1、读后续写20212021年普通高等学校招生年普通高等学校招生 全国统一考试广州二模全国统一考试广州二模Continuation Writing第二节 （满分25分） 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Aram and Rossis Bakery Walking along the narrow brick sidewalk, Aram took a deep breath. The air smelled of lemons and baked bread and coffee, coming from Rossis Italian Bakery. He
2、 was almost there. Aram still couldnt believe his luck. All his friends were working boring summer jobs waiting tables and babysitting. And here he was, about to start as an actualbakers assistant, doing what he loved. It was all thanks to his Aunt Rita. She knew Mrs Rossi and had arranged everythin
3、g. It was the perfect experience for his future career. Rossis Bakery, he was sure, would one day be known as the place where he got his start. Ah, here he was the bakery. A faded wooden sign over the door read “Rossiss Bakery.” Aram straightened his shoulders and entered. Mrs Rossi was sitting at t
4、he counter, looking old and wise. Aram greeted her and stuck out his hand. Mrs Rossi looked at it for a second before turning around and waving him inside. “Im ready to learn everything,” Aram said. “Great. Lets start with the cash-register, Mrs Rossi said, “because thats what youll be doing.” She s
5、howed him how to use the cash register. It wasnt hard. The pastry trays were all marked by price; and there werent that many choices anyway. “Thats it?” Aram said, his heart sinking “But when do we bake?” “Bake? I order wholesale now. No more baking, Im too old.” Then Mrs Rossi silently held up her
6、hands. Aram took in her knotted, swollen fingers, and he understood. A wave of disappointment struck him. Sadness overwhelmed him so suddenly that he couldnt think of a word to say. He sighed, and Mrs Rossi sighed, too. “I used to bake it all. Bread and cakes. And no one did it better than me. But t
7、hat was when these things worked,” said Mrs Rossi, holding up her hands once more and glancing across the shelves filled with empty bottles labelled with names of the various ingredients (配料) she once used. Suddenly she came alive, waving her arthritic（关节炎的）hands. “People used to line up around the
8、corner. Everyone wanted my baked bread.”注意： 1. 续写词数应为150左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Then a thought occurred to Aram that he could ask Mrs Rossi to teach him. _ Mrs Rossi finally said, “Lets buy the ingredients first? _Storywhenwherewhowhathowwhysummerin Rossis Italian BakeryAram，Mrs Rossi，Aunt Ritawan
9、ted to learn bakerydo what he loved一、准确理解材料，理清人物事件一、准确理解材料，理清人物事件 1. 浅层信息理解浅层信息理解 首先要审题：体裁：_；人称：_；主体时态：_。记叙文第三人称一般过去时2. 深层信息理解深层信息理解 理清故事的发展线索（理清故事的发展线索（How）PARAGRAPH（段落）（段落）Behaviors（行为）（行为）Topic（段意）（段意）Walking along，smelled of，coming from，start as，be known as，got his startAram went to Mrs Rossis B
10、akery to learn bakery with high expectations, and do what he lovedPara. 1 & 22. 深层信息理解深层信息理解 理清故事的发展线索（理清故事的发展线索（How）PARAGRAPH（ 段 落 ）（ 段 落 ） 及 时及 时间线索间线索Behaviors（行为）（行为）Topic（段意）（段意）straightened ，entered，was sitting，greeted ，stuck out，waving him inside，ready to learn everything，start with，were all
