1、 Continuation writing 读后续写读后续写 真题回放真题回放第二节：读后续写（满分第二节：读后续写（满分25分）分）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。一个完整的故事。注意：注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为所续写短文的词数应为150左右；左右；2.应使用应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。R
2、equirements for writing One weekend in July,Jane and her husband,Tom,had driven three hours to camp overnight by a lake in the forest.Unfortunately,on the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel.By the time they reached the lake,Jane was so angry that she said to Tom,“Im going
3、to find a better spot for us to camp”and walked away.With no path to follow,Jane just walked on for quite a long time.After she had climbed to a high place,she turned around,hoping to see the lake.To her surprise,she saw nothing but forest and,far beyond,a snowcapped mountain top.She suddenly realiz
4、ed that she was lost.“Tom!”she cried.“Help!”No reply.If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom.Jane kept moving,but the farther she walked,the more confused she became.As night was beginning to fall,Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night.Lying awake in the dark,Jan
5、e wanted very much to be with Tom and her family.She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him.Jane rose at the break of day,hungry and thirsty.She could hear water trickling(滴落)somewhere at a distance.Quickly she followed the sound to a stream.To her great joy,she also saw some berry b
6、ushes.She drank and ate a few berries.Never in her life had she tasted anything better.Feeling stronger now,Jane began to walk along the stream and hope it would lead her to the lake.As she picked her way carefully along the stream,Jane heard a helicopter.Is that for me?Unfortunately,the trees made
7、it impossible for people to see her from above.A few minutes later,another helicopter flew overhead.Jane took off her yellow blouse,thinking that she should go to an open area and flag them if they came back again.Paragraph 1 But no helicopter came and it was getting dark again._ Paragraph 2 It was
8、day break and Jane woke up._ 注意：注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为所续写短文的词数应为150左右左右 2.应使用应使用5个以上短文中标有下划个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语你所使用的关键词语。whenwherewhowhathowwhyA story six elements of a story（6要素）要素）when who whatwhereJane&Tom camp overnigh
9、t by a lake in the forest one weekend in JulyRead for basic informationWhat happened next?Read for plots timeWhat Jane didHow Jane felton the wayAfter she had climbed As night was beginning to fallAt the break of the dayAs she picked her wayA few minutes laterquarreledwas losthad to stop for the nig
10、htfound food and waterheard a helicopterflag her blouseangryhelplessregretfuljoyfulexcited upsethopefulPara.1:But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again.Para.2:It was daybreak when she woke up.Q1:Q2:Q3:Q1:Q2:Q3:How did Jane feel?What could she do?/What difficulties did she meet?What
11、would she think about during the night?What would Jane do after waking up?Would she be saved?Who would come to save?How would they feel when meeting again?What would they do?make it logical(合逻辑的）合逻辑的）Predict to writeShe fell asleep.what would they learn from this experience?Q4:Check the underlined w
12、ordsPara.1:But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again.1.Jane was upset but determined to go out of the forest.2.She wanted to climb up a tree to flag her yellow blouse but failed.3.Jane missed Tom.4.she fell asleep.10 underlined key words:Jane,Tom,walked,climbed,lake,stream,helicopte
13、r,yellow blouse,to her great joy,at a distancePara.2:It was daybreak when she woke up.1.Jane found some berries to eat and drank water.2.She saw Tom coming.3.They were excited to see each other again and apologized.4.They reflected（反思（反思)that understanding is of importance.walked for a while and fou
14、nddown from the helicopterPolish the sentences1.Jane was upset but determined to go out of the forest.(upset as she was,she.)2.She wanted to climb up a tree to flag her yellow blouse but failed.(定语从句定语从句)3.Jane missed Tom.(动词动词ing形式做伴随状语形式做伴随状语)4.she fell asleep.（with 结构）结构）She wanted to climb up a
