1、Contents Part I General remarks:读后续写制高点Part II Useful guidelines:读后续写语言提升的方法和技巧 一、如何使语言生动形象,具有画面感?(词汇篇)二、如何避免刻意使用高级复杂句式?(句式篇)三、如何衔接?(衔接篇)四、如何结尾?(结尾篇)Part III Bonus tips:续写高分的诀窍Part II Useful guidelines:读后续写语言提升的方法和技巧三、如何衔接?衔接篇(1)创意必须合理;(2)故事应体现积极的情感态度和价值观;(3)故事的基本要素(时间、地点、人物)、情感基调、逻辑走向和语言风格应与原故事保持一致
2、。读后续写三原则评分原则1.本题总分为25分,按7个档次给分。2.评分时,应主要从内容、词汇语法和篇章结构三个方面考虑,具体为:(1)续写内容的质量、完整性以及与原文情境的融洽度。(2)所使用词汇和语法结构的准确性、恰当性和多样性。(3)上下文的衔接和全文的连贯性。档次描述第七档(2225)创造了新颖、丰富、合理的内容,富有逻辑性,续写完整,与原文情境融洽度高;使用了多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构,表达流畅,语言错误很少,且完全不影响理解;自然有效地使用了段落间、语句间衔接手段,全文结构清晰,前后呼应,意义连贯。档次描述第六档(1821)创造了比较丰富、合理的内容,比较有逻辑性,续写比较完整,与原
3、文情境融洽度较高;使用了比较多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构,表达比较流畅,有个别错误,但不影响理解;比较有效地使用了语句间衔接手段,全文结构比较清晰,意义比较连贯。内容衔接 诊断 处方语言衔接 诊断 处方如何衔接看懂原文,理清文章的脉络结构。阅读原文的过程中确定文章的体裁理清文章的结构及作者的写作意图明白原文的情节推敲已给出的续写段首,推理下文的发展方向揣摩作者原文的语气,判断作者的情感态度。内容衔接最基础&重中之重 角色、视角错误转化Para 1:Seeing this,my son became confused and surprised.Para 2:On that day,my son
4、performed an act that most adults wouldnt have done.学生容易忽略my son而以我的视角来进行描写。诊断1.与原文情节相契合:故事情节发展合理,逻辑性强,符合故事主线。处方即内容、情节、逻辑相契合。体现在三点呼应:2.点对点呼应原文与续文间续写两段间段首句与续文间 My vision sharpened.I noticed everything around me:the trees,rocks and snow.We managed to stay on the main road and walked straight on.My hus
5、band suddenly spotted a small building on a hill in the distance._ Just then,a friendly woman appeared,saying,“Hello._ 文章末段第一段首句12第二段首句34升华:哲理升华或情感升华心理描写 失望/无望心理描写 结果 行动(做什么)起因结果说什么或做什么2020年潍坊一模 My husband suddenly spotted a small building on a hill in the distance.In no time did we find ourselves h
6、eading for it.We were filled with hope and excitement to find such a building in the middle of nowhere.We climbed up the hill at a swinging pace as if all the pains were gone.As we approached,a sign came into sight,which read:Administration Office.However,It was not open for business.The empty hall
7、made us nervous all at once.We stood there hopelessly,wondering what to do next.Just then,a friendly woman appeared,saying,“Hello.I could barely hold back my enthusiasm and blurted out.Were lost!She comforted us and opened a room for us to take a break.Seeing we were cold and hungry,she treated us w
8、ith hot chocolate.After studying the map,we figured out that our car was parked over three kilometers away.She offered us a ride back to our car and we accepted gladly.I felt relieved to see our rental car again.What a blessing to have such an unforgettable experience!1234诊断:1.与原文语言风格不相符。2.缺少关联词与过渡词
9、。3.缺少“桥梁”词汇或短语。语言衔接平淡,缺关联词无衔接词1.尽量与原文语言风格保持一致仔细阅读原文,判断语言风格,保持与原文一致的风格,幽默继续幽默,诗意继续诗意处方2.巧妙运用关联词与过渡词(常适用于记叙文):顺承或递进关系:meanwhile,still,then again,worse still,furthermore,as well as,at the same time等对比或转折关系:however,yet,nevertheless,while等因果关系:consequently,thus等其他:undoubtedly,apparently,just then,whats m
10、ore,definitely等运用此类关联词语,可使行文更流畅,有轻有重,读起来不过于单调。3.活用“桥梁”词汇或短语(1)副词Carefully,he stepped over all the broken glass.Joyfully he skipped up the street.(201610浙江)Para1:But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again.Immediately,an absolute darkness ruled the forest.(2)形容词及形容词短语Curious to know wh
11、at was inside,he tiptoed into the dark cave.Unable to say a word,he was rooted to the spot.(201806浙江)Para 1:Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse.Afraid that I might hurt the lovely small creature,I automatically let out a cry to stop my horse.Para 2:We had no idea where we were a
12、nd it got dark.Exhausted and hungry,I wondered if we could find our way back.(3)非谓语的运用(201610浙江)Para1:But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again.Feeling disappointed,Jane had to stay alone for another night.Para 2:It was daybreak when Jane woke up.Feeling refreshed,she continued to w
13、alk along the stream to find the way out.(4)介词短语或状语从句的运用1.The air is thin and we have to rest several times on the short hike from camp.To our left,snow-covered mountains disappear into clouds that seem almost close enough to touch.On the plain in front of us,we can just make out a herd of graceful
14、animals.This is why were here to observe Tibetan antelopes.2.When it comes to traveling,sometimes taking a journey alone can be great.3.If you want to follow your dreams,you have to say no to all the alternatives.要写好一篇好的续写文,很重要的一点是续写内容要与原文融洽,且衔接合理,显得浑然一体。简而言之就是一致性,体现在主旨思想(relate to a central idea)、情节衔接(plot)、语言风格(in a similar tone and style)、逻辑合理(follow logically)等方面。Summary