1、高考英语读后续写语篇练习公交车上儿子病情发作，得到陌生然安慰母亲非常感动1题目分析读后续写题目再现范文呈现努力方向2Part 1题目呈现3续写原文I was in Walt Disney World with my son,Daniel,who is autistic(患自闭症的),and at that time he was 7 years old.My wife and our three other sons were with us too.He was having one of his melt down screaming tantrums(发怒),only God knows
2、 why.So my wife and I decided I would take the bus back to the hotel,and she would stay in the park with the other three children.After we got on the bus,the screaming continued.My son looks“normal”.To the many people on the bus,he appeared to just be a kid screaming-or a spoiled child who did not g
3、et his special toy that day.It did not take long-less than a minute-before the screaming brought about stares,then glares from the other passengers.4段首句Para 1：To my shame,I found myself losing my temper at my own son.Para 2：He said calmly,“Is he alright?”I said,“Hes autistic.”5Part 2题目分析6续写原文分析7本文以带
4、患有自闭症的七岁儿子Daniel去迪尼斯世界游玩时他发怒为线索，讲述了在回旅馆的公交车上，儿子病情发作，同车人的恼怒。但是我前面的一位男士安慰我，使我很感动。点1：位于续写第一段段首，流畅衔接前面的记叙文和第一段段首语；点2：位于续写第一段段尾，流畅衔接第二段段首句；点3：位于续写第二段段首，续写衔接第二段段首语；点4：文章结尾升华，给予读者正能量，揭示和强调主题。情节构建的重点8续写思路分析 Para 1:To my shame,I found myself losing my temper at my own son.由第一段首句内容“我很羞愧，我发现自己控制不住自己对自己的儿子发脾气”可
5、知，第一段可描写作者面对发病的儿子羞愧难当，忍不住发脾气，抱怨生活的烦恼。9续写思路分析 Para 2：He said calmly,“Is he alright?”I said,“Hes autistic.”由第二段首句内容“他平静地问我孩子怎么了，我告诉他，孩子患有自闭症”可知，第二段可描写那位男士对我的安慰。10续写素材 续写素材 去游玩儿子发病上公交车返回车上儿子发病众人恼怒男士安慰感动领悟11续写素材 续写素材 行为类 生气：lose ones temper/angry 处理：deal with/do with/cope with/handle 消失：be gone/disappea
6、r 情绪类 感到振奋：cheer up/feel encouraged 紧张的：intense/nervous12续写素材 续写素材 高分句型1.And just as the reactions of the other passengers were becoming most intense,a man seated just in front of me turned around to face me.（过去分词作后置定语）高分句型2.It no longer mattered what the other people thought.（It作形式主语）13Part 3范文呈现14
7、范文呈现To my shame,I found myself losing my temper at my own son.I was embarrassed,angry,and frustrated,and felt cheated by God for not being able to enjoy a normal vacation with my family because of him.I started to wonder what life would be like without having to deal with this cross(痛苦).And just as
8、the reactions of the other passengers were becoming most intense,a man seated just in front of me turned around to face me.I cheered myself up for his advice on how to raise a well-behaved child.15范文呈现He said calmly,“Is he alright?”I said,“Hes autistic.”Then the man said,“Its alright.”And he smiled.
9、Thats all.And suddenly,all the anger building up inside me was gone.I almost wept for shame at how I had felt a moment before.It no longer mattered what the other people thought.My son was my gift from God.I will never forget that man,nor his small,simple act of kindness and understanding.I truly be
10、lieve he was my sons guardian angel that day,maybe mine too.16范文译文令我羞愧的是，我发现自己对自己的儿子发脾气了。我感到尴尬、愤怒和沮丧，并感到被上帝欺骗了，因为他让我无法和家人一起享受正常的假期。我开始想，如果不处理这个十字架，生活会是什么样子。正当其他乘客的反应变得最激烈时，坐在我面前的一个男人转过身来面对我。我为他关于如何养育一个行为端正的孩子的建议而高兴。第2段：他平静地说：“他还好吗？”我说，“他有自闭症。”然后那人说：“没关系。”他笑了。仅此而已。突然间，我内心积聚的所有愤怒都消失了。刚才的感受让我几乎羞愧得哭了。别人怎么想已经不重要了。我的儿子是上帝赐予我的礼物。我永远不会忘记那个人，也不会忘记他那小小的、简单的善举和理解。我真的相信那天他是我儿子的守护天使，也许也是我的。17Part 4努力方向18高级结构名词性从句高级结构三连动虚拟语气形容词做状语无灵主语19定语从句状语从句（包含倒装句）强调句副词做状语非谓语（包括独立主格）20Thank you!
