1、读 后 续 写 读后续写作为浙江英语高考新题型,是一种常见的“给材料作文”,它要 求学生在阅读完一篇还未写完的文章之后,根据所给出的开头语和关键词语把 这篇未写完的文章补充完整。读后续写要紧扣文章前文所述,去推想之后可能 出现的情况,要展开合理、充分的想象,构思适当的情节,写成一篇完整的文 章。读后续写有助于培养学生的想象能力、创新思维能力和语言表达能力。 选材特点 1所需阅读的短文词数在 350 以内; 2多以记叙文故事类文章或者夹叙夹议类文章为主,故事情节有曲折、有 起伏,但是,故事线索的逻辑性比较强。 评分参考 阅卷时主要考虑以下内容: 1与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度; 2内容的丰富
2、性和对所给关键词语的覆盖情况; 3应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性; 4上下文的连贯性。 注意: 1所续写短文的词数应为 150 左右(词数少于 130 的,从总分中减去 2 分); 2应使用 5 个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语; 3续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好; 4续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。 写作步骤 1精读文章,确定文章线索,如是以时间为线索还是以空间为 线索等,这有利于“顺藤摸瓜”。 2仔细审题,明确续写要求,如字数限制、使用几处下划线关键词语、续 写段落的首句提示等,做到“心中有数”。 3回扣原文,想象续写内容。快速回读短文,揣摩文章的思路,结合段首
3、 的提示语和划线词语提示,确定续写段落的内容。 4拟写草稿,修改错词病句。结合提示语和文中划线的关键词拟写出草稿, 注意句子结构的多样性,语言的丰富性,上下文的衔接。 5标出所使用的原材料中标有下划线的关键词语,最后誊写文字时,务必 做到“字迹工整、清晰”。 方法技巧 1在读懂原文的基础上,紧扣原文中心,以原文的结局为起点,写出故事 情节的发展和变化。 2对原文故事没有写出的情节展开合理的推想,打开思路。多角度地想象 出几种情况或结局,并从中加以最优选择。 3要注意前后照应,符合逻辑,防止自相矛盾。必须与上文紧密联系,使 上下文融为一体。 4原文的主要角色,续文中都要安排“戏”,但不要引进影响
4、事件结局的 新角色。 注意确保四个一致: 1要与原文的主题或作者的本来意图保持一致。 2要与原文的体裁、结构、写作手法保持一致。 3要与原文的语言特点和叙事风格保持一致。 4主要人物的思想行为、性格特点要与原文保持一致。 写作要求 阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。 A funny thing happened to Arthur when he was on the way to work one day.As he walked along Park Avenue near the First National Bank,he heard the sound of
5、 someone trying to start a car.He tried again and again but couldnt get the car moving.Arthur turned and looked inside at the face of a young man who looked worried.Arthur stopped and asked, “It looks like youve got a problem, ”Arthur said. “Im afraid so.Im in a big hurry and I cant start my car.” “
6、Is there something I can do to help?”Arthur asked.The young man looked at the two suitcases in the back seat and then said, “Thanks.If youre sure it wouldnt be too much trouble,you could help me get these suitcases into a taxi.” “No trouble at all.Id be glad to help.” The young man got out and took
7、one of the suitcases from the back seat.After placing it on the ground,he turned to get the other one.Just as Arthur picked up the first suitcase and started walking,he heard the long loud noise of an alarm It was from the bankThere had been a robbery(抢劫)! Park Avenue had been quiet a moment before.
