1、C o n t i n u a t i o n W r i t i n g 读后续写之given passagecontinuation writingOur problems in continuation writingThe creative plot is not consistent with the authors writing purpose.谋篇布局谋篇布局与原与原文叙述意图不文叙述意图不一致一致The advanced expressions are not fit for the given passage.语言风格与原语言风格与原文不一致文不一致The details
2、are contradictory to the given passage.细节内容与原细节内容与原文不一致文不一致Learning objectivesIn order to make the continuation writing coherent khrnt(衔接)to the given passage in both content and language,we are going to1.pay attention to the 6 elements of the story(5W1H).2.analyze the authors writing purpose.3.focu
3、s on the language features which we may apply in the continuation writing.What are the six elements of a story?A story1.Who(characters&relationship)2.When(the order of time&tense)3.Where(the order of space)4.What(development)5.Why(theme&feelings)6.How(language features)1.Read for the basic informati
4、on(who,when,where,what)Who Person:Characters and their relationship:When Main tense:Expressions about time:Where Expressions about space:The third personEmily White,her former music teacher Mrs.Owens,her new music teacher Mr.ButtlerThe past tenseeach year;Christmas season;last year;this year;that ni
5、ght;the next day;finally,the day of performance in Emily Whites hometown;in the school auditorium;choral room;on the door of the choral room Seventeen years ago;yearly;Predict a positive ending（正能量原则）（正能量原则）1.BeginningHer _ body figure.&A yearly outdoor _.2.Build-upShe _by Mrs.Owens but_by Mr.Buttle
6、r and _ the testing performance.3.Problem or dilemmaWaiting for the _ anxiously4.SolutionPara 1:The next day,Emily nervously glanced at the list on the door of the choral room.?5.EndingPara 2:Finally,the day of performance came.?strangeperformancewas rejectedwas encouragedfinishedresultShe succeeded
7、 in finishing the performance.Her name was on the list.Task 1 Read beyond lines The passage is divided into four parts.Try to figure out what the writer implies and how Emilys feeling changed.Read Part 1&2 again and answer the questions.(5 min)2 Read for the theme and feelings(why)Emily White was bo
8、rn seventeen years ago with so many birth problems in her body.Some of her organs,bones and muscles were out of shape.No one expected her to survive.She did make it but with her strange body figure,everyone could recognize her,even from a distance.In Emily Whites hometown,there was a yearly outdoor
9、performance in the school auditorium(礼堂).It had been performed for so many years and actually had become one of the most important events of the Christmas season for many of the towns people.Many people tried out each year for it but so many were turned away.It can only include the most excellent pe
10、ople in the field.The performance was _ for Emily to join in.more challengingFeelings:confidenthurt&upsetdiscouraged The writer implies that Mrs Owens was one of the people who _ Emily only from her _.Emily had a beautiful singing voice.Last year she went to Mrs.Owens-her music teacher to ask to joi
11、n in the performance.Without letting her sing,Mrs.Owens took a look at Amys body and said,“Child,you just dont fit.Everyone would stare at you and that would make you uncomfortable.It would make them uncomfortable,too.Without singing a single note,Emily was sent back through the door of the choral r
12、oom.Hurt and upset,she decided never to try out again.But Mrs.Owens then retired.judgedappearance Read Part 3&4 again and answer the questions.(5 min)2 Read for the theme and feelings(why)Feelings:confidenthurt&upsetdiscouragedThe writer implies that the _ Mr.Buttlers support was _ to Emily.unconfid
13、ent,nervous,grateful This year,there came a new music teacher,Buttler.He heard about Emily and suggested that she have a try.Emily didnt want to be rejected again,so she hesitated a little about it.As Emily struggled,the door was pushed open and Mr.Buttler called,“Emily,youre next.”Although kind of
14、nervous.Emily did as Mr.Buttler told her to do,Mr.Buttler sat by the piano to keep Emily company.When Emily finished her testing performance,she thanked Mr.Buttler and knew the result would be posted on the door of the choral room the next day.of great importancecaringFeelings:confidenthurt&upsetdis
15、couragedThe writer implies that this performance was_Emily.unconfident,nervous,gratefulanxious,painful,stressful,hopeful Emily couldnt sleep that night.She was suffering from the feelings that she didnt fit and the great need to be accepted.By the next morning,her stomach was even in pain because of
16、 stress.very important forPredict the change of Emilys feelings Paragraph 1:The next day,Emily nervously glanced at the list on the door of the choral room（合唱室）.Her name was on the list.Paragraph 2:Finally,the day of performance came.Her performance was very successful.confidenthurt&upsetdiscouraged
17、unconfident,nervous,gratefulanxious,painful,stressful,unconfidentnervous,surprised,joyful confidentnervous,calm,happypara 1para 2?Think about the theme of this passageBoth her confidence and Mr.Buttlers support contributed to Emilys success.3 Read for the language features(how)1.How is the passage d
18、eveloped?By time order By space order2.Which of the following descriptions of details(细节描写)are covered?(More than one anwer)dialogues actions surroundings emotions appearance1.No one expected her to survive.She did make it.2.Some of her organs,bones and muscles were out of shape.Emily had a beautifu
19、l singing voice.3.Mrs.Owens rejected Emily.Mr.Buttler supported her.3 Read for the language features(how)If one thing contrasts with another,it is very different from it.Contrast is used to achieve emphasis.Writing technique(写作手法写作手法):Writing technique(写作手法写作手法):3 Read for the language features(how)
20、Repeated verbs and phrases:“look”：recognize,take a look at,stare atRepeated sentence patterns:Without letting her sing,Mrs.Owens took a look at Amys body.Without singing a single note,Emily was sent back.Repetition（复现）（复现）is also a way to make your continuation writing coherent to the given passage.
21、Group work(5 min)1.Discuss with your partners and design the plot together.小组讨论设计续写剧情。2.List some key verbs or adjectives to get your ideas into shape.罗列关键的动词或形容词来理清思路3.Consider the theme and language features as well while plotting.主题和语言也要考虑到。4.Choose one member of your group to explain your outcom
22、e.选一成员来向大家解释你们的续写设计。Task 3 Design the plotPresent and explain your outcomes.1.Read for.2.Read for.3.Read for.In order to make the continuation writing coherent(衔接)to the given passage both in content and language,.the basic information(who,where,what,when,)the theme and feelings(why)the language features(how)Homework Finish the continuation writing and make sure it is coherent(衔接)to the given passage both in content and language.NoImageTHANKS
