1、高考英语读后续写语篇练习脊椎严重受损的小男孩因为各种鸟重新燃起了对生活的希望1题目分析读后续写题目再现范文呈现努力方向2Part 1题目呈现3续写原文The gray sky outside my kitchen window matched how I felt inside.Hopeless.I sighed and turned away.Life had lost all meanings.Nearly a year earlier,on a sunny July day,I drove to a nearby lake to celebrate my birthday with fr
2、iends and family.After a long workweek,I was looking forward to our picnic.And I couldnt wait to get in the water.I loved swimming.“Here I go,”I shouted as I dived headfirst from a boat into the lake.That was the last thing I remember.I was pulled unconscious from the water with a severely damaged s
3、pine(脊柱),paralyzed from the waist down.After months of treatment in hospital,I was finally home.But things werent going well.I had to adjust to my disability and life changes.I was impatient with myself as well as my family.Turning from the kitchen window couldnt drive the grayness away.Oh God,what
4、am I going to do?My life has fallen apart.4续写原文A few days later,I poured out my misfortune to Jeryy,a good friend and neighbor who came to visit in my front yard.“I dont feel like I have a reason to get out of bed,”I told him.Jerry was quiet.His eyes were focused on my mulberry tree.“Look,”he whispe
5、red.“Theres a male cardinal.On that lower branch to the right.”I saw the beautiful bird with its long tail,black mask and bright red feather.“They like to build nests in thick bushes,”Jerry said,“and mostly eat seeds.They dine regularly at bird feeders,especially in the winter.”Cheer,cheer,cheer,the
6、 cardinal sang in a sweet voice.Id seen such birds before.Now as I studied this one,I realized Id never really seen a cardinal.He was amazing.Cheer,cheer,cheer,he sang again before leaping into the sky.From that day on,Jerry continued to introduce me to various new birds,like the sweet-sounding nigh
7、tingale and the elegant hummingbird.Curiosity,like a light,awakened inside me.5段首句Para 1：The strong interest drove me to watch and record more birds in my yard.Para 2：With my bird friends,I found back my passion for life.6Part 2题目分析7续写原文分析8文章以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者因为野餐中的一次意外，导致脊椎严重受损，腰部以下瘫痪。于是他感觉生活变得支离破碎，对自己
8、和家人都很不耐烦。后来，作者把自己的不幸告诉了一个好朋友兼邻居Jerry，Jerry给作者介绍了一种鸟，看到这只鸟欢呼雀跃地叫着，作者感到很惊讶，Jerry不断地向作者介绍各种各样的新鸟，比如声音甜美的夜莺和优雅的蜂鸟。好奇心，就像一束光，唤醒了作者的内心。点1：位于续写第一段段首，流畅衔接前面的记叙文和第一段段首语；点2：位于续写第一段段尾，流畅衔接第二段段首句；点3：位于续写第二段段首，续写衔接第二段段首语；点4：文章结尾升华，给予读者正能量，揭示和强调主题。情节构建的重点9续写思路分析 Para 1：The strong interest drove me to watch and re
9、cord more birds in my yard.由第一段首句内容“强烈的兴趣驱使我去观察和记录更多在我的院子里的鸟。”可知，第一段可描写观察和记录鸟类给作者的生活带来的变化。10续写思路分析 Para 2：With my bird friends,I found back my passion for life.由第二段首句内容“和我的鸟儿朋友们在一起，我找回了对生活的热情。”可知，第二段可描写作者因为和鸟类成为朋友，感受到鸟类的快乐，自己的生活也重新燃起了希望。11续写素材 续写素材 提供水和食物吸引鸟着迷于观鸟开始写观鸟日记与鸟类建立了不可思议的友谊受鸟类影响，作者开始唱歌作品获奖，
10、感到惊讶快乐的鸟儿教会作者忘记不幸生活重新燃起希望12续写素材 续写素材 行为类 提供：provide/offer 着迷于：be obsessed with/be crazy about 建立友谊：build friendship with/set up friendship with 情绪类 难以相信：cant believe/cant accept that result/can hardly understand 艰难的任务：hard work/a difficult task13续写素材 续写素材 高分句型1 So obsessed with bird watching was I t
11、hat I even equipped myself with a digital camera.（使用了倒装句）高分句型2 Struck by the beauty of cardinals,I took photos of them,one of which even earned me a prize.（过去分词作状语，which引导非限制性定语从句）14Part 3范文呈现15范文呈现The strong interest drove me to watch and record more birds in my yard.To attract more birds,I built b
12、irdbaths and birdfeeders in my yard,providing them with water and food.And I made it.Every bird flying in interested me.So obsessed with bird watching was I that I even equipped myself with a digital camera.Though confined in my wheelchair,I observed carefully and managed to photograph their gracefu
13、l figures.Under Jerrys guidance,I even started my own bird watching journal,recording their nest building,child-raising and singing.With patience and persistence,I built incredible friendship with these lovely visitors.16范文呈现With my bird friends,I found back my passion for life.I didnt sit around,fe
14、eling sorry for myself any longer.Infected by the sweet melody of nightingales,I sang along.Struck by the beauty of cardinals,I took photos of them,one of which even earned me a prize.What a surprise!Their cheerful life taught me to forget my misfortune and enjoy life.I became patient and caring lik
15、e before.Now I saw no grayness out of my kitchen window but vigorous angels.More importantly,my elegant bird friends restored my hope in life.17范文译文强烈的兴趣驱使我在院子里观察和记录更多的鸟。为了吸引更多的鸟，我在院子里建了鸟浴盆和喂鸟器，为它们提供水和食物。我做到了。每一只飞翔的鸟都让我感兴趣。我非常痴迷于观鸟，甚至给自己配备了一台数码相机。虽然我被困在轮椅上，但我仔细观察并设法拍下了他们优雅的身影。在杰瑞的指导下，我甚至开始写自己的观鸟日记，记
16、录它们筑巢、育儿和唱歌的过程。凭借耐心和毅力，我与这些可爱的游客建立了令人难以置信的友谊。和我的鸟友们一起，我找回了对生活的热情。我不再坐着自怨自艾了。被夜莺甜美的旋律感染，我跟着唱。被红衣主教们的美丽所打动，我给他们拍了照片，其中一张甚至为我赢得了奖项。真是惊喜！他们快乐的生活教会了我忘记不幸，享受生活。我变得像以前一样有耐心和关怀。现在，我看到厨房窗外没有灰色，只有充满活力的天使。更重要的是，我优雅的鸟类朋友们恢复了我对生活的希望。18Part 4努力方向19高级结构名词性从句高级结构三连动虚拟语气形容词做状语无灵主语20定语从句状语从句（包含倒装句）强调句副词做状语非谓语（包括独立主格）21Thank you!