8、Now the air was filled with the sound of the alarm and the shouts of people running from all directions.Cars stopped and the passengers joined the crowd in front of the bank.People asked each other, “What happened?” But everyone had a different answer. Arthur,still carrying the suitcase,turned to lo
9、ok at the bank and walked right into the young woman in front of him. She looked at the suitcase and then at him.Arthur was surprised.“Why is she looking at me like that?” He thought.“The suitcase!She thinks Im the bank thief!” Arthur looked around at the crowd of people.He became frightened,and wit
10、hout another thought,he started to run. 注意: 1所续写短文的词数应为 150 左右; 2应使用 5 个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语; 3续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好; 4续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。 Paragraph 1: As he was running, Arthur heard the young man shouting behind,“Stop, stop! ” Paragraph 2: The taxi stopped in front of the Police Station and Arthur 【
11、经典范文】 【范文一】 As he was running, Arthur heard the young man shouting behind,“Stop, stop! ” And also at the moment,Arthur suddenly realized that the young man might be the bank robberSo Arthur didnt stop,but continued to run until he saw a taxi.He stopped it,jumped in with the suitcase and said to the
12、driver, “Go to the police station, please.The man shouting behind is the bank thief! ”The taxi raced away like the wind. The taxi stopped in front of the Police Station and Arthur told the police what had happened.Obviously,the police had already learned about the robberyThey opened the suitcase and
13、 there was a large sum of money inside,as Arthur had expected.Then the police asked Arthur to describe the young man and the other suitcase.Later,with the information,the police caught the robber.The police and the bank both thanked Arthur a lot.(Words:153) 【范文二】 As he was running, Arthur heard the
14、young man shouting behind,“Stop, stop! ” Thinking of the way the young man had behaved, he realized the young man might be the bank robberSo Arthur ran faster and stopped a taxi.The moment he got into the taxi,he told the driver the man shouting behind was the bank thief and asked him to drive to th
15、e nearest police station.The driver followed what Arthur said and drove away. The taxi stopped in front of the Police Station and Arthur thanked the driver and directly went in.Just as Arthur was describing what had happened near the bank on Park Avenue and reported the young man to the police,he he
16、ard a voice outside, “Help!Help!” To the surprise of Arthur,it was the young man.He had followed Arthur in another taxi.It turned out that the young man was innocent and inside the suitcases were just some clothes.Arthur felt embarrassed but the policemen thanked him anyway.(Words:158) 【范文点拨】 原文所给关键
17、词分类: 地点:Park Avenue,the bank 人物:The young man,people,the bank thief 事件:suitcases,in the back seat,loud noise of an alarm,robbery,the shouts 在续写时,除了注意原文给出的关键词,还需要注意以下线索: 1Why did the young man look worried? 2What happened?But everyone had a different answer. 3Arthur became frightened and without anot
18、her thought,he started to run. A (2016 嘉兴一中质检) 阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。 Jack,a clerk at the local bank,was wandering alone on the street.It was a cold, silent winter night.His mind was on his wife Linda,who had been in a car accident two months ago and was now lying in a hospital bed,waiting f
19、or more money for her operation Jack had sold everything he had, and he had tried his best to borrow money from all the people and banks he could.But the real world is cruel. A large amount of money was still needed.To Jack, it would mean a great deal of suffering to see his wife die without any hel
20、p. “I have only one option left, ” Jack said to himself.Then he went to the bank,his workplace,again.For several days,he observed the bank and planned a theft The next day,he went to work as usual.Everything seemed normal:he joked with his workmates and helped his clients as he always did.But no one
21、 noticed that he had brought a bigger suitcase to work,instead of the small one he always carried.At 5: 00 pm, the bank closed, and the clerks and the guards had all gone home.However, at that moment,Jack was in the bathroom,and the guards didnt notice him,of course.When the noises coming from the s
22、treet were replaced by silence and everything turned dark,Jack came out from the bathroom.He first cut the lines of the alarms and monitors with tools from his new suitcase. He was all too familiar with the equipment since he had been working there for 8 years and had been studying the security syst
