1、高考续写之如何阅读材料阅读材料方法- 找出矛盾（要解决的问题），主线情节- 找到主人公的诉求，主线情节- 找到可以点明、反衬、暗示某种品质的句子- 找到值得庆祝、纪念和令人悲伤、后悔的事情- 找到是否有值得主人公反思、牢记的（某个亲人、朋友、同学、老师说的）话，在续写中呼应- 找到值得主人公怀念的人物- 找到是否有值得主人公怀念的情形- 掠过次要情节材料分析Whenever I spread marmalade (橘子酱), I am reminded of my mother,a five-foot-tall angel who even befriended a skunk( 臭鼬).【值
2、得主人公怀念的人物】【主题：人和动物 - 一般人和动物成为朋友，大多都是宣扬这个人的善良 但是看到后文和续写，发现这篇文章，续写部分核心不是“母亲和skunk的故事”，而是“我和skunk的故事”】One day, while she was busy picking beans in the backyard, she came across a skunk no more than a meter away. The skunks embarrassment was evident as he had undoubtedly been rummaging (乱翻)through the g
3、arbage. He still had a marmalade jar stuck on his nose. Mom took pity on him.Instead of worrying the creature would spray something smelly all over her and the beans,she smiled compassionately at the little thing and extended a helping hand. Kneeling on the ground,she inched across the grass,reached
4、 out,and twisted the jar very carefully.【这一段体现出“母亲很善良”】The jar slipped off.The skunk nodded a thank-you before slipping away into the woods at the back of the garden.Obviously,there was no spraying incident,thanks to my remarkable mother.She repeated this tale numerous times,always calling the skunk
5、 Marmalade.However,that was not the end of the story.【说明后文我和这只动物还有联系】Three summers later,when I was about twelve, another encounter occurred.【在读后续写中，只要动物在文章一半走了，后边一定会回来】It was a rainy morning,and both my mother and father had gone to work.My friend Rob came over to play,and we decided to run the ele
6、ctric train in my room.Suddenly,a scratching sound emerged from the attic(阁楼) .Rob assumed that it might be some kind of animal. Curiosity got the better of us,and we ventured towards the source of the sound.【到这里还没交代这个声音是什么，可以猜一下就是那个skunk回来了】I cautiously opened the attic door in the hall.The noise c
7、eased abruptly.I climbed up the stairs,Rob following my lead.There behind the toy box near the chimney stood the animal 一 black with a distinct white stripe down his back. Was he scared and trembling?I believe so,at least thats what I remember.Instinctively,I retreated,fearing the potential spray or
8、 bites from the creature.“Hey,Rob,”I whispered urgently,Its a skunk.Lets go to the kitchen and figure out a way to get him out of here.”【基本可以断定这个动物就是skunk】注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Para 1. In the cupboard,several paper cups and a jar of marmalade caught our sight.Para 2. Rob and I follow
9、ed the skunk as he ate his way down the stairs.分析续写两句话第二段首句第一句“Rob and Ifollowed the skunk as he ate his way down the stairs.”说明第一段“我”用了某个东西来吸引他从阁楼中走出来。用的是什么呢？材料首段和续写首句都提到了a jar of marmalade，基本可以判定用这个句子酱来吸引她第一段“several paper cups and ajar of marmalade caught our sight.”这个东西吸引了我们之后，走过去之后心里想什么？做些什么？我们
10、在“想出用marmalade诱惑skunk这个方法之前”，心里又想了什么？怎么和前边“母亲和这个skunk”的故事联系起来？第一段如果不详细描写“我的心理活动”，那么第一段就只剩下“我用marmalade诱惑这只skunk”这部分内容了结合第二段首句说明“我们用橘子酱诱惑这只skunk时，skunk并没有出来，而是我们把句子酱放好之后，它才出来，所以我们才能跟在它后边”第二段“这只skunk走之后”，会做什么？对我们做什么才能体现出这只动物的依依不舍呢？他最后又去了哪里？能否从前文找到线索？设计两段情节No.1第一段1. 【提示：呼应前文母亲和skunk】 接近这只skunk，我突然想起母亲多
11、年前遇到的那只skunk，心里想这会不会就是那只？2. 【提示：心理思考怎么把它弄出去】 回想起母亲之前用橘子酱招待它，我把橘子酱倒进杯子里，希望用美食把它吸引出去。3. 【提示：到这里发现字数不够，所以需要详细描写skunk看到我倒橘子酱之后的反应和吃橘子酱的过程】 于是我拿着杯子往下走，每隔3-5个台阶放一个杯子 终于，我把最后一个杯子放在门外时，我发现从楼梯上探出一只小脑袋，它走到第一个杯子那里，嗅了嗅，舔了舔，然后看了看我们 我和Roh担心我们在它不敢吃，于是我们站在它视线之外的位置 果然，不一会，我们便听到了杯子的声音，我们因此知道它开始吃橘子酱了No.1第二段1. 【提示：听到它吃
12、东西的声音之后，我们又怎么做？看到了什么？】 它一边吃一边回头看我们，也没有躲开，仿佛已经确定我们对它没有威胁2. 【提示：它吃完之后的反应是什么】 我们看着它爬到外边，吃完最后一点橘子酱，回头盯了我们几秒，好像要对我们表达感谢，然后回头快速钻进树林里3. 【提示：它走之后，我和朋友Roh什么感受？】 这时Roh开口说“它还挺可爱的，想不到对人类这么放心” 我回复说“它大概率是我妈妈几年前招待过的那只skunk，现在又来回找吃的”4. 【提示：还要提一下“主人公的妈妈”，和前两段形成闭环】 妈妈回来后，我跟它分享了今天的经历，妈妈说“看你的描述，它应该就是Marmalade，看来它是把这里当成
