1、You are going to write a continuation of the story The Last Leaf.Tears came to Johnsys eyes as she knew what Mr.Behrman had done for her._Ten years later,Johnsy became a famous painter due to her dedication and hard work._Textanalysis Language usePlot constructionPrinciples of continuation writing1.
2、Consistency of the gist(主旨大意)2.Consistency of the plot(情节)3.Consistency of the logic(逻辑)4.Consistency of the emotion(情感)5.Consistency of the style(风格)2.Consistency of the plot(情节)Plot-related mistakes1.Not following the given hints when organizing the plot(情节没有跟着文章提示走)(情节没有跟着文章提示走)Then vivid memorie
3、s came flooding back.Some Ss failed to mention what memories they were.2.Overuse of dialogues(过度使用对话)(过度使用对话)Too many dialogues between the two main characters,Jenny and her mother.As a result,their stories are long and dull.3.Wrong use of person(人称使用错误)(人称使用错误)When I got up at 6 oclock,I have seen
4、my mother busy cooking in the kitchen every weekday.Plot-related mistakesMistakes in expressions1.Spelling mistakes(拼写错误)(拼写错误)Clam(calm)Down!her mother turely(truly)loves her.Her mother prepared a lot of snakes(snacks)for her.The seller smailed(smiled).Dont leave me along(alone).Jenny chocked(choke
5、d)2.Wrong use of collocations(词组搭配介词乱用)(词组搭配介词乱用)She shared happiness to(with)her mother.Jenny approached to(/)her mother and hugged her.She thanked to(/)the seller and left quickly.Mistakes in expressions3.Mistakes in part of speech,tenses,voices,etc.(词性、(词性、时态、语态)时态、语态)take a deep breathe(breath)I
6、 want to make an apologize(apology).Whatever you had met,I will always standing(stand)behind you.I shouldnt shouted(shout)to you.Nobody can heard(hear).The door wasnt been(/)closed.She always remembered the smell of the meal which(was)cooked by her mother.Mistakes in expressionsMistakes in expressio
7、ns4.Mistakes in sentence structures(句子结构)(句子结构)Not until did she hear what the seller told her she came to realize that So thankful she was that When her mother seeing her,she jumped to her feet.They hugged each other,understood others heart.Mistakes in expressions5.Chinglish(中式英语)(中式英语)But she rush
8、ed to the kitchen with no words.You are OK just enough.Thinking here,Jenny made a decision to apologize to her mum.Mom is the best person in the world,a man is like a treasure who has mother.Wonderful expressions and beautiful sentencesExpressions:1.Vivid words&various expressions(生动的词(生动的词/多样的表达)多样
9、的表达)2.Verbs in action(表动作的词)(表动作的词)3.Varied sentence patterns(句式多样)(句式多样)4.Plots corresponding to the given passage(情节紧扣)(情节紧扣)5.Proper statement of the theme(主题升华恰当)(主题升华恰当)1 Read the text again and discuss the questions.1.What happened in the story?Old Behrman saved a young artist at the cost of h
10、is own life.2.Why did the doctor call“The Last Leaf”Behrmans masterpiece?Without Behrmans sacrifice,Johnsy wouldnt have the chance to recover.3.What was the main thread(主线主线/线索线索)of the story?The last leaf is the title,and also serves as the main thread of the story.2 Read the last paragraph and bra
11、instorm what might happen in pairs.1.How will Johnsy feel when she heard what Mr Behrman did for her and that he died for her?Johnsys deeply moved and grateful.2.How will the story end?What will happen to Johnsy?Johnsy will become a successful artist and do something to return the favor.Tears came t
12、o Johnsys eyes as she knew what Mr.Behrman had done for her._ How did Johnsy feel?What did Johnsy do?What did Johnsy say?She felt moved,heartbroken,grateful She went to see Mr.Behrman.She gave thanks and was determined to succeed.Ten years later,Johnsy became a famous painter due to her dedication a
