1、市青年教师优质课比赛市青年教师优质课比赛新教材读后续写新教材读后续写一、题型解读 根据所给的一段约350词的语言材料和段落的开头语进行约150词的续写，将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文。提供的短文，多以记叙文故事类文章或者夹叙夹议类文章为主，故事情节有曲折、有起伏，但故事线索的逻辑性比较强。就目前浙江卷的已考过的读后续写来看，都属于“problem-solving”的思路。二、评分标准1.与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度；2.内容的逻辑性和丰富性；3.上下文的连贯性；4.文中语法结构和词汇的准确性、丰富性。1.读懂原文理清五个W和一个H：人物who、地点where、时间
2、when、事件what、原因why及怎样发展how。2.构思情节，谋篇布局(1)按原文中事件的发生，构思好合理的“下一步”情节，需符合逻辑。三、解题步骤(2)利用续写部分给出的两个段落的首句进行布 局谋篇。(3)这两句话起关键作用，时间的先后、情节的 发展都要以这两句话为内在逻辑关系。(4)情节的安排，必须按照叙述的顺序，继续紧 密结合原材料中五W的逻辑顺序发展。(5)两个段落要衔接紧密，相互关联，不能独立 存在。3.优化语言 语言能力的充分体现，词汇句法的准确与复杂程度，细节描写的生动性等都将让故事更加立体、饱满。四、真题范例 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一个完
3、整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。(2020年6月浙江卷)It was summer,and my dad wanted to treat me to a vacation like never before.He decided to take me on a trip to the Wild West.We took a plane to Albuquerque,a big city in the state of New Mexico.We reached Albuquerque in the late afternoon.Uncle Paul,my dads friend,picke
4、d us up from the airport and drove us up to his farm in Pecos.His wife Tina cooked us a delicious dinner and we got to know his sons Ryan and Kyle.My dad and I spent the night in the guestroom of the farm house listening to the frogs and water rolling down the river nearby.Very early in the morning,
5、Uncle Paul woke us up to have breakfast.“The day starts at dawn on my farm,”he said.After breakfast,I went to help Aunt Tina feed the chickens,while my dad went with Uncle Paul to take the sheep out to graze(吃草).I was impressed to see my dad and Uncle Paul riding horses.They looked really cool.In th
6、e afternoon,I asked Uncle Paul if I could take a horse ride,and he said yes,as long as my dad went with me.I wasnt going to take a horse ride by myself anyway.So,my dad and I put on our new cowboy hats,got on our horses,and headed slowly towards the mountains.“Dont be late for supper,”Uncle Paul cri
7、ed,“and keep to the track so that you dont get lost!”“OK!”my dad cried back.After a while Uncle Paul and his farm house were out of sight.It was so peaceful and quiet and the colors of the brown rocks,the deep green pine trees,and the late afternoon sun mixed to create a magic scene.It looked like a
8、 beautiful woven(编织的)blanket spread out upon the ground just for us.Paragraph 1：Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse.Paragraph 2：We had no idea where we were and it got dark.1.审题与读懂原文。解题示范原文体裁原文体裁Narration()Exposition()Argumentation()原文大意原文大意In _,my dad took me on a trip to _,vis
9、iting his friend Uncle Pauls _.We enjoyed the peaceful farm life and began a _.horse rideSummerthe Wild Westfarm原文六原文六要要 素素Who：_ _When：_Where：_ _ What：_ _ _ Why：_ How:_读懂续写读懂续写段落首句段落首句圈出有用的词或可用于发展思路的词圈出有用的词或可用于发展思路的词Dad and I visited Uncle Pauls farm,and we enjoyed the farm life and began a horse ri
10、de;I,Dad,Uncle Paul,Uncle Pauls wife,Tinasummer;in the afternoonthe Wild West;Albuquerque,a big city in the state of New Mexico;the farm in Pecos/2.构思情节，谋篇布局。根据第一步中所圈出可发展情节的词，并设计情节。填入与段落开头语中填入与段落开头语中画线词有关的、你能画线词有关的、你能想到的词想到的词从四个方面设计情节，从四个方面设计情节，展开思路展开思路Reason：Dialogue：Result：Feeling：Paragraph 1：Sudd
11、enly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse.答案不唯一，由学生讨论，言之有理即可Paragraph 2：We had no idea where we were and it got dark.填入与段落开头语中填入与段落开头语中画画线词有关的、你能线词有关的、你能想到的词想到的词从四个方面设计情节，从四个方面设计情节，展开思路展开思路Reason：Dialogue：Result：Feeling：答案不唯一，由学生讨论，言之有理即可3.润色语言：善用连接词、合理描述细节、使用各种句子结构：独立结构、分词做状语、从句等。参考范文Par
12、agraph 1：Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse.This unexpected appearance frightened my horse,which made it run wildly.I tried my best to control it,but in vain.Frightened as I was,I tried to keep my balance to prevent myself from falling off.Fortunately,minutes later,the horse st
13、opped before a river,out of breath,and so did I.At that moment,my dad also came up.Seeing I was OK,he was quite relieved.But it was clear that we got lost.Paragraph 2：We had no idea where we were and it got dark.We didnt know where the farm house was.What we could do was to go back along the previou
14、s track slowly.But it was really difficult for us in such a dark situation.Just as we were at the point of desperation,we heard a faint voice from the distance.“It must be Uncle Paul,”I said.So we cried back with excitement.Finally,Uncle Paul safely brought us back home.What an amazing ride!Thank you!