13、第二个家了，因为我们家的人都很善良、热情”续写（可适当删减）第一段As I approachedthe skunk, I suddenly recalled the skunk my mother met years ago. I wondered if it was the same one. Could it have returned looking for my mothers treat again? Remembering that my mother once fed it marmalade, I decided to do the same. I filled a cup w
14、ith marmalade and hoped to attract it outside. Holding the cup, I went downstairs, setting down a cup every three to five steps. At last, when I placed the final cup outside the door, I spotted a small head peeking from the stairs. It approached the first cup, sniffed it, licked it, and then looked
15、at us. Concerned it might be too frightened to eat with us watching, my friend Roh and I hid from its view. Soon enough, we heard the sound of the cup, indicating it had begun eating the marmalade.第二段As it ate, the skunk kept looking back at us but did not run away, as if it had decided we were not
16、a threat. We watched it crawloutside, finish the last bit of marmalade, and then stare at us for a few seconds, as if to say thank you, before quickly slippinginto the woods（用到原文的词汇）. Roh then said, Its quite cute, isnt it? Surprising how it trusts humans so much. I replied, Its probably the same sk
17、unk that my mom took care of a few years ago, and its come back looking for food. When my mom returned, I shared todays experience with her. She said, It must be Marmalade. It seems like itsmade this place its second home because our family iswarm and kind第二篇材料When I was seven years old,my family mo
18、ved from Mexico to America.In Mexico, I was a cheerful girl who loved making people laugh with my jokes and inventing fungames to play with my friends.However,when I arrived in America,I found it hard to fitin【矛盾、问题所在：难以融入】,andIbecamequieter.Welivedinasmallhousewithamodestyardwhere wegrewvegetablesm
19、y responsibility.While I took pride in watching them grow,there were times when I dreamed of having a beautiful garden like myschoolmate Luellas【主人公诉求】,with its delicate tulips (郁金 香).Although Luella lived in the same neighborhood as me,we barely knew each otherIt was after a tornado that Luella and
20、 I finally became close friends.【联想：作者想要一个和Luellas家花园一样的花园，经过了tornado两个人还成为了好朋友 那么两个人大概率是在花园这件事上互相帮助，或者其中一方帮助了另一方】ThetornadostruckonaSundayafternoon.Thegentlebreezetransformedintoa strongwind,andthickgraycloudsfilledthesky.Gradually,thetornadotookshape, starting as a thin rope and growing into a lar
21、ge black funnel(漏斗) .My entire family gatheredinthebathroom,seekingshelterfromthestorm.Terrified,Isatclosetomy mom,knees in my chest.After the storm had passed,our worries and fears were replacedby relief that we were unharmed and that our house had remained undamaged.【掠过次要情节：灾难前后过程，不重要，因为重点写的是“afte
22、r tornado两个人如何成为好朋友”】As I stepped outside,I witnessed the extent of the damage the tornado had caused to ourneighborhood【是Luella的花园遭受了损失，所以大概率是主人公帮助了Luella】.Acrossthestreet,atalltreehadfallen,crushingLuellasgardenin front of her yellow house.We hurried over to check on it.Fortunately,her familyseeme
23、d to be away at the time,and no one was injured.However,her once-beautiful garden was in ruins,with the fallen tree destroying the tulips and debris(碎片)spreadeverywhere.I could only imagine how heartbroken they must feel seeing this.1.Thenmymomsusualwordsranginmyear,Itismoreblessedtogivethantoreceiv
