1、Teaching Practice of Continuation Writing Based on Students Deep Learning Marton&Slj（1976）在分析学生阅读成果时，发现了两种不同的学习结果，即基于简单记忆的学习结果和基于深入理解的学习结果，由此得出在学习过程中，学生加工处理信息存在浅层和深层的差异，最终提出了深度学习的概念；Marton,F.&Slj,R.1976.On qualitative diff erences in learning:Ioutcome and process J.British Journal of Educational Psy
2、chology,46(1):4-11.深度学习是指在教师引领下，学生围绕具有挑战性的学习主题，全身心积极参与、体验成功、获得发展的有意义的学习过程。深度学习的五个特征：联想与结构、活动与体验、本质与变式、迁移与应用、价值与评价。王蔷等（2021）从英语学科的深度学习出发，补充了“内化与交流”特征，强调学生需要围绕主题和新的知识结构开展以描述、阐释、交流等实践活动为主的内化活动，以巩固新知识结构，达到促进知识向能力、能力向素养转化的目的。王蔷、孙薇薇、蔡铭珂、汪菁.2021.指向深度学习的高中英语单元整体教学设计J.外语教育研究前沿，（1）：17-25.What：语篇选自2020年1月浙江高考之
3、读后续写，主要讲了男孩即将离家上大学，父母和Poppy（家里的宠物狗，也是男孩的好伙伴）送男孩到学校分别的场景。后来，父母和Poppy回到家后，父母看到Poppy郁郁寡欢、终日抑郁，非常担忧，于是想了一个办法给Poppy带了一只小狗回家。Why:通过描写男孩和家人和Poppy分别后，家人对Poppy低落情绪的担忧，突出了陪伴的重要性以及家人之间的爱与人与动物间的爱。PoppyParentsBoyA PuppyHow：文中连续动词的运用，如“stood up”，“hugged”，“smiled”，“trying not to let”等生动表现了男孩分别的不舍；以及对父母的描写，如“driven
4、”，“hugged”，“smiled through misty eyes”，“laughed”等可看出父母既欣慰儿子即将开启新征程，又流露出不舍儿子的情感。回到家后，Poppy“didnt seem interested in her dinner.”，“Her owners were sad,too.”，“They offered the dog some of her favorite peanut butter treats.They even let her sit on the sofa.”等描写了家里氛围的改变，“The house seemed quiet as a tomb
5、without the boy living there.”，突出家人和Poppy的忧伤与思念，为故事发展埋下伏笔。1.深入研读语篇，分析主题意义 2.以核心素养为导向，设置阅读教学目标 3.从认知规律出发，设计多层次活动 4.重视持续性评价，完善深度学习安富海、陈玉莲.2017.深度教学及其路径研究J.教育探索，（5）：6-10.程晨成都棠湖外国语学校Do you like dogs?Pre-writingThink about the question and share your ideas.Activity 2 Read and drawDraw your information ma
6、p based on the story.1.Who are the main characters and what happened to them?2.Draw an information map based on the main characters actions and their feelings.Underline the verbs in the story.Climax:Build-up:Beginning:Resolution:Parents:The boy:upset;sadWhat happened to them?How did they feel?Activi
7、ty 2 Read and add moreEnding:Parents:The boy:Poppy:Parents:Parents:Poppy:Para.1:Dad opened the box and a sweet little dog appeared.Para.2:A few weeks later the boy arrived home from the university.upset;sad.bent down to hug,stood up,hugged,smiled,tryingdriven,hugged,smiled and laughed程晨成都棠湖外国语学校By t
8、he end of this lesson,we will be able to:1.summarize the main ideas according to the six elements theory;2.analyze the characters feelings and personality according to the plot;3.write a paragraph for the continuous writing and polish it according to the criteria.Learning objectivesActivity 1 Free t
9、alkWhat important information should be included in a story?Think about the following question and share your ideas.who?Character when?where?Setting what?how?why?PlotStory ElementsClimax(高潮高潮)BeginningEndingPlotBuild-up:Resolution:eventsproblemssolutionsClimax:Build-up:Beginning:Resolution:Parents:T
10、he boy:Activity 1 Free talkEnding:Parents:The boy:Poppy:Parents:Parents:Poppy:Para.1:Dad opened the box and a sweet little dog appeared.Para.2:A few weeks later the boy arrived home from the university.PoppyA PuppyParentsBoy1.Who are the main characters in the story?Activity 2 Review and sharePresen
11、t your information map based on the story and share your ideas.Activity 2 Review and sharePresent your information map based on the story and share your ideas.What is mainly talked about in the story?who?Character when?where?Setting what?how?why?PlotStory ElementsIt mainly talks about the dog Puppy