23、em for the past 30 days.Using a special key and some other tools,he then easily opened the doors of the safes.The banks security system wasnt very good,which allowed Jack to take a lot of money.Several minutes later,Jack left the bank with a heavy bag filled with money. 注意: 1所续写短文的词数应为 150 左右; 2应使用
24、5 个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语; 3续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好; 4续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。 Paragraph 1: After Jack had been gone from the bank for a while,the alarms began to ring. Paragraph 2: But the most unlucky man was the manager of the bank,an old man. 【写作指导】 本篇读后续写是一篇记叙文。主要叙述了 Jack 作为银行工作人员,利用职 务之便,为了筹钱给妻子动手术,成功地偷走
25、了银行的钱。根据第一段提示, 此段应描写银行和社会对此事的反应;根据第二段首句提示,银行经理成为了 最不幸的人。尽管 Jack 为妻子治好了病,但心理上也发生了很大的变化。 【参考范文】 After Jack had been gone from the bank for a while,the alarms began to ring.The police arrived at the bank very quickly,only to find no one there.The next day was a really special day for the town,which was
26、 filled with newspaper and TV reporters covering the strange theftThe clerks at the bank were busy discussing the case,of course,including Jack.The police could only promise to catch the thieves as soon as possible,even though no clues had been found yet. But the most unlucky man was the manager of
27、the bank,an old man.He seemed to be the only person to blame and was removed from his position.At last, with enough money for her operation, Jacks wife was saved.However, Jack felt guilty about the manager of the bank.He could not forget what he had done to the old man.His guilt deepened as time wen
28、t by.Finally, he turned himself in to the police and accepted his punishment. B 阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。 It was Mothers Day and I was shopping at the local supermarket with my son who is five years old,TenysonAs we were leaving after finishing our shopping, we realized that only minutes earlie
29、r an elderly woman had fallen over at the entrance and hit her head on the ground badly.Her husband was with her,but there was blood everywhere and the woman was embarrassed and clearly in shock.Fortunately,a lot of people stopped to help out. While we were walking towards the scene,Tenyson became v
30、ery worried about what had happened to the elderly couple.He said to me, “Mom,its not much fun falling over in front of everyone.”Seeing that there was a flower stall(摊位) at the front of the supermarket, he added, “Why shouldnt we buy the lady a flower?It will make her feel better.” I was amazed tha
31、t hed come up with this sweet idea who was only a five years old boy.So we went over and told the flower seller what we wanted.“Just take it, ” she replied.“I cant take your money for such a wonderful deed ” By now medical staff had arrived,and were looking after the injured woman.There we saw the o
32、ld man was also in great horror, but he tried to comfort his wife and held her hands tightly to encourage her to be strong.We gave the flower to the womans husband and I told him it was from my son.At that,the old man started crying and said, “Thank you very much.”He then turned to me, “You have a w
33、onderful son.Happy Mothers Day to you.” The man bent down and gave his wife the flower,telling her who it was from.Regardless of being badly hurt,the old lady looked up at Tenyson with love and appreciation in her eyes and gave him a little smile.And my son went down his body to the injured lady and
34、 tenderly said, “Happy Mothers Day to you,too.” 注意: 1所续写短文的词数应为 150 左右; 2应使用 5 个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语; 3续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好; 4续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。 Paragraph 1: After a moment,the elderly lady was taken into an ambulance Paragraph 2: One year later, 【写作指导】 本篇读后续写根据文中所给的关键词,故事情节以及每段开头语可推知, 续写内容为老妇人被送往医院
35、。此处还应描写儿子的心理活动,以使文章内容、 情感更加充实。根据第二段开头语可知,此处要讲述一年以后的事情,为了使 故事情节更加完整,学生可以将事件回归到母亲节,作者母子在超市购物与老 夫妇重逢的情形。在写作时,学生可以适当运用下列表达方式:worriedly,It seemed that.,there is (are)等。 【参考范文】 After a moment,the elderly lady was taken into an ambulance by medical staff and was sent to hospital.The crowd gradually scatter
36、ed.Tenyson and I went home.On our way home, he asked me worriedly, “Mom, will the elderly lady be OK since she was too old and she had badly fallen over?”I looked at him and said.“The elderly lady would be fine since there were so many people coming to help her.And you did a wonderful deed,my boy.”