24、e,”【值得主人公牢记的话 - 一般需要在续写中呼应 但是考虑到这句话和本文主旨“友谊、互助”没什么关系，所以可以呼应，也可以不呼应 我个人觉得还是不呼应好，不然太刻意了 但如果真的点了，写通顺也可以】and my family started to think about how we could help.Justatthatmoment,Luellasfamilyreturnedintheircar.Even after the debris was cleared,I could still sense Luellas sorrow for her lost garden.Step 2
25、：分析续写两句话2.第二段第一句“after the debris was cleared”，说明第一段“我”帮助了Luellas family清理院子3.第一段，Luella回来之后看到什么？心情如何？看到的是残破不堪，感到震惊、难过、悲伤类似（如果没有描写Luella看到的景象和感受，我认为是不合理的）4.第一段，“我”看到Luella的反应，我又是什么表现？应该是同情、安慰5.第一段，但是我又因为没有fit in而感到害羞，所以我不可能一下子就主动上去帮忙6.第一段，我们是怎么帮助他们的呢？可以是妈妈先去，然后我受到了鼓舞之后再去7.第二段，要以“我和Luella成为好朋友”“我成功fi
26、t in”为最终目标，至于“Itismoreblessedtogivethantoreceive”，我觉得可点可不点，因为这句话和全文主旨“友谊、互助”没什么关系8.第二段，我怎么鼓励Luella并和她成为了好朋友呢？我主动提出和她一起种花，培育植物和友谊Step 3：设计两段情节第一段：1.Leulla一家开始收拾废墟Luella满脸震惊、难过2.妈妈走过去，安慰、拥抱他们3.我受到了鼓舞，也加入他们。并和Luella在合作中交流4.描写清理打扫的过程第二段：1.环境描写：破败不堪的景象2.我提出和她一起种花3.Luella现出笑容4.我们不仅在培育花草，还在培育友谊5.这个花园是我们友谊的
27、见证Step 4：写作第一段：Just at that moment, Luellas family returned in their car. Their were shocked and saddened by the scene where there were ruins and broken branches everywhere. As they surveyed the wreckage（残骸）, Luella wept and groaned（叹息）. Before I could do something, my mother approached them, comfor
28、ting them and giving them a warm embrace. Inspired by her example, I bashfully（害羞地） came forward to Luella and offered to help. She looked at me, with affection in her eyes, and nodded. Together, we picked up fallen branches and flowers, clearing the destroyed flowerbeds.第二段：Even after the debris wa
29、s cleared, I could still sense Luellas sorrow for her lost garden. The empty space where tulips and other flowers once flourished seemed badly hurt. As the sun shines again, I invited Luella to join me in planting new flowers in both our yards. With each seed planted, her smile slowly returned. What
30、 we nurtured was not only new gardens but our friendship. The garden we rebuilt wasnt just a place giving off cents. it was a witness to how we shared hardship and cultivated friendship.第三篇（人物1）Michael saw the trouble coming. There standing in the hallway was Frank（人物2）, the boy who enjoyed making f
31、un of anyone at any given moment. Frank was tall and strong, so few of his victims stood up to him. Michael hated the idea that Frank always got away with his wrongdoing. Yet like most kids who were picked on, he just took it quietly and waited for the unpleasant to pass.（Michael很讨厌Frank - 同学矛盾 - 但全
32、文主要矛盾是否是同学冲突，需要结合后文来继续看）Frank walked up, his eyes locked on the books in Michaels arms. When they met, Frank stopped unexpectedly, “Hey, let me see those books!” Some students watched as Michael held out the books he was carrying, trying not to give away his nervousness.Frank took a book, looked ins
33、ide for a second, and then threw the book at Michael, who dropped all the other books. “Hey, those are school property,” Frank barked, “Be careful!” Then he walked away, laughing loudly.（Frank 欺负 Michael - 矛盾爆发）Michael, his cheeks turning red, half kicked the fallen books. Suddenly a hand picked up
34、one book. “You look like you could use a pally (盟友),” a friendly voice said. It was Ramon（人物3）, the most athletic boy in the high school. Michael couldnt believe Ramon was stopping to help him as they barely spoke.（Ramon来帮他）“Thanks,” Michael sighed with relief. “Its confusing. I dont know what his p
35、roblems is.”“Well, as I see it,” Ramon said, “you need to find a way to end this.” Michael nodded, stuck for what to say. Ramon continued, “You know my grandmother used to tell me whenever I had a problem with someone. Shed say, You can catch more flies with honey than with vinegar (醋).”Looking puzz