12、and parents who felt upset when the boy left home and went to university.Parents tried to cheer Puppy up and brouht home a little dog.Activity 3 Present and sharePresent your information map based on the story and share your ideas.1.Who are the main characters and what happened to them?2.Draw an inf
13、ormation map based on the main characters actions and their feelings.Share your information map within groups and choose one to present.Consider the fowlling:PoppyA PuppyParentsBoyCriteria1.Retell the story by using transitional words like“at the beginning,then,next,in the end.”2.Speak confidently a
14、nd include the six elements and the feelings of the characters.Climax:Build-up:Beginning:Resolution:Parents:The boy:upset;sadWhat happened to them?How did they feel?Activity 3 Read and add moreEnding:Parents:The boy:Poppy:Parents:Parents:Poppy:Para.1:Dad opened the box and a sweet little dog appeare
15、d.Para.2:A few weeks later the boy arrived home from the university.upset;sad.bent down to hug,stood up,hugged,smiled,tryingdriven,hugged,smiled and laughedlifted,flased,saidnodded,watched,turneddidnt seem interested in.offered the dog.even let her sit on the sofawalked.carrying a boxwelcomed,saw,st
16、opped,put her nose on,wagginga sense of losssadworriedunhappyjoyfulcheerfulActivity 4 Think and shareThink about the following question and share your ideas.3.What is the conflict(problem)and what does the story try to convey?The story tells that the dog Poppy felt so unhappy because the boy went to
17、 college and the conflict is that something should be done to cheer Poppy up.The parents tried many ways and did not work until Dad brought home a sweet little dog who Poppy liked.The story tries to convey that Poppys attachment to the boy and the love from the parents to Poppy as well as the affect
18、ion between the boy and his parents.themecompanionship&loveActivity 4 Think and outlineThink about the following question and design the plot.1.What information can we get from the two given sentences?注意：续写词数应为注意：续写词数应为150150左右。左右。2.What do you want to know based on the given sentence from para.1 an
19、d para.2?What was the little dog like?How did it feel and What did it do?How did Dad feel when he saw Poppy wagging the tail?How did other characters feel and react to the scene?Activity 5 Think and outlineThink about the following question and design the plot.Did Poppy still love the boy?How would
20、he react?How did the boy feel when he saw Poppy what did he do?How did parents feel and react to the scene?Activity 5 Think and outlineThink about the following question and share your ideas.reactions from Dad,Mom and PoppyfeelingsactionsenvironmentdialoguesPara.1appearanceactions.1.a pair of large
21、watery eyes 2.two big round eyes 3.beady/sparkling/twinkling eyes 4.a nose like a small black gem 5.long/muscular/skinny/spindly legs 6.fur is as white as snow/other colors 7.a long/short little tail 8.little ears on the top of the head1.wag the tail 2.bark3.put the ears up 4.shake the whole body 5.