37、One year later, it was Mothers Day again.As last year, I went shopping, at the local supermarket with Tenyson.Suddenly,Tenyson said excitedly, “Look,Mom.It is that old woman.”I looked that way and saw the elderly lady and her husband.It seemed that she had recovered from her injury.We walked towards
38、 them and they were happy to meet us,too.The elderly lady hugged my son and whispered to him.“I will never forget the flower you give me,my sweet boy.” C (2016 金华一中模拟) 阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。 Jim was walking down a dimly lit street late one evening,hoping to see his lovely children as soon as
39、 possible.As he was walking quietly,Jim heard muffled(低 沉的) screams coming from behind some bushes.Alarmed,Jim stopped to listen carefully.He realized that what he was hearing was the unmistakable sound of a struggleThinking of the danger,he became frightened. Only yards from where Jim stood,a girl
40、was being attacked.Jim didnt know what to do.Should he get involved in it?He was worried about his own safety and regretted having suddenly decided to take a new route home that night.He was afraid of becoming another victim.He was wondering whether he should just run to the nearest phone and call t
41、he police or went to fight with the attacker to save the unknown girl. As he struggled from within,the girls cries were growing weaker.Jim knew he had to act fast.Yet he knew he couldnt just walk away from this.He realized that he could not turn his back on the fate of this unknown girl,even if it m
42、eant risking his own life. Now,Jim was not a brave man,nor was he athletic.Even he himself didnt quite know where he found the moral courage and physical strength.However once he was determined to help the girl,he became strangely transformed.He ran behind the bushes and pulled the attacker off the
43、girl,who panicked very much.Seeing Jim prevent him,the attacker became crazy and began to fight with him.Jim became fearless and they fell to the ground,where they wrestled for a few minutes until the attacker jumped up and escaped.Jim felt very tired and he couldnt catch the attacker. 注意: 1所续写短文的词数
44、应为 150 词左右; 2应使用 5 个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语; 3续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好; 4续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。 Paragraph 1: Watching the attacker run into the darkness,Jim thought of the girl. Paragraph 2: “Dad,is that you?”asked the girl in wonder and amazement as she 【写作指导】 本文是一篇记叙文续写。一天晚上 Jim 在回家的路上听到争斗的声音,考虑 到危险,他有点害怕。经过
45、激烈的思想斗争后,他还是挺身而出。结果,他救 的是自己的女儿。所续写的内容要积极向上,富有正能量,能够给读者以启迪 并激发出读者强烈的社会责任感和维护正义的决心。 【参考范文】 Watching the attacker run into the darkness ,Jim thought of the girl.Breathing hard,Jim rose from the ground and walked towards her.The girl was sitting behind the bushes,sobbing.Although in the darkness Jim cou
46、ld hardly see the girl clearly,he could certainly sense her trembling shock.Not wanting to frighten the girl further,Jim at first spoke to her from a distance.Jim said soothingly that the attacker had run away and she was safe.There was a long pause and then he heard some words from the girl. “Dad,i
47、s that you?”asked the girl in wonder and amazement as she walked from behind the bushes.To Jims shock,there stood Jims youngest daughter, who began crying.Hugging Katherine,Jim also cried.After the police arrived,they told them about the attacker in detail.He felt it was a right decision to rush to
48、fight with the attacker.Now in his childrens eyes,Jim is a brave man and a hero without fearing any danger D 阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。 A friend of mine whose name was John Smith had a bad memory,which made him famous.He was so forgetful that he sometimes forgot what he was talking about in the middle of a sentence.His wife had to constantly remind him about his meetings,his classeseven his meals!Once he forgot he had eaten breakfast twice, at home and at school.His wife liked to remind her neighbors