11、marked，his heart sinkingWhen Aram entered Mrs Rossis Bakery , she was disappointed to find that she could not learn to bake.Para. 3 & 4PARAGRAPH（段落）（段落）Behaviors（行为）（行为）Topic（段意）（段意）held up，took in，struck ，understood，struck，couldnt think of a word to sayThe old lady looked at her arthritic fingers,
12、disappointed.Para. 52. 深层信息理解深层信息理解 理清故事的发展线索（理清故事的发展线索（How）PARAGRAPH（段落）（段落）Behaviors（行为）（行为）Topic（段意）（段意）sighed，no one did it better than，glancing ，glancing ，filled with，worked，came alive，waving，line up around，Mrs Rossi recalled the success of her shop.Para. 6判断细节描写类型：判断细节描写类型：心理活动；动作 ；环境；外貌性格。通过c
13、ouldnt believe；boring ；perfect ；was sure；looking old and wise；his heart sinking ；silently ；A wave of disappointment struck him，Sadness overwhelmed，couldnt think of a word to say，sighed，alive等词汇生动刻画了Aram热爱烘焙，立志要把它作为事业的开端，体察和同情Mrs Rossi的失望；同时展现了Mrs Rossi热爱烘焙，但由于老了，手指得了关节炎，她对自己的事业，自己的店面非常惋惜、悲伤、失望等心情，故事
14、发展情感自然且真挚。3. 整合本篇的整合本篇的故事故事情节和情感线索：情节和情感线索：开端背景 Aram经介绍到驰名面包店当助理，即将从事最喜欢的职业。他踌躇满志，在前往面包店的途中憧憬着美好的未来，想象着事业的腾飞故事发展 矛盾冲突1：他成为面包师的职业发展进程中他与面包师Mrs Rossi见面时，一开始遭遇了冷遇，只被分派了收银的工作； 矛盾冲突2： Mrs Rossi双手患关节炎不能再亲手烤制面包的悲伤情景； 矛盾冲突3：Mrs Rossi惋惜地看着架上贴上各种配料标签的空瓶子二、分析续写段首，确定续写方向 根据段首句1（Aram突然想到，他可以请罗西太太来教他）结合面包店的招牌香味，
15、“手”在烤面包技艺中的关键作用，Mrs Rossi对Aram的手的凝视，Mrs Rossi对昔日盛况的回忆。结合续写第二段首句Mrs Rossi答应了Aram的请求，设想故事高潮 ： Aram希望能成为像你一样的面包师 Mrs Rossi 肯定Aram有完美的手指可用来做面包 Aram要求让他做Mrs Rossi的手。 根据段首句 2 （最后Mrs Rossi说：“我们先买食材吧？”）及文章标题可知本段主要描述Mrs Rossi传授手艺的过程及揭示了故事结局：面包店由Rossis Bakery变成了Aram and Rossis Bakery，设想以下情节：买食材指导Aram如何根据每种食材的
16、特点制作出最好的面包和蛋糕Aram and Rossi s Bakery再次让许多人在街角排队。二、分析续写段首，确定续写方向三、高分范文：高分范文：One possible version: Then a thought occurred toAram that he could ask Mrs Rossi to teach him. “Mrs Rossi,” Aram said, “I still remember the smell of the bread and cakes bought from your bakery when I was a child. How Iwish I
17、 could be a baker like you.” Mrs Rossi squeezed out a smile, “But Im old now and my fingers are no longer nimble.”Aram took a deep breath and responded carefully in a low voice, “What do you think of my fingers? Do you think theyare fit for baking?” “Yes, I noticed you had the perfect fingers for a
18、baker.” “Then, would you please let me be your hands and restart baking?” begged Aram expectantly. 三、高分范文：高分范文： Mrs Rossi finally said,“Lets buy the ingredients first.” Delightedly, they shut the door and headed for the supermarket. Two hours later, those long-empty bottles were full of ingredients
19、again and Mrs Rossi seemed as overjoyed and hopefulas Aram. Every day, Mrs Rossi instructed Aram about the features of eachingredient and how they work together to make the best bread and cakes. Aramburied himself in the bakery and day by day, his skills gradually improved. Two years later, the now
20、Aram and Rossis Bakery again has people lining up around the corner. 【名师导学名师导学】文本选材属于文本选材属于“人与自我人与自我”主题语主题语境下的境下的“做人与做事做人与做事”主题群，核心主旨指向个人努主题群，核心主旨指向个人努力成就自我发展，符合社会主义核心价值观。续文与力成就自我发展，符合社会主义核心价值观。续文与前文之间、段首句与段落续文之间、第一段续文结尾前文之间、段首句与段落续文之间、第一段续文结尾与第二段首句之间进行了有效衔接。符合与第二段首句之间进行了有效衔接。符合“六六”性：性：故事完整性、时态一致性、语法正确性、语言手段丰故事完整性、时态一致性、语法正确性、语言手段丰富多样性、语言风格与原文风格一致性以及上下文流富多样性、语言风格与原文风格一致性以及上下文流畅性。划线部分是选用与续写情节内容相关联的文本畅性。划线部分是选用与续写情节内容相关联的文本线索词，通过照应、替代、词汇复现等方法帮助完成线索词，通过照应、替代、词汇复现等方法帮助完成读后续写。读后续写。名师导学祝同学们高考成功！