22、rub their necks and backs with their paws6.run around me 7.keep scratching me with his front paws 8.keep its fore legs doubled up happilyjoyfullycheerfullywith joy/happinessWhat does the story try to convey?The ending of an story usually has the function of summarizing the entire story,echoing the b
23、eginning and deepening the theme.pullendingsublimationopen-endedunexpectedquote；rhetoric device；happysadActivity 6 AssignmentWrite the second paragraph based on the plot you have designed.How to write an impressive ending?Simile 明喻1.I wandered lonely as a stay dog.2.Einstein likes to put a cloak on,
24、as if he had just walked out of a fairy tale.Some commonly used rhetoric devices明喻是将存在于人们的心里的具有共性的不同事物作对比。标志词常用：like,as,seem,as if,as though,similar to,such as 等。metaphor 隐喻，暗喻1.Hope is a good breakfast,but it is a bad supper.2.Some books are to be tasted,others swallowed,and some few to be chewed a
25、nd digested.隐喻是简缩了的明喻，是将某一事物的名称用于另一事物，通过比较形成。metonymy 借喻，转喻1.The kettle boils.2.The room sat silent.以容器代替内容3.Lend me your ears,please.4.a complete Shakespeare 5.I had the muscle,and they made money out of it.借喻不直接说出所要说的事物，而使用另一个与之相关的事物名称。synesthesia 通感、联觉、移觉1.The birds sat upon a tree and poured for
26、th their lily like voice.2.Taste the music of Mozart.这种修辞法是以视、听、触、嗅、味等感觉直接描写事物。1.自然式结尾：自然式结尾的篇章一般故事情节完整，从开头能直接推测出结尾2.首尾呼应式结尾：通过重复标志性词汇实现。例如，采用关键词词性或词形变化的方式进行重复，3.议论式结尾（Theme）：以议论的形式总结全文的主旨作为结尾4.留白式结尾（Theme）：这种结尾是一种加深主题的手法，通过描写一个画面（动作、变化等），给读者留下遐想的空间。5.反思式结尾：以人物心理活动的描写为结尾。6.对话式结尾：以人物的对话为结尾。7.以景结情式结尾：
27、以景结情及借景抒情，在续写结束时看可以寓情于景，呼应主题。Evaluation for Continuous WritingAspectsDetailsPointsSelf-evaluationPeer-assessmentTeachers feedbackPlot1.Is the plot development appropriate?42.Is the plot development complete?43.Is the theme appropriate？2Language4.Is there any vivid descriptions on appearance,actions,
28、environment,feelings or dialogue?45.Is there any sentence structure like clauses,metaphors,or others?46.Is the grammar correct?4Coherence8.Is the whole story coherernt?(meaning,logic,theme)3 总分：总分：Activity 4 Write a draftWrite a draft based on the outline you have and use as many sentence structures
29、 as possible.注意：续写词数应为注意：续写词数应为150150左右。左右。reactions from Dad,Mom and PoppyfeelingsactionsenvironmentdialoguesPara.1appearanceactions.Para.2reactions from Dad,Mom and Poppy and the boyfeelingsactionsenvironmentdialoguesthemeWhat does the story try to convey?Evaluation for Continuous WritingAspectsDe
30、tailsPointsSelf-evaluationPeer-assessmentTeachers feedbackPlot1.Is the plot development appropriate?42.Is the plot development complete?43.Is the theme appropriate？2Language4.Is there any vivid descriptions on appearance,actions,environment,feelings or dialogue?45.Is there any sentence structure lik
31、e clauses,metaphors,or others?46.Is the grammar correct?4Coherence8.Is the whole story coherernt?(meaning,logic,theme)3 总分：总分：determined to Activity 5 Evaluate and polishEvaluation for Continuous WritingAspectsDetailsPointsSelf-evaluationPeer-assessmentTeachers feedbackPlot1.Is the plot development
32、appropriate?42.Is the plot development complete?43.Is the theme appropriate？2Language4.Is there any vivid descriptions on appearance,actions,environment,feelings or dialogue?45.Is there any sentence structure like clauses,metaphors,or others?46.Is the grammar correct?4Coherence8.Is the whole story c
33、oherernt?(meaning,logic,theme)3 总分：总分：Evaluate your draft based on the evaluation chart.Activity 4 Write a draftWrite a draft based on the outline you have and use as many sentence structures as possible.Para.2reactions from Dad,Mom and Poppy and the boyfeelingsactionsenvironmentdialoguesthemeWhat d
34、oes the story try to convey?love between the boy and Poppy;love between the parents and Poppy;Climax:Build-up:Beginning:Resolution:Parents:The boy:What happened to them?How did they feel?Activity 2 Read and add moreEnding:Parents:The boy:Poppy:Parents:Parents:Poppy:Para.1:Dad opened the box and a sweet little dog appeared.Para.2:A few weeks later the boy arrived home from the university.