36、led, Michael asked, “What does that mean?”“It means kindness may be more effective than anger,” Ramon explained.（值得主人公牢记、警醒的话 可以在续写中呼应）“Can you just tell Frank to stop picking on me?” Michael suggested.“Thats vinegar,” Ramon laughed as he walked away. “Try honey instead.”Ramons words left Michael th
37、inking.The next school day brought Michaels usual pain. There stood Frank, and Michael knew it would be just seconds before he had to face him in the middle of the hall. Frank came nearer.注意：（1）续写词数应为150个左右；（2）请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Then, suddenly, the unexpected happened._Michael bent down and quickly p
38、icked up Franks books on the floor._分析续写两句话1. 先看续写第二段第一句“Michael bent down and quickly picked up Franks books on the floor.” 说明第一段“Frank”遇到了问题“他的书掉了”，“Micheal”却用善良的行为来回应。这个善良的行为就是“帮助Frank”捡书 但是第一段如果单纯“Frank的书掉了”，那么就算Michael帮了他，Frank也不会感谢什么 因此，可以在这里设计情节是：“Frank被其它东西或者自己绊倒，受到了大家的嘲笑”2. 再看续写第一段第一句：“Then
39、, suddenly, the unexpected happened.” the unexpected，具体是什么“出乎意料的事情”，需要考生自己编 可以设计：Frank本来想使坏，但是Frank走过来时不小心歪了一下脚，然后摔倒了，结果引起了大家嘲笑。这个时候主人公Michael想起了那句话“catch more flies with honey than with vinegar”，并没有跟着大家一起嘲笑他3. 然后再看续写第二段第一句 就因为Michael这一个举动，Frank一下子就和Michael成为好朋友，不大可能，我们怎么设计的合理一些呢？ 可以这样设计：Frank从尴尬中缓过
40、来，对Michael的行为感到震惊，然后说了谢谢。最后结尾再点一下提就好续写设计Frank一脸坏意，抱着一堆书走过来。Michael不知道他心里要打什么算盘，只是觉得他自己又难逃一次捉弄。正当他猜Frank会如何使坏，他该如何应对时，突然“砰”的一声，原来是Frank莫名其妙摔倒了。这时同学们开始偷笑，有人小声说“他竟然能被自己绊倒，真是好笨”。看到Frank眼前的境遇和同学们的反应，Micheal心里感觉非常舒适，准备也讥笑一番。但是这时候他突然想起Roman说的话“you can catch more flies with honey than with vinegar.”于是他做出了令所
41、有人都出乎意料的决定。Then, suddenly, the unexpected happened.Frank, with a prankish（捉弄人的） look, was walking over with a pile of books. Michael didnt know what Frank intended to, but he felt sure he was about to be made fun of again. Just as he was guessing how he should respond, suddenly there was a loud bang
42、 Frank had fallen over. Then the classmates began to tease him, and someone whispered, He can even trip over himself, how silly. Seeing Franks awkward situation and other peoples reaction, Michael felt quite pleased and was ready to join in the laughter. But at that moment, he remembered Ramons word
43、s, you can catch more flies with honey than with vinegar. So, he made a decision that surprised everyone.然后他把书交到Frank手里。Frank看到眼前Michael的帮忙，先是震惊，然后看着他，一声“谢谢”从他口中出来，然后默默走开。同学们也瞬间安静了下来，停止了对Frank的嘲笑，各自回头过去自己的事情。接下来，一整天，Frank都没有捉弄任何人，更没有像之前那样欺负Micheal。虽然Frank没有为之前的行为道歉，但是此时此刻，Michael也知道他的善举起了作用。看到Frank安
44、静了一天，Roman也找到Michael“恭喜你学会了如何去应付这类人”，他回复说：“你说的对，善良确实比愤怒重要得多，有时候我们是需要用honey来应付flies”Michael bent down and quickly picked up Franks books on the floor.Then he handed the books back to Frank, who was shocked by Michaels help at first, then looked at him and a thank you came out of his mouth before he w
45、alked away. The classmates also instantly quieted down, stopping their laughter at Frank, and turned back to their own affairs. For the rest of the day, Frank didnt tease anyone, nor did he make fun of Michael as he had done before. Although Frank did not apologize for his previous behaviors, at thi
46、s moment, Michael knew his act of kindness had had an effect. Seeing Frank keep quiet all the day, Ramon came to Michael and said, you have learned how to handle people like this. He replied, You were right, kindness is indeed much more important than anger. Sometimes we do need to use honey to deal with flies.