13、nd hard work._ How successful was she?What did Johnsy do to remember Mr Behrman?What did the painting mean?Her works She drew the same painting as Mr Behrman did.Hope.Vocabulary for continuation writing动作:动作:stare at(注视,盯着看注视,盯着看),take aside(把把叫到一旁叫到一旁),claim(声称声称),in an attempt to do(尝试做某事尝试做某事),ra
14、ise/lift ones spirits(振奋某人的精神振奋某人的精神),hear of(听说听说),make up ones mind to do(决心做某事决心做某事),fetch(拿来;请来拿来;请来),long to do(渴望做某事渴望做某事),slip away(消亡,死去;溜走消亡,死去;溜走),hold on(在困境或危险中坚持在困境或危险中坚持住住),wonder(好奇,想知道好奇,想知道)情绪:情绪:be tired of(厌倦厌倦),with disbelief(不可置信地不可置信地),helplessly(无助地无助地)状态:状态:wet through(湿透的湿透的
15、),icy cold(冰凉的冰凉的)时序:时序:the next morning,the following day,in the afternoon,the next day时序表达补充:时序表达补充:all of a sudden突然突然 early in the morning一大早一大早 one Sunday afternoon一个星期天的下午一个星期天的下午 the other day=a few days ago几天前几天前 the next/following day第二天第二天 just then=just at that moment 正在那时正在那时 after that=
16、later on然后然后 after a while一会儿以后一会儿以后 in the end/at last/finally/eventually最后最后 from then on从那以后从那以后 surprisingly令人惊讶的是令人惊讶的是 without hesitation毫不犹豫地毫不犹豫地 Hearing this,听到这个,听到这个,After what seemed ages,在过了似乎几年的时间后,在过了似乎几年的时间后,(夸张)(夸张)After seemingly a long time,在过了似乎很长一段时间后,在过了似乎很长一段时间后,Vocabulary for
17、 continuation writingTears came to Johnsys eyes as she knew what Mr.Behrman had done for her.Looking out of the window and staring at the last ivy leaf that never moved an inch,Johnsy couldnt help crying sadly.Although she was too weak to sit up and move around,she was determined to see Mr Behrman t
18、he last time.Supported by Sue,Johnsy got out of bed and went downstairs.There was Mr.Behrman lying dead in his bed.Holding Mr.Behrmans hand tightly,Johnsy whispered to the pale face,“Dear Mr.Behrman!Its you who gave me a second life and I promise that I will continue my painting.”普通版Ten years later,
19、Jonhsy became a famous painter due to her dedication and hard work.Her paintings were widely admired and on exhibition at art galleries all over the world.One day,she returned to Greenwich Village.When she opened the window and saw the leaf on the wall,she decided it was the right time for her to dr
20、aw the painting that she had longed to produce.In the painting,a leaf held firmly onto the dry branches in the icy wind.With the last stroke on the paper,Johnsy smiled broadly.To her,the last leaf is a glimmer of hope that an old man gave to a desperate girl at the cost of his own life.普通版Tears came
21、 to Johnsys eyes as she knew what Mr.Behrman had done for her.Looking out of the window and gazing at the last ivy leaf that never moved an inch,Johnsy could not contain herself any longer and broke into tears.In fragile health as she was,she was determined to see Mr Behrman the last time.Supported
22、by Sue,Johnsy struggled out of bed and shuffled downstairs.There was Mr.Behrman,the poor old painter,lying dead in his bed.Holding Mr.Behrmans hand tightly,Johnsy was too depressed to utter a word.After what seemed like ages,she held back her tears and murmured to the pale face,“Dear Mr.Behrman!Its
23、you who gave me a second life.I promise that from today on,I will put all my heart and soul into painting.”高配版Ten years later,Jonhsy became a famous painter due to her dedication and hard work.Her paintings were highly acclaimed and on exhibition at art galleries all over the world.One day,she retur
24、ned to Greenwich Village.It was the first time she set her foot in the house after she left ten years ago.When she opened the window and caught sight of the leaf on the wall,she knew it was the right time for her to draw the painting that she had been longing to produce all these years.In the painting,a leaf clung firmly to the dry branches swaying in the icy wind.With the last stroke on the paper,Johnsy gave a broad smile on her face.To her,the last leaf is a glimmer of hope that an old man gave to a desperate girl at the cost of his own life.高配版