15、tree，_ turned out to be a failure.Upset as she was,she determined to go out of the forest.Jane,exhausted and scared,lay down near a stone,missing Tom at a distance.She fell asleep with shining tears in her eyes.which1.The smile on her face shone like a diamond.2.A smile of understanding flashed acro
16、ss her face.3.He was wild with joy.4.He stood silently,with tears rolling down his cheeks.5.I feel like I am floating in an ocean of sadness.6.Fear flooded over him.Appreciate more sentences时间先后：later,soon,then,with time going by,eventually因果或转折关系:so,therefore,instead,however,suddenly递进关系 whats more
17、,whats worse,并列关系 Besides,meanwhile,at the same timeMake the paragraph coherentPossible answer for Para.7But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again.upset as Jane was,she didnt give up.Instead,she wanted to climb up a tree to flag her yellow blouse,which turned out to be a failure.Lon
18、eliness flooded over her.Jane,exhausted and scared,lay down beside a stone,missing her husband Tom.“If only he could be with me.”Jane murmured.Just at that time,she suddenly realized it was her foolish decision that made herself in trouble.she could not help bursting into tears.Soon Jane fell asleep
19、 with shining tears in her eyes.It was daybreak when Jane woke up.Weak as she was,she struggled to her feet,continuing searching for assistance.To her great joy,a helicopter was flying overhead again and again.Eager and excited,she flagged her yellow blouse and spared no effort to yell so as to attr
20、act others attention.Fortunately,she was eventually noticed and brought into the helicopter.There,she saw her husband,a man staring at her,wearing an expression of relief.As tightly as possible,she hugged him and was too thrilled to say anything.Besides,they agreed never to quarrel again,determined
21、to live the life to the fullest.writing stepsread and understand predict the story write an outline check the underlined words polish the sentences add coherent words Assessment Criteria for Writing Items（条目）（条目）Levels（档次）（档次）Cohesion（与所给短文和段落开头衔接融合程度）（与所给短文和段落开头衔接融合程度）Use of underlined words（下划线词汇使
22、用情况）（下划线词汇使用情况）Content（内容的丰富性）（内容的丰富性）Accuracy of language（语法结构和词汇使用的准确性）（语法结构和词汇使用的准确性）Variety of language（语法结构和词汇使用的丰富性）（语法结构和词汇使用的丰富性）Coherence（上下文以及语句间的连贯性）（上下文以及语句间的连贯性）Homework1.Finish writing.2.Share your writing with your classmates.1.1.史铁生虽然自身残疾史铁生虽然自身残疾,可是对生活的热爱却无时不流露于笔端。如果没有爱可是对生活的热爱却无时不流
23、露于笔端。如果没有爱,他不会发现地坛的内在他不会发现地坛的内在;2.2.如果没有博爱如果没有博爱,他就无法观察数年来地坛的变迁他就无法观察数年来地坛的变迁,以及每一位进出地坛的人的特点以及每一位进出地坛的人的特点,只有对生活充满热爱只有对生活充满热爱,情感升华到博爱的人情感升华到博爱的人,才能那么细致地观察一切才能那么细致地观察一切,精心地记载一切精心地记载一切,用美丽的文字描述一切用美丽的文字描述一切;3.3.只有心底有爱的人只有心底有爱的人,才能感悟出人生的意义才能感悟出人生的意义,从痛苦境地爬过从痛苦境地爬过,走向光明走向光明;只有心底有爱的人只有心底有爱的人,他才会如此懂得感恩他才会如
24、此懂得感恩,知道忏悔知道忏悔,才能勇敢面对自己年轻时犯下的错才能勇敢面对自己年轻时犯下的错,才能把一切写出来才能把一切写出来,让世人得到教育与启迪。让世人得到教育与启迪。4.4.人的一生会遇到很多事很多人人的一生会遇到很多事很多人,不可能事事称心不可能事事称心,处处如意处处如意,需要我们坚强需要我们坚强,需要我们都有一颗平常心需要我们都有一颗平常心,一种平和的心态一种平和的心态,学会面对学会面对,懂得感恩。懂得感恩。5.5.记得有句禅语道记得有句禅语道，当你抱怨自己的鞋不好时当你抱怨自己的鞋不好时,却发现有人竟没有脚。所以却发现有人竟没有脚。所以,不管你是谁不管你是谁,不管你在做什么不管你在做
25、什么,都有存在的理由都有存在的理由,都要尽心尽力地去付出都要尽心尽力地去付出,这样才可以拥有无怨无悔的快乐人生这样才可以拥有无怨无悔的快乐人生6.6.作者曾这样解释自己的名字作者曾这样解释自己的名字-心血倾注过的地方不容丢弃心血倾注过的地方不容丢弃,我常常觉得这是我的姓名的昭示我常常觉得这是我的姓名的昭示,让历史铁一样地生着让历史铁一样地生着,以便不断地去看它以便不断地去看它,不是不断地去看这些文字不是不断地去看这些文字,而是借助这些蹒跚的脚印不断看那一向都在写作着的灵魂而是借助这些蹒跚的脚印不断看那一向都在写作着的灵魂,看这灵魂的可能与去向。这也可以看作是对他作品的最好的诠释。看这灵魂的可能
26、与去向。这也可以看作是对他作品的最好的诠释。7.7.因为这个故事体现了中华民族的优良传统因为这个故事体现了中华民族的优良传统,是地坛成就了一位卓越的作家是地坛成就了一位卓越的作家,在他身上体现了我们这个民族的自强不息的精神在他身上体现了我们这个民族的自强不息的精神;也是地坛成就了一位伟大的中国母亲也是地坛成就了一位伟大的中国母亲,她身上散发着母爱的光芒。她身上散发着母爱的光芒。8.8.不会讲述。史铁生的故事只是我们生活中的一个个例不会讲述。史铁生的故事只是我们生活中的一个个例,与地坛传统的文化风格不相符合与地坛传统的文化风格不相符合,参观地坛的人参观地坛的人,大多只是想了解中国丰厚的文化底蕴和
27、历史知识大多只是想了解中国丰厚的文化底蕴和历史知识,讲史铁生的故事与地坛本身所代表的旅游文化出入太大。讲史铁生的故事与地坛本身所代表的旅游文化出入太大。9.9.会讲述会讲述,但不会讲得太多。毕竟史铁生的故事与地坛本身的文化、历史结合不太大但不会讲得太多。毕竟史铁生的故事与地坛本身的文化、历史结合不太大,只是借史铁生的故事提高一下地坛的知名度只是借史铁生的故事提高一下地坛的知名度,并借此表现自己知识的丰富并借此表现自己知识的丰富,以引起游客的兴趣以引起游客的兴趣,使自己的导游工作做得更好。使自己的导游工作做得更好。10.10.散文中的物象散文中的物象,就是倾注了作者的思想与主观情感的生动鲜明的形象就是倾注了作者的思想与主观情感的生动鲜明的形象,它是作者抒怀言志的凭借与依据它是作者抒怀言志的凭借与依据,命题者常常从散文的物象入手设题命题者常常从散文的物象入手设题,常见的提问方式有联系全文常见的提问方式有联系全文,指出某物象的含义和它在结构上的作用。指出某物象的含义和它在结构上的作用。
