke into pieces. The hole widened. I was wearing a coat of heavy material. As it became completely wet,
6、it dragged me down. I was tired of the struggle and rested with my arms stretched out on the ice. I looked at Harry on shore. He seemed rooted to the spot. “I cant get out!” I screamed when I caught some breath. 注意： 1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右； 2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语； 3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好； 4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标
7、出你所使用的关键词语。 Paragraph 1: Harry turned and ran from the pond. Paragraph 2: The moment I crashed through the kitchen door, sobbing, mum rushed over. A story when where who what how why Reading for a story Reading for setting I Harry a pond lay behind our farm wore a collar of black mud a green and bub
8、bly scum sometime smelly unsuitable for swimming stay away an inviting place brothers skip stones In summer In winter contrast overt plot Setting Inciting incident Climax Resolution Denouement Events A. The pond in winter was so inviting in winter that I decided to slide across it at the instigation
9、 of my brother. B. I strived to climb out of the icy water by myself, but in vain. C. With the ice cracking, I fell into a hole in the ice. D. The pond behind our farm was not suitable for swimming in the summer. D A Reading for plot Covert plot Time Events Mood Before I slid across the pond Harry _
10、 me to go first because of my lighter weight. In order to _him and have fun, I _. I felt _ but_. When I was in the middle of the pond With ice _ suddenly, I fell into a hole. Arms _ on the ice and body _in the icy water, I was _ in the hole. I got _ and _. When I tried to save by myself I attempted
11、to climb out of the icy hole several times but _. The heavy coat, _ worsened the terrible situation. I was _ and _. When I looked at Harry Harry was _. I _ at him for _. I was _ but _. urged hesitated cracking shocked hanging in vain exhausted becoming wet through and dragging me down willing agreed
12、 outstretched trapped /caught rooted to the spot screamed his help scared anxious please How about Harry? hopeful nervous Inferring the development Paragraph 1: Harry turned and ran from the pond. Paragraph 2: The moment I crashed through the kitchen door, sobbing, mum rushed over. Infer the develop
13、ment from the given sentences I was rescued. Inferring the development Paragraph 1: Harry turned and ran from the pond. Paragraph 2: The moment I crashed through the kitchen door, sobbing, mum rushed over. I was rescued. Raise questions about the development Inferring the development Paragraph 1: Ha
14、rry turned and ran from the pond. Paragraph 2: The moment I crashed through the kitchen door, sobbing, mum rushed over. I was rescued. Raise questions about the development What was my response to his leaving? Did he really leave me alone? How was I rescued? What did mum react to the accident? How c
15、an the story be ended rationally? Inferring the development Paragraph 1: Harry turned and ran from the pond. 1 What was my response to his leaving? 2 Did he really leave me alone? 3 How was I rescued? Feeling: dismay; disappointment; despair Action: wonder; exclaim Let “body language” speak! Way: wi
16、th the help of an oak branch Action: push; wriggle; grab; drag Let “action” speak! How to express disappointment / dismay: 皱眉皱眉 “Where could he go?” I murmured with a fierce frown. 失望地看失望地看 I shot/threw/cast a frustrated look at him. 摇头摇头 I just shook my head in hopelessness. 哭哭 Tears of grievance (
17、委屈) /rivns/ came into my eyes with the figure of my brother out of sight. Staring at the familiar figure out of sight, I was trembling with rage and chill. 颤抖颤抖 Let “body language” speak! Tips for writing _ by a strong sense of nervousness and anxiety, Harry didnt know what to do, his heart _wildly.
18、 A flush of frustration _ from the bottom of my heart, I froze with terror, trembling in icy water and hard to breathe. The thought of being abandoned/deserted by Harry _ my mind, dismay and despair _ in my heart. The icy water _ my skin with needle-like chill as I was _(湿透) to the skin and _(颤抖). D
19、esperate and exhausted, I was on the verge of_(奔溃). “Harry. Dont leave me alone.” I _ at the top of the lung. As I looked at his back, I_, “Is he running for help, or is he running way and leaving me alone?” Seized/ Consumed/ Overwhelmed surging occupying beating /pounding accumulated Show more than
20、 tell! pierced soaked trembling/shivering collapse exclaimed wondered How did Harry save me by using an oak branch? push vt. 推动推动 grab vt. 抓住，攫取抓住，攫取 drag vt. 拖，拉，拽，拖，拉，拽，扯扯 flop vi. 扑通落下扑通落下 wriggle vi. 蠕动，蜿蜒而行蠕动，蜿蜒而行 _ to his stomach, Harry _ the branch before him and _ toward me. When a slender t
21、op branch was within _, I grabbed it. Eventually, I was _ from the icy water. Flopping pushed wriggled reach dragged Let “action” speak! Let “action” speak! Seeing Harry _ back to the pond with a long stick in his hand, I was _ with fresh blood. The next few minutes _ his dragging me to the shore in
22、ch by inch. Finally _ Harry with a long rope. “_ it.” He _ one end of the rope to me. Desperate to escape from the chilly pond, I _ the lifeline tightly and was eventually _ up to the shore. _ out my arms, I _ the oak branch with all my strength and _ carefully out of the hole inch by inch. I _ even
23、tually. storming injected saw/witnessed came Grab threw/cast/ flung grasped dragged/pulled Stretching seized survived crawled Continuing the story Paragraph 2: The moment I crashed through the kitchen door, sobbing, mum rushed over. 1 What was my mums first reaction? 2 What lesson did I learn from t
24、he experience? That day impressed a lifelong lesson on me Always stay away from potential risks and bear in mind that curiosity kills cats. As life has it, not until we encounter something adventurous will we be aware of precious warnings. The pond was still so inviting to young Harry and me, especi
25、ally when winter came again. I was temporarily comforted and relieved but I would never forget the life- risking experience and never act so blindly again. A story is an accident, which begins with a problem and ends with a solution. A good story often has a good theme. A better story “shows more th
26、an tells”. A great story displays details properly. Tips for writing Para. 1 He turned and ran from the pond. Staring at his familiar figure out of sight, I wondered: “Is he running for help, or is he running away and leaving me sliding to the bottom?” Dismay and scare beat me out of breath. The icy
27、 water pierced my skin with needle-like chill. I was anxious to climb out by myself, but countless previous failures froze me from struggling again. After what seemed to be centuries of fruitless waiting, I was on the verge of collapse. Just at that moment, here dashed Harry with a large, black, V-s
28、haped oak branch. Flopping to his stomach, he pushed the branch before him and wriggled toward me. The moment a slender top branch was within reach, I grabbed it immediately and was eventually dragged out of the icy water by Harry. What a narrow escape! We stumbled home, with my clothes dripping(滴水)
29、and my overshoes squishing(发出嘎吱声) and squirting(喷 出) water. Appreciate a possible version Appreciate a possible version Para. 2: I crashed through the kitchen door, sobbing, mum rushed over. Unbuttoning my coat, and stripping(脱去) my clothes from me, she gave me a quick bath and then nimbly wrapped a
30、 thick blanket over me to stop my teeth-chattering chill; meanwhile she gave me a cup of milk to warm me up. I tearfully complained to her about all that had happened and Harry was lectured about getting a younger sibling into such a trouble. His head drooping, Harry murmured an apology to me. I was
31、 temporarily comforted and relieved but in fact, the pond was still a permanent temptation to young Harry and me, especially when winter came again. Assignment Polish your writing according to tips for writing. Share your writing with your classmates. Try to learn from your classmate and meantime give some advice on improving their writing. Thank you!
